(BL) System, WTF!

by Justbooks18

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

I had died naturally  and I have no regrets in the age of 50 I'm thankful I saw my family, being successful and happy, so that's why there's no regret.

When my life is starting to fade away.

I heard a voice inside my head.

[System initiating a connection to the host, processing complete]

Huh?! Wait! What the?! SYSTEM?!WTF!

And my life fades away my soul was suck of a vortex, God what's happening!!!!

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I will follow that story, despite the spelling

Reviewed at: World 1.11 The Crown Prince

This is a re Jew after ten chapters. I am finding this Wuxia story of interest. But the grammar and the spelling are horrendous. I will modify the score if the writing is ameliorated, perhaps with the help of a beta reader.