Dimensional Paradise

by Jke

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Awakening in a strange place, Aleen is forced to fight for his life in a strange game filled with beasts, monsters, and bloodthirsty killers. But while he tries to survive that nightmare, things more important than his life are at stake; and the safety of his loved ones will depend on how much power he can obtain.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue I ago
Prologue II ago
Chapter 1 – Death Game (1) ago
Chapter 2 – Death Game (2) ago
Chapter 3 – Death Game (3) ago
Chapter 4 – Death Game (4) ago
Chapter 5 – Death Game (5) ago
Chapter 6 – Lightning Strikes (1) ago
Chapter 7 – Lightning Strikes (2) ago
Chapter 8 – Lightning Strikes (3) ago
Chapter 9 – Lightning Strikes (4) ago
Chapter 10 – Lightning Strikes (5) ago
Chapter 11 – Flag Finale (1) ago
Chapter 12 – Flag Finale (2) ago
Chapter 13 – Flag Finale (3) ago
Chapter 14 – Flag Finale (4) ago
Chapter 15 – Gamemaster (1) ago
Chapter 16 – Gamemaster (2) ago
Chapter 17 – Questions and Answers ago
Chapter 18 – Interlude: The hatred of a puppet princess ago
Chapter 19 – Interlude: The invasion of Lars island ago
Chapter 20 – Back to Home (1) ago
Chapter 21 – Back to Home (2) ago
Chapter 22 – Back to Home (3) ago
Chapter 23 – Back to Home (4) ago
Chapter 24 – Back to Home (5) ago
Chapter 25 – Raid (1) ago
Chapter 26 – Raid (2) ago
Chapter 27 – Raid (3) ago
Chapter 28 – Raid (4) ago
Chapter 29 – Raid (5) ago
Chapter 30 – Game or Hell (1) ago
Chapter 31 – Game or Hell (2) ago
Chapter 32 – Game or Hell (3) ago
Chapter 33 – Game or Hell (4) ago
Chapter 34 – Game or Hell (5) ago
Chapter 35 – Game or Hell (6) ago
Chapter 36 – A Step From Death ago
Chapter 37 – Before the Boss Raid (1) ago
Chapter 38 – Before the Boss Raid (2) ago
Chapter 39 – Queen Brooder (1) ago
Chapter 40 – Queen Brooder (2) ago
Chapter 41 – Queen Brooder (3) ago
Chapter 42 – Queen Brooder (4) ago
Chapter 43 – Inside the Nest (1) ago
Chapter 44 – Inside the Nest (2) ago
Chapter 45 – Inside the Nest (3) ago
Chapter 46 – Deadly Queen (1) ago
Chapter 47 – Deadly Queen (2) ago
Chapter 48 – Inside the Nest (4) ago
Chapter 49 – Between Hope and Despair (1) ago
Chapter 50 – Between Hope and Despair (2) ago
Chapter 51 – Between Hope and Despair (3) ago
Chapter 52 – Between Hope and Despair (4) ago
Chapter 53 – Between Hope and Despair (5) ago
Chapter 54 – Between Hope and Despair (6) ago
Chapter 55 – Between Hope and Despair (7) ago
Chapter 56 – The Raid Ends ago
Chapter 57 – Information ago
Chapter 58 – Interlude: Meeting with a Level Six ago
Chapter 59 – Interlude: The Dream of a Trapped Bird ago
Chapter 60 – Interlude: The Birth of a Hero ago
Chapter 61 – Interlude: The Girl and Her Cat ago
Chapter 62 – Interlude: Eternal Flame (1) ago
Chapter 63 – Interlude: Eternal Flame (2) ago
Chapter 64 – Unexpected Visitors (1) ago
Chapter 65 – Unexpected Visitors (2) ago
Chapter 66 – Body-Enhancement Drug (1) ago
Chapter 67 – Body-Enhancement Drug (2) ago
Chapter 68 – Beginning of the Training ago
Prologue 69 – Regarding Skills and Training ago
Chapter 70 – News ago
Chapter 71 – A Fated Meeting (1) ago
Chapter 72 – A Fated Meeting (2) ago
Chapter 73 – A Fated Meeting (3) ago
Chapter 74 – A Fated Meeting (4) ago
Chapter 75 – A Fated Meeting (5) ago
Chapter 76 – Like a Translucent Fairy ago
Chapter 77 – The Girl Under the Rain (1) ago
Chapter 78 – The Girl Under the Rain (2) ago
Chapter 79 – The Girl Under the Rain (3) ago
Extra 1 – Average of Supers ago
