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In this world, everyone is cursed with a single fate: Become the most powerful. But those who do become powerful, they hate it. Power is misery and death is the solace.
Nazar, a weapon of mass destruction created by the ancient God of Destruction revolted against his creator a long time ago. While he did defeat his creator, the power he was given is still within him. He is cursed with infinite power, standing at the top of the celestial hierarchy. He has more power and wealth than he needs. But even then, he craves one thing; death.
He wants to die.
Power is misery and death is the solace, but he cannot achieve his only goal. He cannot die.
Perhaps that will change when one day, an ancient cosmic Goddess rises from her grave? Perhaps she will finally kill him? Or will she fall short before his awesome yet terrible power? Only time will tell.
This is a high cosmic story about the hypocritical life of the protagonist and how it affects everyone (and everything) around him.
Naturally, it features very overpowered characters with a lot of high stakes battles roaming across the cosmos.
Warning: Swearing, some suggestive sexual gestures/words, gore.
Feedback is highly welcomed.
(The story was originally named, God's Return, but I wanted to change it.)
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I tried to give this novel a legitimate try, I really did.
I tried looking past the horrid sentence structure, and i tried to look past the 'i am writing a statement' style that was going on, but i couldn't. Grammar makes it even worse, with the incorrect use of pronouns (all of them) kinda everywhere.
"And as he did that, a barrier started to fall down."
We are not talking about A barrier, we are talking about The barrier. you know, the one in the previous few paragraphs.
you think this is nitpicky? it's not. This is one of many examples.
I wanted to give this 2.5 stars, but I would have felt bad so I decided to give it 3.
Author, if you are reading this, please come back to your earlier chapters and clean them up. I'd imagine you've grown as a writer and your first few chapters could really do with that 'more experienced writer' touch.
Style of Writing: Horrid. like i said in the general review, it's basically all statements. In addition to that, there seems to be a needless use of repetition and reminding; we get that there is a sword that can be summoned at will. we don't need to be told for the fourth time.
"Baros took out his sword. It manifested in his hand from nowhere."
"In his right hand, there was a sword. It was not there earlier. The sword resembled a long Excalibur sword. The pommel of the sword resembled a diamond. The grip was made of blue colour. The guard was of yellow colour. And the rest of the blade was of silver colour. However, since it was glowing with bright white light, the colours could not really be seen properly unless you look at it very carefully."
"His sword can vanish and reappear at his will."
Story: no real idea. Each chapter is quite long (first one is just under 3K words. Not really a redeeming feature if half of it is filler), so i only managed to get through half of the second one before i stopped. i can't really give a score here so i'll give it an above neutral 3.5. I suspect this is accurate though, considering the quality of the rest of the novel.
Grammer: i would rate this lower, considering all the other errors with sentence structure and the misuse of pronouns, but grammar is actually pretty good. this has obviously been put through a spell checker, making it readable. not enjoyable to read mind you, but readable.
Character: As i've only gotten about half way through the second chapter, i can't give a proper review for characters. there was also the fact that there was literally no immersion or the feeling like i was actually there, considering the disjointedness of each sentence.
Knowing all that however, it's safe to say that characters are not very believable. A guy literally rips though your castle unscathed and you go and attack him? Are you kidding me?? what about the king who postures and talks back to the man who he knows full well can obliterate his world… I don't know bud. That just sounds like darwinism.
I'm not against powerful main characters and I do enjoy a good 'young master' face slap every now and again, but you've got to suspect the intelligence of the characters in this novel.
Final Score: go read something else.
unless the first few chapters are remade. If they are, then give this novel a go.
I read more of this story than I wanted to. With most of these stories, it's terrible at the start. The characters feel stiff and fake, the grammar in desperate need of resurection, and the style falling so damn flat. But... a few stories actually improve drastically after a while, and I wanted to see if this one did as well.
It did not. It remained to be just as bad as it started as. I just cant with this one. 3/5 from me.
Alas, I have to agree with the other reviews posted here. Perhaps the writer is a non-English speaker, but sentence structure isn't the only issue. The abundance of 1-sentence paragraphs makes the story feel disjointed and breathless. Beyond that, the characters feel flat.
Still, this might be your thing, give it a shot!