He Who Fights With Monsters

by Shirtaloon

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Portal Fantasy / Isekai

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Jason wakes up in a mysterious world of magic and monsters. He’ll face off against cannibals, cultists, wizards, monsters, and that’s just the first day. He’s going to need courage, he’s going to need wit and he’s going to need some magic powers of his own. But first, he’s going to need pants.

Follow Jason as he makes a place for himself in a world that is strange, yet sometimes strangely familiar. He’ll meet crime lords and aristocrats, gods and monsters on his path from would-be victim to heroic adventurer. At least, he tries to be heroic. It’s hard to be good when all your powers are evil.

Release schedule is 5 chapters per week, Monday-Friday USA time.

Please note: I am Australian and this story is written in Australian English, so there will be less of the letter Z and more of the letter U.

This web novel is also available at scribblehub.com

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Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: Strange Business ago
Chapter 2: Of Course Magic is a Thing ago
Chapter 3: Local Cuisine ago
Chapter 4: Cannibals and Spelunking ago
Chapter 5: Wizard ago
Chapter 6: Potent Potable ago
Chapter 7: Spoils ago
Chapter 8: Dark Magic ago
Chapter 9: Escape ago
Chapter 10: The Evil Pit of Evil ago
Chapter 11: Dashing Heroics ago
Chapter 12: Sanguine Horror ago
Chapter 13: This is the Part Where We Step Back ago
Chapter 14: Worlds Apart ago
Chapter 15: Outworlder ago
Chapter 16: Rescue Party ago
Chapter 17: A Conservative Pillage ago
Chapter 18: One of Us ago
Chapter 19: I Want a Lava Cannon ago
Chapter 20: By the Power of Grayskull ago
Chapter 21: I Have the Power ago
Chapter 22: Apocalypse Stone ago
Chapter 23: I May have Made a Huge Mistake ago
Chapter 24: Astral Space ago
Chapter 25: Blasphemy is Kind of My Thing ago
Chapter 26: Waterfall ago
Chapter 27: Water, Fall ago
Chapter 28: How Did You All Fit in There? ago
Chapter 29: That's What Adventurers Do ago
Chapter 30: Closing the Door Too Hard ago
Chapter 31: Taming the Beast ago
Chapter 32: Monster Hunting For Beginners ago
Chapter 33: Mistrun River ago
Chapter 34: Waving the Flag for Secular Morality ago
Chapter 35: Greenstone ago
Chapter 36: The Island ago
Chapter 37: A Good Adventurer and a Great One ago
Chapter 38: Just Another Adventurer ago
Chapter 39: Training ago
Chapter 40: Eyebeams and the Ethics of Adventuring ago
Chapter 41: Vulnerable and Exposed ago
Chapter 42: This is the Pits ago
Chapter 43: The Nightingale ago
Chapter 44: Complimentary Ointment ago
Chapter 45: So Much For Atheism ago
Chapter 46: Blatant Manipulation ago
Chapter 47: Mirage Chamber ago
Chapter 48: An Endless, Inescapable Nightmare ago
Chapter 49: A Voice From Home ago
Chapter 50: The Full Keanu ago
Chapter 51: Song of the Nightingale ago
Chapter 52: Pain ago
Chapter 53: Nightlife ago
Chapter 54: Field Assessment ago
Chapter 55: Rune Tortoise ago
Chapter 56: Gary's Gift ago
Chapter 57: Rainbow Smoke ago
Chapter 58: A Man of Malevolent Intellect ago
Chapter 59: Falling Short ago
Chapter 60: Making Music ago
Chapter 61: Trade Hall ago
Chapter 62: Have Some Damn Adventures ago
Chapter 63: Sunk-Cost Fallacy ago
Chapter 64: Take My Wife, Please ago
