A Void Spirit's Slightly Psychotic Tale

by Dragorule

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Horror Anti-Hero Lead GameLit Grimdark High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Mythos Non-Human lead
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What do you do when you're a newborn spirit in hell? You live. Live, and learn. That is all there is to the life of a spirit, or most life really. To live, allowing you to learn, and to learn, helping you live. What will our protagonist do when he learns that life isn't all fun and games? Come along as a new spirit sees the world and grows to become...well, anything it wants. (*No it is not a reincarnator*)

DISCLAIMER: As a running inside joke (no, you will not be included unless you say so) with some of my readers, I say *Stares silently* in place of thanks for reading. Just so that's clear. 

3 chapters per week guaranteed. Sometimes more. 

 

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Cranium9
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i followed this at about chapter three but your synopsis is a good bit misleading i would probably change it.

azi
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What was at first a cutesy gimmick got old fast. Just because you have an in-world explanation for why the writing is crap, doesn't change the fact that your readers are reading chapter after chapter of inane, barely coherent inner monologue. Take the intentionally broken language away, and you're left with an uninspired monster evolution story. No interesting side characters, no real dramatic tension to drive the plot, no interesting world building, nothing. I have better things to do with my time. 

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Insane and Pawproved! ( ◐w◐ )

The mighty... Well, actually puny little fluffy trash panda in a wastebasket...

Says this novel is good. 

Although the author is insane? or is he not?

Well, I will not spoil the fun.  I will only say it's a very interesting spirit?

Thanks fellow trash eater. 

 

Ok so finally I myself did an advanced review of this. 

For your summary and ez to understand what this novel is about, I will spoil it. 

Slow pacing story about 'it' a void spirit that slowly builds up its mind to understand what to do... And what to not...

As of chapter 49 the spirit is still starting to 'comprehend' and 'learn'. If you don't arrive to this chapter the story might be a turn down for you. So please try to advance till there. In these chapters I can tell it's extremely interesting and I can't wait for what the spirit becomes or hates. I think if the aithor pulls some dark comedy followed by a cool learning arc it can become one of my true favorites. 

 

Style: not the best since our spirits name is it at the start. It is confusing. It is it. And it doesn't tell you when it talks or thinks. So this it is hard to follow. 

Grammar: bacause our little psychotic spirit is dumb... Like it. Then grammar will have trouble with it. Its on purpose by the author. It seems... Correct me if not but It seems... So don't ticker too much. 

Plot: what could go wrong with a spirit with learning... The pace... It is tragically and insanely slow. But I like slow pace so I don't mind. I hope you do too, if not read it faster. After chapter 30 aprox it becomes more it. 

Character: you want it... It knows it. And it will trigger your 'it' word till you follow like a psycothic void spirit doing dubstep over a polar bear. (Actually no...) Just a styx and some s-tun grenade that always follow it. In the last chapters we get an orange... Hope it turns better than I think...

Conclusion: you need it in your life. But it is dumb and slow. It is it. You will hate this review and the word it? Maybe... But it is funny. 

I give only 5s or nothing. I am an all in raccoon. No slicing my pizza. 

 

Stephen Lewis
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 Ch18 

*stares silently*

*judges*

*Nods*

*stares silently*

*finishes review*

*clicks continue reading*

Ch 29 

I felt like my brain was rotting reading this 

10/10 will rot my brain later after I recover

antikangaroo
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The plot is possibly OK, definitely nothing exciting or unusual.

BUT! the fact that the grammar and vocabulary is mangled to the level of the stupid viod spirit makes it unreadable.

There should be a sentient narrator and mostly normal english except maybe occasionally.