Foodie's Enigma

by RiahWeston

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Dungeon GameLit Magic Multiple Lead Characters
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

The Aligning has come and formed a metaverse, connecting dozens of universes with thousands of worlds of man together with giant World Bridges and portals. Magic has become commonplace in the form of the Five Powers and spellcraft and is now just another piece of background in the daily life of many due to its complexity and difficulty.

There are now worlds where giant in-depth video games exist as reality, worlds that exist side by side with the dreams of humanity, worlds where you can commune with the dead, worlds where you can hunt for the most mouthwatering ingredients, worlds you can bet literally everything in duels for wealth and powers, and worlds full of adventures, skills, and jobs like something out of a RPG.

The metaverse is an expansive place that can sate even the wildest man's dreams if you know where to look. And in this magical expanse there are spellmen, ultimate innate masters of magic; and blackzones, dungeon-like places of high risk and reward that would consume entire worlds if not properly trimmed. Almost everyone wishes to become a spellman, or at least a higher race that can make greater use of magic and the Five Powers. And Robert Fayn got just that, in a very round about way.

25 years old, living in a metropolitan city, this foodie has little prospects outside of his job as a museum educator. But all that changed one day when he was assigned-slash-kidnapped to be the blackzone manager of a newly born Enigma! Now Robert must figure out how to survive as a blackzone manager and rule over a newly born dungeon-like distortion in space. All while having to adhere to a dessert theme!?

  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score
  • Total Views :
  • 32,691
  • Average Views :
  • 1,090
  • Followers :
  • 338
  • Favorites :
  • 71
  • Ratings :
  • 120
  • Pages :
  • 231
Advertisement
Remove
Go to Table of Contents
Rate it
Fiction breaking rules? Report
Advertisement
Remove
Author
RiahWeston

RiahWeston

Achievements
Great Commenter (V)
Great Review (IV)
Word Smith (IV)
4th Anniversary
I Am Ascending (IV)
Fledgling Reviewer (II)
Shooting Star
Group Leader (III)
Advertisement
Remove
Table of Contents
Reviews

Leave a review

Zethuron
  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score

A weirdly unique dungeon story, come read it!

Plainly wow, i have read the entire story in a fairly short amount of time, and im fully impressed by what the author has created here in this story and just how unique it is.

The meta-verse is a weird place, there are so many worlds in the known universes that make up the metaverse, some of them just like eachother with small differences, and then there are those that are wildly different. The MC Robert Fayn who lives in New York, is one day taken away from his daily life, to a unknown place, in that place he learns that he has been selected to become the blackzone manager of a newly formed Enigma on a alternate version of earth, his newly formed Enigma, due to some accidental choices on his part, adopts a weird theme, now he is in the another world's version of Nevada, dropped in the middle of a town with people that are out to either enslave him and his Enigma for what he provides or straight out kill him because of the danger he may become, he only has his thrustworthy system assistant to guide him through becoming a competent blackzone manager, but its not that simple for him.

Characters are quite interesting, the author has gone for a style with one main character, and many side characters who appear throughout the story, those side characters are quite well written, personally i cant see much flaws with them at all, aside from them not being developed enough in some cases, but that is just because of the short amount of time that they have appeared so far, which is undoubtly set to improve eventually.

Now the MC himself, and he is sort of two-sided for me, he is decipted as a flawed character, who is thrust in a new situation that he only knew of from words, and those flaws that he is written with, show in his actions and thoughts, by no means he is written as a perfect character, and thats fine! Yet i also feel like he could be so much more, better written overall, theres just something lacking about him, that i dont feel from the other characters.

The world (universe) this story takes place in, is basically the best part about this story, its just so greatly written and unique, the world is seriously complex and in-depth, with there being so many unknown parts about it, that are slowly getting revealed as the story does progress.

One of the best choices the author did make here, is about dungeons, the author just threw away all the common tropes about them, and made a new system, of a kind i havent seen in any dungeon story so far on royalroad or anywhere else.

Ill be fair that i have rarely read anything like the setting for this story, its seriously unique, and i wonder just how the author even thought of it all. And still managed to let it make sense as a coherent story without going too deep in the weirdness. Basically the weird parts of this story, that you just dont see in other stories, are just depicted as just another normal element in this story. The author has made a lot of new terms for this story, with them being quite detailed. One of the better examples is the unique magic system used in this story, the system of Mandalas, that system is very well thought out, with a lot of thought put in making it a logical magic system without clear plotholes, however im not fully sure about it, considering the chapter that they were explained in.

 

Grammar is just... sort of problematic, with weird sentences and other grammatical errors throughout  the unedited chapters that got published , and those unedited chapters are quite the major problem, there are just so many errors in them. The author already has a editor who is doing a good job overall, but the author should atleast try to improve his own grammar, this would make the story better to read overall. However the edited chapters should pose no problems to readers, they are well-edited and there are barely any errors be spotted in those chapters.

