A Journey of Black and Red

by Mecanimus

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Historical Female Lead Urban Fantasy Villainous Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Where am I? What is this! I... I don't remember anything. I am in chains? Why am I in chains?! And why am I so very...

Thirsty.

 

 

This is a story of vampires as I believe they should be, with their strengths and weaknesses, with their remnants of humanity and the beast inside. Updates every Friday. Mind the tags. 

Cover by Antti Hakosaari: https://www.artstation.com/haco

Special thanks to Svensonsen for getting me started, as well as Omi Nya, Jemima, my patrons and you dear readers, for the support.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1. Cruel Genesis ago
2. Jimena ago
3. False Haven ago
4. The seed of Discord ago
5. The Reveal ago
6. Uprooted ago
7. Servitude ago
8. Outside ago
9. A casual visit ago
10. No rest for the wicked ago
11. The Gauntlet ago
12. Acte I, scène finale ago
13. Homeward ago
14. Roadside snacks ago
15. Reap what you sow ago
16. Marsh March ago
17. Loth of Skoragg's offer. ago
18. Six Months Later ago
19. A gentleman and a scholar ago
20. The Pursuer and the Pursued ago
21. Murder of Crows ago
22. The Waiting Maw ago
23. Into the Heart ago
24. Valor ago
25. The Source ago
26. Self-Discovery ago
27. Coming of Age ago
28. Like Herding Cats pt. 1 ago
29. Like Herding Cats Pt. 2 ago
30. Charm ago
31. Winternight ago
32. Old Money ago
33. The science of the Hunt ago
34. Ring Breaker ago
35. Blood Ties ago
36. Cloaks and Daggers ago
37. 1812, Overture. ago
38. Learning curve. ago
39. The Righteous One ago
40. Masquerade ago
41. Stand your ground. ago
42. The Cruel Seas ago
43. Confluence ago
44. Daydreaming ago
45. Embracing Modernity ago
46. The Eternal Game ago
47. Nemesis ago
48. Pyre of Dreams ago
49. The shadow over Marquette. ago
50. Under the Skin ago
51. Prince of Azure and Gold ago
52. Fate and Absurdity ago
??. Black and Red Healer ago
53. Three is a Crowd ago
54. Night-Owned Town ago
55. Sins. And explosions! ago
56. Preparations ago
57. The Beacon ago
58. The First Queen ago
59. Omen of the end. ago
60. Big Game Hunting ago
61. Before the Storm ago
62. Eneru ago
63. Reign of Blood ago
64. Knight Takes Queen. ago
65. Sur les Bords du Mississippi... ago
66. ... un alligator se tapit. ago
67. Expect the unexpected. ago
68. Dies Irae ago
69. Trial ago
70. Painful hearing. ago
Glossary. ago
71. House Nirari ago
72. All that Glitters ago

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Zethuron
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A nostalgic, beautiful dark tale of vampires

Reviewed at: 26. Self-Discovery

Call me totally impressed, i found this story only recently, after it came on Trending and got interested because of the very positive reviews, so decided to give it a go. And i can only say it was fully worth the time reading this.

The trigger warning in the synopis is there for a good reason, this is not a nice and happy story, not at all. The MC gets enslaved and brainwashed, forced to fight for fun, and more of such, so do not start reading this story if you do not like that, such elements are especially prominent in the first arc of the story.

Before starting this story, it is highly recommended to throw away all misconceptions one may have gotten over time of vampires and other creatures of myth, especially the very idea that Vampires could sparkle while in sunlight. They are not at all like those decepicted in modern fiction, no, they are like in the Classics, like the tales told long ago.

This story follows Ariane, a young woman living a average life in early 19th century Louisiana, or atleast she did until one days she wakes up in a mysterious place, with no memory of how she got there, with a a terrible feeling all over her body, the so called Thirst. Soon she is told that she is changed, human no longer, a fledging of her Master, an ancient Vampire who is the one who has taken her out of her old life. She is soon made to serve her Master and the other Vampire Clans that have taken residence in the region of New Orleans. Yet, deep within she wants freedom, from this servitude, to be able to choose her own path in life, but thats not easy, not with the wide world being dangerous, with supernatural beings out there, ancient Vampire clans in the cities and of course, many humans would rather see her killed if they knew about her true nature, and hiding that is not easy, not when you cannot ever walk under the Sun again and have to feed from humans to survive.

