A Journey of Black and Red

by Mecanimus

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Female Lead Urban Fantasy Villainous Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Where am I? What is this! I... I don't remember anything. I am in chains? Why am I in chains?! And why am I so very...

Thirsty.

 

 

This is a story of vampires as I believe they should be. Major trigger warnings.  I update every week. 

 

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Special thanks to the following people for their support, they are the reason I kept writing:

Svensonsen the first fan.

Jemima from Metal and Magic: https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/21323/metal-and-magic

Omi Nya from Creative Thinking:https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/23840/creative-thinking-is-everything-i-have

 

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Zethuron
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A nostalgic, beautiful dark tale of vampires

Call me totally impressed, i found this story only recently, after it came on Trending and got interested because of the very positive reviews, so decided to give it a go. And i can only say it was fully worth the time reading this.

The trigger warning in the synopis is there for a good reason, this is not a nice and happy story, not at all. The MC gets enslaved and brainwashed, forced to fight for fun, and more of such, so do not start reading this story if you do not like that, such elements are especially prominent in the first arc of the story.

Before starting this story, it is highly recommended to throw away all misconceptions one may have gotten over time of vampires and other creatures of myth, especially the very idea that Vampires could sparkle while in sunlight. They are not at all like those decepicted in modern fiction, no, they are like in the Classics, like the tales told long ago.

This story follows Ariane, a young woman living a average life in early 19th century Louisiana, or atleast she did until one days she wakes up in a mysterious place, with no memory of how she got there, with a a terrible feeling all over her body, the so called Thirst. Soon she is told that she is changed, human no longer, a fledging of her Master, an ancient Vampire who is the one who has taken her out of her old life. She is soon made to serve her Master and the other Vampire Clans that have taken residence in the region of New Orleans. Yet, deep within she wants freedom, from this servitude, to be able to choose her own path in life, but thats not easy, not with the wide world being dangerous, with supernatural beings out there, ancient Vampire clans in the cities and of course, many humans would rather see her killed if they knew about her true nature, and hiding that is not easy, not when you cannot ever walk under the Sun again and have to feed from humans to survive.

The author has seriously written a great main character with Ariane. She changes so much over the course of the story. Its simply so well done, how she changes, and how her way of thinking changes with her, her character growth is simply massive, from being a scared woman, who easily gives in to her Vampiric urges and serves others, even if that servitude is due to her change, to what she becomes later on, far stronger in mind than she was and a free woman, yet still affected by her very nature, one that she has to sate at the cost of others, or risk becoming crazy from the Thirst.

Due to the nature of this story, other characters arent exactly prominent, but they are quite well written, with some even being great characters like Loth. I eagerly want to see just where the author goes with the characters, there is simply so much potentional, especially given the skill the author has displayed already.

The worldbuilding in this story goes deep, very much so. The author has taken the old stories and tales about Vampires and other mythological races, and crafted a story out of them, and this story is the result of that, set in the early 19th century where Magic and magical races do actually exist, if hidden from most of humanity, who would only fear them for what they are. And the author got the Vampires right, they are written as the author views they should be like, the nobles of the night, they who rule in the shadows, ever afraid of the sun, yet also savage blooddrinkers,  who are easily led by their urges. Simply wonderfully done, even if the story still has a quite long way to go.

Near impeccable grammar, barely any mistakes at all, and those that were spotted got fixed pretty fast, to me it seems that the author is quite skilled with writing in the english language, overall the grammar quality is better than the majority of webfiction, however there could be still improvements. Readers should have no problems with the grammar used in this story at all.

Mecanimus, the author has a amazing writing style and that is especially shown in this story. With its great prose and overall writing quality, this story simply draws you in from the first pages, making one truly enjoy reading it from beginning until end. The great descriptions of scenes, the tension during the well written fights, all of them add to this story and make it even more enjoyable to read. Even the pacing doenst feel off at all, switching speed when neccesary for the story, either at a fast pace, or a slow one, but never slow enough that the story gets boring to read.

I eagerly await more to read, knowing that it will be very likely enjoyable to read every chapter as it comes, so keep on writing at this quality Mecanimus, and dont stop!

