ROACH- rising pestilence

by Don Wihongi

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead Dungeon High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Multiple Lead Characters Mythos Non-Human lead Reincarnation Ruling Class Secret Identity Steampunk Strategy Strong Lead Supernatural Villainous Lead War and Military
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A weary mind awakens in an unfamiliar body, lost, confused, scared and very far from home.

He doesn't know where he is, he isn't sure what he may become and his stomach growls hungrily

But he knows one thing,

He must feed and he isn't too bothered on how only when.

Through his struggles to survive trying to take his place in this world. it, the world will be forever changed.

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My first story here so let's do it! hopefully with flying colors. (This story is not about an insect that goes on an edgelord, death rampage, so those who came for that, know now what you are reading and stop rating down thx, still, some murder and mayhem is involved) 

feel free to critique, I will be checking on reviews and comments every now and then to see what others think of my writing and how I might adjust it in the future. (although I'm also doing this for fun so don't get your knickers in a twist if things don't change to your liking)

(know that even if you comment/review that doesn't mean I will respond or that I will take your advice, after all, I too have my own preferences).

Also, this story will update once every week (Australian-victorian time)

Ps. A friend of mine drew the cover art, appreciate its homebrew goodness.

pps. serious readers may want to read the authors notes as well.

ppps. If you rate down please say why, I want info, not merely ratings that don't tell me anything, preferably in comments, so I can try to best satisfy my audience, or at the very least understand their reasons.

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Mauger
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Opinions are like assholes, everyone has one and they all stink. Here's mine.

Reviewed at: C6 V1 Uncertain membership

Roach- rising pestilence is a solid novel, that releases frequently, and has an interesting story about a cockroach in a fantasy setting.

Don Wihongi does a great job editing; is willing to listen to comments and critiques about his work. The story is very intriguing and does a great job at establishing a consistent flow of revealing information about the world and the characters that inhabit it.

I personally think this novel is great and the way it's written just leaves you wanting more.

Don Wihongi good shit my man! Keep up the great work!

-Mauger

 

Xabier Brex
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An interesting story idea with a well written execution.

_W_T_F _
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I love this new concept of being a cockroach it new to many other insect reincarnation title still I give my 4.5 for giving the effort in intro well cause it your first Story

Yulwei
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An interesting concept that's decently executed and makes me want to read more. I feel we could do with going into the system more as I have a fair few questions about it like whether levels are a monster thing and Lescar is unique among humans now. 

 

The alternate POVs are all interesting which is rare in even better written novels but I have to say the voice of the narrator I'm a bit iffy on.

 

On the whole I recommend that people give this a chance as this is a damn good foundation from which to expand

forged
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A very fun story with a promising future (and frequent uploads!!!). The grammar could definitely use an editor, but it is rarely immersion-breaking. The characters do fall somewhat flat occasionally, but that can also often be attributed to the grammatical and syntactical errors. All in all, a job well done.

Darquesse
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Starts rough, rapidly improves

Reviewed at: C21 V1 Clairvoyance

For all who want to try this out, fair warning, the earlier chapters are a bit rough in terms of grammar. Starting out, the grammar is somewhere in th 3 star range, as of chapter 20 it improves to about 4 stars.

 

The style is interesting and the story is fine, but the characters, especially the main character, aren't fully fleshed out yet.

All in all, a decent start, with a writer who is rapidly improving as the story goes on.

Cheese_stiks
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I'm not up to date but I'm enjoying this story so far! Good concept, it's a little slow at the start but it picks up. My only other qualms is the spelling, grammar and cohesion which other reviewers have mentioned, thankfully its pretty minor and doesn't really take away from the reading experience. Other than that interesting characters and well written plot.

 

Tommyjl7
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First 5 or so chapters are a little rough and almost made me drop as the story just wasn't flowing well but after that the author finds his rythym and the story gets pretty good definitely worth a read especially if you like monster litrpg's books

Stephen Lewis
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Ch 22

I'm biased towards monster/non-human MCs 

Enjoyable read in my opinion 

Glad I waited so long to start this (read it all in one sitting)

Interesting story so far I dont remember anything super annoying 

Tldr worth a try if your into a decent monster story

Schuldraigh
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Roach +system=good novel.

Nuff said

Pointless: filler