A Journey of Black and Red

by Mecanimus

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Historical Female Lead Urban Fantasy Villainous Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Where am I? What is this! I... I don't remember anything. I am in chains? Why am I in chains?! And why am I so very...

Thirsty.

 

 

This is a story of vampires as I believe they should be, with their strengths and weaknesses, with their remnants of humanity and the beast inside. Updates every Friday. Mind the tags. 

Cover by Antti Hakosaari: https://www.artstation.com/haco

Special thanks to Svensonsen for getting me started, as well as Omi Nya, Jemima, my patrons and you dear readers, for the support.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1. Cruel Genesis ago
2. Jimena ago
3. False Haven ago
4. The seed of Discord ago
5. The Reveal ago
6. Uprooted ago
7. Servitude ago
8. Outside ago
9. A casual visit ago
10. No rest for the wicked ago
11. The Gauntlet ago
12. Acte I, scène finale ago
13. Homeward ago
14. Roadside snacks ago
15. Reap what you sow ago
16. Marsh March ago
17. Loth of Skoragg's offer. ago
18. Six Months Later ago
19. A gentleman and a scholar ago
20. The Pursuer and the Pursued ago
21. Murder of Crows ago
22. The Waiting Maw ago
23. Into the Heart ago
24. Valor ago
25. The Source ago
26. Self-Discovery ago
27. Coming of Age ago
28. Like Herding Cats pt. 1 ago
29. Like Herding Cats Pt. 2 ago
30. Charm ago
31. Winternight ago
32. Old Money ago
33. The science of the Hunt ago
34. Ring Breaker ago
35. Blood Ties ago
36. Cloaks and Daggers ago
37. 1812, Overture. ago
38. Learning curve. ago
39. The Righteous One ago
40. Masquerade ago
41. Stand your ground. ago
42. The Cruel Seas ago
43. Confluence ago
44. Daydreaming ago
45. Embracing Modernity ago
46. The Eternal Game ago
47. Nemesis ago
48. Pyre of Dreams ago
49. The shadow over Marquette. ago
50. Under the Skin ago
51. Prince of Azure and Gold ago
52. Fate and Absurdity ago
??. Black and Red Healer ago
53. Three is a Crowd ago
54. Night-Owned Town ago
55. Sins. And explosions! ago
56. Preparations ago
57. The Beacon ago
58. The First Queen ago
59. Omen of the end. ago
60. Big Game Hunting ago
61. Before the Storm ago
62. Eneru ago
63. Reign of Blood ago
64. Knight Takes Queen. ago
65. Sur les Bords du Mississippi... ago
66. ... un alligator se tapit. ago
67. Expect the unexpected. ago
68. Dies Irae ago
69. Trial ago
70. Painful hearing. ago
Glossary. ago
71. House Nirari ago
72. All that Glitters ago

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Pyottl
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An entertaining if flawed gem

Reviewed at: 58. The First Queen

Style

More intricate than an average light novel, but not as full as classic novels either. The prose avoids getting too flowery or edgy, and has a decent handle at making it feel a bit archaic, in according with the time period.

However, it also doesn't manage to make it feel entirely authenthic, and to me the LN-style elements still shine through too much for some of the heavier themes of the novel, with occasional streams-of-consciousness issues as well. 

Grammar

Some minor if regular issues; capitalization of titles is a common problem for example. Overall it shouldn't keep anyone from reading this but there's some proofreading misses.

Story

Starts quite strongly with the heroine getting captured and being turned into a vampire, and then of course building up to exploring the world, overcoming challenges, getting used to being a bloodthirsty monster ...

But as so many serials it kinda fizzles out into a slice-of-(un)life thing. I absolutely do not mind the lighter elements of the story in and on themselves, but after the escape the plot lacks a counter-balance to stay truly interesting to me. It's got more of an "everyday life of an 19th century vampiress" appeal than evoking a "omg, what's going to happen next?!" feeling.

Character

Story is for obvious reasons and rightly so dominated by the heroine, and she's entertaining enough with some good balance to follow her. I do think the story suffers a bit from the usual LN/serial power creep / super-special-MC issue ... in essence, she keeps saying how she's so much weaker than older vamps, but then there's always an excuse why it's not that dangerous to her.

Good point would be the current chapter, where she meets 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 Don't get me wrong; it's not like a Mary Sue fest where every 5 chapters you have to expect the lead character to gain some new superamazing power and there's never anyone around that can challenge them in any way ... but after the beginning of the story it's nonetheless in my opinion too easy for the heroine.

