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William Pitt has a bad hangover, is lost, and is trying to avoid any problems. Unfortunately, the local demons, clerics, and army of never do wells have decided to get in his way.

 

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Every chapter starts off with a different POV

Reviewed at: Chapter 14

The author needs to add the Multiple character tag to this novel so people can screen it out when they search for novels. The POV often changed every chapter making it hard to connect with the MC. Lucky the author gave some clues that it was changing so the story wasnt unreadable. I would say that this is a okay if you like constant POV changes.

 

I also will say that as an avid reader I abhor POV changes. I think that most writers who write them are not skilled enough to adequately pull them off. The best  way to write them in my opinion is to change the name of the chapter to the name of the reoccuring character and put side view or something as the name. Constantly changing the POV to irrelevant people has no purpose and is confusing since you could just use a third person omniscient point of view to get your point across.