Chapter 65: Curious Urges ago
Chapter 66: A Stronger Weapon Than the One in Your hand ago
Chapter 67: This is What it Means to Fight Me ago
Chapter 68: Good News For Clive ago
Chapter 69: Dumpling Soup ago
Chapter 70: Rewards ago
Chapter 71: A Bit of Poo ago
Chapter 72: Rat Race ago
Chapter 73: A Grim Sword to Live By ago
Chapter 74: Doing Better ago
Chapter 75: Progress ago
Chapter 76: Preparations ago
Chapter 77: Group Cohesion ago
Chapter 78: Jason Has the Good Biscuits ago
Chapter 79: Sand Everywhere ago
Chapter 80: It's Not Work if You Love What You Do ago
Chapter 81: Crazy Desperation Move ago
Chapter 82: Choices ago
Chapter 83: It makes No Difference to the Ant ago
Chapter 84: Injury & Death ago
Chapter 85: Because I'm an Adventurer ago
Chapter 86: Some Kind of Secret ago
Chapter 87: Can't Lose ago
Chapter 88: The Nature of Absolution ago
Chapter 89: Anti-Pirate Operations ago
Chapter 90: The Path to Bronze ago
Chapter 91: Life & Death ago
Chapter 92: Unusual Contract ago
Chapter 93: Truth ago
Chapter 94: Consequences ago
Chapter 95: Punishment ago
Chapter 96: You Don't Get a Third ago
Chapter 97: Integrity is Sexy ago
Chapter 98: The Point of Money and Power ago
Chapter 99: Someone Else's Game ago
Chapter 100: Legwork ago
Chapter 101: Fantasy World Goodness ago
Chapter 102: You Fight Like Me ago
Chapter 103: Silver Hair ago
Chapter 104: An Outcome That Satisfies ago
Chapter 105: You Aren't in Control of What Happens Next ago
Chapter 106: Something Shady ago
Chapter 107: All The Good People We Can Get ago
Chapter 108: You Don't Have the Strength ago
Chapter 109: The Tyranny of Rank ago
Chapter 110: Help Arrives ago
Chapter 111: Strange Star ago
Chapter 112: The Accumulation of a Life ago
Chapter 113: You Should Work on Making Enemies ago
Chapter 114: Climbing Mountains ago
Chapter 115: Nothing Can Hurt You Like Hope ago
Chapter 116: See You in Court ago
Chapter 117: Six-Month Lease ago
Chapter 118: The Perks of Being an Essence User ago
Chapter 119: This is the Moment ago
Chapter 120: Iron Rank ago
Chapter 121: Getting Stoned ago
Chapter 122: Children ago
Chapter 123: Star Seed ago
Chapter 124: It's About How You Use It ago
Chapter 125: We End Here ago
Chapter 126: Poison Pill ago
Chapter 127: Let's Just Fight Monsters ago
Chapter 128: Damage You Shouldn't Walk Away From ago
Chapter 129: Picking Out the Good Ones ago
Chapter 130: Events Loom Large ago
Chapter 131: What the Geller Name is Worth ago
Chapter 132: Cleansed ago
Chapter 133: It Just Takes Practise ago
Chapter 134: World Building ago
Chapter 135: Fabulous Prizes ago
Chapter 136: Any Team Except Yours ago
Chapter 137: More Than One Clown ago
Chapter 138: Resurrection ago
Chapter 139: Manifestation ago
Chapter 140: Potential ago
Chapter 141: Weaponising a Barbecue ago
Chapter 142: This Town Ain't Big Enough ago
Chapter 143: The Second-Best Adventurer ago
Chapter 144: Arrival ago
Chapter 145: Full Jason ago
Chapter 146: Versatile ago
Chapter 147: I Don't Like This Plan ago
Chapter 148: Impossible to Subdue ago
Chapter 149: The Price We Pay Doesn't Matter ago
Chapter 150: Make the Most of It ago
Chapter 151: Wake ago
Chapter 152: I Cant Trust Any of It ago
Chapter 153: Legacy ago
Chapter 154: A Rash Decision ago
Chapter 155: It's A Good One ago
Chapter 156: The City of Fallen Echoes ago
Chapter 157: Shade ago
Chapter 158: Seriously Hardcore ago
