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I am in the process of rewriting the entire thing, under the title Apex Code (REWRITE)

I'll post the link here when the first chapter of the rewrite is done.

Have a great day.

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Zimzimbadabim
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Where to start. . . This is rough. Enter with caution. This is one of those stereotypic wish-fulfillment power/sex fantasy stories. You know the ones. All characters are one dimensional and fit the stereotypes almost exactly. It's like the author actually studied how to make a Gary Stu self-insert and followed the template exactly. It's kinky in all the ways one might expect from someone that regularly watches vanilla hentai. From chapter one I don't expect any  tentacles or shemales, but that has the potentail to change if the author gets bored with the typical harem orgy style. 

This is most likely a first work. 

If this seems like what you might enjoy, go for it. If not, search elsewhere.

Arte
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Pretty decent so far

I'm sort of hesitant to say too much since the plot of the story is still in the "barely started" stage, but I'm liking the concept so far. The protagonist and his group seem to be in the OP category, but we really haven't seen them go against anyone other than some magical rapist-thugs (in which we see why saving in a videogame is stupid powerful) and a spoiled young master type who is promptly shut down. There's very little scale to go off of other than how the protagonist compares to his harem members and the few other people who have shown up recently in the story (almost all of which want nothing to do with getting on the protagonist's bad side.)

I have no idea if future antagonists are going to be an actual challenge or just speedbumps in the way of the protagonist's happiness, but the grammar is pretty solid and unless something drastically changes the setting has potential. 

Vitanima
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The cringe is real.

I dont have a problem with wish-fullfillent novels, Nor harem novels; but the absolute cringe oozing out of every sentence makes it hard for me to read this.

Im only 3 chapters in and he's told every girl he's met that he wants to make a harem but act gentlemanly about it. (*tips hat m'lady*) Its also gone over multiple, multiple times how he likes anime, manga, and computers. Also everyone he's met in the 3 chapters I've read are like computer geniuses or something.

It sucks because I really want to like this novel, but the dialogue in this is so bad and cringey its like the author doesnt know how to talk to people at all. I cant go one sentence without physically cringing up at how awkward the story and dialogue is.

If the author ever decides to write another novel on here, I'd be willing to check it out as it seems he's good at grammar and making an average plot premise, but I just hope at that time he'd be better with dialoge and not making the main character so.... cringe?