Evolution (Rewrite)

by A wild writer appears

Original ONGOING Action Fantasy Romance Sci-fi Dungeon Female Lead GameLit High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters Post Apocalyptic War and Military
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In a single instant, we lost everything. All the technology and progress made by the humankind stopped working. However, that was just the beginning of a new age of evolution — an era marked by battles and fighting for survival to make humanity reach the next level.

To me, the end of our civilization made me realize many things. It made me realize how I was short-sighted and weak. Many people died in just a few days. And that made me understand how humankind was soft.

But in the end, all my struggles were for naught. In the end, everything made me understand what I truly was. I was just a...

 

 

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A wild writer appears

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue ago
Chapter 01 Survivor ago
Chapter 02 Mistake ago
Chapter 03 Possibilities ago
Chapter 04 Limits ago
Chapter 05 Retreating ago
Chapter 06 Naive ago
Chapter 07 Team ago
Chapter 08 Progress ago
Chapter 09 Hunted ago
Chapter 10 Countdown ago
Chapter 011 Predator ago
Chapter 012 Survivors ago
Chapter 013 Wrestling ago
Chapter 014 Return ago
Chapter 015 Payback time (1) ago
Chapter 016 Payback Time (2) ago
Chapter 017 Alone (1) ago
Chapter 018 Alone (2) ago
Chapter 019 Harry (1) ago
Chapter 020 Harry (2) ago
Chapter 021 Training (1) ago
Chapter 022 Training (2) ago
Chapter 023 Climate change (1) ago
Chapter 024 Climate change (2) ago
Chapter 025 Climate change (3) ago
Chapter 026 Winter (1) ago
Chapter 027 winter (2) ago
Chapter 028 Winter (3) ago
Chapter 029 The Faceless man (1) ago
Chapter 030 The Faceless man (2) ago
Chapter 031 The Faceless man (3) ago
Chapter 032 Domination (1) ago
Chapter 033 Domination (2) ago
Chapter 034 Domination (3) ago
Chapter 035 Domination (4) ago
Chapter 036 Domination (5) ago
Chapter 037 Lending a hand (1) ago
Chapter 038 Lending a hand (2) ago
Chapter 039 Lending a hand (3) ago
Chapter 040 Lending a hand (4) ago
Chapter 041 Organization (1) ago
Chapter 042 Organization (2) ago
Chapter 043 Organization (3) ago
Chapter 044 Organization (4) ago
Chapter 045 The most powerful survivor (1) ago
Chapter 046 the most powerful survivor (2) ago
Chapter 047 the most powerful survivor (3) ago
Chapter 048 the most powerful survivor (4) ago
Chapter 049 the most powerful survivor (5) ago
Chapter 050 the most powerful survivor (6) ago
Chapter 051 the most powerful survivor (7) ago
Chapter 052 fifty days left (1) ago
Chapter 053 fifty days left (2) ago
Chapter 054 fifty days left (3) ago
Chapter 055 fifty days left (4) ago
Chapter 056 the dark orb (1) ago
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veted
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cannot recommend: stupid MC

I am unreasonably annoyed while writing this review. But, here we go anyway.

The MC is a complete imbecile.

He yells out loud and makes terrible decisions like an unattended toddler. He’s is such an unlikable character I cannot even force myself to care enough to find out why. He's also simulataneously a coward and raging rambo whose two brain cells can't rattle together hard enough to form a coherent thought.

In one instance he was just sitting around at night, and a system message in his brain annoyed him so he just screamed out loud "SHUT THE FUCK UP!". He just screams out for no reason, and it’s not the first nor last time he’s done it!

As for the dialogue in the story, it feels awkward and unnatural, and the events seem to just happen with little forethought or foreshadowing. The text is readable, but still has the occasional, obvious errors. All in all I still could forgive all the problems for an amateur writer if the MC wasn’t so mind numbingly stupid, and no, you can’t just say “you’ll find out later" in the comments section. That isn't enough! It needs to be (at least partially) explained in the available narrative, otherwise if he:

  • sounds dumb
  • looks dumb
  • acts dumb

Then for all intents and purposes, he's just plain dumb.

Bill Ngo
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5 chapters in and i feel like punching a hole in my screen. The MC is so freaking dumb its annoying. Like another comment said "The MC is a complete imbecile."

The story with all its faults can still be read even if u ignore some problems but this shit as hell MC ruins all enjoyment if any that you might have had. Just drop this and dont read until the author learns a little.

You cant have an average story with a shit MC and expect to read this, you need something in this story too offset the crap that it has because how else do you expect people to stay.

Stephen Lewis
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Early review: Good start so far

Ch11 

Not a bad read I dont know how I feel about the mc but he isn't annoying me enough to drop so I will continue reading to see how it develops 

The only thing that pulled me from the story was some spelling errors (it wasn't unreadable just noticed a few)

Tldr not bad worth a try

Edit ch 31

Spelling and grammer issues increased and some weird phrasing of some things 

Edit ch 40 

I'm kinda done with the mc the way he just let's them dictate his life irritates me so dropped for now I might come back and try to read it again lator

SonnyChiba
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Story is ok but not great.  The grammar is readable but not very good.  The word choice and sentence structure is constantly awkward.  I feel pretty certain that the author is not a native speaker and this clearly shows in the frankly bizarre writing style. 

I like the idea of safe zones and upgrading/developing skills used in this work.  It is nothing unique but seems to be scaled more or less correctly.

The characters are not well developed, no real reasons are given for any choices made.  They all seem to be tropes rather than people.  I.E. loner teen, motherly teacher, etc.

The best thing I can recommend about this work is that it seems to be updated quite frequently.  Kudos to the author for writing but this should see an editor.

Ringostrauss
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Interesting Ideas worth reading.

I am enjoying reading this webnovel despite the awkward prose and occasional grammar mistakes.  If you like the genre of this writing I think you'll find it worth your time. I look forward to seeing the author improve as time goes on.

Hacked Anonnymus
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Dumb MC? Yeah I agree, but its not like he stay like that the whole story and he actually recognize when he makes a dumb action, also you can read (imagine or whatever .d) that he makes actual progress in mind and skills and doesnt stay the same the whole story.

So far its good in my opinión :D

Abdulwahab1979
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Why does he not buy an inventory item or a skill to carry things? Or a safe zone skill for camping outside