Defiance of the Fall

Defiance of the Fall

by TheFirstDefier

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Zac was alone in the middle of the forest when the world changed.

The whole planet was introduced to the multiverse by an unfeeling System... or God. A universe where an endless number of races and civilizations fought for power and dominion. Zac finds himself stuck in the wilderness surrounded by deadly beasts, demons, and worse. Alone, lost and without answers, he must find the means to survive and get stronger in this new cut-throat reality.

With only a hatchet for his weapon, he'll have to seek out his family before the world collapses... or die trying.

 

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue - Welcome to the Multi-Verse ago
Chapter 1 - Roll For Survival ago
Chapter 2 - A New World ago
Chapter 3 - Battle Tactics ago
Chapter 4 - Alone ago
Chapter 5 - Stranded ago
Chapter 6 - Born for Carnage ago
Chapter 7 - Outpost ago
Continue reading on Kindle, Kindle Unlimited, and Audible ago
Chapter 214 - Traps and Ladders ago
Chapter 215 - Treasures ago
Chapter 216 - Appeasing the Spirit ago
Chapter 217 - Ransacking ago
Chapter 218 - Alchemist's Mountain ago
Chapter 219 - Alliance ago
Chapter 220 - Jackpot ago
Chapter 221 - Public Enemy Number One ago
Chapter 222 - Herbs and Pills ago
Chapter 223 - Darkness ago
Chapter 224 - Salvation ago
Chapter 225 - Diplomacy ago
Chapter 226 - Alliances ago
Chapter 227 - Silver Rivers ago
Chapter 228 - Descent ago
Chapter 229 - The Great Redeemer ago
Chapter 230 - Out of the Frying Pan ago
Chapter 231 - Rooting out Problems ago
Chapter 232 - Into the Fire ago
Chapter 233 - Falling ago
Chapter 234 - Square Up ago
Chapter 235 - Dao of Formations ago
Chapter 236 - Anzonil ago
Chapter 237 - Mystic Garden ago
Chapter 238 - Mystic Structure ago
Chapter 239 - Through the Tunnels ago
Chapter 240 - Evolution ago
Chapter 241 - Eternal and Unbroken ago
Chapter 242 - Chains of Fate ago
Chapter 243 - Gold and Bones ago
Chapter 244 - Immutable Bulwark ago
Chapter 245 - Indomitable ago
Chapter 246 - Core of Darkness ago
Chapter 247 - Heart of Oblivion ago
Chapter 248 - Cursed Success ago
Chapter 249 - Creation and Oblivion ago
Chapter 250 - Rewards ago
Chapter 251 - Family Drama ago
Chapter 252 - Hunter's Paradise ago
Chapter 253 - Rats and Champions ago
Chapter 254 - Beruv Ylvas ago
Chapter 255 - The E-Grade ago
Chapter 256 - Pits and Tracks ago
Chapter 257 - Billy and Alien-man ago
Chapter 258 - A Singular Goal ago
Chapter 259 - Insurrection ago
Chapter 260 - Wallbreaker ago
Chapter 261 - Catastrophic Losses ago
Chapter 262 - Spear World ago
Chapter 263 - Man's Best Friend ago
Chapter 264 - The Final Sprint ago
Chapter 265 - Ladder Rewards ago
Chapter 266 - Council ago
Chapter 267 - News ago
Chapter 268 - Rescue Mission ago
Chapter 269 - Four Gates ago
Chapter 270 - Riverleaf ago
Chapter 271 - Rockmen ago
Chapter 272 - Corpsebloom Mantra ago
Chapter 273 - Guarantee Death ago
Chapter 274 - Final Tally ago
Chapter 275 - Billions ago
Chapter 276 - Runic Shaman ago
Chapter 277 - Cultivation Cave ago
Chapter 278 - Inheritance ago
Chapter 279 - Proving One's Worth ago
Chapter 280 - Fight Fire with Fire ago
Chapter 281 - Life Versus Death ago
Chapter 282 - The Lord of Cycles ago
