Dropped. WIll be rewritten.

When an unknown ship apears in system one day, two Jegathens are sent to investigate, but what they find on that ship will change the history of the Jegava Union for decades to come

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A good story can excuse many faults

Reviewed at: Chapter 9: The Cypher

As the title stated, a good story can mask most mistakes to the point where the issues are negligible. 

Grammar does needs work in many instances, with punctuation mistakes common as well. But the overall plot progression and character development is phenomenal. 

I look forward to your work and hope you continue writing soon; the suspense is killing me!