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Zac was alone in the middle of the forest when the world changed.
The whole planet was introduced to the multiverse by an unfeeling System... or God. A universe where an endless number of races and civilizations fought for power and dominion. Zac finds himself stuck in the wilderness surrounded by deadly beasts, demons, and worse. Alone, lost and without answers, he must find the means to survive and get stronger in this new cut-throat reality.
With only a hatchet for his weapon, he'll have to seek out his family before the world collapses... or die trying.
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Overall it's decent for what it is, a cultivation story with a system. But it could use some work and a good polish. But i don’t think that will happen, the author reminds me of Chinese Wuxia authors. He is making a very long story with many plots and paths it can take, while keeping the tension high to keep people reading.
I honestly won’t go into detail because other people have already pointed out everything I would put down.
If you like a decent story about a body cultivator who has to suffer to get stronger, this story is for you. Otherwise, maybe pass it up.
Ill start this off by saying i'm still reading along due to enjoying the overall plot, but that is about all i enjoy in this story. Hopefully it continues to improve.
Pros - I would say the synopsis does a great job at telling you what this story is about. Overall the plot and the world building introduced is fairly good. Races and civilizations across the universe are brought in the story and fleshed out to a small degree showing what the MC now has to deal with.
Man there are so many that are hard to get past. Repetitive story telling for one. MC goes to fight > thinks about his powerups/new levels and stats he just gained > more internal dialogue about loot gained. Rinse and repeat, and maybe every few times he will have a 1 sentence dialogue with a random side character that goes nowhere. Then will continue with... And then Zac and "character" discussed a few more things and he went off to go prepare to fight
Dialogue and character growth is non existent in this story. He has a somewhat of a core group of people he relies on which are his generals that you know by name, but never have a discussion with, and then there are the "Elites" that support him time and again that he doesn't give the time of day. A new side character might be introduced and given an interlude, and then either die off, or are never brought up again.
Motivations / Loot / Town Building - This ties into the previous point a bit that there is almost no discussion on what he's doing or why he's doing it other than to save his family. Eventually he gets a few people he can rely on but he doesnt try and empower or assist them in any way, always looking to do everything himself. Loot? He has an endless supply of it that you pretty much never see being bought or sold or giving to his town or elites. Meat? Endless supply of mountains of meat that you never see him make or buy. The Town? Again, you see the surface level of one or two buildings in his town, but never more than a sentence or two of discussion about it.
Chapters - The chapters are a bit short in volume and in actual story info. A large part of each chapter is essentially filler (MC ponders on this or that before doing anything of substance) and a small amount of action, and then ends abruptly so he can finish that plot point a few chapters down the road
The story really hasn't progressed far enough to rate the characters but from what I've seen it seems like they're gonna be somewhat better than in the average rrl story.
Other than that, the story is a pretty basic New World/Ghosthound style deal. Everyone gets a system and is teleported to a tutorial while the earth gets fucked up by monster hordes and stuff. Everyone except for the protagonist of course, he doesn't get a tutorial (lol).
Other than that I am fairly impressed by how the story is relatively gritty (and sometimes defies logic, like how the guy used the same hatchet for over a month swinging it with superhuman strength against monsters that are definitely tougher than your average tree, considering they can break them apart by running into them... without breaking the hatchet) the protagonist is powerful, but at least so far he is not overpowered (he has the promise of becoming overpowered later tho if he plays his cards right). He has to survive by the skin of his teeth, he'd die on a daily basis if he didn't have the system giving him a 'sleep and your fatal injuries will be healed' trope. The author basically hands the protagonist everything he needs on a silver platter like in most stories like these, what he has not done however is give him anything more than what he needs, he's given him exactly the bare minimum and nothing more and I like that. It's pretty decently written too so you can feel the protagonists struggle as he suffers for not getting to do the tutorial like everyone else.
Unlike him however, we do get a tutorial, we get all the basic RPG stats eplained to us as if everybody doesn't already know it and the story is chock full of wordy explanations about the most mundane things. This was my gripe with the story, the pacing feels like it's snailing along because sometimes entire chapters are devoted to just seemingly meaningless exposition. Hell the last chapter I read (37) was one such chapter (edit: and 38 was the same. And 39.). Literally nothing happens in the entire chapter.
