Predators Dungeon

by Peter Madsen

Original HIATUS Action Fantasy Dungeon LitRPG Magic Non-Human lead

It was not a new event, neither was it a rare event. It had happened before, and it would happen again. But while the event that transpired was not new or a rare, the thing it spawned, would bring a new challenge to the world’s adventures. Because this was the birth of a new dungeon.

 

 

Cover: https://www.maxpixel.net/Fantasy-Character-Myth-Monsters-Cave-Creature-2706135

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Sasquatchlou
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So far this book has amazing potential I love it. The way this dungeon story works is also a first for me so hope you can continue.

Sixty Watts
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I’m not sure why this is receiving such glowing reviews. Here is my review as of Chapter 5.

There are plenty of grammar mistakes. Some sentence structures aren’t quite right, there are some misspelled words, and commas are misplaced very frequently. The writing tense changes from present to past occassionally. The story is mostly written in past tense. I do understand that the author is not a native English speaker, so it’s quite good when you take that into account. It’s still very readable, but the mistakes irk me too much to continue.  

the main character is making choices as the story progresses, but he has no personality. I feel like I’m reading the bare minimum of responses that someone could give for their new situation as a dungeon core. Maybe I need to read past chapter 5 for that, but I felt like I should have seen some personality by now  

He is given the best kind of dungeon core straight away, and it felt unnatural. I don’t mind an OP MC, but it felt a little too easy that he just asked what he could be, and then chose the best one like it was so unexpected. 

Maybe I will try reading this again in the future, but it would need to be edited more first. 

Icecold543
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Love it but please faster uploads. I was hoping for maybe once a week? Just don’t drop it honestly. Please. 

_W_T_F _
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Really slow update love the introduction in this one still waiting if the mc is becoming dumbass

All hail The Machine God
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Bad upload scedual amazing dungeon story 10/10

meerschaum
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More spelling/grammar problems than most.

Not the worst I've seen on RR, but it doesn't have much to say. No real characters yet, but that's typical for the start of most dungeon core stories. No real plot yet, either. It's only chapter 8, it could just be a slow start.

david_pdx
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nice start, need more :)

Very enoyable start to the story, looking forward to more.