Eterna's Source

by unice5656

Original HIATUS Adventure Fantasy Romance Female Lead Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters

Sery is a Source, born with immense magic but unable to use it. Enslaved for her power, her life is one of abuse and exploitation until one day, everything changes.

Veltyen, a sword-mage, rescues her, releasing her from her chains. He takes her to join the mage guild Eterna, where she learns she can help others without being used. As her magic boosts the guild to entirely new levels of power, trouble brews. Other guilds want Sery's power, and they are willing to destroy Eterna to get it.

(This story has strong romantic elements, so if you don't like romance, you probably won't like it)


- Cover art credit goes to Chryiss

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Opening - 4 star. Subduing mission gone violent made an interesting back story.

Attraction - 2 star. Admiration route for the girl is fair, but man who's ambivalent toward women suddenly show excessive care toward heroine without first triggered by emotional shake is illogical. It's as if he approached the heroine romantically only for the sake of story, not because his own circumstances.

Chemistry - 1 star. Friendly relation between the two main character felt dry. No jabs, barbs, heartfelt praises or compliment, open conversations, or anything of note. There are gesture, like allowing each other into their respective apartment, but that's not special enough.

Rival - 3 star. They exist. But non-responsive heroine and hero made a boring story. Jealousy also has never been invoked, maybe because the chance hasn't come yet.

Trial - story hasn't reach this part yet. Closure - still far away away...

Characters - 2. Rich, handsome, and capable hero made a perfect man. Perfect man made a boring character. Author need to add quirk that made him unique.

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Quickly becoming my favorite fiction

I’ll start by precursing this review by saying I’m a hopeless romantic…  Now that I’ve made that clear, this is an awesome novel so far, even despite only being 7 chapters in with a slow release rate.  I read this author’s novel Fantasia first and I’m have to say I’m very impressed by the entirely different writing style this story has compared to the last!  Where the last story was very comedy driven and had an entertaining self-aware narrator telling the story with their comical quirky bias, this new story is very character and romance driven with the best single word I can think to describe Eterna is just “fluffy”.

The MCs it has so far are an adorable pair, and always leave you just happy for them.  The whole magic system is unique and really interesting always leaving me interested to hear more about it.  I am excited to see more of the story to the point where I'm not even bummed know it'll have slow releases because I'll take anything I can get no matter how long I need to wait for it.  If you despise anything with romance in it don't read this, but if you don't... You're going to love this!

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A really promising debut

*Reviewed after reading the 6 chapters available*


A really promising start. The world building seems well thought of. The magic system is coherent and well explained for 6 chapter worth of text. The stories is written with alterning POV of 2 MC a guy and a girl, and it is really interresting to see the discrepancy between both. The story leave a really good fuzzy feeling and the story flow particularly well, taking the reader along and not letting him go until the last chapter available. The MCs, particulary the girl, are well defined which is very great. Of course after 6 chapters you can't expect the panel of side characters to be anywhere past a general naming and place in the story, so on that side it's ok.

Now, it's my personnal opinion, and since it seems to be an artistic choice made by the author, she probably won't change it; however, i something think that some sentence are maybe a bit longer than they should because the author use a...flowery style, i would say. Which in turn increase the number of comma in a sentence. Well, it work both way, it allow the reader to slow down and appreciate the scenery that the author is trying to show but at some points in the story I would have liked if thing got a bit more fast paced. But don't take that as a negative point of view, after all I've read Earth's Children by Jean M. Auel who could describe the scenery for a couple pages worth and i still immensely appreciated his (her?) books.


I'm very eager to see what the author have in reserve for that story. Keep up the good work!

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really , REALLY well written

a normal taciturn person such as myself. rarely ever even makes a comment on a story... however i feel the need to say, this lovestory?... couldnt be told better..


the MC... well, yeah, he is a bit dense (how far we will see in upcoming chapters)... the secondary MC... hits you in the feels (yall know what i mean) held captive for 1/2 her life.. fed off of by a literal mana vampire... and then rescued by a "Knight" on a noble steed..


seeing her (in my head) reactions.. her actions and her desires (plus some of her thoughts) makes her rescuers actions and reaction more human...


say what you will... this story may not be for you .. but nonetheless, its well written  



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A Real Gem of a Story

First thing about me, I HATE romance novels. 