This kind of stuff is a huge pet peeve of mine, when authors do too much exposition, spend too much time on explaining or detailing things that don't really warrant that much text.
Good writing is a balancing act between colorful wording and effective pacing, this author leans a bit too heavily on the former for my tastes. The only reason the story even progressed anywhere for the past 30 chapters is because the author at some point went 'fuck it' and did a month's time skip. (Thankfully, or we would have had chapter upon chapter of the protagonist doing the exact same thing)
Like others have said I share the opinion that this story has potential, it's too early to tell if it's worse or better than the works it seems inspired by, but I'm worried it will never be finished with this focus on overly detailed explanations.
I would advise the author to show more, and tell less. Not everything needs to be explained in full detail, let the readers imagination work out most of the things and focus on what's important to the main plot progression instead. If you look at some great artists (like say wlop for an excellent example) if you look closely at their artwork you will find that sometimes up to 80% or so of their pictures may end up being just blobs, anything that isn't the main focus/character of the picture is only vaguely defined. And it works, your brain will fill in these details when you look at the picture as a whole, but zoom in on it and all you'll see are blobs.
With the decreasing attention spans of humanity as a whole in our current society, it's vital for writers to adopt a similar strategy in their writing to keep the attention of readers.
Update: Now I'm at chapter 278.
Characters are, in line with my original impression, decent. They're better than in most stories in that they have actual personalities of their own, even if it's mostly template personalities, at least they're not full blown template characters. I should warn you though that if you're into good characters, you probably won't like this story because 90% of it is just focused on the protagonist. Other characters get defined personalities, but they don't get much further fleshed out than that, you won't be finding many tragic backstories or any character development in this story. There's a few interesting characters spread around in the novel, and you might actually be able to feel invested in some characters (hopefully at least the protagonist), but I doubt you'll be singing the author praises for good characters. Suffice it to say that he makes characters that work for the story, rather than a story that works for the characters. The story is centered around the protagonist mostly, other characters are in the end mostly just extras, so far most of the story is still the protagonist going solo, not that I dislike that at all, but it is what it is.
What I do dislike however is that unlike my original impression of the story being similar to new world and randidly ghosthound is that this is actually a xianxia story, I can see the tag is there now but I don't think it was when I started reading; what I do like however is that it's much better organized than any xianxia I've ever seen, namely that the power scaling of everyone is rather properly defined here thanks to the litrpg system, e.g. we pretty much know at all times where the protagonist stands on the global scale of power. Maybe not how powerful he is compared to others on the same scale, but just which scale he's on (i.e. the ratings of A, B, C, D, E and F essentially, and of course the levels). Everyone can be a bit of a wild card since their final power output depends heavily on their class and equipment and their 'daos' (a thing I really dislike in this story, the 'daos' create an undefined power scaling system within a decently defined one, tsk tsk.), but it's usually a fairly safe bet that a rank D warrior will not be able to defeat a rank C one with exceptions (exceptions like plot shields and overpowered daos!)
On that note, now that the story has progressed a bit, the protagonist is now overpowered, but only overpowered within his power scaling category (I don't remember what it was but I mean it's pretty down there like E or something) if you want specific, here's a lil spoiler:
Basically, on Earth, he's the most powerful human, but there are humans who borrow from outside powers which pose a colossal threat to him, and there are also a sizable bunch of non-humans that are more powerful than him. On the intergalactic scale of power he more or less fits in right where you'd think his rank of E (actually, 376 chapters in and he is still stuck at F rank
So is he overpowered? Yes, but also no. The major reason why he can (logically speaking anyway, not sure if the author did this deliberately) still survive on earth is via security through obscurity; in other words it's because he has avoided publicizing the location of his home area, because if some parties knew where he is he'd get hunted down pretty fast. This would be an interesting plot point if it happens, but probably frustrating to readers since it'd bring to ruin everything he's built since the beginning of the story, so it's probably not gonna happen.
As another review said, this story suffers a bit from lack of planning, but I somehow always end up coming back to it, I first dropped it at ch 36 or so, but then came back to it a good long while later when it had 100+ chapters. Then I had enough of this stupidity but eventually came back when it had 200+ chapters, now I'm coming back to it again when it has 300+ chapters.
