Fantastic Advancement

by C-Logos

Original ONGOING Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi GameLit High Fantasy Magic Ruling Class Steampunk

Waking up naked, alone, and confused, Vincent finds himself on an alien planet with an environment and rules he does not understand.  

Join him in his process of discovery and mastery of the inscrutable and ill-understood laws and principles that will come to govern his new life.  

 

Right now (Aug. 2019), each chapter is an average of ~3.5k words, and I update two or three times a week.

 

NOTE: Cover art is a Creative Commons image, from https://www.photosforclass.com/search/insect/1

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Fantastic Advancement - An apt description.

This story is shaping up very nicely. So far, at 14 chapters, it's got me completely hooked. There's only one potential issue I can see, that being the rate of progress in the first few chapters, but I'll get to that in more detail later.

The grammar and spelling is impeccable. I can't possibly overstate how important that is to any story. There's nothing I hate more than having to parse out what the author's trying to tell me from all their spelling errors and run-on sentences, and with this story, I don't need to worry about that.

Writing styles, to me at least, are invisible when done right. If you can't feel anything wrong with them, they're likely to slip entirely under the radar. With that said, I think I'd need several degrees in literature in order to pick this one out, so good on you, C-Logos.

The main character seems to be perfectly adequate for the story, your average joe who's been magicked away from wherever and, with the help of some strange mental interface, turns a mud and branch hut into a great center of industry manned entirely by himself and some weird spider-clones with the power of SCIENCE!

Of particular note is the unique form of 'system' used in this story. Instead of your typical LitRPG with classes, experience, and levels, this mental interface functions as a sort of tech-tree progression - which I find rather fitting, as instead of being a one-man army with a magic sword, or an arcane prodigy, our MC finds himself tucked neatly into the role one assumes when playing Civilizations, Stellaris, or some other empire-building strategy game: The Guy Who Manages All The Things.

I won't go too much further for fear of spoilers, but let it be known that the main character, whose name seems to have slipped my mind, is the single driving factor of both technological advancement and government in his own little settlement - and, as the title proclaims, there is quite a bit of technological advancement.

As far as the overall story and plot goes, it starts off quickly, very quickly. In fact, our main character blows through several different ages of progression within the first five or so. Then again, that's not too surprising, any one of us knows the basic concepts of a screw pump, or windmill, or even chemistry, biology, and domestication. That's simply the result of living in an age of scientific enlightenment, all the hard thinking has already been done for us. However, it might have gone by almost too quickly; by chapter 10, there's already a fair-sized town populated by spidertaur homunculi and what can only be called wolf spiders.

To wrap this up, I love the story so far. It's one of the best stories I've found on RoyalRoad, as evidenced by the fact that I've bothered to write a review here (and with only 14 chapters, no less). I dearly, dearly hope that it continues updating for quite some time, and I wish the author all the best.

If you're reading this review to see whether or not you want to check out the book, then my advice is this: Take the plunge, read the first 5-10 chapters, and see what you feel about it from there. The plot starts developing in earnest around chapter 10, when the elves get involved, so don't worry if the first part is underwhelming.

Take care, and keep reading! The back of a shampoo bottle, the ingredients list on your cereal, some dime-a-dozen novel from your local book shop, doesn't matter. Reading is its own reward.

Tulsan
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Wow, this story is simply amazing.

There are barely any typos in the 12 chapters I have read so far. The writing style and the grip the author has on the english language are both things of beauty that you rarely get to see on this Website anymore and everything is nicely formatted in such a way that even bigger walls of text are easily digested. 

But that's not all this story has going for it. The author seamlessly weaves fantasy mumbo-jumbo and actual science tid-bits into the story in a way that just makes it witty and sometimes even funny. Every time the protagonist discovers new stuff, it actually feels like an advancement he earned and right on pace.

It's a very satisfying read that gets your mind running with the possibilities of every single discovery in the story. I especially love the way the protagonist solved the problems in chapters 10 to 12, seeing how the author completely avoided the pitfall of "Protagonist steamrolls every problem he has because he can" that many stories with game systems suffer. 

TLDR: This is a story I'd gladly pledge money for, limited as my funds might be.

forged
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This is so good. Just a dude in a forest making spider-humans and figuring out life. Focus is almost entirely on the mc and his development - no overriding antagonist or anything like that. Very slice-of-life-y without being boring. Actually so good.

Geneticfreak
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So far so good, as of writing this reciew (Ch 20) the MC has finally had other characters to interact with and honestly their interactions have been solid. 

He has beneficial if tense relationship with the other characters and he’s learning things about the world and his environment that suggest a lot of room for the story to grow into.

I’m thoroughly enjoying this story, the advancements are interesting, it’s an excellent blend of science and magic, the MC is at the very least passably moral, more so than one might expect given his situation and he has fairly clear, if a bit lacking motivations but honestly it doesn’t impact the story much.

Now that, presumably, the most rapid advancements have been made and things are starting to slow down a bit there has been a shift towards a more plot driven story rather than a tech tree driven one.

All I can say so far is keep up the good work and I can’t wait to see more from you in the future!

MrHrulgin
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No tension, minimal characterisation. A nice, smooth upward arc of skill unlocks. As satisfying and empty as cookie clicker. 

radosl1
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Room for improvement

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

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The writing and grammar is pretty damn good. At least there is nothing that stands out to me as an issue with the grammar. The writing is good, with no run-on sentences, proper diction and syntax, punctuation is as expected of a book.

While the writing is good, there isn't much of a plot. The plot is only focused around skill and technological advancement. There is barely any character interactions in the first 9 chapters, which with the general lack of any real plot development seems really long.

We know nothing about the MC from before his jaunt into an unknown world, and he seems pretty apathetic in general and doesn't seem to care about anything other than making a cooler base. He is strangely skilled at basically everything. While his knowledge of how to do things is explained, his physical ability to do it isn't. Knowledge doesn't breed motor skills. He also has this weird "fugue state" in which he seems capable of inhuman feats of engineering. I don't think that was ever explained.

I feel like this story could be really really cool, if only the MC had some sense of adventure and a personality. The little we know of the world seems like a perfect dark fantasy kind of place, with all manner of evil gods and cultist horrors.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Snoek
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While the premise is interesting, there is no real tension or any kind of goal for the Mc to work towards.

As of chapter 7, the Mc has yet to meet any other character, with no indication that this might be changing any time soon.

This makes for a boring story, which is a shame, because I loved all the references, and the fact this author clearly knows how to English.

 

CatVI
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Too many idioms but otherwise good

I am not a native english speaker. 

So as the title states that really is my only problem. The story otherwise is almost perfect grammarwise.

But having an idiom every other sentence or replacing words with rarer or made-up words is really getting to me. And the worse thing is I don't know if the word was made-up. I just don't know what that word/idiom/phrase thing means. I need to google them alot of the time and i am just at chapter 10.

My advice to the author is to use less hard to understand words for us non-english natives but that really is just my personal problem. Choice is yours.

And well....

The mc seems like a varitable god at this point. He is a nice mc. But his powers can make basically anything imaginable from a rock. Like a Sentient dragon potato with voodoo tentacle powers using generations of sanguinism.

Kind of takes away the umph here. Like, he lacks something, he magiteks it into existence. Well that was my rant. I'll still be following this tho.