Chapter 283 - Mortals and Cultivators ago
Chapter 284 - Beauty and Brawn ago
Chapter 285 - Profound Yin and Everlasting Yang ago
Chapter 286 - Sneaking Inside ago
Chapter 287 - Subterfuge ago
Chapter 288 - A Flower of Fire and Ice ago
Chapter 289 - Setting a Course ago
Chapter 290 - Impartment ago
Chapter 291 - Return ago
Chapter 292 - Westfort ago
Chapter 293 - Different Choices ago
Chapter 294 - Cultivation ago
Chapter 295 - Perusing the Library ago
Chapter 296 - Division of Labor ago
Chapter 297 - Changing Course ago
Chapter 298 - Rot ago
Chapter 299 - Little Bau ago
Chapter 300 - Ready for War ago
Chapter 301 - The Ez'Mahal ago
Chapter 302 - Rage ago
Chapter 303 - Punishment ago
Chapter 304 - Plantations ago
Chapter 305 - War ago
Chapter 306 - The Tal-Eladar ago
Chapter 307 - Finality ago
Chapter 308 - Verana Tir'Emarel ago
Chapter 309 - Grub and Lulu ago
Chapter 310 - Growth ago
Chapter 311 - Peak ago
Chapter 312 - Blood for Blood ago
Chapter 313 - The Belly of the Beast ago
Chapter 314 - Sneaking Inside ago
Chapter 315 - Against the Clock ago
Chapter 316 - Deforestation ago
Chapter 317 - Explosions ago
Chapter 318 - Dao Funnel ago
Chapter 319 - Sugar Daddy ago
Chapter 320 - Karmic Ties ago
Chapter 321 - Severing Karma ago
Chapter 322 - Convergence of Fate ago
Chapter 323 - Sowing Grudges ago
Chapter 324 - Mr. Black ago
Chapter 325 - Underworld Nexus ago
Chapter 326 - Subterranean Diplomacy ago
Chapter 327 - Billionaires' Brawl ago
Chapter 328 - Captive ago
Chapter 329 - Negotiations ago
Chapter 330 - Transit Camp ago
Chapter 331 - Truths and Lies ago
Chapter 332 - New Management ago
Chapter 333 - The Underworld Council ago
Chapter 334 - Hidden Wealth ago
Chapter 335 - Ascension Breaker ago
Chapter 336 - Refined Skills ago
Chapter 337 - Profane Dominance ago
Chapter 338 - Breaking Out ago
Chapter 339 - Battleroach King ago
Chapter 340 - Battle of Attrition ago
Chapter 341 - Firmament's Edge ago
Chapter 342 - An Easy Gig ago
Chapter 343 - Priorities ago
Chapter 344 - Heretics ago
Chapter 345 - Drones ago
Chapter 346 - Heaven's Path ago
Chapter 347 - Enemies Ahead ago
Chapter 348 - Man Versus Machine ago
Chapter 349 - The Final Five ago
Chapter 350 - Despair ago
Chapter 351 - Out of Control ago
Chapter 352 - The Three Paths ago
Chapter 353 - Production Lines ago
Chapter 354 - Sortie ago
Chapter 355 - Baoqui ago
Chapter 356 - Final Stand ago
Chapter 357 - Adriel ago
Chapter 358 - Catharsis ago
Chapter 359 - Evil Stars ago
Chapter 360 - Dangers of Technology ago
Chapter 361 - An Overdue Meeting ago
Chapter 362 - Time Pressure ago
Chapter 363 - Stasis ago
Chapter 364 - Crusade ago
Chapter 365 - Lunatics ago
Chapter 366 - Manufacturing A Fortuitous Encounter ago
Chapter 367 - Playing the Part ago
Chapter 368 - Glimthain ago
Chapter 369 - Heat ago
Chapter 370 - Array Towers ago
Chapter 371 - The Floor is Lava ago
Chapter 372 - Deluge ago
Chapter 373 - Desecration ago
Chapter 374 - Dao of the Axe ago
Chapter 375 - Free Lunch ago
Chapter 376 - Impressions ago
Chapter 377 - Risk and Reward ago
Chapter 378 - Fallout ago
Chapter 379 - Fragment of the Axe ago
Chapter 380 - Coastal Incursion ago
Chapter 381 - Options ago
Chapter 382 - Enforced Balance ago
Chapter 383 - Final Hours ago
Chapter 384 - Apparitions ago