The author has seriously written a great main character with Ariane. She changes so much over the course of the story. Its simply so well done, how she changes, and how her way of thinking changes with her, her character growth is simply massive, from being a scared woman, who easily gives in to her Vampiric urges and serves others, even if that servitude is due to her change, to what she becomes later on, far stronger in mind than she was and a free woman, yet still affected by her very nature, one that she has to sate at the cost of others, or risk becoming crazy from the Thirst.

Due to the nature of this story, other characters arent exactly prominent, but they are quite well written, with some even being great characters like Loth. I eagerly want to see just where the author goes with the characters, there is simply so much potentional, especially given the skill the author has displayed already.

The worldbuilding in this story goes deep, very much so. The author has taken the old stories and tales about Vampires and other mythological races, and crafted a story out of them, and this story is the result of that, set in the early 19th century where Magic and magical races do actually exist, if hidden from most of humanity, who would only fear them for what they are. And the author got the Vampires right, they are written as the author views they should be like, the nobles of the night, they who rule in the shadows, ever afraid of the sun, yet also savage blooddrinkers,  who are easily led by their urges. Simply wonderfully done, even if the story still has a quite long way to go.

Near impeccable grammar, barely any mistakes at all, and those that were spotted got fixed pretty fast, to me it seems that the author is quite skilled with writing in the english language, overall the grammar quality is better than the majority of webfiction, however there could be still improvements. Readers should have no problems with the grammar used in this story at all.

Mecanimus, the author has a amazing writing style and that is especially shown in this story. With its great prose and overall writing quality, this story simply draws you in from the first pages, making one truly enjoy reading it from beginning until end. The great descriptions of scenes, the tension during the well written fights, all of them add to this story and make it even more enjoyable to read. Even the pacing doenst feel off at all, switching speed when neccesary for the story, either at a fast pace, or a slow one, but never slow enough that the story gets boring to read.

I eagerly await more to read, knowing that it will be very likely enjoyable to read every chapter as it comes, so keep on writing at this quality Mecanimus, and dont stop!

So stop waiting already and just go make the right decision with starting to read this story, so you can enjoy this beautifully written vampire story with a great mix  of action, drama, worldbuilding and characters. This has totally not disappointed me, and i doubt anyone who wants to read about Vampires as they are will be.

Jemima
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Nosferatu Would Be Proud

Reviewed at: 13. Homeward

A intense, visceral exploration of vampiric delights. Vampires as they should be, no sparkle, no nonsense - only violence, passion and lots of action.  Ariane is a beautifully and expertly drawn character and an absolute pleasure to read. The fight scenes are gritty and tense, the world building is interesting and I am keen to see more.

flobbingmaster
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Really good as of chapter 24. With solid writing, cool characters and a thrilling plot.

My only fear is that it might get less interesting after the first couple of arcs. So far it has not been an issue, but the beginning set a high bar and it would be easy to degrade into mediocrity.

So Mecanimus, keep up the good work, and keep writing great atmospheric situations and don't let the plot stagnate. The current arc as of chapter 24 is interesting, but i personally miss vampire politics.

Oh and i love the setting of 1800's ish America.

K. Love you. Bye!

Foolish Luke
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Surprisingly good period vampire drama

Reviewed at: 21. Murder of Crows

A period vampire story that respects the classics without imitating them, this is a well writen and so far well thought out vampire drama that has avoided all of the usual pitfalls and cliches.

 

I am thoroughly enjoying the story and I eagerly await more chapters.

caerulex
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Seriously, who didn't give this 5 stars?

Reviewed at: 26. Self-Discovery

A truly fantastic work of fiction. I'm generally not a huge fan of period fiction, but I am a fan of vampire books, and have read everything from Anne Rice (ie The Vampire Lestat) to Stephanie Meyer (Twilight...) to Bram Stoker (Dracula). Looove vampires.

This is an excellent work that is definitely reminiscent of, at least in my opinion, Anne Rice. It is creative and has some excellent world building and unique elements I haven't read about in other vampire novels but appreciate, like the ever-present eye in the sky.

The main character, Ariane, is fantastic and has SO MUCH development. Love many of the other characters as well, especially those introduced a bit later, like Loth, Dalton and Bingle.

Style-wise, the book is beautifully written. Additionally, the dialogue is consistently period appropriate, witty/funny, and intelligent as a rule. Very few errors, and whatever ones found are very, very small. Ie a bot vs both. I have yet to find more than a single error in one chapter, and the chapters are all blissfully long.