The faults of the story being as they may, I have to give the author credit where credit is due. I have never on this site seen another author that's as consistent in his publishing rates as this one. I've seen it on other sites mind you, the chinese mass produced trash wuxia/xianxia novels in particular over on sites like webnovel.com do have this, it's just that they're always trash with absolutely no pacing, this story is similar I suppose (xianxia right?), but orders of magnitude better, has actual pacing (even if slow) and the plot is actively developing (even if slowly). So kudos for that!
I stand by my original ratings for the story, although I always end up dropping it at some point because of either pacing issues at some stretch of chapters, or some stupid things going on, I always come back to it fresh and mildly excited to keep reading it months later, which means there's some kind of rare quality to this story, because there aren't many stories I come back to after dropping 'em, and yet for this one it's happened 3 times.
(Update, now at ch 376; pacing issues have gotten worse, not enough happened in the last 100 chapters, dropped style score by half star for how ridiculously reduced the pacing has now become, but as I said earlier, the bad pacing is largely mitigated by the consistently fast chapter release rate, so the real major downside to this really is the amount of filler text, or like I said in the original review, this author should really show more and tell less, rather than listening to my advice however, he seems to have gone the opposite direction, telling more and showing less, sometimes having entire exposition dump chapters just to explain things that were already thoroughly explained in earlier exposition dumps (chapter 375 for instance))
So you know what? Go ahead and read it, it's no masterpiece, you will probably enjoy some of it and get frustrated at some of it, but it is at least so far somewhat worth your time, especially if you can't find anything else good to read. It has a few decent plot twists, and passably good worldbuilding too, I doubt you'll be head over heels for the story but I also doubt you'll hate it, unless you're super picky.
This has a pretty good story, so good that I read 500 chapters before I stopped reading despite the few issues that this has.
The most prevalent issue I've noticed is some words being repeated for seemingly no reason (a word is said a few words before where it would make sense to say it, then repeated in the correct location)
A lot of things aren't properly explained, to the point that I didn't realise that a constitution was an actual cultivation term until a few hundred chapters in. A lot of aspect of the system are left unexplained entirely and some things are changed to fit the story at the time, which makes it harder to know what's going on at times.
For some reason, characters are constantly spitting out blood, which makes no sense. That implies that they've been pierced in their lung and it's started to fill with blood but most of the time they're just straining themselves or being crushed which are unlikely to lead to them coughing blood. I can understand why you'd think that this makes sense, since it's used often in a lot of media, but this just throws me off and makes it harder to enjoy the fight scenes.
Other than these things there's not really any issues I can think of right now, so I would say that this is not bad if you're able to get past these things.
EDIT: A kind reader has pointed out that some of my nitpicks and issues I had with the story have been fixed. When I wrote this review, the story was around chapter 35. With over 100 chapters now the story is different then when I reviewed in the beginning. I'll give the story another read in the future and I'll update my review to accurately reflect how I feel about the story then.
The story had a good start despite it being somewhat of a cliche. Apocolptic-litrpg where the MC is off on his own trying to survive in this new dark and gritty world. The author blended a few elements of eastern fantasy books with western litrpg and it came out pretty well. I did enjoy the story a lot, which is why I'm more disappointed as I got my hopes up. The story started to take a dive in quality when the MC made poor judgements and out of character decisions and the author started to handwave details too big to ignore. The problems I had with the story are pretty spoilery, so I wouldn't recommend clicking it if you're a new reader.
First off, of course has to be the class choice. I went more in detail about it in my review on chapter 24 if you'd like my complete thoughts on it, but to summarize it, it was an out of character decision and seemed like a forced choice from the author. I acknowledge the callback the class made to the prolouge where he's out looking for firewood, but I didn't realize the theme of the entire story will now be about a glorified lumberjack. I can also appreciate the author wanting to break the mold of both western and eastern fantasy books of being a cookie-cutter sword user, but it's jarring compared to the grim-dark theme. The other rare class that was available was the clear cut, no brainer choice to pick.