Nice writing style for this story, the author knows how to handle the different story elements and combine them in a good enjoyable story, which this one is very much so. Overall the author has handled worldbuilding very well, and there are barely any infodumps that ruin the flow of reading, but in the case of infodumps, there is a notable expection. Considering this story uses a ton of  new terms just for it, the author is sort of struggling to explain those in a nice way that does not break the flow of reading. And here lies the problem, there are those 'Learning' chapters that are pure infodump, and they are sort of a chore to read, yet also explain a lot of neccesary information about some of the terms used in this story. So while its a very good writing style overall, the way the author handles the terms used in this story, could be much better.

This is so unique, i hadnt expected to find a story this different on royalroad, i hope the author can keep writing like this, while also improve even further on this story, it is already a great story, but could become a true outlier.

This story, i just can recommend to everyone, its wildly different, and there are sure to be some readers who want exactly that, and even for those who dont exactly are looking for a such story,  i can still recommend you this creative and weird combination of dessert foods in a dungeon story.

 

Akuamane
  • Overall Score

This made me start to drool. I couldn't stand it so I got some cheesecake

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

 

Hoophy97
  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score

Unique Take On The Dungeon Genre

RiahWeston is creating a very...alien setting. The world is incredibly unique compared to, well, pretty much everything I've seen on Royal Road. This story is a very creative take on the dungeon core genre and I highly recomend it! Besides the engaging worldbuilding, the magic system is also very fascinating, you can easily tell that the author crafted it to compliment the story perfectly. Well done!

DarkCX
  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score

Keep it up. Could use an editor, and don't kill yourself with this pace! I do enjoy the jargon but a little bit more explaination would be good sometimes. MY favorite part was when you mentioned Regan and Ike. Like I said keep it up!

Lazy Empress
  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score

A dungeon like nothing else you've ever seen.

I'm not a great reviewer, I'll try my best though.

If you're interested in dungeons, read this. If you're interested in food, you can read this. It's less about the food than I expected a foodie dungeon to be, sweets are mentioned, characters are named and made of food. They even drop food. Also food restaurants etc. But still, it kinda feels like a side detail. "Oh yeah, I made a dungeon that drops sweets."

But hey, I'm not here for the sweets, I'm here for the dungeon. The dungeon part of the story feels slightly odd. Things are skipped and then later mentioned it happened. "This army that was never mentioned before, they now exist for months, also I created them." That's what it feels like, I rather have the details about him creating new monsters than to suddenly get the info they have always been there.

Also, a great writer once said that fantasy is great because you can add everything to it. Even dragons, and this story includes just that :P

The characters are slightly odd, almost every character gets a pov. Which is great to giving characters more time, but also keeps confusing me every single time. We're still in the same event and suddenly the character changes. It just gets me out of the story every single time. The chapter title says who's pov it is, and then we get a never seen before character and are suddenly dumped in their pov. I personally don't like so many pov switches, but if you don't mind that everything is still fine.

Grammar has some mistakes here and there, it's not perfect. Everyone improves as they go though, and the mistakes aren't terrible or anything. So if you're not a grammar nazi, still good to go.

I think I've said everything I wanted to say now lol. This story is an interesting take on dungeons, and I hope the author can keep up the writing. Or what else am I supposed to read? 

Try it yourself, and get dragged into the world of Foodie's Enigma. There's no going back once you get dragged in, don't say I didn't warn you ;)

JeanDRacc
  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score

Foodie Raccoon Pawproves ( ◐w◐ )

5 stars... Because I was hungry... Maybe?

Well I am raccoon... You see? Food is 5 stars for the steal. So why do you want to fight with my pesty self?

Muahahaha nice of you flan seller author! That cover suits... My taste?

Mr flan author you need motivation to write. As raccoons are bad with grammar and eat anything I'll give you 5 stars! 

Style: Good enough to have a nice reading experience. 

Grammar: I skip this and give 5 stars. For a new novel recently taken out of the oven we can't be expecting a publishing level grammar. 

Plot: This is the reason why to read. A dungeon core that creates sugar creatures. A dessert fight? Roll the D&D oven! I want to play dessert monopoly please!

Character: Well this one I gave 5. Because the novel is currently starting you can't expect much as there isn't enough to do characterization. So I hope it grows and gives us surprises. 

 

 

RaxsoTheCat
  • Overall Score

Epic story made out of even more epicness

Interesting story with good characters and a new take on magic. The story is totally something that could come right out of an anime and I am a huge weeb, 10 out of 10 would read again.

littleXmanXet
  • Overall Score

nice binge worthy title new and refreshing

unique and intresting its like the auththor managed to nat20 a masterpiece all in all a good story

zjacket68
  • Overall Score

I have to agree with LITTLEXMANXET he Nat20'd the hell out of it!!!

Esarathon
  • Overall Score

Very Interesting Story

Very engaging story with a premise that could be developed to be incredibly interesting. So far very good job. I like how you pulled out a system of magic/power I haven't yet run into and I'm very interested to see how you develop it. Keep up the good work.