I will admit, it took about a chapter for me to get into this. For the first few thousand words or so, I was unsure what was going on and the prose felt *slightly* clunky.

Do yourself a favor and make sure you at least get through the first chapter if you have any doubts about the quality of this work. It's really something special! One it gets going (somewhere towards to end of chapter 1, at least for me), it doesn't stop!

👍👍

Darch
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What is Black and White and Red all over?

Reviewed at: 30. Charm

This story is many things: a period drama set across the history of the united states from the perspective of a vampire, a coming of age story for an immortal, a beautifully written, character-centric story of a girl who overcomes a terrible situation, and shows noticable growth every single arc. Mostly, though, this story is just incredible.

Don't let the dark tags scare you  away: this story isn't some edgy power fantasy for those who want to see the death of the innocents. Here we have a vampire that follows the bram stoker rules: no walking into a residence uninvited, no moving during the day, a weakness to silver, fire and sunlight. Oh yeah, and an incredibly well written inner dialogue of a simple southern girl fighting the new instincts she has to devour all who oppose her reign as the true top of the food chain like the cattle they are. This is a story about this girl who grows into her own code of conduct, doling out a bit of poetic justice where she can, while interacting with monstrous beings of myth who have hidden from humanity, just beneath the surface... 

So yeah. It's really good. If you like character centric stories with great inner dialogue, and aren't afraid of seeing the crueller parts of humanity, i'd say give it a go. 

Bioniclegenius
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I am not a fan of vampire stories. I don't particularly enjoy history. I don't like period stories, and I don't generally enjoy stories written in first person.

This... Monster masquerading as an author has put all of those things into a masterwork that is far more compelling and absorbing than it has any right to be. I have almost never had a story suck me in this powerfully. The writer is clearly extremely highly educated, and expertly puts that to use to great effect. The characters are intelligent, witty, and fully three-dimensional from the moment you meet them, but not in a way that feels overwhelming - rather, in a way that just feels real and right.

I have not yet finished reading all there is of this so far, but I can already tell that when I do I will be feeling the Thirst for more. This will be going on my personal best-of-all-time list, and I highly, highly recommend that everybody read this, even if you think you won't be interested. You'll be in for a ride.

duens5
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a strange combination of nostalgic and novel

Reviewed at: 24. Valor

Reading this story I flashback to my youth where I voraciously read everything that the Youg adult section of the book store had to offer. Vampires were very much in vogue at the time and every book involved them in some way. Some were good, some weren't. It was always a deep pleasure to find a good one. This story reminds me of some of the best of those. It treats vampires as they ought to be, as magical creatures with significant strengths and weakness as opposed to immortal superheroes. It properly answers the question of " if vampires exist what else is out there?". It makes its world exciting and skillfully contrasts a few different writing styles. I hope to see this story continue on and keep filling the vampire shaped hole in my heart. 

Branded-Tier
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A well written and interesting story

Reviewed at: 30. Charm

A dark and gritty vampire story. It calls on Bram Stoker's Dracula and Anne Rice's Vampire Chronicles but doesn’t just copy them. The world is set in the Southern United States two decades after it was formed, specifically around the French speaking populations.

The vampires in this story aren't nice, they burn in the sun and sleep during the day. They drink the blood of humans and fight with other magical creatures like Werewolves and mages all against a backdrop of a still tumultuous United States of America. It has interesting interactions between its characters all influenced by traditional European, Native American, and African cultures. The characters' different backgrounds influencing how they perceive and interact with the main character.

The characters are well written and well explored. They each have people they trust and distrust, they betray each other and help each other, they have likes and dislikes, flaws and strengths.

The pacing of the story is a breath of fresh air when many stories on this site have much trouble with either rushing through or going so slow that it turns into a slice of life.

The plot is well thought out and interesting. The main character has her share of ups and downs, walking a twisting road through life trying to avoid any of the truly powerful entities in the world that could kill her in a second flat.

All around a very enjoyable story. It is perhaps a bit Grimdark for some people's tastes, at least in its characters’ flexible morals and proclivity towards violence. If you like a more down to earth and gritty depiction of creatures that can only survive by taking lives then this story is definitely for you.

HoloSol
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Simply amazing. First Vampire novel I’ve actually enjoyed.

Reviewed at: 26. Self-Discovery

Basically the first Vampire novel I could ever sink my teeth into.

 

As of chapter 26, I have nothing but positive words to say about this story. Really looking forward to where the story is going; it’s brimming with potential.