Atros Imperium

by Terry78

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Harem Magic Supernatural

Anton Thorn died in an incident of his own creation, his body torn and shredded to pieces.

Yet death and eternal rest did not await him. Gods, from another world, took his soul along many others to their world to fight an overwhelming and impossible foe.

By chance and oversight his soul was missed by the gods, his soul destined to remain in limbo and torment for all eterinity. A few weak and desperate gods took a chance with him and brought him through to their world.

Now sent far away from the battle, in his original body, to a small village in the husk of a dead kingdom. It is now up to him to restore the Kingdom and fight off anything that would threaten him or those he loves; be they human, beast, monster or hero.

 

---[Cover art by ssddx]---

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 000: Prologue ago
Chapter 001 ago
Chapter 002 ago
Chapter 003 ago
Chapter 004 ago
Chapter 005 ago
Chapter 006 ago
Chapter 007 ago
Chapter 008 ago
Chapter 009 ago
Chapter 010 ago
Chapter 011 ago
Chapter 012 ago
Chapter 013 ago
Chapter 014 ago
Chapter 015 ago
Chapter 015.5 ago
Chapter 016 ago
Chapter 017 ago
Chapter 018 ago
Chapter 019 ago
Chapter 020 ago
Chapter 021 - Preperations (V.2) ago
Chapter 022 - The Forest's Secrets ago
Chapter 023 - The Outer Heart of Maxill ago
Chapter 024 - The Righteous Path ago
Chapter 025 - New Tension ago
Chapter 026 - Kal and Gods ago
Chapter 027 - Kobolds ago
Chapter 028 - Strike ago
Chapter 029 - Accelerated Plans ago
Chapter 030 - Respite ago
Chapter 031 - The Last Night ago
Chapter 032 - Maxill Reborn ago
Chapter 033 - A Change of Heart ago
Announcement ago
Chapter 034 - The Home Front ago
Chapter 035 - Siege and Revelation ago
Chapter 036 - Returning to Carnage ago
Chapter 037 - Cleaning Up ago
Chapter 038 - The Calm Night ago
Chapter 039 - Nithroel ago
Chapter 040 - Planning for the Future ago
Chapter 041 - Laying down the Law ago
Chapter 042 - The First Test ago
Chapter 043 - Cave of the Past ago
Chapter 044 - A short and Bloody Trial ago
Chapter 045 - Administration ago
Chapter 046 - Down to the Depths ago
Chapter 047 - Barred ago
Chapter 048 - Venom Tipped ago
Chapter 049 - Determinant Decision ago
Chapter 050 - Warcamp ago
Chapter 051 - Payments of all Kinds ago
Chapter 052 - Counterattack ago
Chapter 053 - Clogging Meat ago
Chapter 054 - Gravestone ago
Chapter 055 - Into the Heart ago
Chapter 056 - Charmed ago
Chapter 057 - Smoky Dust ago
Chapter 058 - Old tricks ago
Chapter 059 - Heart ago
Chapter 060 - Bonds ago
Chapter 061 - Questioning ago
Chapter 062 - Knight Order ago
Chapter 063 - The King's Justice ago
Chapter 064 - Family ago
Chapter 065 - Embers of Alliance ago
Chapter 066 - To the Future ago
Chapter 067 - The New Heroes Pt.1 ago
Maps and Images ago
Chapter 068. Vol 3 - Rings and Sand ago
Chapter 069. Vol 3 - Blessed ago
Chapter 070. Vol 3 - Hints and Whispers ago
Chapter 071. Vol 3 - Confusion ago
Chapter 072. Vol 3 - Provincial Lands ago
Chapter 073. Vol 3 - Yellow, Blue and Red ago
Chapter 074. Vol 3 - Weathered Thin ago
Chapter 075. Vol 3 - Changes ago
Chapter 076. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - Iron Links ago
Chapter 077. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - Frozen Stone ago
Chapter 078. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - The New Heroes Pt.2 ago
Chapter 079. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - Abuse of Faith ago
Announcment (Not a cancellation) ago
Chapter 080. Vol 3 - Entry ago
Chapter 081. Vol 3 - Leather and Bands ago
Chapter 082. Vol 3 - Meaty Kebabs ago
Chapter 083. Vol 3 - Enchantments, Clothing & Supplies ago
Chapter 084. Vol 3 - Road to Battle ago
Chapter 085. Vol 3 - Fort Acidava ago
Chapter 086. Vol 3 - Fire, Water, Iron and Gold ago
Chapter 087. Vol 3 - Into the Breach ago
Christmas update ago
