Apocalypse redone

by Viral

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Horror LitRPG Male Lead Post Apocalyptic Reincarnation Supernatural
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With a cry of pain the last human on earth dies. Then he wakes up in his apartment 10 years in the past just at the beginning of the zombie infection that devastated humanity. Now with the accumulated knowledge of a lifetime he must evolve and change that tragic defeat into a glorious victory.

 

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Many people are rightly asking me to get an editor so if anyone wants to do it for free you are welcome. Due to my economic situation, I find myself unable to pay one and therefore what is written will remain that way until the story ends.

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Psycho
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On one hand, it is clear that the author put quite some effort into this work(icons are a nice touch), on the other hand, well... there really is a lot to complain about.

It is quite obvious that the plot holds a central position in this fiction, and when 'setting integrity' or 'reasonable behavior' comes into conflict with a predetermined plot they yield and are bent. The tone of storytelling is more suitable campy MMO adventure, then the gritty apocalypse. People are just having fun killing zombies.

There are a lot fewer survivors than declared 1%, closer to something like 0.0003%, even if we consider that a lot of survivors are killed near instantly by zombie mob, it is still orders of magnitude off.

The difficulty of battles has me doubting the reality of mc's previous life. How could he survive any of this?

And finally - dialogues. Very bad, not even considering bad grammar. Every time someone talks - it seems like one person talking with himself. All characters seem to have a complete understanding of each other and dialogue is just a formality for the sake of the reader. Far too bizarre how everyone in this crazy world are reasonable, cooperative and trusting.

Kiwiwarrior1
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Its a good story but it could use some editing and the realease rate could be higher but other than that its good.

THaD1US
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I like the idea of this story it’s semi-unique and has a slight subtle crossovers of different apocalypse novels

Nomad1791
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Wait until an editor takes a crack at it.

Reviewed at: Creeping death

Man I made it to chapter 11 someone pm me if it gets a re-write. The story is ok love the authors pictures for the powers that's a nice touch the Grammer is so bad I can't read any further. It wasn't too bad until a new character was introduced that just curses for no reason than to curse. Now why would that be my tipping point? Broken English cursing done wrong is just a pain to read. To sum up. Story not bad. Characters ok except for one. World building is good. Pacing was ok. Just needs a editor badly. 

Max read
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It could do with some re-working or just start over.

Reviewed at: Made in Heaven

Look, I like this novel... but it just keeps going downhill. For example, or mc, Gabriel, has 10 years worth of experience so, even if he is stupid, he would have far more intelligence than he has shown. I mean, for gods sake, the man survived to be the last human alive, that takes not only strength and luck, it takes a great amount of intelligence. 

Now let's look at his strength. Gabriel, who has been killing these infected for the longest amount of time, does not seem to realise that, if he is gonna be the leader of this group, he needs to be stronger. He, who has been killing these infected for over 10 years, does not seem to have realise (even after 10 fucking years) that strength is vital in their situation. He just gives away the 'Hell crystal's to whomever is in his group, now all of them have; more mutations, better mutations, more levels in each mutation and each and every single person (even the fucking cat) has better armour than him.

 

I quite liked this novel but, the way the author didn't think the first powers he gave the mc through really annoys me. Like this new girl (who I personally don't like at all) has the mutation 'Giants Blood', this at level one gives her the ability to carry 50kg easily, at level two it's 100kg and at level 3 its 200kg. Now if you compare it too the mc's 'Explosive Strength' which gives him the ability to carry 100kg for SIX WHOLE SECONDS THATS CRAZY RIGHT!*sarcasm if you couldn't tell*  But honestly, although that could be the turning factor in a fight, what's the point hive that could be a constant buff... it's stupid to me.

 

Then there's his 'Explosive Speed/Agility/Reflexes' there useless if you just look at oscars mutations, all Oscar has to do is up each of his 'Super Agility' 'Fast Reflexes' and 'Herculean Strength' once and gain a constant buff equal to Gabriel's 6 second one. Plus the mc is just stupid, do what the cad did and up his sleep efficiency to 3 or 4 so he doesn't have to sleep.

I feel that people have got what I'm saying for the most part, if not then whatever. But, if the author does ever decide to re write this or make some changes, give the mc; more crystals, more mutations, better mutations, higher intelegence and... FOR THE LOVE OF GOD AND ALL THAT IS HOLY! PLEASE REMOVE THAT YENI FROM ALL OF EXISTENCE!

 

Now, although I truly doubt you will, if the author of this novel (Viral) were to see this review. I am sorry to say I am dropping this, I enjoyed some of it but most of it just annoyed me, I am sorry if my words upset you. It's just my honest opinion and thoughts.

 

-Max Read-