Chapter 159: Mixed Medication ago
Chapter 160: Giving People Choices ago
Chapter 161: A Well-Informed Man ago
Chapter 162: The Danger is Us ago
Chapter 163: Surplus to Requirements ago
Chapter 164: A Worse Plan ago
Chapter 165: No One Has That Coming ago
Chapter 166: Part of Being a Team ago
Chapter 167: Making a Spectacle of Himself ago
Chapter 168: Team Change ago
Chapter 169: Company Worth Keeping ago
Chapter 170: He Who Fights With Monsters ago
Chapter 171: Irreconcilable Ideals ago
Chapter 172: Meanwhile, Two Weeks Ago in Greenstone... ago
Chapter 173: Take the Loot and Go ago
Chapter 174: Making an Exit ago
Chapter 175: Shallow Earth ago
Chapter 176: Relief ago
Chapter 177: Glory ago
Chapter 178: Display of Gratitude ago
Chapter 179: The Person I Decided to Be ago
Chapter 180: You Have Friends to Help You ago
Chapter 181: Blob Body ago
Chapter 182: Particular Appetites ago
Chapter 183: Domineering, Territorial and Robust ago
Chapter 184: More Shady as We Go Along ago
Chapter 185: Magnificent Entity ago
Chapter 186: I Try to Find the Truth, But That's Your Hiding Place ago
Chapter 187: The Last Reward ago
Chapter 188: Impossible Wasn't Enough ago
Chapter 189: Eclipse ago
Chapter 190: A Question You Don't Yet Know to Ask ago
Chapter 191: Looking Forward ago
Chapter 192: Adventurers Are People Too ago
Chapter 193: Valkyrie ago
Chapter 194: Departures ago
Chapter 195: No Pot of Gold ago
Chapter 196: The Glory of Success or the Price of Failure ago
Chapter 197: Adequate ago
Chapter 198: Trash Bonanza ago
Chapter 199: Strangeness ago
Chapter 200: Full Circle ago
Chapter 201: Regretting it Later ago
Chapter 202: Swat ago
Chapter 203: The Purpose of the Adventure Society ago
Chapter 204: Elven Storage Solutions ago
Chapter 205: Disbanded ago
Chapter 206: The Man Behind the Mouth ago
Chapter 207: Search ago
Chapter 208: Defiance ago
Chapter 209: Hanging Around ago
Chapter 210: What Doesn't Kill You ago
Chapter 211: Lingering Doubts ago
Chapter 212: Scars ago
Chapter 213: I Won't Let Them Turn Me Into That ago
Chapter 214: Putting the Band Back Together ago
Chapter 215: Nothing Speaks Louder Than Power ago
Chapter 216: My Name is Jason Asano ago
Chapter 217: While They Watch Me Kill You ago
Chapter 218: Inherently Corrupting ago
Chapter 219: Beholden to No One ago
Chapter 220: Evil Detector ago
Chapter 221: The World Needs People Like You ago
Chapter 222: I'm Very Big on Cowardice ago
Chapter 223: More Powerful Than We Anticipated ago
Chapter 224: Fate Can't Wait to Kill Us All ago
Chapter 225: Running Towards Something ago
Chapter 226: Greenhouse Flowers ago
Chapter 227: A Man Transformed ago
Chapter 228: The Worst Possible Option ago
Chapter 229: Brave Little Tailor ago
Chapter 230: Terms of the Pact ago
Chapter 231: Trading Safety Today For Death Tomorrow ago
Chapter 232: Stalwart ago
Chapter 233: I'm Sick of Fighting Magic Rocks ago
Chapter 234: Crossing the Threshold ago
Chapter 235: Anyone Can Be Useful ago
Chapter 236: A Series of Familiar Powers ago
Chapter 237: It's Not About Killing Monsters ago
Chapter 238: Sin Eater ago
Chapter 239: The Most Dangerous Thing in the Dark ago
Chapter 240: The Boss Comes to Town ago
Chapter 241: It's Very Complicated and You All Need to Go Away ago
Chapter 242: Strong Foundations ago
Chapter 243: A Valiant Death ago
Chapter 244: Ambitions ago

