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This is a fun little swashbuckling Isekai story. 
The MC isn't some martial arts savant or anything.
Instead, he uses his geek knowledge to get by as he adapts to his new reality.

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So far this story has been a fairly engaging take on the isekai archetype. While there are some reused concepts from other stories with similar settings, their delivery is where the story shines.

Style

     The style is really the accent of the story. A light and adventurous tone keeps the MC's journey away from the uninteresting travel log-esque feel that bogs down most similar attempts at the genre.  The adventure itself isn't too difficult to digest and quickly moves on from one point to another, making this a perfect wind-down read. Earlier chapters feel somewhat chaotic, like the author hadn't completely decided what kind of flow he wanted the story to take, but everything clicks into place before too long.

Story

     The plot essentially follows a day-by-day structure, which actually fits in well with the MC's attitude and general tone. While there are currently some interesting plot points set that can be built further on in the future, there doesn't seem to be a central goal to the story. A nice part of the world is that it doesn't seem to bend backwards to give the MC an adventure. He finds himself isekai'd and doesn't get immediately showered in riches or power, each development he makes seems well within the bounds of reason. This makes it seem more like the Mc is really exploring the world.

Grammar

     Grammar has been very nearly impeccable so far, apart from the occasional tense error and other technicality.

Character

     All characters have some level of dimensionality to them, but the story has been limited to the MC's perspective, so all takes on any side characters comes through his lens. The MC himself suits the book perfectly. He takes each new development in stride and watching him adapt to the world in stages has been very satisfying so far. 

toolazytobreathe
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Very good story about a guy who wakes up on island in another world after a party.  The guy is not op and have to earn every bit of coin with hard work and a bit of trickery.  Fisherman,bard, sailor,trader and who knows maybe mage in the future, with every chapter he adapts to the new world.

Jarthon
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A unique and remarkable tale

Reviewed at: Thanks for reading!

I've read up to the most recent chapter (20 at the time of writing) and I can't imagine the person who wouldn't at least put this in their top 50 webnovels of all time. It's top 20 for me. Lets talk about why.

Style: As always, I'm not sure what this means, but with my best guess I would say this is well executed. The word choice is sofisticated without ever presenting me with something I don't know. The sentances flow nicely as far as I can tell and the light, banter-esque way of presenting the story (in first person) contrasts nicely with the more serious notes that apear when necessary. It's enjoyable to read and the only complaint I can think of is that the very first line is kind of jarring as an introduction. Other than that, thumbs up.

Story: This is the highlight of the novel for me. It does borrow soemwhat from other stories of a similar genera and style, but only in the more basic framework, while all of the details are beautifuly imaginative and even the borrowed portions have some unique spin on it. So far the story doesn't seem to have any particular overarching plot (something fairly ubiquitous to the webnovel scene) and instead simply follows the various adventures of its protagonist. Its a jorney rather than a quest if that makes sense. This is something that can become a problem in other works, but Beach Bum sidesteps that neatly by having what amount to interwoven story arcs that lead into eachother while still being somewhat self contained ideas (I'm thinking of the transition between the starter island and the ship journeys here). This greatly deserves it's 5 stars.

Grammar: Not too much to say on this one. I've only noticed about 3 errors in the entire story so far, none of which broke my immersion. The sentance structure and complexity is nothing groundbreaking, but nor is it childish. I'd recomend a pass from an editor if you were looking to publish, but for Royal Road it is more than sufficient.

Character: So far there are only maybe 8 majorly plot relevent characters in the novel, but we are only at chapter twenty and all the ones who have been introduced feel fleshed out and belevable. This is also where one of the books intresting elements comes into play. Each character is to some extent ballooned out. Cartoonified if you will, to a limited degree in the way that you imagine characters in another dimension should be. It adds a good dose of comedy to the narrative, makes each character memeorable and unique, gives good sources of drama in inteactions and translates much better than I would ever have guessed.\

Overall I would highly recomend that you give this a shot. I sincerly doubt you'll regret it.

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Easy read about the long road to success in a fantasy world

Reviewed at: Chapter 21

(as of chapter 21)

Patrick wakes on a sandy beach after a party, with nothing but the clothes on his body. He soon notices that he is in a fantasy world with a stat/skill system (but no colored boxes) and decides he wants fame and adventure and to become a mage. Easier said than done, first he has to take care of the basic necessities for survival. So he starts working in the only town on the small island, drudgingly earning food, a few coins and some skills over time. Once he has bought passage on a boat he is able to learn more skills and he plans to climb up the ladder from there. Well, that ladder is quite steep, not going as straight up as he wants and he has to take it one step at a time.

Style/Grammar: The story is told in first-person internal style from the MC's POV. While the story includes sad aspects like poverty and slavery, the main feeling is light-hearted and upbeat. The skill system is interesting in that you can buy skill-related abilities by spending skill levels (which you then have to earn again if you want to progress in the skill). The descriptions are okay and there are some humorous elements. Grammar is fine with barely any typos.

