Vainqueur the Dragon
by Void Herald
Vainqueur Knightsbane is your average dragon: a giant, fire-breathing lizard who loves to take naps on his golden hoard, kidnap princesses for fun, and make the life of adventurers miserable. Vainqueur's only pleasure in life is to watch his treasure get bigger, one coin at a time.
So when a would-be thief turned unwilling minion tells him about "classes," "levels," and "quests," Vainqueur wonders if maybe, just maybe, he should consider a career change.
After all, why bother hunting monsters for free when you can get paid for it?
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If you are fiending for that next great story on RoyalRoad and have not given this story a shot, shame on you!
It's a good novel, and the comedy lands really well at first... Then it just becomes annoying really annoying and as much as I liked Victor in the beginning, he has become a character with next to no change and is wierdly passive.
I like it. Isn’t sure what else to say.... Meep!
I just... It's a good concept. I suppose.
But the writing just bugs me. The square bracket breaking flow to point out something is a skill, where the reader could have logically figured that out themselves. The characters didn't feel to me like people I might encounter in any capacity. In one case, that's understandable - he's a dragon, it's in the title. But none of the human characters actually felt human to me.
It's now been at least a month since I dropped this story, and at no point have I wanted to come back to it.
I like the mc but the story is not for me it just lack somthing i do enjoy the comedy it just not on a level with most of the other funny good novels on royalroad no hate just My OPN
I have read to chapter ten and all I have been thinking is what the hell is this supposed to be.
I was under the impression this is supposed to be a comedy yet the most that we got in that regard are some witty conversations between Vainqueur and Victor or like in chapter 6 when we were introduced to the kobolds where they did this parody of power rangers and team rockets introduction. For the most part all of its very bland and not very funny.
here is an example
from chapter 2
“Sixty-four thousand? That is almost as much as my entire—” He stopped himself, probably realizing that he had already said too much.
As much as my entire hoard, Victor guessed.
From chapter 4x
“What could possibly delay me doubling my hoar-” Vainqueur stopped himself mid-sentence, unwilling to reveal his hoard’s size. The fact it seemed quite small when compared to what adventurers earned already shamed him, although he would never admit it openly. “Explain.”
Those are the examples that directly play on dragons obsession with hoards of gold. there are many more that just tease at it in passing like this one below from Ch4x.
Vainqueur marveled at the new additions to his hoard, especially the three foot tall gold statue of some manling king and the golden bracers. At this rate, he would double the size of his hoard within the week."
This joke was already kicked to death by the 10th chapter, another one is dragons obsession with princesses. The problem with these jokes is that they all just continue to feed into the he is a dragon trope rather than making fun at anything else. This makes it a repetitive and predictive reading experience.
the biggest problem with this work is that the relationship between victor and Vainqueur is not only uninteresting but downright insufferable and uninspired.
Victor doesn't want to be there and that is apparent in his interactions with Vainqueur. so far the most he has done in the way of addressing this is in internal monologues/thoughts complaining or pacifying/comforting himself rather than say plan in any meaningful way. making him more of a passive participant in this story. (note he does make a plan in chapter 4 but it's worthless here's a recap in the spoilers below}
He does make a plan with the help of the marquise in chapter 4 but that doesn't amount to much seeing as he decides to let the dragon do what it wants for the most part and steer it to fight small fry. Here are the key sentences from those conversations.
Louise “While the loss of my pantry is devastating, the economic gains do outweigh it. We might as well make use of the dragon’s current fancy. If he wants to be an adventurer, we could send him on a fool’s errand.”
louise's advisers “We could offer him a doomed request, like attacking the Fomors of Prydain or the demon lord Brandon Maure,”
the marquise ignored her advisers
victor thought "what should he do? Lure Vainqueur to his death, hoping an adventurer would get lucky? His gut told him it wouldn’t work"
Victor"The adventurer decided the best option was to make use of the dragon’s fancy, as the marquise suggested."
Victor "Victor was stuck with the dragon for now, and from what he had seen he would better work with or around him than against."
Victor "If he reached a high enough level while guiding and studying the dragon up close, maybe Victor could escape his grasp one day."
Victor “Are there any troublemakers that need death by dragonfire?”
marquise "The main threats are ..." ..."They are no match for a dragon"
victor " Victor guessed he would just guide Vainqueur towards that kraken. Considering the reward, he would have no trouble convincing the dragon. But it wouldn’t hurt to take a look at the other options."
the kraken was mentioned in chapter 2 and was worth 65k in gold it was the most dangerous/wellpaying task avalable in the guild.
This is problematic seeing as he is half the narrative focus, this means that for the most part, you end up with a yes man that doesn't contribute to the development of anything like the progression of the plot or more interesting interactions with the dragon.
we are strung along as the dragon stumbles along doing dumb shit that has no bearing on the progression of the plot nor is it productive in any way.
We ended up getting pulled along from the start by the dragon despite minor attempts to steer him by Victor. like in chapter 4x he says “Hunt the kraken of Messaline, Your Majesty? Manling Victor suggested." in response to
We return to my hoard to add them to it, and then we go…” The dragon left the sentence hanging.
Yet we ended up watching him fight small fires recognized as such in the spoilers above for some reason.
here are my personal thoughts on how things should have gone.
What should have happened is that Victor should have leveraged his relationship with Vainqueur to change his relationship with Vainqueur from master servant/slave to partners or maybe even friends or equals. He could have done this in a number of ways at a couple points in the story.
The reason why this is necessary is because the way things are right now Victor and Vainqueur will be in this perpetual rut of recycled interactions because Vainqueur is currently stereotyped as a dragon and nothing else, this severely limiting how he can be interacted with. look no further than my examples on the jokes written for him above.
The first opportunity to change the relationship dynamic was all the way back in chapter 2 all Victor needed to do was convince Vainqueur that he would be a good broker between him and the humans so that Vainqueur would be approved as an adventurer.
The second time was in chapter 4 he could have brokenred better relations between him and the nobility, wedging himself into a place of importances.
the third time should have happened after chapter 4 they should have killed the Kraken like Victor wanted. Victor levels up to the same level he's at in chapter 10 and gets "Monster Lifeforce (Red Dragon)". This will change the relationship dinamice because Victor now has some of the lifeforce of a dragon.
Personally I advocate for the second or third option because that would allow the reader to observe the change in character.
Yep. That title and summary are 100% correct. this story is about the VAINEST dragon you will ever see and the unlucky thief that awoke him from his "nap". It would be perfect but the dragon and his minion both take away half a star because of their motivations.
I don't know if it gets better but I got to chapter 8 and the personality of the dragon annoys me so I had to stop. Maybe I'll come back and give it another try. Maybe there's some character development later on. It was an easy to read and well written piece so far though
Well it was deacent fic but... I can't shake the feeling of disapointment in the ending and worldbuilding. Like gods bing minions revelation that just destroyed my wish to read further and I droped it right there.
Would have prefered the ending being played more straight but no it just had to be retarded to the end. Had to make oven the suposed godhood goal stupid.
Its pretty funny but I got bored of it pretty quickly. I don't really like Victor as a character. That red dragon Vainqueur is a money hungry idiotic dragon part of the comic relief I guess. The writing is fine since I can understand it and enjoy it. I think it is a relaxing decent comic relief novel which didn't have me wheezing but certainly made me chuckle a bit. Try it out.