God of Eyes

by SuperSayu

Original COMPLETED Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy High Fantasy Magic Portal Fantasy / Isekai Reincarnation Strategy
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Speaking heresy on my deathbed led me to meet god.  Maybe it was a curse, or a blessing, but he decided I would work it off--as one of many gods on another world of magic and sorcery.  It wasn't something I intended or was prepared for, but I am willing to work to make the world a better place.  Isn't that what a god SHOULD do?  Part of the Demonsword Project universe (First Age).

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prelude: Heresy on a Deathbed ago
1. Being reborn is like... ago
2. A god trying not to be a hobo ago
3. Books, exposition, and arithmetic ago
4. [-] From taxes to death, and then worse things ago
5. [-] Aftermath ago
6. Dreams, Sweet and Otherwise ago
7. A bad job and a bad day ago
8. The opposite of heresy ago
9. Godhood, Keys, and Hubris ago
10. Some names, some blame, and he should be ashamed ago
11. Felli ago
12. Perspective ago
13. Finding my legs ago
14. An Incident at the Docks ago
15. Things aren't too bad ago
15.5: Exposition (?) ago
16. Progress and a New Job ago
17. Carrying On ago
18. To War and Other Problems ago
19. Arriving at the War Camp ago
20. A bit about Belma and some more training ago
21. Spreading the Word ago
22. Reaching the Front ago
23. Angels and Mourning ago
24. Raine, Vicar of Eyes ago
25. The battle is won ago
26. Renovations ago
27. More magic and a madwoman ago
28. Goblins and Shadows ago
29. Hunting ago
30. The fight starts ago
31. A battle ends ago
32. Back to Camp ago
33. A Sermon ago
34. Being a Busy God ago
35. Debriefing (with the generals) ago
36. "Debriefing" with Ciel'ostra ago
37. Meetings and Messages ago
38. Walking, Thinking, Healing... ago
39. Godly Chit-chat ago
40. Welcome to Balant ago
41. Banking on it ago
42. Cleaning Up ago
43. The Temple of Blades ago
43.5. Raine Hunts, Raine Hunted ago
44. The Forbidden and The Foreboding ago
45. Pal'lud's Patio ago
46. Touring the Temple ago
47. Taking a walk ago
48. Ask Alanna ago
49. Dinner with Destiny (and friends) ago
50. A pleasant evening ago
51. The Book of Ciel'ostra ago
52. Training with Ulia ago
53. First meetings of old friends ago
54. Gods and Idiots ago
55. Raine and Xethram ago
56. Waiting and Worrying ago
57. The Promised Meeting ago
58. Gods ago
59. Blades ago
60. Loi, and Xechi ago
61. Ulia, and Chibal ago
61.5. The Necromancer ago
62. Raine, and Miana ago
63. To touch the face of God ago
64. Ulia, and Loi ago
65. Xechi, and Miana ago
66. Ryan and Miana ago
67. Myth and Consequences ago
68. Retreat and Doubt ago
69. Rising and Falling ago
70. Storm Rising ago
71. The Storm Breaks ago
72. Nerves ago
73. Catching up and Planning Ahead ago
73.5. A message, and Silence ago
74. Opening Up, and Keeping things Secret ago
75. By Design ago
76. Of Storms ago
77. Searching for... ago
78. A job for... ago
79. Perspective ago
80. Cold Comfort ago
81. When gods pray ago
82. Real Power ago
83. Ash and Perspective ago
84. Conflict ago
85. Ambush ago
86. Merger ago
87. Judgement (End) ago
EPILOGUE 1 ago
EPILOGUE 2 ago
EPILOGUE 3 ago
EPILOGUE 4 ~ FIN ago

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Overall

Decent Story, well written, unfortunately hurt by being overly feminist

Reviewed at: 22. Reaching the Front

It's weird, but there aren't many true god stories out there, even among the thousands of power fantasies on RR. Usually the "god" part is just another way for explaining an OP hero, worship and moral issues never being addressed.

I was searching for a decent/good one and found "god of eyes" that gets sooo close to being what I hoped it would be.

This story is set in a essentially nice thought out world (with one big flaw), usually moves at an for me enjoyable pace, sometimes a bit slow but that is rare (introduction to magic for example).

