Lord of the skies

by Guimaros

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Mythos Post Apocalyptic Strong Lead Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Sexual Content

A young man grows being shunned for being different, he only has a few friends and his family.

When a system arrives in a world, everything changes.

What would you do if a system that says it's going to save everyone, throws you at a jungle?

What happened to his family? Are they alive?

Find out following the steps of Bryan Fulgur.

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Nomad1791
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Ehhh not bad but not great. Decent afternoon read

Needs a editor. Worlds ok characters are ok, Grammer mistakes in every chapter some simple and easy to overlook others bit more jaring. Overall 5/10 you got talent and a decent imagination just need to polish up good luck 👍

Ryancost
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Has potential, no character depth

You need and editor. So many past tense mistakes. Plural mistakes as well. Decent afternoon read. It has potential but you are moving too fast. Like summarizing a story. Characters have no depth. Their friend samuel is just like a polyfiller. Do not write to finish the story, write to fill the world with characters and background stories.