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coolusername
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Was good but the morality and ideology bullshit ruined it

Reviewed at: Chapter 63: Sunk-Cost Fallacy

I came here for an adventure filled with action and fantasy. Not a MC (reflection of author probably) who starts spouting bullshit about his ideoloy of the world and moral beliefs. At some point (where i dropped the novel) almost every chapter was about his moral beliefs and his justification for manipulating people and forcing his beliefs onto them while disrespecting and ridiculing others. If it wasnt for that Id have given this around a 4.5 but now the novel is unreadable imo. Edy pretty much nailed it with his review and I was surprised to see someone felt the same way.

FriedTM
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Really not worth the read unless you're interested in the system

Reviewed at: Chapter 40: Eyebeams and the Ethics of Adventuring

I can honestly say I do not understand the hype for this. I don't really know a logical way to break down some of the issues I have with this so before I go into my negativity rant let me give you some of the positives. The system and the universe is fascinating, in fact that's pretty much the reason I'm sticking here. But with that right off the bat we can start with a big negative. While the system is completely interesting I have found that you can skip basically 90% of the chapters only stopping at system messages read the paragraph above it and follow the plot. This is simply because the author is incredibly focused on mind-numbing character interaction. Now this might have been interesting if the characters where not dancing to the tune of the main character. The most emotional thing I've seen come out of them or anyone for that matter is a little bit of anger that seems like a toddler throwing a tantrum. Everybody is just so incredibly unnervingly calm, everybody either wants to help the main character or is interested in him. Even the villains take interest in him, there's not a second that goes by where he's not the focus of everybody's attention. On top of that interactions range from info dump to just emotionless fluff. The fight scenes are weirdly laid out and his idea of expressing pain is to pass out and then upon waking up make some jokes. On top of that the humor is incredibly random and poorly placed. At best I was neutral to it at worst it annoyed me. Just get to the point where he's trying to get into the adventurer's guild and the three examiners meet him. It's just an unending screeching coming from his mouth that some how woes the pretty lady. What's weird is he's never like that before or since it's just like his character randomly became a different person. Finally consistency oh, none of these characters are consistent on any deeper level than outward traits. They're constantly flipping and flopping for plot or humor. It's just, it's a confusing mishmash that can be skipped 90% of the time.

gracenote108
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Captivating with critical flaws

Reviewed at: Chapter 139: Manifestation

Pros:

The multiple story and events flow nicely together and they don't feel convoluted. Story events don't necessarily run parallel with one another, but some events start halfway or near the end of another event. It helps to keep the story moving.

The story includes politics. Progression fantasy, and LitRPGs in general, have very lightweight or simple politics. This author does not avoid them and is central to the story. This is a breath of fresh air in this genre as most of them are concentrated on accumulating personal power and wealth. 

MC isn't a typical sword wielding, super magical character with the power to nuke all enemies into the abyss. His powers do require him to use his intelliect. 

 

Cons:

The Main Character - Two-faced and hypocritical. He'll lecture other characters on rights and morality but engages on immoral and thoughtless behavior. The character has absolutely no sense of self-reflection. The MC is written as an intelligent character who can politically and socially manipulate people, but hates it when others manipulate or use him. This makes the main character neurotic and unrelatable. 

Religious and political commentaries by the MC are contrived. The Gods, society, and the people feel like they are meant to validate the opinions of the MC. Gods make stupid decisions and have followers who are assholes while the rich and powerful are simpletons who just throw money around. There is clearly an agenda in the story and it really detracts from the story. 

Combining both of the above points together, the consequences the MC sometimes face don't feel like consequences. Sometimes there aren't any consequences at all. 

 

Overall: I am still going to continue reading the story because of the story and execution of certain events. The MC has made some changes to his behavior and I am hoping that continues. It would be nice to see the MC evolve his religious and political viewpoints that reflect the worlds reality. 

Par0xysm
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interesting isekai, snarky mc. But it's overhyped

Reviewed at: Chapter 35: Greenstone

First of all i would like to say that i quite enjoy this story, but thats mainly because of the MC. But people here on RR need to stop overhyping stuff. it's kind of tiresome. The story is interesting, and quite a fresh take on isekai, but it's NOT a perfect 5. Very few stories actually are.

This is a review of up to chapter 35.

                                                    The Positive:

Characters:

I like the mc, he's the true driving force for the story, and he has a fun and likeable personality. He has a sharp tongue and he's quite witty and fun to read about.

I enjoy the banter in the story, it's well written, and so far the characters feels like they have actual personalities, and aren't just mindless plot puppets.

The System:

The ability/skill/game systems are very interesting and i highly like this kind of system. I just wish we saw more of these kind of ideas for the game-like feel of LiTRPG'S here on RR.

The Grammar:

The grammar is very, very well done. Rarely do i find a story on RR with such good grammar. The very few mistakes and typos i've spotted, have not in any way detracted from the story, the flow, nor my understanding of the chapters.

 

So that was a bit of the postive, now i come to the negative. And again, i really enjoy this story so it's not me being mean or salty.