Chapter 385 - Protect Your Wallet ago
Chapter 386 - Galau ago
Chapter 387 - The Naspheyi Clan ago
Chapter 388 - Toxicity ago
Chapter 389 - Dreams ago
Chapter 390 - Balance ago
Chapter 391 - The Eight Calamities ago
Chapter 392 - Emerald Skies ago
Chapter 393 - Last Day ago
Chapter 394 - Last Opportunity ago
Chapter 395 - Prajñā Cherry ago
Chapter 396 - Aftermath ago
Chapter 397 - Elites ago
Chapter 398 - Piker ago
Chapter 399 - The Peaks ago
Chapter 400 - The Law of the Land ago
Chapter 401 - Taboo Origins ago
Chapter 402 - Whittlecreek ago
Chapter 403 - Questing ago
Chapter 404 - Remuneration ago
Chapter 405 - Floor Guardian ago
Chapter 406 - Penalties ago
Chapter 407 - Mastery ago
Chapter 408 - Creation ago
Chapter 409 - Fermentation ago
Chapter 410 - Heartless ago
Chapter 411 - War ago
Chapter 412 - Voidfire ago
Chapter 413 - Concordat ago
Chapter 414 - Ill-Gotten Gains ago
Chapter 415 - Hidden Rules ago
Chapter 416 - Bravoria Goods and Treasures ago
Chapter 417 - Vanguard of Undeath ago
Chapter 418 - Undying Legion ago
Chapter 419 - Tumbles ago
Chapter 420 - Erudite Master ago
Chapter 421 - True Strike ago
Chapter 422 - Road to 1000 ago
Chapter 423 - Cosmic Gaze ago
Chapter 424 - Thelim ago
Chapter 425 - The Enlightened Three ago
Chapter 426 - Talent ago
Chapter 427 - Storm ago
Chapter 428 - Pool of Tranquility ago
Chapter 429 - Reciprocity ago
Chapter 430 - Manuals ago
Chapter 431 - Nine Reincarnations ago
Chapter 432 - Lord Draugr ago
Chapter 433 - War ago
Chapter 434 - Repurpose ago
Chapter 435 - Breeder Clone ago
Chapter 436 - The Tallest Trees ago
Chapter 437 - Struggle for Supremacy ago
Chapter 438 - Points ago
Chapter 439 - Battle of Fates ago
Chapter 440 - Fractured ago
Chapter 441 - Faceless ago
Chapter 442 - A Break from the Monotony ago
Chapter 443 - Fate ago
Chapter 444 - Dreams ago
Chapter 445 - Gains ago
Chapter 446 - The Hayner Clan ago
Chapter 447 - Fated ago
Chapter 448 - Nouveau Riche ago
Chapter 449 - Pawn of Fate ago
Chapter 450 - Out of Reach ago
Chapter 451 - Little Bean ago
Chapter 452 - Road of No Return ago
Chapter 453 - Clearance ago
Chapter 454 - Undercover ago
Chapter 455 - The Machine God Faction ago
Chapter 456 - Dr. Fried ago
Chapter 457 - Desolation ago
Chapter 458 - Creation ago
Chapter 459 - Perception of Reality ago
Chapter 460 - Indigestion ago
Chapter 461 - Pink ago
Chapter 462 - Dragon ago
Chapter 463 - Chaos ago
Chapter 464 - An Old Friend ago
Chapter 465 - Beware the Terminus ago
Chapter 466 - War ago
Chapter 467 - Man Versus World ago
Chapter 468 - Restrained ago
Chapter 469 - Clashing Fates ago
Chapter 470 - Friends and Foes ago
Chapter 471 - Quid Pro Quo ago
Chapter 472 - Arcane ago
Chapter 473 - Twilight Harbor ago
Chapter 474 - Challenged ago
Chapter 475 - Trapped ago
Chapter 476 - Sowing Discord ago
Chapter 477 - Meteors ago
Chapter 478 - Fighting Fate ago
Chapter 479 - Fragments ago
Chapter 480 - Desperate Times ago
Chapter 481 - The Next Step ago
Chapter 482 - Love's Bond ago
Chapter 483 - Against the Natural Order ago
Chapter 484 - Invitations ago
Chapter 485 - Choices ago
Chapter 486 - Decision ago
Chapter 487 - Heart ago
Chapter 488 - The Final Era ago
Chapter 489 - A Frayed Web of Uncertainty ago
Chapter 490 - The Second Step ago
Chapter 491 - Clashing Versions ago
