Silver Fox and the Western Hero

by MH Johnson

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy GameLit High Fantasy LitRPG Male Lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Reincarnation Wuxia Xianxia
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Alex was dying, and all the millions his father had left him meant nothing.

The life he had been so eager to embrace, to do the memory of his father proud, would soon come to an end.

Cancer.

That ugly, terrible word.

He had tried to be strong for his mother, even when the treatments left him violently ill, his body wracked with pain, his friends and even his girlfriend leaving him almost as fast as his once impressive physique wasted  to nothing under the ravages of his illness.

And just when he thought all hope was dead, a couple discrete referals placed by high-powered friends of his family got him an exclusive spot at the most sophisticated cryonic facility in the world.

He didn't know if there was such a thing as an afterlife, but part of the package included uploading a copy of his cortex into a digital universe filled countless worlds to explore, where he could embrace whatever class or profession he could dream of.

All of which sounded hell of a lot better than the miserable death waiting for him in the real world.

In the end, he signed the paperwork, putting his pathetic flickering life in the hands of potential quacks and charlatans.

After all, with death just days away, what did he have to lose?

Even if he could never be successfully revived, he could at least adventure his heart out.

(Authors Note: Books 1-3 are now live on Amazon and here is a link if you wanted to check it out!  And I will continue to post chapters to Book 4 here first, until that tale is told! I hope you enjoy! And if you wanted to help support my work by checking out book 1 on Amazon, I would be extremely grateful!)

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etiolated
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This story starts with a fairly standard litrpg opening. It then moves into a D&D inspired western system meeting an eastern cultivation society in a violent clash of cultures. The protagonist has a full game system, with an A.I.

Things suddenly change. Power escalates, and we’re in the big leagues. The story turns fully to cultivation, the A.I. abruptly disappears.

Things suddenly change. Power de-escalates. The story is now about a modern westerner surviving in a classic eastern cultivation setting. The system is still there, but softer and much less emphasized.

Things change, and now we’re shifting to romance...

This is quite well written, and there are a lot of great ideas here. There are in fact too many good ideas. It feels like the author has repeatedly changed his mind about what kind of story he wants to tell in a very short period.

This is still interesting, and worth a look, but it would benefit from a bit more focus.

telchar
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'The difference between a skilled artist and a master is the latter knows when to stop.'

I remember this tip from some article on paintings and find it equally valid across all fields of art.

When the story started, the focus was on the MC solely for his life experiences, his personality and his reaction to adversities. The author should have built the story on these foundations. And to some extent he has done so. 

However in his latest chapters the slant has been towards MC's use of  his OP ring and abilities to structure the plot. This is a common failing of both Chinese wuxia/xianxia and English web novels today.

'Ohh..  look at his big sword, what is he compensating for? giggle....' is as cliche a saying as it gets. The saying is not only valid for characters but also for authors of said characters. (Not targeting Mr. Johnson, just a comment on a common thread I have observed in works on RRL .😣)

I have observed that many authors get lazy after putting in efforts at the beginning. For example they structure events such that the MC has to rely on their OP abilities to succeed and use the said event to stretch the ability further to be used in the next event! It is an empty and self fulfilling loop with the sole purpose of increasing word count. 

This is my first review on RRL. I hope that the author takes some time to review and deliver on the potential he showed in the beginning.

Hectic1
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This story has heaps of potential but it suffers due to  the MC having incredibly vague goals and acting in an incredibly unrealistic fashion. it feels lime his whole motivation is 'see a pretty girl and help her' which makes his actions weirdly out of sync with the story. Overall the world is different and interesting but this divide needs to be addressed for the story to live up to its potential. 