Chapter 088. Vol 3 - Six Weeping Eyes ago
Chapter 089. Vol 3 - Lord Cassius ago
Chapter 090. Vol 3 - Strega ago
Chapter 091. Vol 3 - Smoulder ago
Chapter 092. Vol 3 - Curses and Prayer ago
Chapter 093. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - Misplaced Trust ago
Chapter 094. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - Centaur’s Countermeasure ago
Chapter 095. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - By the Holy Father! ago
A Brief Reflection (Not a cancellation) ago
Chapter 96. Vol 3 - A Moment to Sit ago
Chapter 97. Vol 3 - Crossing the River ago
Chapter 98. Vol 3 - Break Away ago
Chapter 99. Vol 3 - Rusaddir and The Snowberry ago
Chapter 100. Vol 3 - Danafra ago
Chapter 101. Vol 3 - Legal Rescue ago
Chapter 102. Vol 3 - Beast-kin in the Shadows ago
Chapter 103. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - Thessos ago
Chapter 104. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - The Ancient Oak's Defenders ago
Chapter 105. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - Infiltration ago
Chapter 106. Vol 3 - Dragon Tooth Bay ago
Chapter 107. Vol 3 - Storm over Ruins ago
Chapter 108. Vol 3 - Safety ago
Chapter 109. Vol 3 - (Interlude) - Soulthor's Fate ago
Quick Update ago
Chapter 110 Pt.1 - Vol 4 - Good Tidings ago
Chapter 110 Pt.2 - Vol 4 - Good Tidings ago
Chapter 111 - Vol 4 - Weapons of the Old Gods ago
Chapter 112 - Vol 4 - Vision and Sight Restored ago
Chapter 113 Pt.1 - Vol 4 - Clutching ago
Chapter 113 Pt.2 - Vol 4 - Clutching ago
Chapter 114 - Vol 4 - Spinning and Writhing ago
Chapter 115 - Vol 4 - Tranquil Days ago
Chapter 116 - Vol 4 - Porous ago
Chapter 117 Pt.1 - Vol 4 - Cooperation ago
Chapter 117 Pt.2 - Vol 4 - Cooperation ago
Chapter 118 Pt.1 - Vol 4 - Groundwork for Depature ago
Chapter 118 Pt.2 - Vol 4 - Groundwork for Depature ago
Chapter 119 Pt.1 - Vol 4 - (Interlude) - Qaiviel in Flames ago
Chapter 119 Pt.2 - Vol 4 - (Interlude) - Qaiviel in Flames ago
Chapter 119 Pt.3 - Vol 4 - (Interlude) - Qaiviel in Flames ago
Chapter 120 - Vol 4 - Balefire Mine ago
Chapter 121 - Vol 4 - The White Realm ago
Chapter 122 - Vol 4 - (Interlude) - Blood Drenched Snow ago
Chapter 123 - Vol 4 - Jaka ago
Chapter 124 - Vol 4 - The Basilisk Swamp ago
Chapter 125 - Vol 4 - Learning ago
Chapter 126 - Vol 4 - The Roiling Waves ago
Chapter 127 - Vol 4 - First Batch ago
Chapter 128 Pt.1 - Vol 4 - The Calm ago
Chapter 128 Pt.2 - Vol 4 - Before the Storm ago
Chapter 129 - Vol 4 - The Shadow Isles ago
Chapter 130 - Vol 4 - Mist Walkers ago
Chapter 131 - Vol 4 - Rumble in the Forest ago
Chapter 132 - Vol 4 - First Battle in The Shadows ago
Chapter 133 - Vol 4 - Maxill & Gresir ago
Chapter 134 - Vol 4 - Pushing Forward ago
Chapter 135 Pt.1 - Vol 4 - Spiteful Elders ago
Chapter 135 Pt.2 - Vol 4 - Spiteful Elders ago
Chapter 136 - Vol 4 - Beasts in the Dream ago
Chapter 137 - Vol 4 - Shadows in the Sand ago
Chapter 138 - Vol 4 - The Green Moon ago
Chapter 139 - Vol 4 - Respite ago
Chapter 140 - Vol 4 - Quick Foray ago
Chapter 141 Pt.1 - Vol 4 - Strike in the Darkness ago
Chapter 141 Pt.2 - Vol 4 - Strike in the Darkness ago
Chapter 141 Pt.3 - Vol 4 - Strike in the Darkness ago
Chapter 142 - Vol 4 - Castle Etoile ago
Chapter 143 - Vol 4 - King Leo's First Battle ago
Chapter 144 - Vol 4 - Silver ago
Chapter 145 - Vol 4 - King and Key ago
Chapter 146 Pt.1 - Vol 4 - The King's Subterfuge ago
Chapter 146 Pt.2 - Vol 4 - The King's Subterfuge ago
Chapter 147 - Vol 4 - Light Surgery ago
Chapter 148 - Vol 4 - Clausonne in Reach ago
Chapter 149 - Vol 4 - Cardinal's Gambit ago
Chapter 150 - Vol 4 - All Hail the King! ago
Chapter 151 - Vol 4 - Closing Evening ago
Chapter 152 - Vol 4 - Troubling Dreams ago
Chapter 153 - Vol 4 - The Qaiviel Kingdom ago
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Bearcat
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Excellent Story - A Must Follow

