Omnipocalypse Monsters

by JackOfAllSins

Original ONGOING Fantasy Horror Satire Sci-fi Anti-Hero Lead Dungeon Female Lead GameLit Grimdark High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Mythos Non-Human lead Post Apocalyptic Reader interactive Reincarnation Ruling Class Strategy Strong Lead Super Heroes Supernatural Villainous Lead
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The Omnipocalypse was every apocalypse humans ever imagined all happening at once, zombies, plagues, nukes, EMPs, Robot uprisings. Not just the earth either, It happened to every World ever dreamed up by men too: heaven, hell, and every other afterlife or spirit world ended, plus the worlds of books and stories bled into reality. It all broke apart and either; became new places on the chaotic Earth or part of the even messier spirit world. Magic beasts mutated by radiation, Robots mastering Magic, the mixture of everything made the horrors... well, more horrible.

Omega; A young Woman with few memories wakes to find she has spent 2500 years in stasis, in a basement of scientific horrors. Horrors that could supposedly destroy the world if ever let free. Horrors of which she was the last to get free.

Rather then Quest for world domination or destruction; Omega keeps getting drawn into a protective role over other orphans, lost monsters, and broken AIs. So she decides to build something to help all her little monster family be safe, and that something may or may not involve teaching children to tame and battle monsters in a manner that may or may not parallel a certain children's game. Pocket monsters of the Omipocalypse, or Omnipocalypse Monsters.

I try for 5K words a week, but I do not have a particular release day yet.

Discord https://discord.gg/hUTC3Ct

Cover Image by kalli gruen from Pixabay

Discord Image by Digital Photo and Design DigiPD.com from Pixabay

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Shemryu
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This story has awesome potential

Love the world's system liking the characters want more now

Purp13
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Good, but with room to improve.

Has good ideas, lots of interesting concepts, but the writing is a bit messy and can be hard to parse sometimes. The author has already improved since it started and I’m looking forward to seeing the story grow and improve.

Knight22
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I don't normally leave a review of a story in progress. This one deserves one however. Great characters, fun powers, and a world setting with amazing possibilities. This may be a work in progress but it reads like a manuscript waiting to be published. 

The only bad, and honestly its not even bad, is there's a few grammar errors. The kind you get when the sentence you're writing changes in your head half way through writing. I doubt many people will even notice them honestly. 

Andross Guile
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This is pretty good but it needs serious editing. Half the time the reader isn't sure what is going on and the other half of the time the reader has no idea what's going on.

The syntax is above average and the characters are interesting enough. The world is a Charlie Foxtrott and even though it might be on purpose it still needs more structure. 

It needs a rewrite. 

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