So stop waiting already and just go make the right decision with starting to read this story, so you can enjoy this beautifully written vampire story with a great mix  of action, drama, worldbuilding and characters. This has totally not disappointed me, and i doubt anyone who wants to read about Vampires as they are will be.

Jemima
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Nosferatu Would Be Proud

A intense, visceral exploration of vampiric delights. Vampires as they should be, no sparkle, no nonsense - only violence, passion and lots of action.  Ariane is a beautifully and expertly drawn character and an absolute pleasure to read. The fight scenes are gritty and tense, the world building is interesting and I am keen to see more.

Bioniclegenius
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I am not a fan of vampire stories. I don't particularly enjoy history. I don't like period stories, and I don't generally enjoy stories written in first person.

This... Monster masquerading as an author has put all of those things into a masterwork that is far more compelling and absorbing than it has any right to be. I have almost never had a story suck me in this powerfully. The writer is clearly extremely highly educated, and expertly puts that to use to great effect. The characters are intelligent, witty, and fully three-dimensional from the moment you meet them, but not in a way that feels overwhelming - rather, in a way that just feels real and right.

I have not yet finished reading all there is of this so far, but I can already tell that when I do I will be feeling the Thirst for more. This will be going on my personal best-of-all-time list, and I highly, highly recommend that everybody read this, even if you think you won't be interested. You'll be in for a ride.

Khoalala
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Fascinating, alluring and addictive

This story hits all the right places for me, but the best parts are the vampires and the protagonist. The vampires are portrayed as true monsters, they are mysterious and frightening in their nature, not just their supernatural powers.

The protagonist is lovable and believable. I found myself giggling reading her thoughts on her circumstances. 

And the author’s style is unique and quite enjoyable.

To sum up, the story is great, the characters are fun, go read it :3

K4m30
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All the other reviews are five stars

 And it certainly deserves it. Read it.

A well written compelling story.

MrAlwaysRight
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Well written story, 10/10.

I had no idea what to expect before I started this story, but straight from the beginning I was hooked because of this story's unique (on RR) and archaic use of vocabulary and sentence structure. I love the way it is told, it is easy to read and also incredibly fascinating.

I read all 26 chapters (so far) in one sitting because I was so drawn into the story and eager to find out where Ariana's journey to become a full fledged vampire would take her next. 

It is descriptive but does not suffer from long drawn out sentences. The action scenes are well written and informative of what happens and there's some good humour sprinkled here and there. 

Regarding grammar; I don't recall finding any mistakes however there were some typos here and there. They are few and far between so they did not deter my reading experience. 

Honestly, 10/10. Good job & keep on writing. 

Foolish Luke
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Surprisingly good period vampire drama

A period vampire story that respects the classics without imitating them, this is a well writen and so far well thought out vampire drama that has avoided all of the usual pitfalls and cliches.

 

I am thoroughly enjoying the story and I eagerly await more chapters.

Dorrin
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This one should go the distance

Excellence in motion, well formed characters, decently laid plot, detailed and rich world are the main characteristics of this story.  Nothing to complain about or find wanting.  It fits the tags like a glove and yet blossoms into more.  It has been a long time since I've read a good vampire novel.

flobbingmaster
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Really good as of chapter 24. With solid writing, cool characters and a thrilling plot.

My only fear is that it might get less interesting after the first couple of arcs. So far it has not been an issue, but the beginning set a high bar and it would be easy to degrade into mediocrity.

So Mecanimus, keep up the good work, and keep writing great atmospheric situations and don't let the plot stagnate. The current arc as of chapter 24 is interesting, but i personally miss vampire politics.

Oh and i love the setting of 1800's ish America.

K. Love you. Bye!

duens5
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a strange combination of nostalgic and novel

Reading this story I flashback to my youth where I voraciously read everything that the Youg adult section of the book store had to offer. Vampires were very much in vogue at the time and every book involved them in some way. Some were good, some weren't. It was always a deep pleasure to find a good one. This story reminds me of some of the best of those. It treats vampires as they ought to be, as magical creatures with significant strengths and weakness as opposed to immortal superheroes. It properly answers the question of " if vampires exist what else is out there?". It makes its world exciting and skillfully contrasts a few different writing styles. I hope to see this story continue on and keep filling the vampire shaped hole in my heart.