ROACH- rising pestilence
by The true Narrator
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A weary mind awakens in an unfamiliar body, lost, confused, scared, and very far from home.
He doesn't know where he is, he isn't sure what he may become, and his stomach growls hungrily.
But he knows one thing.
He must feed and he isn't too bothered on how, only when.
Through his struggles to survive trying to take his place in this world. It, the world will be forever changed.
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My first story here so let's do it! hopefully with flying colors. (This story is not about an insect that goes on an edgelord, death rampage, so those who came for that, know now what you are reading and stop rating down thx, still, some murder and mayhem is involved)
Feel free to critique, I will be checking on reviews and comments every now and then to see what others think of my writing and how I might adjust it in the future. (although I'm also doing this for fun so don't get your knickers in a twist if things don't change to your liking).
(Know that even if you comment/review that doesn't mean I will respond or that I will take your advice, after all, I too have my own preferences).
A chapter tends to come out every fortnight, however sometimes it may be sooner or later, It depends on how lazy I'm feeling or how busy I am.
Ps. A friend of mine drew the cover art, appreciate its homebrew goodness.
PPs. serious readers may want to read the author's notes as well.
PPPs. If you rate down please say why, I want info, not merely ratings that don't tell me anything, preferably in comments, so I can try to best satisfy my audience, or at the very least understand their reasons.
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Reviewed at: C6 V1 Uncertain membership
Roach- rising pestilence is a solid novel, that releases frequently, and has an interesting story about a cockroach in a fantasy setting.
Don Wihongi does a great job editing; is willing to listen to comments and critiques about his work. The story is very intriguing and does a great job at establishing a consistent flow of revealing information about the world and the characters that inhabit it.
I personally think this novel is great and the way it's written just leaves you wanting more.
Don Wihongi good shit my man! Keep up the great work!
-Mauger
Reviews are annoying to Write but here is mine
Reviewed at: C16 V2 Crispy concerns (Big chapter)
A story worth reading, The grammar at the start can put you off, but once you get past that the story becomes much better.
The style that the story is written in is not my favorite, but we all have our prefreneces, But since i like the Story so much i can look past that.
Almost all the characters in this are likeable, My top two are Dewy and Dwayne, The way they are written, the personailites and everything else makes up a Good story.
Considering everything that the Author put into this, The detail, the Mystery, the Characters, and the fact that this is the Authors first story....
Gotta give this Piece of art a 4.5.
Hope to see more, Good luck.
An evolution story with a twist
Reviewed at: C7 V2 A day out on the town- Bear eccentrici-teas
Don Wihongi has crafted an interesting tale here.
The system our MC is reborn with is pretty bare-bones with few descriptions and little explanation for most of its facets.
Our MC grows fairly quickly, through a process of small time-skips, into something vastly more powerful than its surroundings (a vast sewer system).
Enter humans and adventures. Who are proportionally more powerful than our MC and quickly assert their dominance.
From there the story changes rapidly and becomes more of a team-building exercise rather than just developing our MC.
The entire story is well written and entertaining, although it may not be everyone's taste.
I personally liked the beginning and hope we return to that style again soon.
Thanks, Don for the tale!
Clever and Original LITRPG
Reviewed at: C7 V1 A montage and just a pinch of revenge
Story: 5/5. System-Based Monster LITRPG Fantasy. Unique with dual POVs. It sort of reminds me of Dakota Krout’s Divine Dungeon series with a non-human POV and human POV. I’d give it a 5 for originality. The nice thing is there no immediate drowning in exposition, the story gradually unfolds naturally through the viewpoint of the character.
Style: 4.5/5. Written in third-person present-tense with multiple perspectives. There is a narrator's POV which is more omniscient manner while the other two character POVs are more limited. At first, I thought this would be an issue because many authors I came across had issues juggling multiple POVs. Thankfully, this author is not among them and the story weaves around the three naturally. Only two minor issues was the use onomatopoeia (which is a personal take), and instances where it seems telling would do better than showing.
Grammar: 4.5/5. Some minor mistakes but nothing that makes the fiction illegible. I’d rate this in the upper quartile of RR fics which nets it a 4.5.
Character 5/5. Unique characterization from a cockroach who is struggling to survive and begins to quite literally climb and eat his way up the foodchain. A bit like Super Minion, except the cockroach is more inclined toward growth and gaining strength versus the more exploratory mind-set of the Super Minion. There were also some very humanizing instances with Lescar in the later chapters which I found to add dimensions to the character.
Tis Good!
Reviewed at: C7 V1 A montage and just a pinch of revenge
I'm not up to date but I'm enjoying this story so far! Good concept, it's a little slow at the start but it picks up. My only other qualms is the spelling, grammar and cohesion which other reviewers have mentioned, thankfully its pretty minor and doesn't really take away from the reading experience. Other than that interesting characters and well written plot.
The Handsome Cockroach Really Rocks
Reviewed at: C3 V1 Growing pains
Mr. Cockroach is awesome and badass. I hope he will become a cockroach king and rule the entire fantasy world.
Please keep up the good work.
I like the story even I hate cockroaches
Reviewed at: C13 V1 Cut a deal with... the devil?
I can't give you the perfect score for the grammar because I see some mistakes.
Have potential
Reviewed at: C1 V1 swift start
I love this new concept of being a cockroach it new to many other insect reincarnation title still I give my 4.5 for giving the effort in intro well cause it your first Story
Roach
Reviewed at: C3 V1 Growing pains
An interesting story idea with a well written execution.
Starts rough, rapidly improves
Reviewed at: C21 V1 Clairvoyance
For all who want to try this out, fair warning, the earlier chapters are a bit rough in terms of grammar. Starting out, the grammar is somewhere in th 3 star range, as of chapter 20 it improves to about 4 stars.
The style is interesting and the story is fine, but the characters, especially the main character, aren't fully fleshed out yet.
All in all, a decent start, with a writer who is rapidly improving as the story goes on.