Survival 2.0

by Arroww

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Sci-fi Cyberpunk Female Lead Grimdark LitRPG Post Apocalyptic
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

A young woman lost in a strange forest, separated from all that she knows, struggle to survive in a world now changed.

Welcome to The System.

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Hello people! Just to inform you that English is not my native language and as this is my first attempt at writing, the beginning will probably be a bit rough (meaning bad, like really bad). Please don't shy from criticisms and feel free to correct any mistakes that you'll see. I also plan to rewrite most of the beginning chapters as I get better. Thank you!

PS: The cover image is not mine.

PS2: The System in this novel is inspired by LORG.

PS3: The current reviews were posted when the story was still a draft. I corrected a lot of things and (I hope) increased the quality of the story since then. (It's not 100% edited though, there is still much to improve.)

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Aspartame
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Not sure, but it feels like I'm reading about a victim of a Ship of Theseus style brain parasite. That's how it reads anyways. Even with saftey and food, she needlessly hunts. The MC doesn't seem to care about the massive changes going on with her mentality. My care factor for the mc goes from Meh to Nil as the story progresses. The primary problem with the base concept is the lack of proper build up. You are telling me changes are happening, but not what they are, or what they are replacing, nor a proper template to start subtracting from. It kinda undermines the existential horror if you turn an undefined cookie cutter Mary Sue into an undefined Beofulf's Grendle. I get the concept you seem to be aiming for, I just don't care about the result. And your chapters are short.

Tielong
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I was definitely interested.  The English is good with minimal tense and word choice issues.

The Stat Screen looks like it is from Randidly Ghosthound.  I look forward to reading more.

It's too hard to tell what is going on and I can't relate to the Main Character because they seem to have no control of or reaction to what is going on.  I also have a personal dislike for POV changes, especialy if they don't add to the story.

gavinjon
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I’m getting both Randidly Ghosthound and H.P. Lovecraft vibes, but I like it thus far.  It doesn’t completely match my personal taste, so I won’t give it 5 stars, but it’s still really good and I recommend giving it a try!

Silv
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Its the new world mixed with randidly ghosthound. I am not a fan of the new world and i will be dropping at this point. Grammar and style: pretty good. Character: i dont know it just seems kinda forced that she doesnt notice anything at all with 

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