While the MC is a god from pretty much the beginning he is still weak, yet I enjoyed that this is not another story of becoming a god or reclaiming power but growing and understanding godly powers and the duties that come with them.

The one issue I have with the story so far , that sucks out quite a bit of enjoyment is that although the premise is unique the characters are very predictable, because of the feminist tropes the author uses too often. I know that this sentence alone will already make some of the readers of this review gather foam around their mouth and any explanation that each of the following points alone or even a good chunk of them wouldn't be an issue for me, will only fall on deaf ears. But so be it, the combination of them and how heavy handed it feels hurts this story a lot in my eyes.

TL:DR for the next part: A magical world that makes us truly equal, go for it! An empowering story of fighting against all odds of a misogynist/oldfashioned society, great! A female dominated setting, sure! But all that in one doesn’t work and feels very forced.

[The following part of the review contains mild spoilers up to chapter 22.]

All the "bad" (any bad attribute; lazy, bullying, greedy, ..., not only evil) are men, without exception, the worst female character so far is a half sentence mention of a rich wife being an alcoholic, on the sides of men we had slave traders, necromancers, rapists, sadists , loan sharks, cheaters and so on. People in positions of power that are not bad, 90%+ women.

In stories with fantasy elements it does not break immersion that even in a medieval themed setting the fighting forces have a somewhat equal split in sexes. But again the author overdoes it, if the sex is mentioned it is officers and decent soldiers female, lazy bums and thieves male.

While the MC (and the gods apparently) loath slavery, a male harem for the general is "funny" [quote].

The author goes out of their way to hammer home the point that a relationship with a very skewed  power balance (female god with mortal male) failed because of "men".

This goes so far that the author felt the need to point out that, yes, the astronaut in an illusion/vision was indeed a woman, who would have guessed!

But even in this world that is so female dominated, were women have no issue, besting men in fights, leading armies, governing towns, they felt the need for a "don't tell me you can't do this because you are a woman" speech. Felt like if King Leonidas in 300 gave his son a pep talk that even men can become soldiers.

It is just too much and sucks out a lot of the enjoyability of an otherwise so far good read if you already know what a character will be like the moment their name and thus sex is revealed.

Jacksonion Democracy
Overall

Very nice book to read, good grammar and a nice plot -> only complaint is how there seems to be a lot of manhater characters and as a man it gets a little irritating after the 5th time.

DrAlt
Overall

Reminded me of reading high school creative writing submissions

Reviewed at: 6. Dreams, Sweet and Otherwise

An interesting premise, and after the prelude and synopsis I was hoping for more philosophy around the nature of godhood.  Instead it's a fairly standard fantasy story with small chapters, low-level dialogue, and too much exposition.  The undertones of weakness and self-reflective negativity the author seeds through the story made me not like it.   This tone is spread too thick for 'learning the ropes of godhood', and lacks balancing positivity/humor.

SoundTramp
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Interesting ideas but an inconsistent plot

Reviewed at: EPILOGUE 4 ~ FIN

SuperSayu uses the story to broach interesting discussions about theology, morality, death, war, perspective, purpose and more. He does this well, and has some well thought out things to say.

The characters and overall setting are well suited to facilitating these discussions, and the grammar is decent. However, the plot seems to not have been fully planned out. As a result, actions taking place in a given chapter often have the MC being reactive and uncertain. He loses a concrete sense of agency.

The magic is a mixed bag. The godly magic is interesting and we see a fair bit of it. However, we see very little mortal magic, especially in the latter half of the story. SuperSayu seems to have a full magic system written out to which he is referencing, but unfortunately he does not include very much of it in this story.

Overall, this is a relatively short story in an interesting setting that facilitates interesting discussions. Not everyone will be interested, but those who are will surely enjoy the read.

Thank you SuperSayu for the story!

KoboldPatrol
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Nice story about being a (still weak) god

Reviewed at: 22. Reaching the Front

(as of chapter 22)

A man dies and is reincarnated in a world with magic, like it happens to many MCs on RRL. But for Ryan the new job description is not "be a swordmage hero and go on adventures", instead he is reincarnated as a god. Now, if you're instantly thinking of throwing lightning, resurrecting the dead or other miracles, that stuff is a bit beyond his abilities, divine power needs faith after all. Trying to have his weak mortal body survive and at the same time finding followers that generate divine fuel is not that easy. After getting some pointers from a friendly goddess he starts by picking a domain, after some deliberation he will be know as the 'God of Eyes'. Let's See what will come of this...