As for the side characters ... they are colorful bunch and that has some advantanges, but sometimes some more subdued characteristion I'd say would have better results. Makes it again feel somewhat LN-esque at moments where perhaps things should be heavier.

But I'm getting a bit nitpicky there; most at least have a bit more to them than is immediately obvious and that usually perfectly fine.

Overall 

I quite enjoyed reading it and I do like that it neither turns into some sort of juvenile grimdark fantasy fest nor a complete light novel-esque power fantasy trip. It strikes an OK balance.

I do feel like the first few chapters made me hope for something that's even better and delivers more in terms of tense plot and surprise developments and so on, but, eh. It's a good read like this still.

Fenedor
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One of my favourite web novels

Reviewed at: 51. Prince of Azure and Gold

After following "A Journey of Black and Red" for some month now I can confidently say that it is one of my favourite web novels.

The writing style is different yet refreshing and fitting for the story. Even for me as a non-native speaker, the pairing of setting and language provides the story with an added layer.

I haven't found many grievous or distracting grammar mistakes so far that weren't quickly fixed after release.

The story itself and its characters are a real joy. To follow the growth of Ariane is never boring.

Not only Ariane herself but also the side characters she meets on her journey are well crafted and believable.

I can wholeheartedly recommend "A Journey of Black and Red" to everyone who has the slightest interest in vampires, history (with fantasy elements of course) and/or a continually growing, loveable main character.

Bl00dDem0n
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the child of thorn and hunger claws itself onto my heart

Reviewed at: 48. Pyre of Dreams

 A wonderul tale that tells the story of a human life turned eternal. Of trechery and friendship. Marvelois writing that captured my heart. Written for those who appreciate a moddern classic of writing. The vampire storry.

Mecanimus joins elements of vampiric lore from around the globe into a storry of faith and magic that explores the classic tale in a different way.

I am looking forward to the continuation of the tale of our Child of Thorn and Hunger.

One little critical point at the end. In some conversations with multiple parttakers it can be difficult to follow who is talking at any line. But that is a minor issue making the storyline marginally more difficult to follow. At least for me

That-Cat-Guy
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It starts off slow but even then it's captivating,

From character writing to story telling ariane is the best.

Please read if you love vamp stories that are written in a realistic fashion with a touch of politic drama

KinkyGorilla
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I am disappointed. Not by the quality of the authors work, but at the lack of chapters. I have a Thirst that cannot be sated now, and suffer greatly for it. On a more serious note, this story is amazing. It offers a very unique experience that other stories, both on this site and others, will be hard pressed to match.

Eritis sicut Diabolus
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I'm no fan of vampires so I avoided reading this for months despite seeing it all over. My mistake.

The story reminds me remarkably of the early Tarzan novels (without a lot of the extremely painful cliche's the books contain), back when he was the murder king of the jungle fighting mythical beasts and not some guy that yodels and talks to chimpanzees. The MC is civilized, but contains a savageness that is just so much fun.

TheAntlerInscriber
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One of the best vampire stories I have read in recent times. The writer takes great inspiration from the likes of Anne Rice, Supernatural and the World of Darkness RPG line and then makes it his own with a clever use of world building. His prose, pacing and style is truly captivating as the writer ensnares his audience within the first few pages.

 

I intend to follow this series very closely, and highly recommend it to anywho is looking to enjoy a great vampire novel.

Donny Blue
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One of the best stories on RR.

Reviewed at: 37. 1812, Overture.

The title says it all. Easily one of the best stories on RR.  I read all the available chapters on here and then immediately became a member of the authors patreon page and finished everything they have written. My only complaint is I have to wait for another published chapter. Faster please! 

Elorie
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A proper vampire story, for once. I've avoided anything with that word for a few years now, but the positive reviews had me try it out, and I was not disappointed. 

BlackMountain
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A delightfully refreshing story. Like a cold Coca-Cola on a hot summer day. 

 

Man am I thirsty now.

 

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RR wants me to write 200 characters, so I guess I'll give it a go. This story is not your typical RR story. In an age of overt LitRPG, this story shines with its subtleness. The author doesn't tell us what time period it is, who the main character is, nor much else really. However, he shows us. Through vocabulary, sentence structure, mannerisms, and all sorts of subtle shenanigans.

 

Hats off. 5/5