Story: Even though the protagonist has to take many very small steps, his progress is palpable but not unreasonably so. Each chapter brings new scenes of how he meets somebody new or uses one of his strengths to reach a goal. You could fault the author a bit for making it too easy for the MC, there have been only minor hiccups and no really difficult obstacles. On the other hand, not every story has to be about the fight against overwhelming odds, as a lighter type of story it is fine as it is now.

Characters: The MC adapts to his new life rather quickly, soon using all of his limited options as if he were a born gamer, never looking back to his old life. Aside from this unlikely aspect (which is often seen in isekai stories), his personality is only "okay"; as the story is not very serious this is fine. The side characters, which due to the first-person narrative style are only presented by their actions towards the MC, don't stand out much but so far they act in a rather normal way.

All in all, this is a light-hearted tale that is easy and fun to read, excellent for winding down after reading the grimdark chapters of other RRL stories.

alphaReviews
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Half-baked plans to change the world

Reviewed at: poll

I enjoyed the beginning quite a bit, but later on the MC decides to save slaves based on plans and ideas so poorly thought out that calling them half-baked is being extremely generous. 

The MC is in a world that practices brutal slavery. This has gone on for centuries no doubt, and these slaves probably need to figure out how to solve their own problems rather than have things handed to them by the MC, whose help they never even asked for - but no matter: the MC has decided that he will 'save' a measly handful of these slaves POST HASTE.

His plans seem to have less than 1% chance of succeeding (he has no idea what or where he is doing), and he has no idea what he will do with the freed slaves if he succeeds, but he will do this nonetheless, probably because he knows, deep down inside, that he has almighty plot armor.

I applaud the MC for aiming to make a positive difference in his world, for not just going with the flow, and for refusing to stupidly submit to evil, but he needs to rethink his plan! :)

13lack12ose
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A quirky little number

Reviewed at: Chapter 31.5

Very different world to the majority of stories on RR. Worth reading simply for the change of pace and lack of overpowered MC which seems to dominate in trending recently.

Smokeybear has done an excellent job with this story - I only wish that they'd write faster!

 

Thanks again for the wonderful story! <3

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fun light-hearted read

Reviewed at: Chapter 23

 Read up to chapter 23.

For the most part, this story is a nice, light-hearted read. Patrick gets drunk, wakes up isekai'd, fumbles his way through the starting island, and does his best to survive and make some money afterwards. He's not immediately shoved into the depths of hell, but he's also no superman.

 

Grammar/style- The writing here isn't too bad, but it's not too good, either. There's a lot of tense switching, as the author frequently goes from past to present and then back to past. Sometimes there's missing punctuation or incorrectly punctuated dialogue. Other times, the sentence flow is a bit off and the way that things are described is a mite confusing. For the most part, things are written in a reasonably straightforward way with some decent descriptions but not many creative devices. 

That being said, while it's not a very fancy piece, as it is now, it doesn't really need to be. It's nice, it's light, the MC and the things he gets up to are fairly funny, he doesn't take himself too seriously, and overall, it works for what it is. The style is relaxed and casual.

 

Character- The characters are quite fun, and though some have fairly cliche-ridden personalities, it's decent enough anyways. I appreciate that the MC doesn't immediately discard his modern-day way of thinking as soon as he gets isekai'd. While he does adapt to the game-world with its stat screens and ability points very quickly, he doesn't immediately lose all moral capacities when he runs into slaves/the poor and downtrodden. I also like the way he's made to realise that his actions can actually have negative side effects when Spoiler: Spoiler

 

 Story- The story is very slice-of-life-y, and mostly revolves around Patrick and his attempts to survive and progress. He's not thrown any particularly rough challenges and he doesn't immediately set off on an epic adventure to save the world and collect a harem, and that's perfectly fine. Patrick is just a (mostly) normal guy (with some extra perks) in a RPG world doing mundane and then, gradually, less mundane things to work his way up. He explores his new world in a very reasonable way, bit by bit. 

Lorraine V
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Well written, light adventure story.  Perfect reading after a long day at work. 

Gerald
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Good but Dumb MC

Reviewed at: Chapter 20
  • The MC's just too soft.
  • It's feels like watching an 8 years old boy doing some staff.
  • The MC know that he's not on Earth anymore and the world's not in his favor,... cruelty is one of those yet the MC's still forcing himself to be a righteous fanatic. I'm not saying, him to be a villain lunatic...what I'm trying to say is "be realistic".
  • The feelings and decisions should act as a mature man or an adult one living in an unknown land. If he really want to save some strangers then be strong, strong enough that no one can question his authority.
  • The MC should not risk his life based on some strangers self-proclaimed-story. It's not his business anyway... no one really know the truth. 
  • The MC should rationalize things rather than being stupid.
CatVI
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Hoping for more sea action

Reviewed at: Chapter 31.5

I hope is this novel goes to the high seas piracy option.

But the mc seems to be  a revolutionarist.

A bit dumb, and definitely getting scammed way to many times. But he manages.

The mc is a hero, and he's learning.

I thoroughly enjoyed this.

Also,

that KAMEHAMEHA looooooooooool