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Aperio had been a slave for as long as she could remember. She toiled away in the palace of her masters, her body forced to obey, her mind no longer caring that she did. Her only joy was the small inconveniences an error in her work could bring, the resulting punishment a small price to pay. When the news came she was to be sacrificed in a grand ritual, she welcomed it—for most, death was a cause for grief and mourning, but for Aperio, it was her only way out.
However, during the final stages, something went wrong. Fate intervened, and Aperio found herself in a world she no longer knew, with powers beyond her wildest dreams. No longer a slave to the Empire, she set out to find her place in the world, and enjoy true freedom for the first time in her life.
Please do keep in mind that this story is a first draft and training exercise for me and, while I do try my best, mistakes will still be made. Writing in a foreign language is sometimes harder than you think.
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The story is slow, and introspective. Unfortunately it's hurt by weak characters. The MC is the only character that's at all fleshed out, while the supporting cast are quiet, passive and with little to no personality to distinguish them.
The story is grand, but there is no tension or risk. There is a mystery hiding behind everything, but by chapter 90+ we're no closer to understanding. I don't think the characters in the story are strong enough to carry such a slow pace, which led me to drop the story.
The world building is shallow, but with several interesting pieces strewn about.
There are only so many times you can have the exact same dialogue while expecting a reader to care about what is being said for the hundredth time. So many outpourings of emotion and "character development" that are just a rehash of conversations they had last chapter.
I've read like 80 chapters, and all the content in there could probably be said in 40, while increasing the quality of the story by not watering it down.
The characters seem pretty 2 dimensional honestly. There isn't any time spent making us care about anyone other than Aperio, and she isn't that sympathetic a character in the first place. She has no real struggles that readers can use to bond with her. She has one defining motivation that seems weak at best. Most of the time she isn't even working toward her goals, and is just going on angry rants and rampages, or bemoaning her sad life.
Still, a power fantasy is always a bit enjoyable so it's got 3 stars from me. I'm not going to read any further since the story is just grinding it's wheels at this point.
The start is interesting in terms of setting and plot. But the story is really slow, often gets stuck in a circle in the same POV, and repeats the same topics over and over; with little to no progress.
On the other hand there is very little conflict/struggle for the characters. Besides some emotional back and forth - especially in the slightly annoying romance arc - nothing builds up much tension.
The characters are a bit... one dimensional, even the MC. Often shown as a little too naive and depended on her hugpillow characters to calm her; so she doesnt go berzerk every minute.
She is the CREATOR of everything. Eons old and she never ever had any kind of romantical contact - or so it feels- with anyone? She created the bodies of females and males right? She made souls capable of love and emotion but does understand nothing of it?
And at this point, I am reading, she has probably about of 50%+ of her lost memory back.
In a sea of wish fulfillment reader insert fast food litrpg stories Forgotten is that 5 course meal that you did not know you were missing.
Forgotten has interesting world building, engaging mysteries, and ever-expanding scope, all driven by a unique and complex protagonist who undergoes actual character development.
Forgotten has one main character, Aperio, who is both the protagonist and main point of view character in the story. While you do get a few different PoV chapters they are all used to add additional perspectives of Aperio. It is very hard to talk about her without revealing a major spoiler that happens over the course of the first arc but I will try.
Aperio starts out a slave in a completely over the top evil empire and has had every single horrific thing happen to her that you can think of for a fully mind controlled slave. At the same time, she can maintain her inquisitive personality and basic sense of decency. This is the first hint that something odd is happening as she should have long ago been broken and gone insane from her treatment.
In the second chapter Aperio starts to change in a way that I at first thought was taking us down the path into that clichéd wish fulfillment reader insert fast food that I mentioned at the start. If you also have this reaction I need you to trust me here and keep reading. I promise that what you think is happening is not what is happening.
Aperio is a completely unique protagonist for a litrpg. In every other litrpg I have read the protagonist starts out weak and over the course of the story you follow along as they make their numbers get bigger. Aperio is not like that. She is not working to make numbers bigger, instead she is working to understand who she it and where she fits into the world. The issues she deals with are not “how do I kill this thing” but more “should I kill this thing?” or even “how can I interact with this person without things devolving into violence?”.
All of this exists for a specific reason that is slowly revealed over first arc as you discover along with Aperio who she is.
Forotten takes place in a fantasy world where magic is commonplace and there are multiple humanoid races. There is also a divine pantheon who can grant power to Their followers and They take an active role in the world.
