ROACH- rising pestilence

ROACH- rising pestilence

by The true Narrator

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  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

A weary mind awakens in an unfamiliar body, lost, confused, scared, and very far from home.

He doesn't know where he is, he isn't sure what he may become, and his stomach growls hungrily.

But he knows one thing.

He must feed and he isn't too bothered on how, only when.

Through his struggles to survive trying to take his place in this world. It, the world will be forever changed.

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My first story here so let's do it! hopefully with flying colors. (This story is not about an insect that goes on an edgelord, death rampage, so those who came for that, know now what you are reading and stop rating down thx, still, some murder and mayhem is involved) 

Feel free to critique, I will be checking on reviews and comments every now and then to see what others think of my writing and how I might adjust it in the future. (although I'm also doing this for fun so don't get your knickers in a twist if things don't change to your liking).

(Know that even if you comment/review that doesn't mean I will respond or that I will take your advice, after all, I too have my own preferences).

A chapter tends to come out every fortnight, however sometimes it may be sooner or later, It depends on how lazy I'm feeling or how busy I am.

Ps. A friend of mine drew the cover art, appreciate its homebrew goodness.

PPs. serious readers may want to read the author's notes as well.

PPPs. If you rate down please say why, I want info, not merely ratings that don't tell me anything, preferably in comments, so I can try to best satisfy my audience, or at the very least understand their reasons.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Whispers of legends ago
C1 V1 swift start ago
C2 V1 Elsewhere but close... ago
C3 V1 Growing pains ago
C4 V1 a harrowing tale + Narrators meddling ago
C5 V1 I dream of system ago
C6 V1 Uncertain membership ago
C7 V1 A montage and just a pinch of revenge ago
C8 V1 I totally Didn't see that coming... no not at all! ago
C9 V1 Spreading blood ago
C10 V1 Bug meets girl ago
C11 V1 A touching story (extra) ago
C12 V1 My money is on the big one (extra) ago
C13 V1 Cut a deal with... the devil? ago
C14 V1 Muddled ago
C15 V1 Synergy (extra) ago
C16 V1 Taking stock and taking hearts ago
C17 V1 A guide on how to make friends... ago
C18 V1 A guide on how to make friends (part two (extra)) ago
C19 V1 A guide on how to make friends... (part 3 (extra)) ago
C20 V1 Party of five ago
C21 V1 Clairvoyance ago
C22 V1 Hunters and hunted ago
C23 V1 Turning tides (a brutal chapter) ago
C24 V1 Sacrifice and loss (the 'actually' brutal chapter) ago
C25 V1 Cleaning up ago
C26 V1 Inner conflict ago
C27 V1 Head-closed ago
C28 V1 Climbing the ladder, (The first rung is sought) ago
Volume 1 epilogue- Ascension and System troubles ago
A Christmas special- Bestiary and codex ago
False idols (early serving) ago
C1 V2 Listen to your Taldurs ago
C2 V2 Surface tension ago
C3 V2 Scheming and sightseeing ago
C4 V2 A day out on the town- Conifer square ago
C5 V2 A day out on the town- All in good jest ago
C6 V2 A day out on the town- Bearly standing ago
C7 V2 A day out on the town- Bear eccentrici-teas ago
C8 V2 Rodent resolutions ago
C9 V2 Waking up ago
C10 V2 Quick-fix ago
C11 V2 My rock! My star! My love! (A side story, sort off...) ago
C12 V2 Self awareness ago
C13 V2 Teens will be teens ago
C14 V2 Criminally underrated ago
C15 V2 Electrical discharge ago
C16 V2 Crispy concerns ago
C17 V2- Key ago
C18 V2 Claybed port ago
Untitled goose story V2- Intermission ago
The end... ago

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Yulwei
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An interesting concept that's decently executed and makes me want to read more. I feel we could do with going into the system more as I have a fair few questions about it like whether levels are a monster thing and Lescar is unique among humans now. 

