A Void Spirit's Slightly Psychotic Tale

by Dragorule

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Horror Anti-Hero Lead GameLit Grimdark High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Mythos Non-Human lead
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Being a kid is hard. Being the equivalent as a spirit is even harder. 

What will our protagonist do when it learns that life isn't all fun and games? Come along as a new spirit sees the world and grows, from dumber than a doorknob to quite the intellectual. With the occasional stumble here and there. (*No it is not a reincarnator*)



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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue - Hello World ago
Chapter 1 - Tutorial, Start! ago
Chapter 2 - The Good, the Bad, and the Goodbad ago
Chapter 3 - WORDS! ago
Chapter 4 - New Words! ago
Chapter 5 - Battle of the Bones ago
Chapter 6 - Wisp! ago
Chapter 7 - Waves are bad... ago
Chapter 8 - Alone Again ago
Chapter 9 - Food and bugs ago
Chapter 10 - Insults! ago
Chapter 11 - Shattered... ago
Chapter 12 - New Demons! ago
Chapter 13 - In the dirt! ago
Chapter 14 - Many Wolves. Many. ago
Chapter 15 - What to evolve... ago
Chapter 16 ago
Chapter 17 ago
Chapter 18 ago
Chapter 19 ago
Chapter 20 ago
Chapter 21 ago
Chapter 22 ago
Chapter 23 ago
Chapter 24 ago
Chapter 25 ago
Chapter 26 ago
Chapter 27 ago
Chapter 28 ago
Chapter 29 ago
Chapter 30 ago
Chapter 31 ago
Chapter 32 ago
Chapter 33 ago
Chapter 34 ago
Chapter 35 ago
Chapter 36 ago
Chapter 37 ago
Chapter 38 ago
Chapter 39 ago
Chapter 40 ago
Chapter 41 ago
Side Chapter: Just another day ago
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Chapter 51 - The Joys of Learning ago
Chapter 52 - I, am I ago
Chapter 53 - My First Day Off ago
Chapter 54 - That's Depressing. Fun! ago
Chapter 55 - Conscription? What's that? ago

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i followed this at about chapter three but your synopsis is a good bit misleading i would probably change it.

Jack Blank

Granting I frequently had to skim over large parts because the grammar hurt me physically to endure, but it largely made sense and was fun to read, mostly.

Not too much story but the characters are lively and the perspective is definitely unique, so I request moar.


What was at first a cutesy gimmick got old fast. Just because you have an in-world explanation for why the writing is crap, doesn't change the fact that your readers are reading chapter after chapter of inane, barely coherent inner monologue. Take the intentionally broken language away, and you're left with an uninspired monster evolution story. No interesting side characters, no real dramatic tension to drive the plot, no interesting world building, nothing. I have better things to do with my time. 


Insane and Pawproved! ( ◐w◐ )

Reviewed at: 49

The mighty... Well, actually puny little fluffy trash panda in a wastebasket...

Says this novel is good. 

Although the author is insane? or is he not?

Well, I will not spoil the fun.  I will only say it's a very interesting spirit?

Thanks fellow trash eater. 


Ok so finally I myself did an advanced review of this. 

For your summary and ez to understand what this novel is about, I will spoil it. 

Slow pacing story about 'it' a void spirit that slowly builds up its mind to understand what to do... And what to not...

As of chapter 49 the spirit is still starting to 'comprehend' and 'learn'. If you don't arrive to this chapter the story might be a turn down for you. So please try to advance till there. In these chapters I can tell it's extremely interesting and I can't wait for what the spirit becomes or hates. I think if the aithor pulls some dark comedy followed by a cool learning arc it can become one of my true favorites. 


Style: not the best since our spirits name is it at the start. It is confusing. It is it. And it doesn't tell you when it talks or thinks. So this it is hard to follow. 

Grammar: bacause our little psychotic spirit is dumb... Like it. Then grammar will have trouble with it. Its on purpose by the author. It seems... Correct me if not but It seems... So don't ticker too much. 

Plot: what could go wrong with a spirit with learning... The pace... It is tragically and insanely slow. But I like slow pace so I don't mind. I hope you do too, if not read it faster. After chapter 30 aprox it becomes more it. 

Character: you want it... It knows it. And it will trigger your 'it' word till you follow like a psycothic void spirit doing dubstep over a polar bear. (Actually no...) Just a styx and some s-tun grenade that always follow it. In the last chapters we get an orange... Hope it turns better than I think...

Conclusion: you need it in your life. But it is dumb and slow. It is it. You will hate this review and the word it? Maybe... But it is funny. 

I give only 5s or nothing. I am an all in raccoon. No slicing my pizza. 



The plot is possibly OK, definitely nothing exciting or unusual.

BUT! the fact that the grammar and vocabulary is mangled to the level of the stupid viod spirit makes it unreadable.

There should be a sentient narrator and mostly normal english except maybe occasionally.



*stares silently*



*stares silently*

*finishes review*

*clicks continue reading*

Ch 29 

I felt like my brain was rotting reading this 

10/10 will rot my brain later after I recover