Acacia Chronicle

by Kyshies

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Traumatising content

Elena de L'Enfer is a Lich, an eternal, ancient and bloodless fiend. Once an elven teenager, she is an immortal sorcerer ascended from the invocation of dark magics from another era, by the blessing of gods long dead to the world. She is now, like many before her, a Vizier of the Eye in service to her enigmatic (and sometimes very whimsical) mistress, Nhaka Mezalune.

It is the duty of a Vizier of the Eye to do battle against the enemies of the Empire, be they humans, elves, or eldritch horrors far beyond even the darkest fathoms of the gods. That by her hand, the world of Melodia and the Empire of Arcadia might endure.

  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score
  • Total Views :
  • 85,832
  • Average Views :
  • 841
  • Followers :
  • 456
  • Favorites :
  • 108
  • Ratings :
  • 80
  • Pages :
  • 588
Advertisement
Remove
Go to Table of Contents
Rate it
Fiction breaking rules? Report
Advertisement
Remove
Author
Kyshies

Kyshies

Archfiend

Achievements
Writathon Royal Road 2019 winner
15 Review Upvotes
Fledgling Reviewer (III)
75,000 Views
Word Count (11)
Top List #2000
400 Followers
1st Anniversary
150 Comments
Premium Member
Advertisement
Remove
Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Introduction - A Stroll at Midnight ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part I [Prologue] [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon's Lair Story Arc, Part II [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part III [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part IV [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part V [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part VI [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part VII [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part VIII [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part IX [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part X [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part XI [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part XII [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part XIII [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part XIV [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon's Lair Story Arc, Part XV [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part XVI [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon's Lair Story Arc, Part XVII [Re-write] ago
Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part XVIII [Epilogue] [Re-write] ago
The World of Melodia: Elicia's Law ago
Side Story: Cecelia's Lament ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part I [Prologue] [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part II [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part III [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part IV [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part V [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part VI [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part VII [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part VIII [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part IX [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part X [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part XI [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part XII [Re-write] ago
Elena's Requiem Story Arc, Part XIII [Re-write] [Epilogue] ago
Side Story: Elena's Reckoning ago
Side Story: Blackheart ago
Innocent Blood Story Arc, Part I [Prologue] ago
Innocent Blood Story Arc, Part II ago
Innocent Blood Story Arc, Part III ago
Innocent Blood Story Arc, Part IV ago
Innocent Blood Story Arc, Part V ago
Innocent Blood Story Arc, Part VI ago
Innocent Blood Story Arc, Part VII ago
Innocent Blood Story Arc, Part VIII ago
Innocent Blood Story Arc, Part IX [Epilogue] ago
The World of Melodia: The Wild Elves of Clan Ayan, Part I ago
The World of Melodia: The Wild Elves of Clan Ayan, Part II ago
Side Story: In Dreams ago
Side Story: Master of Illusions ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part I [Prologue] ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part II ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part III ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part IV ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part V ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part VI ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part VII ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part VIII ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part IX ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part X ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part XI ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part XII ago
In the Shadow of the Witch Story Arc, Part XIII [Epilogue] ago
Side Story: A Picnic at Purity Forest, Part I ago
Side Story: A Picnic at Purity Forest, Part II ago
Side Story: A Picnic at Purity Forest, Part III ago
The World of Melodia: Lightsworn ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part I [Prologue] ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part II ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part III ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part IV [Re-write] ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part V ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part VI ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part VII ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part VIII ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part IX ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part X ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part XI ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part XII ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part XIII [Edited] ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part XIV ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part XV ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part XVI ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part XVII ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part XVIII ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part XIX ago
Scarlet Dreams Story Arc, Part XX [Epilogue] ago
Side Story: Death, and the End of Dreams, Part I ago
Side Story: Death, and the End of Dreams, Part II ago
Side Story: Death, and the End of Dreams, Part III ago
Side Story: Death, and the End of Dreams, Part IV ago
The World of Melodia: Vampires of Melodia ago
Land of the Demon King Story Arc, Part I [Prologue] ago
Land of the Demon King Story Arc, Part II ago
Land of the Demon King Story Arc, Part III ago
Land of the Demon King Story Arc, Part IV ago
Land of the Demon King Story Arc, Part V ago
Land of the Demon King Story Arc, Part VI ago
Land of the Demon King Story Arc, Part VII ago
Land of the Demon King Story Arc, Part VIII [Epilogue] ago
Side Story: Affairs in an Early Afternoon Window, Part I ago
Side Story: Affairs in an Early Afternoon Window, Part II ago
Side Story: Affairs in an Early Afternoon Window, Part III ago