Chapter 492 - Heartbeat ago
Chapter 493 - Void Heart ago
Chapter 494 - Balance ago
Chapter 495 - Turbulence ago
Chapter 496 - Death Defiance ago
Chapter 497 - Attunement ago
Chapter 498 - Go Time ago
Chapter 499 - Pillars and Beams ago
Chapter 500 - Wallbreakers ago
Chapter 501 - Death's Embrace ago
Chapter 502 - Scourge ago
Chapter 503 - Hidden Aces ago
Chapter 504 - Broken ago
Chapter 505 - Fate's Obduracy ago
Chapter 506 - Triv ago
Chapter 507 - Lump of Coal ago
Chapter 508 - Bloodlines ago
Chapter 509 - Challenge ago
Chapter 510 - Eveningtide ago
Chapter 511 - Plans and Schemes ago
Chapter 512 - Regret ago
Chapter 513 - Pathways ago
Chapter 514 - Cultivation Cave ago
Chapter 515 - Divide ago
Chapter 516 - Beastcrafting ago
Chapter 517 - Jammers ago
Chapter 518 - Artifact ago
Chapter 519 - Cleanse ago
Chapter 520 - A Clean Break ago
Chapter 521 - Birds ago
Chapter 522 - The Abyss and Arcadia ago
Chapter 523 - Jungle ago
Chapter 524 - Fanaticism ago
Chapter 525 - Sigil ago
Chapter 526 - Holy Fire ago
Chapter 527 - The Next Step ago
Chapter 528 - S-Grade ago
Chapter 529 - Adaptability ago
Chapter 530 - Incentives for Exploration ago
Chapter 531 - Peace ago
Chapter 532 - Upgrading the Shipyard ago
Chapter 533 - Non-lethal Lethality ago
Chapter 534 - Blighted Cut ago
Chapter 535 - War Council ago
Chapter 536 - Sincerity ago
Chapter 537 - Clues ago
Chapter 538 - Nepotism ago
Chapter 539 - Loot ago
Chapter 540 - Attunement ago
Chapter 541 - Dust and Bones ago
Chapter 542 - Crusade ago
Chapter 543 - Battleplans ago
Chapter 544 - Intent ago
Chapter 545 - War Machine ago
Chapter 546 - Massacre ago
Chapter 547 - Monster ago
Chapter 548 - Wrath ago
Chapter 549 - Adcarkas ago
Chapter 550 - Swamp ago
Chapter 551 - Connectedness ago
Chapter 552 - River ago
Chapter 553 - Roots ago
Chapter 554 - Life, Death, War ago
Chapter 555 - Trinity ago
Chapter 556 - Heaven's Mandate ago
Chapter 557 - Retaliation ago
Chapter 558 - Showdown ago
Chapter 559 - Void ago
Chapter 560 - Pressure ago
Chapter 561 - Liar ago
Chapter 562 - Back Again ago
Chapter 563 - Return ago
Chapter 564 - Precipice ago
Chapter 565 - Convictions ago
Chapter 566 - Lunar Tribe ago
Chapter 567 - Expansion ago
Chapter 568 - First Entry ago
Chapter 569 - Rifts ago
Chapter 570 - The World is Ending ago
Chapter 571 - Back-up Plans ago
Chapter 572 - Flames ago
Chapter 573 - Ash and Steel ago
Chapter 574 - Deathwish ago
Chapter 575 - Tempering ago
Chapter 576 - Plunge ago
Chapter 577 - Corruption ago
Chapter 578 - Sacrifices ago
Chapter 579 - Void ago
Chapter 580 - Gate ago
Chapter 581 - Hunger ago
Chapter 582 - Conformation of Supremacy ago
Chapter 583 - Overrun ago
Chapter 584 - Storm Surge ago
Chapter 585 - Alpha ago
Chapter 586 - Delayed Gratification ago
Chapter 587 - Pathstrider ago
Chapter 588 - Lunar Forest ago
Chapter 589 - Tracks ago
Chapter 590 - Let's Talk ago
Chapter 591 - The Hero's Journey ago
Chapter 592 - Datamancers ago
Chapter 593 - Old Friends ago
Chapter 594 - Bubbles ago
Chapter 595 - Karma and Time ago
Chapter 596 - Hands ago
Chapter 597 - The Collector ago
Chapter 598 - The Hero's Burden ago
Chapter 599 - Horror ago
Chapter 600 - Mapper ago
Chapter 601 - Next Step ago
Chapter 602 - Crowdfunding ago
Chapter 603 - Monochrome ago
Chapter 604 - Anchor ago
