Opening an orphanage in another world
I got reincarnated and one thing lead to another, I decided to open up and protect the orphanage
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I tried to get through the first chapter and had to give up due to the grammar issues. Might want to look into getting a beta reader or even just a free grammar program like Grammarly to help fix the issues.
I couldn't get through half of the first paragraph, this is unreadable at this point in time. If anyone can work through this they have the patience of a saint and/or the mental fortitude of a brick.
Hmmm.... the author is not a native user of English. The grammar is all over the place, sentence fragments, odd word choices, stilted dialogue.
However I do like stories of this kind, reincarnated isekai, help the orphans, defeat the wicked and powerful etc.
The characters so far have been fairly generic but it can be hard to tell inner dialogue and motivations with the overall writing being so unclear.
If you are really in the LN genre and have read google translated raws and thought they were okay then this might be for you.
Truly unreadable. Interesting concept ruined by reading like it came straight out of Google Translate, maybe with another language or two in between.
this one had a really nice premise, but the lack of depth to the story and character really bring down the overall quality. The world was interesting. Floating worlds connected by dungeons, Gods, nobility crumbling with corruption, it really was interesting. But, the whole thing just feels naive.
Written as of ch1
Please get an editor for this.
Honestly, this looks like the type of story that I would browse Royal Road for a good hour or two to find. Unfortunately, the grammar is so bad that it hurts my eyes to read. Don't get me wrong, from what I can decipher it looks like a good story, but until it gets a rewrite, I'm not going to read past chapter 6. Its just not fun for me to read something that is this sloppily written.
Terrible English, to the point where it's unreadable even to another non-native English speaker.
Author also doesn't take the effort to correct mistakes, when pointed out.
I don't understand why this is trending, how can anyone enjoy reading this?
What we have here is a mixed bag of blessings and painful to read.
You can actually follow the story if you dont get hung up over things like grammar , logical character introductions and common sense.
True fans of the OP MC faction will enjoy the very descriptive scenes of monsters and shallow sidekicks with cliche villians thrown in to really make it "isekai" but its real focus like the title says is as an Orphanage .. Psyche.. yeah this concept could be better.
The sidekicks or "Orphans" are not introduced very well and so far I wouldnt let the MC look after a dog let alone 10 kids, clearly the writing gets better over the chapters.
Slice of monster hunting actions and some really interesting background worldbuilding via politics was forced a little but acceptable and gave this book a little more depth which it surely needed.though would prefer it wasnt so info dumped.
Not my pick for book of the year , HOWEVER do keep an open mind and this should serve as a very good example of how the writing has improved throughout each few chapters getting better.
My advice is to follow the author , and maybe read this book if you can get past the rough bits.
Read till chapter 5. The English is bad. Struggle to make sense of a lot of sentences. It might improve in more recent chapters but I couldn't.
@author, I'd recommend following the normal conversation layout - "I want to go home" said Ash. It makes multiple people talking easier to read. And try read your story once over after you write so it makes sense to you