This is a fascinating rendition of the popular "transported/reincarnated" story template. As the synopsis denotes, the MC is transported separately from a group of souls that died during a busing accident(?). Potential readers, please be advised that it does not follow the "LitRPG" style of game windows and all that. However, it doesn't suffer in the slightest. I'd recommend you pick up this work. Few chapters, but their lengths are substantial.

 

After some typical god meeting shenanigans, he wakes up in the middle of a town that is currently being swarmed by goblin-esque creatures. From there, it's a fast paced headlong dive into the state of affairs for the town that is on the brink of ruin. 

 

This in itself (besides the sheer quality of the writing) was what hooked me. While there is a typical "summoning" that our MC missed, we get to stay away from the stereotypical political and training issues of being summoned and we instead are thrust into a more basebuilding plot  that's centered around a localized community vs. monsters defense scenario. I love it. All the while, you still stay true to advancing the MC and giving him bursts of insight to increase his control and understanding of the magic he was gifted by the gods.  

 

Your grammar, diction, and sentence structure are all excellent besides some occasional typos and punctuation misses. There is one habit of yours that I should comment on, ( it's one that lots of authors on the site are guilty of) and that would be the tendency to split up dialogue from supporting actions. I understand the need to separate dialogue of course in certain cases, but when you do it too much, it produces a typewriter style of reading for the audience. If you want an example, look towards the beginning of Chapter 8. It's a stylistic thing too of course, but I'd recommend being more intentional with your paragraph construction as it possesses better reading flow and would be easier on your readers. The only reason I bother mentioning it is because you're a good enough author that I can only recommend polishing tweaks.

 

The last thing I want to comment on is how much of a love/hate relationship I have with how much you keep us in the dark about characters' back story(*cough*Verona and Jeffrey*cough*). After all the times I've been shot in the heart by authors on this site when it comes to romance, I can't help but imagine the worst case scenario until everything has been explicitly fleshed out.  This is just a personal aside, and it has no bearing on my rating. Otherwise, I applaud the suspense as it adds a lot to the story.

 

Here's to hoping that you can continue to write regularly as I am certainly going to be following your tale!

readalot
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The story and the people are far too simple. Ok, guy gets thrown to a medieval setting and is given leader position for no particular reason that is fine. What isn't fine is how people are portrayed as idiots. Build a wall, use stone instead of wood and store food are all things any commoner would know about in ancient times but for some reason, the people in this story need to be told. 