Chapter 605 - Missive ago
Chapter 606 - Inner Layer ago
Chapter 607 - Unmarked Boxes ago
Chapter 608 - Divine Guidance ago
Chapter 609 - Conflicting Truths ago
Chapter 610 - Looming Threat ago
Chapter 611 - Lab 16 ago
Chapter 612 - Betrayal ago
Chapter 613 - Helping Hand ago
Chapter 614 - Gifts and Reciprocation ago
Chapter 615 - A Different Sky ago
Chapter 616 - Blood for Blood ago
Chapter 617 - Like Moths to a Flame ago
Chapter 618 - Path to Freedom ago
Chapter 619 - Despicable ago
Chapter 620 - Sankhara-Dukkha ago
Chapter 621 - Ripples ago
Chapter 622 - Upheavals ago
Chapter 623 - Benevolent Shepherd ago
Chapter 624 - Island Hopping ago
Chapter 625 - Under Attack ago
Chapter 626 - Denizens of the Void ago
Chapter 627 - Hunger ago
Chapter 628 - Resisting Fate ago
Chapter 629 - Final Stretch ago
Chapter 630 - Foothold ago
Chapter 631 - Judgement ago
Chapter 632 - Asura ago
Chapter 633 - The Gift of Life ago
Chapter 634 - Seals ago
Chapter 635 - Bad Omens ago
Chapter 636 - Shortage ago
Chapter 637 - Treasure Mountain ago
Chapter 638 - Perfection ago
Chapter 639 - To Eat ago
Chapter 640 - Force of the Void ago
Chapter 641 - From the Void ago
Chapter 642 - Infighting and Finishers ago
Chapter 643 - Wresting Control ago
Book 1 out on Amazon/Kindle Unlimited/Audible! New bonus chapter goal! ago
Chapter 644 - Bloodline Resonance ago
Chapter 645 - Sever Karma ago
Chapter 646 - Clan Volor ago
Chapter 647 - Weight of Sin ago
Chapter 648 - Paradise ago
Chapter 649 - Ember of Glory ago
Chapter 650 - Prison ago
Chapter 651 - Overbearing Truth ago
Chapter 652 - Inner Chambers ago
Chapter 653 - Mad Ambition ago
Chapter 654 - Overpowering ago
Chapter 655 - The Key to Life ago
Chapter 656 - Ticking Clock ago
Chapter 657 - Barter ago
Chapter 658 - Ragnarök ago
Chapter 659 - On the Horizon ago
Chapter 660 - Anniversary ago
Chapter 661 - Peak Performance ago
Chapter 662 - Deviant ago
Chapter 663 - Tribulation ago
Chapter 664 - Destiny ago
Chapter 665 - Power ago
Chapter 666 - Powerless ago
Chapter 667 - Einherjar ago
Chapter 668 - Cycle of Life and Death ago
Chapter 669 - Grasping for Perfection ago
Chapter 670 - Alternative Paths ago
Chapter 671 - Vilari ago
Chapter 672 - Skill Fusions ago
Chapter 673 - Departure ago
Chapter 674 - Equanimity ago
Chapter 675 - Bloodwind ago
Chapter 676 - Zanda ago
Chapter 677 - Big Axe Coliseum ago
Chapter 678 - Tyrant ago
Chapter 679 - Terror of the Twinruins ago
Chapter 680 - Big Boss's Big Wall ago
Chapter 681 - Buyout ago
Chapter 682 - Attendant ago
Chapter 683 - New Horizons ago
Chapter 684 - Guide ago
Book 2 out on Amazon/Kindle Unlimited/Audible! ago
Chapter 685 - Old Friend ago
Chapter 686 - Lies and Propositions ago
Chapter 687 - Pursuit of Eternity ago
Chapter 688 - Stocking Up ago
Chapter 689 - The Value of Money ago
Chapter 690 - Inheritance Crystal ago
Chapter 691 - Suspicions and Auctions ago
Chapter 692 - Flaunting one's Wealth ago
Chapter 693 - Bumpy Ride ago
Chapter 694 - Oppressive Might ago
Chapter 695 - Breaking Shackles ago
Chapter 696 - Aethergate ago
Chapter 697 - Coming Alive ago
Chapter 698 - Perennial Vastness ago
Chapter 699 - The Twilight Ocean ago
Chapter 700 - First Culling ago
Chapter 701 - Clashing Seas ago
Chapter 702 - Trove ago
Chapter 703 - Marked for Death ago