Leave a review

drakan_glasses BE NICE! Fair critique is fair, but be respectful & follow the review rules. There will be no mercy.
Reviews
Sort by:
TroubleFait
Overall

Acacia Chronicle is different from what Royal Road usually offers.

Rather than focusing on action, you will have descriptions as a motor for the story to progress.

Everything is not conveniently written such as you could read it without effort. Instead, you'll have to ask yourself, in the midst of all the information that is presented to you, how it relates to what you already know. While reading the elegant chapters you will piece the puzzle back together, bit by bit.

As a result, it is not a 'no-brainer' read, and you won't be able to read it if you're tired and unfocused. But it is really worth devoting time to it when you are in good shape.

Anjin
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Seriously, this is pure poetry. This fiction is a celebration of the English language, rife with decadent descriptors, immersive imagery, and… proper prose? I’ll leave the writing to Kyshies.

If I hadn’t promised to give feedback then I’d stop there, because that’s really all you need to know. However, promise I did, so here’s a breakdown:

Style – There is a quaint charm to the style. The writing harkens back to the classics, using complex, laden sentences, instead of the clipped, succinct style that is prevalent today (take a guess which I prefer). I’ll admit that it’s not everyone’s first choice, but I found it nostalgic, and I think it fits the tone and setting of the story perfectly. After all, if we can’t be whimsical and verbose in high fantasy, then where can we be?

On a critical note, I will point out that style does occasionally trump substance, and the flow of a scene can get mildly bogged down in the language, but I see it as a minor tradeoff. I spotted some cases of redundancy, which slowed the pace a little, but Kyshies has been quick to trim any rough edges. I’m also not a huge fan of having the scene set out at the beginning of the chapter, rather than described in the text. It’s a valid stylistic choice, but I personally think it has a bit of a cartoon/ comic feel to it, that isn’t in keeping with the rest of the fiction.

Story – The story gave me what I was craving in big, sinful, saccharine scoops, that I am greedily lapping up. There’s a blend of high and low fantasy here, with well thought out world-building and unique quirks that enhance the experience. It’s enough of a deviation from the norm to not feel stale, whilst still giving all of us fantasy lovers our much needed fix. I won’t give away much, but we have dragons, thralls, the undead, living deities, and a partridge in a pear tree.

Grammar – You can’t write a description heavy narrative without some idea of what you are doing grammatically. Kyshies has this under control, and I don’t think anyone will be too disappointed here.

There were occasional typos, more evident in early chapters, as far as I can tell, but these were minor and rarely immersion damaging. A little more frustrating is an unfortunate tendency to have sentences without a specified subject, which can read a little awkwardly. I’ve seen this employed deliberately, but at times here it just feels like a mistake. I would argue that if it is deliberate then it just doesn’t gel with the grandiose feel of the narrative. I feel like Kyshies should stick to their guns here, and keep up the more formal approach.

Characters – Thus far I have come across only one character that I didn’t absolutely love. That’s pretty incredible, if you ask me. However, I try not to score based on personal preference, even if I would give my left arm to be able to follow Elena around for a day. Instead, I am reviewing the characters based on how well-rounded and developed they are, and whether they function as the author intended them to… Yeah, either way, take my five stars. This is a great cast, full of rich and distinct personalities, and I’m going to thoroughly enjoy watching their stories unfold.

Conclusion - This is a glorious read from a masterful author, and one I can’t recommend enough. This is going to take pride of place on my virtual ‘shelf’ and I can see myself checking in with Elena and co. on a regular basis.

DeadLeaves
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

A story that doesnt follow normal conventions. The prose is beautiful and full of imagery, a bit like reading a tolkien book. It tells the story of Elena and her close compatriots. It is not a single narrator and some people dislike that, but give it a shot, it is done in a tasteful way and is clearly written by someone who knows what they're doing.