Extra 2 – How Are Dimensions Connected ago
Chapter 80 – Zombies (1) ago
Chapter 81 – Zombies (2) ago
Chapter 82 – Zombies (3) ago
Chapter 83 – Zombies (4) ago
Chapter 84 – Zombies (5) ago
Chapter 85 – Zombies (6) ago
Chapter 86 – The Cat’s Fight (1) ago
Chapter 87 – The Cat’s Fight (2) ago
Chapter 88 – Alone Against the Zombies ago
Chapter 89 – Tower of Nightmares (1) ago
Chapter 90 – Tower of Nightmares (2) ago
Chapter 91 – Tower of Nightmares (3) ago
Chapter 92 – Tower of Nightmares (4) ago
Chapter 93 – Tower of Nightmares (5) ago
Chapter 94 – Pandemonium (1) ago
Chapter 95 – Pandemonium (2) ago
Chapter 96 – Pandemonium (3) ago
Chapter 97 – Pandemonium (4) ago
Chapter 98 – Pandemonium (5) ago
Chapter 99 – Pandemonium (6) ago
Chapter 100 – Patient Zero (1) ago
Chapter 101 – Patient Zero (2) ago
Chapter 102 – Patient Zero (3) ago
Chapter 103 – Patient Zero (4) ago
Chapter 104 – Rotten Blood and Flesh (1) ago
Chapter 105 – Rotten Blood and Flesh (2) ago
Chapter 106 – Rotten Blood and Flesh (3) ago
Chapter 107 – Rotten Blood and Flesh (4) ago
Chapter 108 – Rotten Blood and Flesh (5) ago
Chapter 109 – Aya’s Choice (1) ago
Chapter 110 – Aya’s Choice (2) ago
Chapter 111 – Interlude: Voice ago
Chapter 112 – Interlude: NEET Girl ago
Chapter 113 – Interlude: Chief of National Security ago
Chapter 114 – Interlude: Leona’s Mission ago
Chapter 115 – Claire’s Illness (1) ago
Chapter 116 – Claire’s Illness (2) ago
Chapter 117 – Conversation in the Night (1) ago
Chapter 118 – Conversation in the Night (2) ago
Chapter 119 – Fire Stroke ago
Chapter 120 – Ancient Battlefield (1) ago
Chapter 121 – Ancient Battlefield (2) ago
Chapter 122 – Woman Wraith ago
Chapter 123 – Fog and Trees (1) ago
Chapter 124 – Fog and Trees (2) ago
Chapter 125 – Fog and Trees (3) ago
Chapter 126 – Pursuit (1) ago
Chapter 127 – Pursuit (2) ago
Chapter 128 – Pursuit (3) ago
Chapter 129 – Pursuit (4) ago
Chapter 130 – Turned Into Lightning (1) ago
Chapter 131 – Turned into Lightning (2) ago
Chapter 132 – Explosion ago
Chapter 133 – Power (1) ago
Chapter 134 – Power (2) ago
Chapter 135 – Power (3) ago
Chapter 136 – Power (4) ago
Chapter 137 – Dream ago
Chapter 138 – Game End ago
Chapter 139 – Forming a Team ago
Chapter 140 – A Treasure, A Calamity ago
Chapter 141 – Mana, Body, Image, Experience, and Luck ago
Chapter 142 – Alice Appears Again ago
Chapter 143 – Ominous Clouds ago
Chapter 144 – The Fate of the Phoenix (1) ago
Chapter 145 – The Fate of the Phoenix (2) ago
Chapter 146 – Interlude: The Shadow and the Nun ago
Chapter 147 – Interlude: Press Conference ago
Chapter 148 – Get Ready ago
Chapter 149 – E-39 (1) ago
Chapter 150 – E-39 (2) ago
Chapter 151 – E-39 (3) ago
Chapter 152 – E-3902 (1) ago
Chapter 153 – E-3902 (2) ago
Chapter 154 – First Apparition of the Laws ago
Chapter 155 – Sword and Arrow ago
Chapter 156 – Two Small Curved Horns (1) ago
Chapter 157 – Two Small Curved Horns (2) ago
Chapter 158 – Two Small Curved Horns (3) ago
Chapter 159 – Two Small Curved Horns (4) ago
Chapter 160 – Daemons (1) ago
Chapter 161 – Daemons (2) ago
Chapter 162 – Daemons (3) ago
Chapter 163 – Facing an Irregular (1) ago
Chapter 164 – Facing an Irregular (2) ago
Chapter 165 – Absolute Mana Body ago
Chapter 166 – About Cultivation ago
Chapter 167 – Aya’s Danger ago

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Nomad1791
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As of chapter 40

Story: a deminsion of Earth is pulled into a death game where you need to fight and pass to survive. 

