Apocalypse redone

by Viral

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Horror LitRPG Male Lead Post Apocalyptic Reincarnation Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
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With a cry of pain the last human on earth dies. Then he wakes up in his apartment 10 years in the past just at the beginning of the zombie infection that devastated humanity. Now with the accumulated knowledge of a lifetime he must evolve and change that tragic defeat into a glorious victory.

 

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Many people are rightly asking me to get an editor so if anyone wants to do it for free you are welcome. Due to my economic situation, I find myself unable to pay one and therefore what is written will remain that way until the story ends.

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Psycho
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On one hand, it is clear that the author put quite some effort into this work(icons are a nice touch), on the other hand, well... there really is a lot to complain about.

It is quite obvious that the plot holds a central position in this fiction, and when 'setting integrity' or 'reasonable behavior' comes into conflict with a predetermined plot they yield and are bent. The tone of storytelling is more suitable campy MMO adventure, then the gritty apocalypse. People are just having fun killing zombies.

There are a lot fewer survivors than declared 1%, closer to something like 0.0003%, even if we consider that a lot of survivors are killed near instantly by zombie mob, it is still orders of magnitude off.

The difficulty of battles has me doubting the reality of mc's previous life. How could he survive any of this?

And finally - dialogues. Very bad, not even considering bad grammar. Every time someone talks - it seems like one person talking with himself. All characters seem to have a complete understanding of each other and dialogue is just a formality for the sake of the reader. Far too bizarre how everyone in this crazy world are reasonable, cooperative and trusting.

Kiwiwarrior1
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Its a good story but it could use some editing and the realease rate could be higher but other than that its good.

THaD1US
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I like the idea of this story it’s semi-unique and has a slight subtle crossovers of different apocalypse novels

Nomad1791
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Wait until an editor takes a crack at it.

Man I made it to chapter 11 someone pm me if it gets a re-write. The story is ok love the authors pictures for the powers that's a nice touch the Grammer is so bad I can't read any further. It wasn't too bad until a new character was introduced that just curses for no reason than to curse. Now why would that be my tipping point? Broken English cursing done wrong is just a pain to read. To sum up. Story not bad. Characters ok except for one. World building is good. Pacing was ok. Just needs a editor badly.