Unfamiliar Faces

by IndigoSharpe

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Horror Harem Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead Reincarnation Slice of Life Strong Lead Supernatural Urban Fantasy
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Live a long enough life and boredom becomes the enemy. Live a strange enough life and you start to crave a little more normalcy. Old Monty has been around for quite a while. Long enough for all his enemies to have either died off or gotten over whatever they were mad about. Long enough for all his friends to have either moved on or moved up to higher planes of existence.

For eons he slept, unbothered, unprovoked, unremembered. Now a whole new life is knocking at his door. A whole new adventure as the familiar of an intrepid but callow young mage.

Can a immortal lord of the void lower himself to being a mortal's partner-in-crime? Yes. Will there be some good stupid fun along the way? There better be...Or the whole world might be in trouble. 

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StormWhiteHd
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Interested to see where it goes!

Seems like a pretty good start so far, interesting premise, and I definitly think human is gonna be a major asset in this book. Obviously I have only read 4 chapters cause that's all it has so far, but definitly had high potential for some good duo shenanigans.

human 000
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To be honest I enjoyed this story very much and it is been a while to see agood story 

dak'kon
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Unedited Wish fulfillment

A girl summons a god, they proceed to do whatever they want.

More then anything it reads like a thought flow published as-is. There is no clear direction story-wise and riddled with basic grammar mistakes.
For example, using the same word in succession(we we).
To make matters worse The characters are shallow, the god reads like a teenager with to much power.

I suggest using Grammarly or similar program for the grammar issues.
Invest time in planning where the story is going.
The cliche show instead of telling exist for a reason, half the chapters are made of inner monologue.
*Stopped reading after chapter 12.

LadyLark1
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Fascinating Perspective

I like the idea for this one. It could also to a fun/fantasy/slice of life story. That is of course if the author doesn’t make it into one of those OP character rules the world sticks. Either way it’s entertaining and fun. So let’s see where this story leads. ( what I meant by slice of life, was character having a pretty normal life in a fantasy like story) 

jaketsam
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it's got a good start I just hope is stays that way.

Stephen Lewis
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Ch22 

Very enjoyable read 

OP character done right interested in where this goes 

A few spelling errors and weird phrasing pulled me from the story but that's about it

Maukka
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A relaxed story about a very OP character casually making someone in a bad situation into slightly less OP character while they do some random stuff. If that sounds great you might enjoy this but personally besides a few nice bits in this story most of it is very boring and uninteresting to me.

Relationship between the 2 main characters is interesting and the family drama is somewhat nice with the "bad" guys having pretty well developed and intersting personalities but they are sort of ruined by the fact that besides possibly causing slight emotional turmoil to one of the main characters they pose basically no threat due to how OP the MCs are.

caby202
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Kinda crappy. Unhappy to have been recommnded this.

You over explain everything. Almost like you're writing a children book for adults. Not to say the story in general is bad. If there was a story. It seems to just jump from point to point like a sidewalk that requires you to cross the road, go back a street and then turn3 corners to arrive where needed. Some grammar errors were noted during my read thru as well. One that stuck out to me I think was "What we do we do." 

 

Tldr. Messy story and over explaining. Some grammar errors.