 

The characters are all well written and you quickly come to love them all in their own way. 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

The only real issues I have with it are two minor things.

1. The pacing is a little slow but not to the point that it's unbearable. 

2. Is a spoiler, not a major one, nor one that even affects how the characters act.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Mejiro
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

A Light Novel-Style Action Story, with a Dash of Mystery

Reviewed at: Into the Dragon’s Lair Story Arc, Part VI

(Written as of the end of the first arc)

This is a fairly densely written, light-novel style story, with a powerful protaganist who has few bones about holding back, and will likely unveil more trump cards in arcs to come.  It's mostly a character piece, with the fights being largely for the sake of form, but done with a lot of flair and style.  There's some ongoing suggestions of worldbuilding and history slowly getting teased out and unveiled, and some rather wonderful overwrought and old-school fantasy names.  There's a decent amount of, uh, anime-ish fan service, for want of a better term (various powerful beings lounging around in lingerie, that sort of thing) which might not be to everyone's taste, but it's relatively unobtrusive as such things go. 

The grammar is functional - it could do with another go-through and tidying, but it's fairly readable and conveys what's going on OK.  (Personally, I'd say that 'hellbourne' should be capitallised to make it stand out more, but I tend to try and make things proper nouns fairly often, it makes things easier to read)

Pauliuk
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

This is story is a fantastic and interesting experience. The beginning arc Into the Dragon's Lair is a mystery story except the detective is an overpowered lich instead of a Holmes. The world that is being developed is both interesting and organic which also draws the reader in.

Style:
The story is always told in the third person but it follows different characters. This allows us to see into the minds of the characters we are following and get their internal thoughts. It's also written with a lot of descriptive words to help us get a feel for what the characters are sensing. From the aromas that surround them to the touch of the snow on their skin.

Grammar:
The grammar in the story is beautiful and descriptive. I could see no obvious spelling or grammar errors and if I did it was so minor that it didn't ruin my experience in any way.

Story:
The beginning of the story is a mystery trying to find a missing woman. The main character uses strong-arm tactics to get the information she wants and then proceeds to her next objective. A cult devoted to dragons is revealed to be the source of the kidnapping and the reason why they are doing it is explained.

Character:
The main character is Elena de L'Enfer or simply known as Elena. She is an elven lich who follows the mortal god of this story. During this arc, we are also following a pair of sisters. One sister is desired by a dying dragon for very unsavoury reasons whereas the other sister was simply used as bait to get the other one. The dying dragon itself is extremely powerful as well and is a master of illusions though you wouldn't know that is you based his power off of his useless child.

Anyway, it's a good read and is very worthy of all the praise the other reviewers have given it.

aralbair
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Elves, half-dragons, demonic Hellbourne who have been brought to heel by the living god of the humans. The world building is fantastic, clearly well-thought out, and comes across through imagery and characters rather than exposition dumps.

It gets off to a slightly awkward start, with unclear character motives and some bouncing around POVs, but it picks up a lot around chapter 5 and 6. Not that the pace needs to be picked up -- even watching the characters go through their normal routines is a joy to read when Kyshies writes it.

And it indeed feels like watching.

Whatever additional effort is required to parse Kyshie’s style is more than offset by the powerful imagery. In so many other RR stories, the bare-bones descriptions often leave me struggling to piece together who’s where and what’s what. There’s a cognitive load in trying to get a grasp on the setting.

Kyshies does all the work painting this world for you, and this world is beautiful.

The prose itself has its ups and downs. The diction is much better than RoyalRoad norms, but there is some fat that could be cut in editing. Mostly sentences that are wordier than they need to be. However, I'd take strong imagery at the cost of a few extra words any day.

As for the plot, what tropes are used are used well. The world-building is original and strong enough to make the plot feel fresh. The main character Elena is pragmatic and refreshingly not dense, yet has an arrogant streak that is a delight to follow. I’ve never been bored, and a lot of interactions and encounters have played out differently from what I’ve expected.

Like another reviewer mentioned, there is anime-ish fanservice with how the authorial "camera" views scenes. That didn't bother me, although the one torture scene did.

