Son of the Spirit Beast

by nagatosaitou

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Romance High Fantasy Male Lead Martial Arts Mythos Supernatural War and Military Xianxia
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Traumatising content

In a world where the strongest beings are represented by cultivators, Hei is born under special circumstances and is raised by a spirit beast spider.

With the body of a human but the mind of a spirit beast, Hei will try to make his way in this conflict-filled world following his convictions and trying to protect those he loves.

 

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littlevikingdk
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Giant scary spider is a bit stilted

Interesting setup. And world. 

The premise seems good.

But both the dialog and descriptions are quite stilted. It's problem is not grammatical but the directness of it. I found myself being pulled out of the experiance multiple times by a. And this said that for she loved him and he was sad but knew it was for his own good.

Its switching between multiple characters. But does not delve into any. 

 

3,5 star

Give It a go. I cannot say you will love it, but I doubt you will hate it

Danyel N
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Great premise but not so good execution

The premise and the title and the introduction was very intresting but the content in my opinion is verii silly i mean it is a good novel for kids but seriously  a beast that lived for a long time that hat to fight for every bit she got and one that killed those thieves so simple without any remorse  i thought it would be more intresting but what i get its a story for kids or at kest thats the inpresion i got

IF THE AUTHIR IS A TEENAGER LIKE 14 16 THAN YES THIS IS A GOOD FITST STORY 

SevenShade
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Same level of " Coiling Dragon " by i eat tomato.

If u ever read Coiling Dragon then u knew how good that novel is... This gem is at the same level of that novel... thats all i can say for thos who really like "good" novel....all in all my rating (5star) is enough to describe this wonderfull art... and congrautalion to the auhtor and be carefull of Qidian International ...