Ira’s Faithful

by Denisat

Original HIATUS Adventure Fantasy Dungeon Female Lead High Fantasy Magic Mythos Non-Human lead Ruling Class War and Military
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

On hiatus due to health reasons. I will be back once I feel better.

Synopsis:

Fate has plans for everyone. There are many paths one can walk and many nodes one can unlock. Yet all mortal souls only start with one node. This has been the case for many years and while there are some records of people with more than one first node, these are as rare as wings on snails, roses made of air, or ropes made of dragon-hair.

Elise Anker has two first nodes. She doesn't know why and the only one that could answer is an angry voice in her head. She hears it rarely and the voice is as helpful as a sword is effective against a Leviathan. No one knows that she has an angry voice in her head, and she doesn't think that anyone would believe her.Elise is loved by her mother Fiona, her new Grandpa Heinz "The Red Lion" and her new Grandma Heidi. She strives to become a mage, a knight or maybe something else entirely. The future is uncertain and unless she finds out what her nodes mean, she won't ever know what she wants to become.But her nodes won't unlock and the angry voice tells her that she needs to find a worthy sacrifice to kill.


Disclaimer:

This is a work of fiction. Names, characters, businesses, places, events, and incidents are either the products of the author’s imagination or used in a fictitious manner. Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead, or actual events is purely coincidental.

I am also not a professional author. Furthermore, this fiction is rather slow-paced for a rather long time.

"Ira's Faithful" is the rewrite of "Temptations Of Wrath". Parts of the plot and characters may be different or missing.

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Kirkegaard
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I like the story thus far, it feels like a coming of age story, and i like the pace aint to fast, but it feels about right

LongTimeReaderFirstTimeWriter
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90% exposition, 2% action, 8% clunky dialogue

Reviewed at: Chapter 21 - Foul Mouth

This story is just exposition. No story just exposition followed by more exposition. Every chapter is 90% inner thoughts of characters telling exposition about the history of the world or current politics. 
Author, show don't tell. I had to drop this story because I started skimming all the exposition.