 

                                                  The Negative:

Worldbuilding:

The world building has honestly been a mixed bag imo. I can clearly see that the author is trying to tell us about the world, but it simply has a very weak impact on the reading experience. I've not been impressed by it so far, and there have been no overaching mystery that has caught my attention nor interest.

Story Progression:

In the beginning the story was quite high on the action and a lot of chapters introduced new stuff and moved along the plot with a nice flow. Then it simmers down to an almost non-existant boil. I think there's been nothing of importance happening for more than 10-15 chapters now.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 Let me give some examples of what i mean: 1. Whats his end goal? 2. Why is he taking his sweet time with everything? 3. He wants to be powerful, but whats the reason beside being an adventurer? And if he wants power, why is he wasting so much time on mundane, and unnecessary things?

Banter and Monologuing:

As i said under positive, i like the banter, and it's very comedic to read about Jason, but too much of a good thing gets stale fast. The chapters seem to waste in avg. more than half of it on banter, and expositions that really do nothing for the story at large.
Even with so few chapters out, it's already feeling like we get too much unnecessary information almost every chapter. And i've already caught myself wanting to scroll down, just to get to the actual 'meat' in some of the chapters, i have refrained from doing so... so far at least.

 Characters:

We get introduced to new side characters a lot, but they don't really have any importance for the plot. Only ones so far that had relevance to the plotline, is Rofus and co. and possibly

Spoiler: Spoiler

Closing Thoughts

To close out i would like to say that this story has a lot of good potential and i already added it to my favorites. I intend to keep reading and following it since it's quite enjoyable.

It's already highly rated, but i do NOT feel it's entirely justified. It's up to a good start, and well written, but it's not THAT good (yet). Give Shirtaloon some useful feedback and time, and then this story might be worthy of the whole slew of 5 star ratings, that people tend to give when something is overhyped. Most of them are waaay too early imo, and very few of them give any useful critique to the stories and the author(s).

But that blame lies with the RR community more than the story or author. People really need to be more critical here i feel.

 

 

 

HURGMCGURG
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I've been with this story since the beginning and I loved it. It was fun and imaginative. The characters and their dialogue was fun, the world was well developed, and the powers displayed were interesting. The adventures, training, and fights were captivating. Over time, I've lost interest due to how the world revolves around the main character too much. Having Jason be smart a few times politically would have been fine, but having every action he does propel him forward in the eyes of his allies was a bit ridiculous. Perhaps there is some deep lore explanation for this, but It's been around 200 chapters and I still haven't seen it. If the author made fewer chapters with less filler and higher quality I would be all in, but as it is, the story meanders from time to time and it takes a long time for Jason to move between events at times. This story may be better than a lot of the other stuff on this site that I've read, but I'm done. See y'all elsewhere. 

Edit: I came back to update my review now that I've thought it over again and added a little extra.

F.Dj
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Mary Sue themed, it's well written, but that's all

Reviewed at: Chapter 181: Blob Body

 It's been along time since I wrote a review. Well, like the title said the story is quite well written. And that's all the redeeming point it had, everything else is depend on everyone's tastes, which is in this case not quite to my preferences. At the beginning, it's quite fun to read, I was expecting litrpg comedy of the sort. But it turned into something serious but nonsensical in the same time, quite ridiculous.

It's written upon xianxia recipe, it's guaranteed it's going to feed your youthful ego. So don't expect any realistical & sensical aspect in it. Well, everyone had their own preferences.

The characters, they're literally pretty much two dimensional, good guys vs the stupid bad guys. It could end up good if not for the thick plot armors & the nonsensical logic which is in my opinion ruined it. If you have a penchant for Mary Sue, this is your thing.

The grammar, well I'm not a fluent English speaker so it's not my coin to say what's good & whats wrong. But it's very good in my opinion.

Overall its good to read if you just wanna waste your time and stroking your youthful egos where you imagine yourself as the baddest smug bastard in the block. Like what's someone told me, it's the snack story, not the full course kind of story, but it still fun. Somehow I found out this saying kinda wise used here in Royalroadl. Because not everyone here was a professional. 

singlespace
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Fairly interesting, but suffers from somewhat bland characterization and dialogue that tries too hard.

Ostensibly every character is quite different, but in pratice all the dialogue sounds and feels like it’s spoken by the same person. The humour, cadence, and disposition is pretty much exactly the same between all the dialogue leading to this somewhat awkward feeling that it’s just someone speaking to themselves.