Style/Grammar: The story is told in first-person internal style by the MC as a rather reliable narrator with some aspects of stream-of-consciousness mode. The descriptions are fine. There are some parts with a confusing sentence structure or strange moments but in general grammar and spelling are okay.

Story: Most of the story so far is about the MC finding out how magic and divine powers work and about finding a way for his avatar to blend in. There have been some action scenes but not as many as in stories about isekai adventurers. As the story is about being a god, there are some philosophical musings about how gods (should) act. The pacing is unhurried but doesn't feel slow.

Characters: Ryan is a sensible guy with a quiet but friendly personality. As expected he is a bit overwhelmed by his new responsiblities at first but he soon finds his balance but he stays a bit bland. The other characters are depicted okay, many are a bit on the one-dimensional side but only a few are true stereotypes.

All in all, this is a nice story written in a rather quiet mood about creating your own religion. No aspect of it is world-shakingly new or literarily extraordinary but I still enjoy reading it.

thejoker195
Overall

 I'm not too sure how to rate this, as I feel this review is mostly based on personal opinion.  My personal opinion being that I just don't feel any excitement reading this, the prose is good but weird at the same time, can't think of a word to describe it but it just doesn't flow smooth in some places as I have to back track and try and understand what the mc is saying or thinking.

Then as far as the story goes I just don't feel it, I won't exactly call it boring but 15 chapters in and the only thing I can feel from this story is depression, I don't care for the road/method to Godhood either, gathering flock and all that seems sooo...drab? I much prefer wuxia style, or hardwork with magic, so this just feels stale for me.

All said, not a bad story to be honest, I think the mc is sensible and an okay sort, just not someone I want to read about, much prefer a nathan drake uncharted style adventure than the vibes I get off this story.

todd
Overall

Not a standard god story (chapter 23)

Reviewed at: 23. Angels and Mourning

I had put off reading this because it seems that most "god" stories are just blatant power fantasies, with power creep being an immediate issue from the beginning. God of Eyes is very much not like that. The protagonist begins by mouthing off on his deathbed to a protest priest about what a god should be and unceremoniously finds themselves in a new body and a new world and no idea what they're doing. Rather than immediately rushing out and crashing into the world with all the subtlety of charging bull, he quietly makes mistakes and fixes little problems as he sees the problems of the world and develops the foundation of his new godhood. It's slow but well written and gradually adds depth to the world and the gods around him.

The best aspect of this is that his chosen domain of Eyes isn't fire or destruction or unbreachable barriers, but vision. Rather than smashing the bad people, it empowers people to see a little more clearly, both literally and figuratively. Having a soft power makes for a much more insightful tale and one that focuses more on providing the tools for others to do well, instead of reaching out to do everything himself. The magic of the world is still being explored at this point in the story but appears to be well thought out and interesting, and while there isn't a big bad coming for the MC, the world has problems that he's been exposed to and would like to help resolve.

Mechanically, the story is well written with little in the way of errors and the author's prose is smooth enough for easy reading. As far as my recommendation goes, if you're looking for a more thoughtful take on a fantasy ascension story, I think you will be well served by God of Eyes. It has a slower pace but doesn't bog down in spite of it. If you're looking for a fast-paced action fantasy where the MC sees and then smites evil, this might not be quite what you're looking for.

Xx_N00b_SlAyEr_xX
Overall

Love the book so far, It's rare to find a book like on here and im happy I did. I have a feeling it'll get on trending soon and it'll finally get the recognition it deserves. 

slee202
Overall

I think its the title.  I seem to be almost the only person reading this and its a real shame because this is one of the good ones.

This is the story of an intelligent and sensible man who because of that is when he dies made a god.  Yes god, with a small g.  Weak and helpless in a rather primitive but magical world he has to learn to survive and hopefully prosper.  But most important he has to learn how to god.

national
Overall

The only bad thing about this book is the title.

Reviewed at: 15. Things aren't too bad

This is a great story and I wish there were more like it