Toil and Trouble, the Tale of the Summoned

by SJ Reaver

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Not all summoners know what they're doing. Zoey learns that the hard way when she's whisked to another world and mistaken for a low-level demon. Yes, the jobs are nasty. Yes, the summoners are often crazy. Yes, the authorities on Earth aren't pleased. But the pay is great, and it's more interesting than flipping burgers for a living.

Join Zoey as she tackles the universe's oddest temp job: that of a summoned creature.

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A fun summoning tale, with a naive MC

Good start so far for this one, just because of the author being Sunreaver, i expect quite a lot here, her stories are good reads.

Zoey is a LARP'er, she loves playing as a monster in their plays and does a good job at it, but one day it is different, when playing a demon, she somehow gets summoned to another world, mistaken for a demon and gets tasked to do a job. That is only the start of her troubles, because now she has a system accompanying her on earth, while certain authorities are not pleased at her for travelling across worlds like that and bringing a system to earth, but its worth it for her, since it pays so well and is more interesting than your average job.

The mc, well, she is fun to read about, and im sure the author intentionally wrote her being quite naive and stupid in how she behaves with the new situations she finds herself in, but this does get a bit annoying at times, i dont exactly mind that, but i can see it being annoying for many readers. I guess the author has something planned for her in regards with her naivety.

The premise here is quite interesting, one i mainly have seen before in the cliche filled Japanese webnovels and mangas, so a good author having a go at this premise gives this story a lot of potentional,  i look forward to how the author will handle both the summoning part with the other world(s?) and the earth part of the story. So far it does not look like that the worlds she is summoned to, will get any major development, but i dont exactly mind that. Be warned that at times, this story can turn very dark all of a sudden, that especially does contrast with the summonings, where it so far has been all go-happy.

Overall good grammar, though there are some typo's and other errors throughout the story, normally those should not pose a problem at all, and get corrected when spotted by readers.

The author's writing is easy to read, to understand what is going on at the moment, with the premise here, the author went in a good direction with the worldbuilding, making it mostly non-existent in the summoning parts, so it doenst slow down those chapters.

I will be fair that it is still early, so a lot could be subject to change.

On another note, expect that while the story will be of good quality and fun to read, it is rather unlikely for it to be completed, but i will still enjoy the ride while it lasts (and maybe it gets completed, you never know with this kind of setting how long, or short it can be.)

For sure a fun story that shows a lot of promise, if you dont mind the MC being naieve and making stupid decisions at times. Its currently a short read, so give it a try!

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A bit chaotic, like a dancer trying to find they're rhythem, but with a solid premise and an easy to understand concept.   I hope the low-level summoning and demon-but-not theme continues!

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This story is a unique take on this genre. Zoey is a fun protagonist, and I'm interested to see where this is going. Zoey is definitely stupid, but I personally feel it's a balanced level of stupid. She has done a few things that have been objectively poor decisions, but they were interesting, and I enjoyed the addition. She has yet to make me want to punch her, which is a win in my book. 

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Well written, too nonsensical

Great style and use of the word. 

Yet, the surreality of everything doesn't allow me to latch on. 

First and foremost are the reactions of the protagonist, but she is hardly the only one suffering from "Alice in wonderland" syndrome.

Not for me, but damn well made. 

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Summoning: the moderately rewarding occupation you didn't know about

I love how being summoned to another world for grunt labor in hazardous conditions is almost worth it. Roughly one order of magnitude payout vs mundane Earth work. As long as you survive you get plenty of health potions, so great health care plan. Zoey's strong work ethic in highly non-standard employment situations, including standing up for herself to get the recognition and branding she deserves, is a delight.

The summoning aspect loosely resembles the one-way trip in: Demons of Astlan by J. Langland (which is a great triology IMHO).

In the most recent chapter 007: Zoey visits a pseudo-government agency that seeks to suppress her trans-dimensional shenangins. This strikes me as rather similar to the recent video game "Control" and the FBC building of highly variable geometry and oddball supernatural events.

In any case, I can't wait to find out what crazy job Zoey will next be summoned for.

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Deliberately misleading synopsis

The synopsis needs to be rewritten completely. The light hearted "I'm just a summoned temp worker making her way in a magical world" description doesn't match at all with any of the stuff that happens on earth. They're like completely separate stories. One has a lite litrpg Dorothy in Oz fairytale vibe while the other has a young adult/horror/lovecraft vibe. A poorly executed contradictory mish mash. 

The most inconsistent tone I've ever encountered in a story.

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This might is a fun read, the grammar is ok. There really isnt much story yet, but the writer gives the reader a story which is fun and easy to bond with.

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Just found it and heading home from work. Looking forward to reading when I get home!