Rebirth in a Magical World

by Flying JMW

Fan Fiction ONGOING Action Fantasy Magic Male Lead Reincarnation School Life

What would you do if you were reborn inside the Harry Potter Universe. Follow Alexander Fawley's adventures as he is reborn in the Harry Potter world. In this tale, he will have new unique adventure to call his own, And he will discover that the Harry Potter Universe is much greater than he had imagined. 


P.S This is my first story, so please leave reviews, to let me know how I am doing, so I can get better. Also J.K. Rowling owns Harry Potter, I simply play in her world.

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Almarna
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as of chapter 21

i like most of the explanations behind some of the decetions and magical mekaniks that we get

be aware there are a few chapters not suitible for asmatics....(had me wheezing with laugther)

Jacksonion Democracy
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Very enjoyable read, standard MC reincarnates into noble house in HP universe - unique plot and arcs tho as well as lots of fleshed out lore. Very few grammer errors that are usually fixed soon. Only complaint is the sometimes MC will be a tiny bit of a beta-male, often tolerating some stuff he really shouldn't (tho rhis has only happened a few times in 30 chapters so) In general, this is worth a shot at least

chazzi
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An almost original Harry Potter fanfiction

Reviewed at: Chapter 31: Ring

The story is almost original but set in the harry potter universe. The story is not tightly constrained by the harry potter but does tie in events in the books with an original story.

The writting is rather good, the length of chapters are longish but not boring or incoherent (Not a bad length for a book chapter). A couple of spelling mistakes or missing words (very minimal).

The MC's character is easy to read and MC doesn't seem to have to much plot armour so far, most encounters the MC spends time thinking before doing.

thejoker195
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Style : not bad, simple, easy to follow but needs some editing in the earlier chapters, especially when it comes to POV changes.

Grammar: it's ok, honestly I think it just mostly needs edits or a good proof reader as most of the mistakes I see seem to be more of a problem of mis types than actual poor grammar on the authors part, so when you get a chance do go back and edit or ask someone to help you proofread.

Story: this is where I think the author shines as he's doing an admirable job of trying to make a compelling story of a character in the world of harry potter, rather than just hashing out the canon story and having us go through jk Rowlings story again, new parts of the wizarding world are introduced and possibilities for different and interesting adventures available, and the author still tries to give reasonable explanations as to why magic and situations e.g :the ministry of magic,work the way they do as seen in the books, this to me is a mark of great fanfic as seen in stories like : harry potter and the boy who lived by santi or Greg verder vs the world.

Character's: this area was okay, they were a bit animey in the earlier chapters and some characters still are but the author is doing a decent job of giving people good backstories and such that can make them relatable and how they influence their personalities, like Anna and the situation with her mom.

Overall I think you're into something good here and I'd recommend any that enjoy a good fanfiction to give it a try.

Banks94
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Sure it's a fanfic but you don't have to read Harry potter to enjoy it

Reviewed at: Chapter 31: Ring
Like the title says, you don't need to be a Harry potter fan to read this. Sure their are some characters that are in this that are in the books as well but I just look at it like a bonus to those of us that have read them. The characterization of the characters we all know and love are enjoyable, while keeping true to the books. The mc is a likeable kid whose not op but is obviously a prodigy when it comes to magic, but he works hard for it and he plans carefully instead of relying on plot armor. He's got his own adventures (which are actually interesting) instead of relying on the main plot of the books but it takes place around the same time, (the mc is Fred and George Weasleys age, also Cedric's, whose his best friend so that's fun) so I'm sure we'll see him get involved in some of Harry's shenanigans somewhere down the line. 
 
I don't usually write reviews because I'm a terrible writer and tend to ramble but I felt like helping out as much as I can because I want this to succeed and I'm genuinely think other people will enjoy this.
 
The pacing is good and the chapter release seems fast. My only gripe is the vocab (I am by no means a grammar snob) it can be a little jarring from time to time but doesn't interfere with the story and it's something I can look past. 
 
All in all check it out. I haven't read any other Harry potter fanfics but I just might if they are half as interesting as this one. Keep up the good work author sama.
 
Jangofet54
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Not just great fan-fiction, great fiction. Please do give this a read, it's rare to see good fiction like this.

 

Steve Moss
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A different sort of Harry Potter fan fic

Reviewed at: Chapter 33: Preparation

A cancer ridden young orphan is reborn in a Harry Potter world.  He died before the series ended so his knowledge is incomplete.

I enjoyed it as the MC is not focused on Harry, Ron or Hermione.  He seems to be plotting his own path, doing his own thing. He just happens to share the universe with the Rowling’s characters. 

Grammar and spelling could use a lot of work.  Other than that, the story is enjoyable and an easy read.  Recommended.