Final note on the setting: given the appearance of pistols, the world seems to be Renaissance or nearly Industrial age fantasy rather than medieval fantasy, which always feels much fresher to me, especially in an urban setting. Sort of The Gods of Bastards vibes.

I'll definitely be reading more!

Dr.4C
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Style: The word overwrought comes to mind. Really good command over the language so the descriptions are really good but they are on the verge of going from flowery to purple. I skipped quite a bit of the description at times.

There is a tendency of action scenes to be bogged down by excessive descriptions and exposition. An example of this is the second chapter where we supposedly follow a blood crazed vampire but he has enough sanity left to explain the setting of the world and the overall heirarchy of the church.

Grammar: No problems there.

Story: Really rich world, a bit too much exposition at the start but nothing that overtly detracts from the story. Reads like an urban fantasy in a fantasy setting if that makes any sense.

Characters: Very well done characters. Nice sense of mystery, but it is taken out quickly by the introduction of the God and slight over explaining at the start about the heirarchy of the church.

I feel my immersion ruined by the way a x-years old archmage + lich reacts and speaks. She feels like a human teenager which I think is because of the rewrite but I'm not sure.

TLDR: Too much description impeding action scenes.

Repetitive phrases.

Sentences are a bit too tedious too read, needs to be toned down a bit. 

Speech style of the protagonist feels off to me.

Overall 5 stars because it's just so well written.

Camille d'irithyl
Overall

It's a world of high dark fantasy. With dragons, elves, undead, slaves, cruelty, real deities, and an immortal protagonist who somehow manages to right the wrongs, and acts as a kind of light beam to dispel the darkness that roams in this world in which they live, and transform it into a better place.

Elena, however, despite being the main character, is not omnipresent on the screen, as we follow many different characters, in order to be able to explore the world. The story is somehow constructed as separate episodic sequences, even if they follow each other, but are autonomous. There is a very slice of life that is enjoyable and refreshing, but also intrigue and adventure.

The prose is beautiful and full of imagery, and the style of the story and characters seems to have a strong manga cultural influence. It's as if the world of manga met Lovecraft and Tolkien, and together they made a child.

All aspects of storytelling contribute to creating an immersive and dreamy atmosphere. Almost like a story told in poetry. It is a valid and wonderful stylistic choice, although it slows down or weighs down the narrative, but it is an inevitable consequence of this style.

Typical of what an omniscient, well-controlled style of narration allows. It allows one to create a world that is at once complex, rich and deep, with the help of descriptions, or by exploring it through the perceptions and feelings of the different characters.

This novel is a pleasure to read for its old-fashioned universe and style. If you haven't read it yet, then you should.

You should read it.

Daniel Newwyn
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Unlike other more straightforward stories in the genre, Acacia Chronicle is very meticulous in its flow, inner thoughts, and storytelling. I start with Into the Dragon's Lair arc, which I am fairly sure isn't the beginning of the story. However, it is listed at the beginning and I don't know where else to start.

 

Humans, elves, dragons—this story has them all! The author manages to weave in many different elements into a story, and make them seem seamless as if they'd belonged all along. Budding romance turns into war and bloodshed, hope turns to despair, heaven turns to hell. But in the end, justice shall prevail. Magic is a common thing in this world, something that is very much to my liking. All the aspects of the book so far has been great, making me eager for more.

 

The descriptions make the book great. I sometimes stop to read some of the descriptions twice because they're worth a second glance. It's vivid, it's detailed, and it works for both high and low fantasy elements. There are lots of inner thoughts and inner dialogs in the right places, which makes for a rich and flavorful reading experience.

 

The characters in the story are well fleshed-out, but a bit typical. Maybe it's because the arc I read is a rather short one, so I can more or less figure out what type of person the characters might be when they're introduced. It can be a good thing though, as it leaves the stage for the plot and world-building to shine!

Lord Turtle
Overall

Short Reveiw: Recommend to at least give it a chance

Review: This fiction definitely has an interesting flair to it that I really find myself enjoying especially with the way the author tries to set up a situation and resolution. The idea and world also seem pretty intersting though it does get points off for being slightly confusing at certain points. Overall, I would say give this a chance and at least finish the first arc to judge.