System Hunter

System Hunter

by JaneJohn

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  • Profanity

Reincarnated as Ernesh Ungar of Gram Clan born with the weakest core must find a way to become stronger in this strange new world.

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The first chapters are all a prolongued prologue as you are force-fed a bunch of gimmiks and and anime tropes.

  • To start off there is this entire reincarnation and reborn as a child shenanigans that is bog standard and booring, completely unnecessary.
  • Then there is some overly convoluted construct with gods and "systems"
  • There are peope who are incapable of restraint or logical thought and just commit wanton slaughter because they think they can (at chap 6 this is a sign of a budding xianxia in the worst way possible)
  • Then there are cores (xinanxia style) and of course the MC is the dreg of the dregs with everybody having 0 hopes for him.

So much unnecessary crap is showed down the readers thoat before anything meaningful happens. There is no worldbuilding only "system building" or explaining to the reader (some of) the rules of the complex construct the author has come up with.
After reading all of the chapters currently published (6) I dont care 1 bit about the MC or his faimily because they all come off as cartoon characters. A collection of comical character traits rather than personalities.