The dialogue’s perpetual attempts to be clever further exacerbates the issue making the singular voice even more obvious. No living breathing person speaks like that.

naralian
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A good story cut off at the knees by the serialized format

Reviewed at: Chapter 223: More Powerful Than We Anticipated

First, the good:

1: The story itself is solid, isekai in a game world but styled more in western pulp traditions than the usual chosen one schtick. More of a John Carter on Barsoom vibe than anything else, where the protagonist is powerful enough to cause trouble and gain attention but not so powerful he just overrides everyone, and the main long term conflict is him finding a place in the new world rather than the immediate pulpy action with the monsters and villains.

2. When things are happening, as in actually occuring on-screen with the audience figuring out what's happening as the protagonist does, seeing the problems as they come and watching through his eyes as he takes his best swing and hopes it works out, or when we're sharing his pleasure, irritation or horror as he later discovers how right or wrong he was... it's amazing. Shirtaloon can convincingly write action and drama with a clear, clean sense of each participant's mindset informimg their actions when he has a mind to.

Now, the bad:

1. Things actually happening on-screen dominates the story at the beginning, but as of this review something actually happens maybe one chapter in five or six. Essentially the guy has a solid chapter's worth of actual events per week to two weeks, but decided on a daily serialized format so things get... padded. This kills the pace of the story in general, and i think indirectly spawned the other issues:

2. Exposition instead of characterization. We get multiple chapters in a row where characters exchange a couple lines of unnecessary dialogue as a framing device for looking into the camera and dryly reciting Cliff's notes on their situation and sometimes entirely irrelevant exposition about the area or situation that the viewpoint character probably wouldn't be thinking about. Basically the author wants word count so we get his barely altered setting notes.

3. Interlude viewpoints spoiling the plot... with exposition. Beyond the telling instead of showing issue, 90% of the passages from non-protag perspective result in a better story if cut, because, firstly, the audience finding out about things when the viewpoint character does is better narrative flow to begin with, and secondly, the villain showing up and monologuing to the camera about what he's going to do next chapter and why makes the following several chapters where the hero's task is to figure out who did the villainy and why super fricking boring. You know, because we're tapping our foot waiting for the protagonist to catch up instead of following the adventure.

4. The author over-stuffed his magic system with a lot of very fine-grained details, only realized they were irrelevant to even the fight scenes for the most part, and never figured out how to get it under control. So we get regular digressions about ability descriptions whose specifics never serve an acual purpose.

The overall:

In essence, this is a really excellent once a week fiction hidden inside of a bloated, over-optimistic publication format. It needs a few passes by an extremely vicious editor who asks exactly what every scene contributes to the narrative and hits delete if there is so much as an awkward pause before the answer, with that going double for scenes featuing only characters that the overall narrative isn't actually about.

kjoatmon
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Good Intentions Does Not a Great Story Make

Reviewed at: Chapter 229: Brave Little Tailor

This story has a lot of great parts and potential. It could be great. Then, it ruins it and just comes out OK.

All the characters start out unique and individual. Jason, the main one, is especially snarky, carefree, and loves a good non sequitur. Others come in less happy go lucky, etc. Then, everyone slowly becomes Jason. They lose much of their individuality and act and sound the same as him.

The other bid problem is that it forgets both the Lit and RPG aspects of LitRPG at times. The definition of the term by the people that came up with it is literature that uses aspects of RPGs as a part of the story. It does not define how much, but large is common. In RPGs, menu's don't just pop up at random. In literature, the flow of the story is important. Half the time, the RPG elements are worked into the story in a way to make them part of the literature, and thus it is LitRPG. The other half the time, RPGish menus just pop up for no reason to show you EXACTLY the same information that has been gone over time and time again. Nobody is reviewing their skill, looking at an update, etc. Instead, it is in the middle of an action and POW! The menu is there. If there was at least some reference to them remembering their new menu defined skill changes, it would have been a pass at working it into the Lit aspects. As it is, NO RPG just throws things out like that, so it is not even RPG aspects.

In the end, these two, large issues drag the story down from a unique RPG basis with individual and unique characters into a half-assed LitRPG with random menu pops and muddled characters.

Bobbunny
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Everyone else can comment on the main character being the primary fault. If your enjoyment comes from LITRPG systems and worlds though, this story will be enjoyable so long as you skim over Jason.