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To many holes to fill needs a bit more prep

Reviewed at: Chapter 33: Epilogue Part II - Close of book 1

The author has good grammar and ok sentence structure. However, the story has to many plot holes and seems very forced. One the MC is supposed to have combined two powerful cultivation techniques that allows use of all elements and is supposed to be powerful but later in the story says he can not use shadow...The MC also bounces back and forth between always being scared to a hero then back again. He also keeps fighting to forward the cause of people who treat him like crap and when I stopped reading turned him into a slave. I am sorry but the MC is just to far outside my realm of understanding that it breaks the story and the supporting cast is just as bad.

TjStorm
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An Enjoyably Frustating Story, With Built-in RageQuit

Reviewed at: Book 3 - Chapter 18 - Growth & Friendship.

I originally found this story on Amazon, having tried it with kindle unlimited. And the first book had me enjoyably interested in Alex's journey, and where his destiny might take him.

Whilst this is set in the good ol' universe of might makes right, and the weak beg for life, it is magnitudes easier to understand the structure of this universe than a lot of other stories.

While this does feature cultivation schema, the author makes a clear deliniation between the different realms or tiers; Basic, Bronze, Silver, Gold, Jade then divine. Nice and easy to understand. The author has also made it clear how Basic's reach the first tier; Bronze, where our protagonist resides in for Books 1-3.

But where the author has made the world very clear on how it works, and even why the people react and respond the way they do, the history behind the prejudice that Alex faces with his Ruidian heritage characteristics, the author failed to provide Alex with any of the solid foundations for him to successfully grow and evolve..

At the end of book one, I almost didn't read book two, as it seemed like the author was going to nerf Alex's spatial ring, one of the things that gave Alex a huge advantage, and a big reason why I continued to stay glued to the end. Luckily, the author only put a temporary lock on the ring in book two, and wiped out its inventory, rather than make us suffer a convoluted plot to restore it to functionality.

But it was in book two that had me rage quitting multiple times, and twice almost just deleting it and saying 'bugger this for a lark'. Because Alex is supposed to go to the academy to find his cultivation method, so he can save his only friends and maybe love interest, from being sucked in hell to suffer for all eternity.

So we are given this plot to go along with, but Alex doesn't seem to give a damn about Liu Li or Liu Jian. They are going to be sucked into hell and be tortured for all eternity, but the protagonist can maybe powerup and save them. But his actions repeatedly show that he has not learned a single lesson on how this world behaves, and would rather die for strangers, repeatedly, rather than stop his friends horrid fate.

Alex's single greatest ability, is to die. And that is it. To Die. If plot armour didn't exist, Alex would have died at least three more times by my count. See a wild beast, kill yourself. See a demon, kill yourself. Meet another infernalist, don't do anything to stop him, just his schemes to save a pretty girl and her brother. From an Uncle, who anybody else would say, Sod Off Mate. Instead, we are stuck with Simple Alex.

I think this would be an excellent series for someone who doesn't invest anything of themselves into the story. Because you would not give a damn when Alex shows that he is full of youthful naivety even when the whole world shows that it would rather see him dead. Kindness is the extremely rare excemption, not the rule. Alex hasn't twigged this even with multiple near-death-experiences.

But I kept at it, and finished book two, and finally Alex shows he understands the reality of the world he lives in, and makes a solemn vow to seek strength and to stop being a complete noob. Yay.

But it doesn't last, and the first time he faces adversity again, and falls back into thinking that everything is fair, people are going to play fair, and that not everyone hates him. Even though everyone not tied to the Kitsune, has stated, more or less, that the only good Rhuidian, is a dead Rhuidian.

But for all that, I am still continuing to read, in the hope that Alex will get his act together, although fat chance of that. Will he shake off his Simple Hero complex, and learn a different ability than to Stupid Sacrifice for Harry, Larry and Moe.

Thank you for reading, Enjoy!

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I read through book one and I am starting on book 2 but I have to say it is painful. Book one started well and while the pacing felt off, it was enjoyable to read... until the ending. 

