Quantum Beginnings (Entangled Fates Book 1)

by Joe Kuster

Original ONGOING Sci-fi Anti-Hero Lead Cyberpunk Harem Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

In the near future, a tech-giant begins taking the first true steps of melding the human body to technology. There are those who wish to profit, those who wish to eradicate it, and Alex, the unwitting first human trial for the technology designed to fix his damaged brain.

When Alex awakes from a traumatic accident, he finds himself permanently bonded to a rogue AI due to a twist of fate. He also finds that he’s become little more than a R&D project for a tech billionaire who will do anything to ensure he gets a return on investment. Under threat of being remotely shut down if he doesn’t play along, Alex soon finds himself thrust onto the global stage and at odds against a dangerous anti-augmentation political movement. Enlisting the help of his nurse, an AI that seems to have plans of her own, and a team of mercenaries, Alex begins his play for freedom. From becoming a public shill for a tech corp, to making underground deals to protect his friends, Quantum Beginnings is a ride through the near future of cybernetic enhancements and self-aware AI.

This book contains an anti-hero protagonist, attempted murder, corporate espionage, actual murder, unconventional relationships, hacking, digital drug use, arson, falsification of government records, money laundering, breaking and entering, misuse of epoxy, sexual content that doesn’t fade to black, and a self-aware artificial intelligence with questionable moral leanings.

For mature audiences. Ages 18+

 

Quick note from the Author:

Welcome! Books 1-2 are complete and in editing. What you are reading is the unedited version. I wanted to get it out there for feedback.

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rushedman
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Jk, but really though. Great grammer and little mistakes (just me nitpicking). Story comprehensive and believable. An actual protagonist that does not have a black and while moral compass or one that has a "gray" one but is more like and black with white specks. I can't wait until the next chapter and want to see where this goes.

uiytt
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The story is very good, its original and interesting ! there is always something to make the story evolve. The character is chaotic neutral so always good to read and the other characters are funny and yet reliable. I can't really think of anything bad in this fiction.

i just enjoyed it 

desmerit
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One small step for cyber-kind...

Review as of chapter 17,  June 16th 2019.

Story summary:

This story takes place just prior to when the cybernetic revolution would take place in a near future world. The main protaganist, Alex, uses whatever resources he can in order to escape from under the thumb of a ruthless corporation while keeping those he comes to love safe.

Style/Grammar 5/5:

The story is told from a mix of first person interaction and third person narrative that blend seamlessly to tell a fastastic story. The main focus surrounds the protaganist with very limited side snippets from other characters to either add clarity to a situation or as worldbuilding. With very limited amounts of grammatical errors (there were a few occasion of wrong word usage or incorrect pronouns) and a good overall flow, the story moves at good pace while not feeling rushed or getting to caught in the minutia.  For those interested, there are some of the more explict scenes (most having been extracted to a, as yet, pending side novel) in the story, however they can be skimmed through without loss of content or character building.

Story 3.5/5:

The story flows well and has a pretty decent balance between descriptive phrases creating a dynamic picture of the scene and action to keep the plot rolling forward. The biggest issue that seems to come up is the 'suspension of disbelief', that is, some of the 'lucky' things that just happen to go the main characters way or how some resources are obtained. For some, these are minor things that are easily overlooked, where as some come from (probably) pulling chapters of explicit content that would potentially develop characters (and their interactions) more.

Characters 3/5:

The main character and the two immediate side characters (Sophie/Audry) are fairly well developed, with their own motivations and desires depicted. There is a little bit of depth lacking in part due to the low amount of content (relative) compared to stories who've had a lot longer to add more details. Some of the characters, at this point, are little more than paper cutouts with a backstory to fill out roles and numbers. Right now this is not actually an issue, but it can be a bad habit for many authors where they go, "oh, I need a guide to set them on X quest, lets just conjure up some wise man or oracle". I give the author credit here as, with the backstory at least partly in place, the characters have their own desires/plot and can be expanded upon later without having paradoxal issues (also opens up the possiblity or side storys/prequel histories). Every interaction with each character adds more to their story and personality. Given time I think the depth issue will fix itself.

The author does a very good job of drawing the 'battle lines' between all of the relavent factions so that the reader never has to question who was with what group. With politics and morality being critical factors, it sometimes can blur the lines and I find it refreshing not having to keep notes to keep track.

Summary:

A well written story with a rich world to build into, the only drawback is the depth of the characters that will (without a doubt) be remedied with time. Would reccomend to anyone who doesn't outright hate technology of any kind.

 

ArahVhel
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Instant buy once it's published.

Well, I gotta say these chapter stroked an itch. 

Good AI growth phase narration. 

Healthy (and sporty) relationships! 

Not a total psychopath of an MC. 

 

If anything. I want the same author to write stuff in the same universe a few decades later in universe. To stroke my cyberpunk itch further

Also it's pretty rare to get into "early cyborgs" in books. Or at least I didn't see it. 

TheGamerNonsense
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The story is very good, some small things you can be nitpicky on but not much.

TheZouave
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Good premise, Great execution

I really like the story thus far. The premise is great and the writing style is suberb. The story feels well-mixed, but could stand to be drawn out a bit more. Everything was moving on a VERY tight timetable, and maybe there's a plot reason for that, but also keep in mind that not every chapter has to advance the plot. There is also merit in exploring where the characters are between plot points, or what is commonly called 'fluff'. Lots of stories published have fluff in them. A good example:

Spoiler: Spoiler

 Also, an editor is never a bad choice, especially for a story that you'll be revising. I noticed a few things that were off grammatically. A missing word here, a wrong your/you're there, stuff like that. It will only get worse with revision. An editor also helps with things like character consistency and another perspective on how the story is written.

You may want to consider a NSFW tag if there is such a thing.

tl;dr Space it out with some fluff and character interaction plz. Also editors are nice.

Ruin51
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Can’t wait for updates

I don’t really know what to put down for style, but the story is pretty danm good, the grammar is publish worthy,(and as of this time I’m pretty sure that is before it’s seen an editor) and I personally found the characters pretty likeable.

G4merSylver
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Excellent work, ends as cliffhanger

I considered to strike off a couple stars for the reason named above, but that'd just be petty. Figures I'd rather point it out, if you wish to finish reading this story you (quite likely) will have to buy the published copy of it. It ends on a really fucking nasty cliff hanger.

Anyway, that is my only issue here. Alright, let's talk about the work within itself - from the get go, even the unedited/reviewed work is of professional level.

For one, the style and grammar are both excellent. You could simplify contents a little to ease up reading, but by no means you should be worried about the writing not being up to standard.

Story wise, I enjoyed it. It is intriguing in its own manner and unwinding into an enjoyable piece of work. You won't be disappointed by the story itself. But I suggest a different synopsis, I was somewhat put off by the story because the synopsis itself wasn't particularly exciting.

Character wise, you did well. Really well, the individual figures are well defined. They didn't come off shallow. Maybe introduce the mercs slower though. One by one rather then all at once.