In Chapter 27, "He threw the arrow away and pulled out one of his smaller knives from its sheath. Zac wasted no time and threw it straight at the archer, and it flew with at least the same velocity as the arrow that had hit him." First of all, where the hell did he get a knife from? And what kind of knife, a damn kitchen knife?! Second of all, when the hell did he learn to throw knives? Is this the same gamer nerd or some ninja from Naruto. Then third of all, what the hell is the point of a bow if some rando noob can throw a knife with the same force from his hand. Later on we learn that archer was one of the more talented demon youths, so not only would she have access to a great bow, but also great archer skills. L.O.L. BTW, the MC later uses a throwing knife to kill the archer in a full speed movement along the trees while he himself is moving in a run on the ground. That's beyond just dabbling in knife play, dude is the knife god.
Throughout the entire fight of chapter 27 and 28, the author wouldn't stop talking about how strong and tenacious the MC is, but when the fight is over and the MC has to go collect the gear, he's all of a sudden weak and not capable of carrying all the loot away. Yes he got injured in the fight, but that didn't seem to stop him from chasing the ranger girl or going blow for blow against a heavy sword. This gripe isn't about the loot, it's moreso how in battle the MC seems to have a 100 justifications to his strength and plot armor to give 1000%, but when it's out of battle all of a sudden he's incacable of doing anything beyond his means.
In chapter 32, we're shown many times the paranoia the MC has with anything demon related. "He threw in all the food and drink the demon had stored, and also the two bracers. He was pretty sure they were fake, but he didn’t want to keep them in the camp on the off-chance their function was tracking their location." Did the MC not realize if the bracers could have location tracking, then every single item from the demons could also? The sword, the axe he's using now, the spatial bag, the armor, the clothes? Even those "pretty" thrones that he couldn't bear to throw away. If you're gonna be paranoid about something, it doesn't make sense to be half-paranoid about it.
Chapter 32 again, "He was somewhat disappointed to see that he was unable to absorb cosmic energy from a Nexus Stones while doing other tasks. He first tried putting it in a pocket while he was cleaning a carcass, but he couldn’t sense the stone when he did. Having it in one of his hands was too unwieldy, and slowed down his progress on the meat considerably. Finally he stuffed the crystal in his mouth, hoping the contact to his body would make it possible to absorb the energy without occupying a hand."
Why not use scraps of leather, cloth, plants, or even tree bark to hold the crystal against your body? Or even wear it like a watch? Why does it specifically have to be the hands that can draw in the energy? Can he keep the crystal in his underwear or in his shoes? Heck, how bout those useless bracers that you threw away, what if you put the crystal underneath the bracers?! Can we also get an explanation why he cant hold like 4 in each hand? Or just pour the entire 100 all over his naked body while he lies on the ground, imagine how many levels he can gain.
There's a bunch of minor issues that just keep piling up and it's hard not to be nitpicky about it when they're so glaring. It's not allowed me to fully enjoy the story and after writing this review has soured my taste for this story even more. I rated this story as a 3.5/5 stars, but as I wrote this review and looked more indepth in the issues I had with it, lowered it to 3/5. I imagine many users on this site can overlook these problems and rate it 4-5 stars easily. I would recommend this story to readers very familiar with royal road, but I wouldn't recommend this to anyone who mainly reads published books.
The story has fallen to pieces. It just reads like filler garbage now. Spent an entire chapter reading about the main characters thought process on why he should go for a legendary item as if 450 chapters with the main character didn't show us the motivations. In 50 chapters maybe 5 chapters progressed the story in any meaningful way, and even that hasn't really progressed the story as much as it has moved him from A to B. At this rate I'll give it a couple more weeks but it's about time to drop the story.
The author really needs to cut back on frequency and focus on quality. I tried to stay with it but the quality has fallen too low. And I don't have a high bar.
Reviewed at chapter 508.
Great story, the author is good at world building and there is never a point in the story that is boring or where it feels the author is lost on how to move the plot forwards.
A note on the story: there's a lot of buildup to each "climax" in the story. The buildup is interesting and obviously important, yet the climax of various parts in the story feels a bit anticlimactic. All the tens of chapters buildup to end in a short fight. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, it's simply credit to the main characters effort during the buildup.