 

The good: I enjoy the story's world/setting. System is a little wonky but it works.

Side characters/ alternative main are solid and enjoyable. 

Story is readable Grammer and sentence structure isn't so bad you can't get through it. 

Style: developing. 

 

The bad: 

Mc is trash and anyone from his version of Earth is trash. I'd seriously put money on almost anyone else winning a death match with the mc if his magical plot armor was taken away. 

 

Story: has some kinks the system seems to contridict itself where you are put into a death game because there's a hidden reason for it and they even give you weapons that are basically as useful as a passing fart. 

Style: author is in the process of developing one I think so growing issues. 

Grammer: there isn't a single chapter without a mistake and poor sentence structure. It's not enough to keep you from understanding it's just jaring at times. 

 

Overall: could use editors and a re-write but it's good for someone just starting out. Dont stop writing you have potential. 

xmenxuser
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Not bad so far but is it Aleen or

Aiden? You keep switching the names

J Guilherme
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Read until the end of first volume.

"Struggle" is the tone of the narrative and the author wants to imprint that in every moment, as form of suspense, tension in the action scenes and character development. And that's a problem for me.

For the sake of the aforementioned element the MC becomes a blabbering fool incapable of simple deductions. For instance, "ice cold woman" explain him about something akin to magic, then the MC goes about a rollercoaster of emotion and thoughts about how it should be impossible, then in the next chapter he sees someone doing a spell and he goes through that avenue again.

In suffice, even after some world building development, MC is repeatedly portrayed as a blind man walking into a gunfire, so his survival sounds like and it's plot armor.

Good enough if you're seeking some tense moments, but everything else in the story is paying the price for it.

The Gray witness
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Interesting story, great potential, sentence structure and grammar is painful to look at. The story style is over used, and you can see the plot coming from a mile away. The characters are badly developed and plain, the mc has more plot armor then most op/godlike stories, author needs a lot of experience, an editor, and some goddamn English lessons. Noo offence, but it's a bit hard to read smoothly.

zmikez
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Good premise but suffers from writing mistakes.

Reviewed at: Chapter 1 – Death Game (1)

I liked the premise, I'll most likely come back and attempt this story later, just slogged through 3 different stories with subpar grammar. This one doesn't seem nearly as bad as a 30 chapter one I just finished binge-reading. The most grating is the use of  multiple plurals back to back. Most are easy to decipher like 5 men teams would be 5 teams consisting of men. 5 man teams would be teams consisting of 5 men each and just reading through the chapter will usually straighten up any ambiguity.

That being said, having to decipher meaning from context isn't something I want to do often if I'm reading for pleasure. Immersion is being broken too consistently.

Gisorel
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Were Up to ch.80! review time!

Reviewed at: Chapter 80 – Zombies (1)

Now we're talking!

 

Now that ch.80 is out, and we even have a few extras I guess we can say something on this book.

 

The read was excellent, and I’m sure that this book is one that I can support with a amazon purchase without worrying, thing that only happened once before.

 

about the book? well....

first off, won’t go in expecting fast world building or fast character building or some random action scene for the sake of views/ word count.

 

At least for now the author made a great job doing everything as a pack, he won't take 5 to 10 chapters to do one thing, but will take 30 or more to set a few things at the same time, and if you ask me if it works, it sure does!

 

I’m not telling you that is a slow read, is definitely not, it just takes more than a chapter to someone fully appears or set himself/herself/itself (multiple options intended) on the world.

 

The workaround with the "little girl" was really interesting and I’m sure it’s not over, a few pieces are missing, but they’re probably in place already on future chapters.

 

 

TL:DR :
word for the author:

 

SevenShade
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Style is just 2 star cause the setting is like ARENA , TERROR INFINITY and ect...

 

Story score is so-so ... cause of a simple logical reasoning like whats the most dangerous bout team fight? Ofcourse its being a scout ! And the MC got a ride with a woman experiencing some nonesense like being ignore while the MChisterically warn her of a beast ! Then later advising him of rules like being alert?! Are u nuts woman?! No ! Because of author a plot like that happen ! 

 

GRAMMAR is only 3 star because the authro lacks punctuation ! Like comma...u will see it when u read it .. go ...

 

If its the authors first time them im his/her 1st blood !!!  Not bad trying BUT pls ! Review your work and plan ahead the plot before and after  writing !!!