The world has a long history with multiple periods of rising, collapsing, and rebuilding. So the bones of old empires remain and color the current world. Much information has been lost with only legends remaining.
There are monsters, dungeons, and adventurers that are part of daily life alongside outposts of civilization.
The plot, at the time of this review, is a single thread which follows Aperio as she discovers the world and learns to come into her own. It is told in real time with no major diversions as the focus remains entirely on Aperio.
There are multiple mysteries that drive the plot, both small and large. These mysteries also span the range from things that are immediate and personal “why can I do this now?” to world spanning and universal “why are things this way?”.
To go along with the mysteries the plot also expands in scope over time which coincides with what Aperio discovers.
I actually gave Forotten a try because I kept seeing GamingWolf talk in another author’s discord. They were always polite and helpful to others when questions came up and it took a long time before I even realized they were an author. Some other people seem to do nothing but promote their stories which always leaves a bad taste in my mouth. GamingWolf is clearly an asset to the RoyalRoad community and I love that they also have an amazing story to go along with that.
If you would like to read a litrpg story with a protagonist who is different than anything you have ever read before, dealing with issues far beyond what this genre addresses, this is absolutely the story for you. I would also recommend this to people who typically do not enjoy litrpg stories as it is a background element that adds color rather than existing for its own sake.
MC is not evil. Or, at least, tries not to be. Easier said than done.
I only read up to chapter 58 so far. The story is enjoyable, but not what I expected. If you want to read this, I recommend dumping any expectations before you start. This is very much a slow burn.
I'm not sure how to rate this one in terms of quality. In some ways it's generic and bland, in other ways it's unique and insightful. It's a bit of an oddball that doesn't fit neatly into any given category.
What I can say is that I didn't encounter anything that made me regret reading this story. I highly recommend at least reading the first dozen chapters to see if you'll like it.
Review for up to chapter 11.
This is an interesting take on the monster/escaped trope. We follow an young elf woman named Aperio as she “wakes up” centuries after a ritual gone wrong devastated the empire she lived in. Aperio was a slave and her journey is one of self discovery as she asks herself what she should do now that she is finally free.
Style: light and pleasant. The story is clear and fluid thanks to it.
Grammar score: perfect. The story is properly edited and there are no repetitions nor weird sentence structures.
story score: my lowest ranking for the simple reason that we already got one interlude with less than ten chapters published. The rating is tentative since we don’t have enough content yet to make a final judgement.
Character score: Besides Aperio, no character has been developed properly yet but the few we meet have their personality. The main character feels alive and her reactions are always in character considering what she has been through.
Verdict: there may not be much yet but what is there is promising. I would advise keeping Forgotten in the bookmarked list to see where it goes.
When the only worry is "How can I live safely with all these people so much weaker than myself?" you don't ever have to worry if your protagonist is going to get very interesting.
Honestly, the story isn't that bad... The only problem I had with the story was with the MC. I listed bellow the problem I had with the MC:
- Since she is a slave since her young age, you could expect from her to have learned by now what are to rope of being a slave, and yet, you find her tring to resist the order she received like if she was new to the job.
- She was enslaved for multiple year by now and yet she still isn't broken. And i dont want to feel like a psychologist but after being rape, beaten, tortured, used for ritual and as testing subject. You would expect her to be somewhat broken and resigned.
She is really dumb
- she is continually asking herself if she is strong...
- like seriously: "hmmm... I wonder how I was able to cut through the wall like if it was butter... I don't remember having so much strenght.... even though I did feel like my strengh had grown tremendously back there.... oh well it's probably just the wall that is really weak" or "I wonder how I was able to literaly make someone explode on the wall like One Punch Man.... they're so slow, it must be because they are weak"
- and it goes on and on for two entire chapeter (chapter 4 and 5)
other then that, it's overall pretty good, even though i wouldn't recommend it for the reason said earlier.
sorry for any spelling mistake english isn't really my first language...
It feels like the writer had a general idea for a story, but then exercised no self restraint while writing said story and wrote him/her-self into a corner. I'm not going to spoil what they did, because I do feel like some of the ideas the author used up until this point are worth being introduced to, but I've lost all interest in this story, and have no plans to pick it up again in the future.
It's very hard to write overpowered characters unless you understand one simple thing. Characters who could wipe the foor with everyone they meet still need to develop and grow, and that is something this novel nails.
This is not the story of an unkillable person wiping the floor with everyone, there's more than enough of that out there. It's the story of someone trying to find themselves, and it reads like a journey of self-discovery. I cannot wait to see where it goes next.