The style of the story is simply great. No actual issues except for annoying words like gains and clout and the rare jumble of a sentence.
The characters are solid and grow with their environment. They make some strange and out of place choices here and there but nothing severe.
The grammar. This is by far the largest problem in this entire story. 500 chapters in and the author is still making the same mistakes as the first 10 chapters. I understand that English might not be his first language. But even so. It feels like there's basically zero proofreading done by anyone. If the author is pressed for time it should be well with in his capabilities to ask or hire someone to proofread and edit for him. Words and even whole sections of sentences missing really hurts the story and the flow of the reading. The mistakes are elementary and can be easily fixed to push this story to at least a 4.5 star.
These continuous grammatical errors also creates the feeling that the author doesn't care in the slightest about the story he is producing.
Couldn't stop reading and finished all 501 chapters up to this point in about a week.
The balance between an overpowered and a struggeling main character is just perfect, while the main character keeps getting stronger, stronger challenges keep appearing without appearing out of nothing.
The world building is pretty good, very rarely I had the feeling it was too detailed or not detailed enough. I had the feeling the author had a good overview and the story didn't contradict itself much so far.
As for the characters, there are quite a few noteable characters. Even though I read the story in a pretty small timeframe I had problems remembering some of the minor characters names. Some only appear for a short time and re-appear after quite some time without a reintroduction, making it somewhat confusing. But in genral all important characters have a detailed backstory and are introduced nicely.
Grammar wise I can't really give an accurate feedback, as I'm not a native but it still was easy to read. Some words felt a bit repetetive as for example it felt like he was roaring every chapter, but it didn't feel like it was too much.
All in all definitly a recommendation to give this novel a try.
One of the stories that has nearly nothing special but cannot hold yourself to not to read. A classic world survival story with mediocre at everything. But hey I really like mediocre stories far more than stories that have its ups and downs. Definetily worth to read if you have nothing important to do.
What started good quickly turned into a slog.
As many have stated Character deverlopment is on the side run.
So many interesting character gets intruduced and then tossed aside.
It would have been so much more interesting to get PoV chapters from the other character.
I i dont mean just the side kicks to the main but others of the mutliverse.
A mini arc what the undead lady he meat did after they parted.
How the son from Greatest (Forgot his name) does. His current actions.
Petty peak and the dude that they went with in the tower.
There are sooo many ways to advance the timeline without focus on the main character.
Instat we get zack grinding again and again and again.
The entire Forrest Flower chapter could have been skipped.
Been skipped is a theme i see more and more ofter here.
I keep seeing myself skipping entire paragraphs or sometimes even chapters as i wonder where the dam story is.
I cant find it.
We are supposed to get all invested in the mystic realm but i cant seem to care about it.
Nore do i care about the people that die.
Why? becourse there is no character deverlopement.
There is no growth as a character.
Everyone just seem to grow in Stats and nothing else.
In short this entire story turned into a Power trip exposition.
I will keep reading it when iam bored but as it is now it cant hold itself to chicken and destiny.
I just hope the entire Mystic realm afair is over soon as it keeps draging on and on and on.
A shame for the potential is there.
Me reading all the was to chapter 213 (the current max of the chapters)
*Keeps hitting the greyed out next chapter butten*
"This cant be.... Where is the rest of it?"
During the past 4 days i Went to work, sleept and read this novel.
Its good. Really good. Not Wandering Inn good but close enoug to warrant 4 stars.
As many have said the strugle is real. People die.
Also avoiding the Cultication tropes.
"The difference is like haven and earth" -Nope not once read.
"She is defintly a kingdom topeling beauty" -Also not found. While there are multiple female site casts the MC is clear that we wouldnt go suck them all up into a harem.
"Fortunatly this happend" -While the MC is lucky, he is not OP lucky.
Many of the Wuxia Novels i read have the MC constantly be extrem lucky. Getting one super rare artifact and cultivaton bonus after another.
This is not the case here but i will say this here that the author is on a tight rope so far.
If luck where on a scale and the MC is defently getting more and more lucky.
Dont fall to the trap of Wuxian story Lucky.
The MC should get through this story with skill and only in some cases with luck.