 

The alternate POVs are all interesting which is rare in even better written novels but I have to say the voice of the narrator I'm a bit iffy on.

 

On the whole I recommend that people give this a chance as this is a damn good foundation from which to expand

Soulxlight
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This story definitely has a lot of potential. The main POV characters are well fleshed out, the few side characters have their stories developed out enough for them to be people and not placeholders. The main problem midway through is the world seems blank. We don't know anything about the wider world, the city, even the sewers feel kinda bland despite everything taking place there.

Besides world development there is the more serious problem of way too much wordiness for not enough being said. Fights take place from multiple points of view, which isn't a problem and can actually enhance fights. The problem is the same bits of a fight is retold multiple times from different POVs without anything really new being added. It just pads chapter length and drag out fights. This make fights feel slow instead of quick paced and fluid.

The only other problem I see are minor to moderate grammar errors. These grammar errors are headlined by multiple paragraph size run on sentences. I do that myself and in this case it isn't that big an issue.

Overall a solid 3/5. A little above perfectly middling which is 2.5/5 but definitely not 4/5 which translates to 8/10.

Sneaky Faisal
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Interesting and Fun story to read (To me atleast)

Reviewed at: C1 V2 Listen to your Taldurs

A good story, starts off a bit rough at the first 4-5 chapters but gets better very quickly.

The style is... fine though I much prefer other styles of writing, but I'll keep that to myself eh?

The grammar is a bit rough at some parts but its pretty damn good most of the time, and the author comes back and fixes it alot.

The story it self is pretty interesting, Our protaganist starts off as a tiny little roach and quickly grows stronger and more terrifying to the things that surrond him, so overall, a unique and interesting story that the Author has put alot of time into.

The characters are good... Dont really have much to say about them xD, but I enjoyed almost all the characters, even the disposable and unimportant ones, Our author here has put alot of time into creating, and fleshing out these characters.

Overall, a fantastic story that is most DEFINITLEY worth the read, I would give you five stars on everything but... There is some Grammar issue here and there and your Style of writing isnt my favorite.

But still! Good stuff mate!

Hope to see more soon! 

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Xabier Brex
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An interesting story idea with a well written execution.

Jpburger
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I am always searching for non human Novels because of their unique perspective and I may be a bit baised toward them so be warned. 

This story is definetly an enjoyable read it is just plain fun to see our MC gaining new followers and trying to figure out what exactly he wants to accomplist in this world. 

The Main characters have all one basic characteristic that has been . Dwayne has his loyalty , Roulette has her playfullness and our MC has his cold pragmatic self. It would be intresting to see them going outside their comfort zone. I already saw it happening briefly with the MC. 

The Grammar is mid to upper tier . Not perfect but definetly good.

And the releases are regular so no complaints there.

But yeah definelty give it a try to be honest I am not that good woth reviews but I just wanted to recommend this story to you. Give it a try.

Sandsforever
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Ch 22

I'm biased towards monster/non-human MCs 

Enjoyable read in my opinion 

Glad I waited so long to start this (read it all in one sitting)

Interesting story so far I dont remember anything super annoying 

Tldr worth a try if your into a decent monster story

Tommyjl7
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First 5 or so chapters are a little rough and almost made me drop as the story just wasn't flowing well but after that the author finds his rythym and the story gets pretty good definitely worth a read especially if you like monster litrpg's books

Schuldraigh
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Roach +system=good novel.

Nuff said

Pointless: filler

 

Jarmaro
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It's barely readable, grammar and style need serious rework. From what I understand this is supposed to be fixed after first volume is finished, but this is way beneath acceptable quality. Some say webnovels read like first drafts, which is true in a way, but this novel reads like an alpha version of the first draft.

About story, MC is typical reincarnated, nothing interesting there, but story goes downhill near instantly with timeskips, we are informed about the existence of the System in an off-hand comment, no information about how anything works. 

Utter dissapointment, maybe it will get better after (possible) rework, for now just skip it and wait a few months.