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 The first few chapters in Book 2 find our "hero" reverting to who he was at the start of book one. It's like all the growth and everything that happened were for nothing. Book one doesn't matter because our MC is right back to his earlier self before the personal growth, not growth in power mind you. 

Lyn M Kenny
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 Did something happen to the author? Why did he stop posting? 

bengordo
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This book is great, I love being introduced to some of the culture of Asia.

Reviewed at: Book 3 - Chapter 37

So I love these books, and first found this series on amazon kindle unlimited. I have read a lot of the reviews already given, and I understand some of them, however, a book this great is probably incredibly tough to come up with, and the autor has done an incredible job writing it. The only reason I didn't give it 5 stars is that for a book with this kind of power system, it is a little bit chaotic. What I mean is the power scaling. In the first book, the MC had a really good progression, and at the end had a really great ending that came along with that power scaling, but at the beggining of the second book, everything was so confusing that I kinda thought the author had messed up his drafts or something. However the good thing is that he explains everything later on in the book, and though someof it felt rushed, there were relatively few loose ends. All except what happened to the other freed slaves that he was with. But I'm pretty sure that they'll some around later on, so I'll just sit here being patient. And if the author is reading this, I love everything you have done with this series, nobody is perfect, but some are really good, and you are one of them. Keep it up.

warownslife
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A very good, old style story. 

It's basically a play in novel form. A good one. I don't mean this as a form of quality, but as a reference to style, it's shakespearan esk. 

As for quality, its pretty good. it's about a young man's journey in interesting times. It's *not* a fantasy or even a xiania per se. It's basically the incarnation of the curse "may you live interesting times", with a small time western system as a passive power and xiania as the location. I'd honestly call the genre "theater" and it shows in the later chapters more. 

Hell, theirs even acts and follows the classics of comedy, romance and tragedy. Amazing. Does seem to drop in quality/enjoyment a bit post book one. 

 

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Downgraded for removing content. It's still good but I disagree with the Amazon practice. 

anonymous prashant
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Read till the end of book one and some part of book 2, got only few things to say(for now) :

1) Name's different, but that's all. The way protagonist behaves, the way his companions act, the morals, the actions and the intent behind those actions is all the same. I mean, come on, our hero is a former heir to a several billion dollar worth fortune, not a patriotic ex-soldier, then why he acts like a person born as a knight in some medieval European Kingdom? I mean, sure he wanted to play a hero, but seriously, how can you just format his whole personality and experience of life before coming to this world of magic?

2) This might be related to first, but aren't you making this too easy? I mean sure our hero is confronting some horrible things, but does he really needs to dive headfirst in every problem or situation he comes across? Are all the problem of this world his to solve only? It's like he is on some sacred mission to atone for sins of his past life, suffering his lot, penance his destiny. I mean the guy has helped almost everyone has came across and paid back all the debt he owes to anyone and still when a minor guard, whose life he has just saved, ridicules him for being a 'Ruidian', he does nothing, like completely nothing. No ego, no pride, no sadness, no arrogance, no anger? How's that normal? 

3) Keep the sentences short, please. I get that every author has his/her own style, and your flowery language is a delight to read WHEN it is used to describe things of importance, like a fight where our hero is staking his own life, or where he is forced to confront the perils of his newfound world, but to wax poetic about every situation! that takes the fun out of reading. Not to mention breaking the flow of the story.

 

Update :

Finsihed book 2. Not gonna read anymore. Author is deliberately trying to create situations which even his die hard fans are having trouble in justifying. Hero purposefully takes the difficult route, endangering not only his own life but even the people he wants to save. He does 'rescuing' in the most mule headed way possible, taking gamble on the lives of 'innocent children's', not thinking even for once to share his misgivings with his companions and allowing them and himself to be lead into extreme dangers, when there were so many ways to solve the problem more efficiently, all while knowing about the danger that looms over the head of his master and her daughter (the people he supposedly feels indebted to and who should accordingly be his first priority)....