The Bus Lurker
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If you've read the Daniel Black stuff, you'll like this fic.

 The premise of the story is another transported to another world. The MC has the typical unlimited potential to work magic. For me the story is an okay read, or average. The setting is really interesting, the situation the mc is thrown into while not unique is still interesting. The author could use an editor, as there are many words that do not fit into context, but were not caught by auto correct because the filler words are actual words, just like i said taken out of context.

I do however have three strong gripes with the story overall. 1, the connection to the gods is very sketchy, and the first couple of chapters are a little hard to follow, and in general uninteresting. 2, after one display of power, nearly killing himself in the process, the villagers follow the mc with stunning devotion. It's clear that he has very little to no grasp over magic, and has just about no memories about anything. Yet a group of 1000 people follow him, about 9.9/10 of them blindingly. The MC has some sound ideas, but to bumpkin villagers who only know farming, how would they know a good idea that the mc offers from a bad idea? The MC almost kills a dozen villagers with his magic, and it's not even addressed by the villagers, excuse me?!?! My third gripe is the characters. They're all flat. Jeff "trains the people how to fight" excuse me, a guy who has been in "a few scraps" is teaching people how to kill how to use a pitchfork or spear to fight? And he does a damn good job of it! WTF! The MC is rescued by a girl. Okay, but for reasons, she now lives in his room, and travels by his side for everything. Uhhh what? The MC talks with the village chief about people doing something productive for the village, and she literally does nothing. She trains with a spear in the mornings, and just recently started to do so. The MC refers to her as being the first real guard the village has seen in years. Yeah okay, keep thinking with your dick. The MC jumps straight into the defense of the city, and doesn't have a personality. He's just a person that goes along with situations, a person who describes himself as a loner, and is then a leader, and feels natural in 2 days. The village is too unrealistic for me, and that laddies and gentleman is what grinds my gears.

Malakbel
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Read until Chapter 11

I've dropped the story after Chapter 11. Chapter 1 with the introduction was fine/good and made me interested, everything after went downhill. Honestly, the author has ok grammar and sentence structuring. Although sometimes it can get annoying when you've read "allot" a lot of times.

Spoilers up till Chapter 11, personal opinion. Super honest. 

No my real gripe is that I couldn't enjoy the story enough to continue reading. Too many flaws. Most issues for me are story related:

  • At some point the MC is the new leader and it's not explained why the new guy (MC) that randomly appeared is in charge of the village. They know nothing about the guy except he has 0 memories and he is supposedly a mage. Why, would you put him in charge? Someone would need to earn leadership, it's not freely given. Either through respect, force, etcetera. No, casting 1 spell isn't enough to earn leadership. They don't know if the guy is even a fine leader, they only know he can cast spells.
  • The main character shouldn't just accept his new position either. If someone randomly hands it over to you, shouldn't you feel wary if there's any catch? Why give the position in the first place to him and why does he not ask why it's given to him?
  • The romance feels forced. The female character with silver hair randomly appears and starts following him. And from one point to another, suddenly she's stuck with him and he's just ok with it. There's no in-between, there is zero build up and no reasoning given why both are fine with it up till this point.
  • The antagonist I read is 100% delusional and 100% evil. There is no real motive here other than greed for power. If you read american comics such as Batman or Spiderman etcetera. Usually the antagonists have better fleshed out stories than the main character themselves. Nope, not this guy. He started a cult and we don't even know how he managed to make people believe in him. Sure, when an outsider looks at a cult, it's obvious it is a cult and they're doing lots of weird stuff.. Whereas the people inside the cult aren't aware of it. But the way this cult is being run, he's not even remotely smart and I don't even get why everyone is following him.
  • All characters are flat. We barely know anything about anyone other than the MC and we even don't know much about the MC himself. Almost no character building. There's only power building and low-key levelling I suppose.
  • There is no mentioning of any cultural differences which you would think there are in a different country/world/fantasy etc.
  • Informal speech is being used, a lot. In situations where it doesn't make much sense.