First thing about the novel, I ******* love it.


Romance novels in my experience are cringy little pieces of fantasy, where little too perfect accidents and unatural responses stitch together into a sickly sweet glob of vomit. Not this one. Eterna's Source weaves together meticulous and careful planning into the beautiful story that is presented today. The details and information that are sprinkled around the scenes are the telltale signs of a planned story, and the author adds in the perfect amount to provide understanding without the burden of info dumps. Perfect points for the controlled, enjoyable descriptions.


Heart rendingly beautiful. Writing this review, this story has only revealed 13 chapters. While the fantasy elements are predominant in here, this is more of a story about a poor unconfident girl learning to appreciate herself and life's multitude beauties. 


Perfect. I can find no faults in grammar.


The aspect that turned this story from mundane to magical (pun intended). The cast of the characters, from the main characters to the supporting ones all have an amazing depth and personality. None of the secondary characters have the cliche sacrifice-everything-worthwhile-for-the-MC trope that seems to be rampant in the majority of low-grade stories. The MCs are relatable and understandable, not to mention the fact that one easily becomes emotionally invested into these characters. (And honestly, this would be a terribly weird story if it invested in the romance department, maintains a good review, yet hosts a terrible character cast).


If I compare this story to a song, I'd say that the pacing is like the cadence of the beat. The smooth, measured notes that provides the comfortable pleasantry not unlike a leisurely stroll. Not too fast to be a sprint, not too slow to be a crawl, the control of the measure impeccable. The story the notes themselves, forming a melody that brings a smile to the surface as our cores anticipate the next measures. The grammar akin to the quality of the notes, along with the transitions from note to note, like the words themselves: perfect. And finally the characters, the layers of sounds that bring the piece of art into another dimension (Specifically two dimensioned, like... on paper two dimensioned.....pun also intended). The beauty is that instead of any character springing out and vying for attention, the whole cast mesh and interact with each other that creates of symphony like a Mozart masterpiece. In conlcusion, wonderful.


It's bloody fantastic, good (insert synonym to feces here) all around, read it.

Nathan Stewart
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Good, but mc’s love feels kinda creepy

It’s a good, neat story so far. I haven’t really read anything quite like it, so kudos there. The main reason I didn’t give 5stars is because so far the romance seems to point towards the rescuer/rescued which feels a little creepy and like the character is developing a nightingale effect and whatever the reverse of Stockholm syndrome would be, but the story hasn’t really progressed enough to see if that’s what actually happens. Plenty of room for the story and plot to progress in many different ways.

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Wow I love this story

Amazing. Only 3 chapters and I'm alredy hoked.

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I love it, can not wait for more

came here from your other fiction and I have to say, impressed with how good your romance story is already especially when your comedy writing is so good, pulling of a different genre can be difficult 

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 So far, this story is told from two points of view, alternating frequently – the girl and guy main characters.  They’re slowly learning to depend on each other.  It makes me feel very fuzzy and warm.  They’re both very likeable, too.


The world here seems well thought-out so far, and the magic system has an original flair that is used creatively and drives the story forward. Personally I want to be the magician whose specialty is making food taste good.


The means for potential conflict is pretty clearly  explained and foreshadowed, and I’m confident that when it comes there will be more than ample justification.


All in all, the care with which this has been written clearly shows – there are very few details that do not contribute to building the story/characters in some way, even – and I’m looking forward to seeing it continue.

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It's soooo fluffy and cute!!!! Except for her origin, everything is slightly shaded in pink! 

There are two povs involved in this story, but that gives a better view of what's happening.

The world building is done well, not stacking paragraphs at me, but not too little that we don't know anything.

The characters are good, not machines, and we like them, though Sery seems a bit too innocent after what she's been though. Her timidness and slight ignorance is good though.


Great story if you are looking for FLUFF. COTTON CANDY CLOUD FLUFF. From the description though, it seems it might have a darker turn, but that isn't here yet at chapter 9.