As you can see what I'm pointing at. I need to jump through too many hoops in order to enjoy the story. Chapter 1 was fine and everything went downhill afterwards. No world-building, no character-building, flat characters. There are too many flaws in the way the story is currently structured.

Honestly I'm only pointing out the bad stuff so I suppose I'm biased. The story is somewhat enjoyable to read, interesting stuff happens and the story setting is interesting (which was the whole reason I started reading). You'll naturally be wanting to know what happens in the next chapter. But honestly, it's not really that good of a story as I pointed out before during my rant. Sorry for ranting guys :-P

shortos
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unpolished gems stay as rocks

Its a pretty nice story.

 

Thats said there are glaring plotholes and contradictions in it.

Lets take the size of the village for example. At first it is around 6-10 buildings wide. Then days later 25. Not to mention the dozens that got distroyed. Even if you take THAT there is no way 1000 people lived there permanently. Not even to mention the population bofore the fights.

Then we got explicitly mentioned the wall has 2 gates. The next chapter it seems moses walked into it because it split to have 4 now. And that in storytime of 3 days. In a raging thunderstorm.

So yeah its a nice little story but it cries the whole time pls edit me or end my struggle

 

Prasant Mehata
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 Well.I continued till ch88.but now it has become boring..MC is I think an idiot..He has forgotten many things he said he would do...Also not creative with magic.. Doesn't even experiment or think new ways of applying "magic"... and really marriage...Not even a year of story build up..

AaronoraA
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2 stars is pushing it

Story is bad, characters are boring, setting is bland, grammar and spelling are atrocious, and the fact that this has near 5 stars is unsettling. The only thing I can compliment is the way mana is described as being heavy. A very intuitive way of describing it, indeed.  I would list all of my gripes with everything, but that would be a monumental undertaking and don't feel there would be much use anyways. You deserve credit for sticking to it and continuing to push out chapters after two years.

Chimeric
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I wanted to like it, but ...

Disclaimer: The story is quite long, though I only made it to chapter 12, so some of the issues that bothered me could well be worked out in later chapters. I don't want to discourage the author, because there are sparks of what could be a really good story that was birthed in an active imagination. However, I would really recommend that the author take the time to brush up on grammar and vocabulary--or at least find someone to edit the work who is competent. 

Another thing that bothers me is that this story fell into a much-used trope where the MC "valiantly" tries to maintain his chastity or else not jump to conclusions about the woman's motives in the face of overwhelming temptation as the most beautiful woman around basically throws herself at him at every opportunity, up to and including sleeping in the same bed with him. Add on that the woman in question is the love interest of the main protagonist and you've got a good half of the plot of every bad story ever written.

At the point I stopped reading, they've just more-or-less chastely risen from their third night in the same bed without consumating the relationship. I can't completely fault the author, I'm noticing this trend in a lot of amateur works on RR, so I can't put the blame here, but it's unnecessary, does not move the story along, and if the intention is to build sexual tension, then the scenario fails at that. It all reminds me of the fumbling attempts at relationships of middle-schoolers when we're supposedly dealing with adults.

Frankly, since I had little in the way of constructive criticism to offer, I DID NOT want to write this review; however, many authors of stories that I've read on RR have complained that someone gave them a bad star score, but didn't leave a written review, so I took my own advice and decided that if I was going to do it at all, I'd do it all the way ;)

Oninomad
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Maybe it gets better but I'll never know

I have to assume from the reviews that I'm missing something, maybe it's farther than chapter 10 but that is as far as I got. It's just not interesting, is begins with 2 cliche gods (and one with potential I'll admit) who want him to reincarnate but seem completely uninterested him succeeding, his love interest remind me more of a puppy than a full formed human being and his powers, like the characterization of almost everyone in the story are very inconsistent. The grammar is just below the tolerable line except for the over use the term "a lot" made only more noticable because he spells it "allot". I won't say the story doesn't have potential but after 10 chapters there was no reason to believe that potential would amount to anything.

darckshin
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I like the idea and the way you write. Hope to read much more of it.