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Overall it's decent for what it is, a cultivation story with a system. But it could use some work and a good polish. But i don’t think that will happen, the author reminds me of Chinese Wuxia authors. He is making a very long story with many plots and paths it can take, while keeping the tension high to keep people reading.

 I honestly won’t go into detail because other people have already pointed out everything I would put down. 

 If you like a decent story about a body cultivator who has to suffer to get stronger, this story is for you. Otherwise, maybe pass it up.

Joostin
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Plot - Decent, Everything else? Shallow

Reviewed at: Chapter 679 - Terror of the Twinruins

Ill start this off by saying i'm still reading along due to enjoying the overall plot, but that is about all i enjoy in this story. Hopefully it continues to improve.

Pros - I would say the synopsis does a great job at telling you what this story is about.  Overall the plot and the world building introduced is fairly good.  Races and civilizations across the universe are brought in the story  and fleshed out to a small degree showing what the MC now has to deal with.

Cons - 

Man there are so many that are hard to get past. Repetitive story telling for one.  MC goes to fight > thinks about his powerups/new levels and stats he just gained > more internal dialogue about loot gained.  Rinse and repeat, and maybe every few times he will have a 1 sentence dialogue with a random side character that goes nowhere. Then will continue with... And then Zac and "character" discussed a few more things and he went off to go prepare to fight

Dialogue and character growth is non existent in this story.  He has a somewhat of a core group of people he relies on which are his generals that you know by name, but never have a discussion with, and then there are the "Elites" that support him time and again that he doesn't give the time of day. A new side character might be introduced and given an interlude, and then either die off, or are never brought up again.

Motivations / Loot / Town Building - This ties into the previous point a bit that there is almost no discussion on what he's doing or why he's doing it other than to save his family. Eventually he gets a few people he can rely on but he doesnt try and empower or assist them in any way, always looking to do everything himself. Loot? He has an endless supply of it that you pretty much never see being bought or sold or giving to his town or elites. Meat? Endless supply of mountains of meat that you never see him make or buy. The Town? Again, you see the surface level of one or two buildings in his town, but never more than a sentence or two of discussion about it.

Chapters - The chapters are a bit short in volume and in actual story info. A large part of each chapter is essentially filler (MC ponders on this or that before doing anything of substance) and a small amount of action, and then ends abruptly so he can finish that plot point a few chapters down the road

Cestarian
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The story really hasn't progressed far enough to rate the characters but from what I've seen it seems like they're gonna be somewhat better than in the average rrl story.

Other than that, the story is a pretty basic New World/Ghosthound style deal. Everyone gets a system and is teleported to a tutorial while the earth gets fucked up by monster hordes and stuff. Everyone except for the protagonist of course, he doesn't get a tutorial (lol).

Other than that I am fairly impressed by how the story is relatively gritty (and sometimes defies logic, like how the guy used the same hatchet for over a month swinging it with superhuman strength against monsters that are definitely tougher than your average tree, considering they can break them apart by running into them... without breaking the hatchet) the protagonist is powerful, but at least so far he is not overpowered (he has the promise of becoming overpowered later tho if he plays his cards right). He has to survive by the skin of his teeth, he'd die on a daily basis if he didn't have the system giving him a 'sleep and your fatal injuries will be healed' trope. The author basically hands the protagonist everything he needs on a silver platter like in most stories like these, what he has not done however is give him anything more than what he needs, he's given him exactly the bare minimum and nothing more and I like that. It's pretty decently written too so you can feel the protagonists struggle as he suffers for not getting to do the tutorial like everyone else.

Unlike him however, we do get a tutorial, we get all the basic RPG stats eplained to us as if everybody doesn't already know it and the story is chock full of wordy explanations about the most mundane things. This was my gripe with the story, the pacing feels like it's snailing along because sometimes entire chapters are devoted to just seemingly meaningless exposition. Hell the last chapter I read (37) was one such chapter (edit: and 38 was the same. And 39.). Literally nothing happens in the entire chapter.

This kind of stuff is a huge pet peeve of mine, when authors do too much exposition, spend too much time on explaining or detailing things that don't really warrant that much text.

Good writing is a balancing act between colorful wording and effective pacing, this author leans a bit too heavily on the former for my tastes. The only reason the story even progressed anywhere for the past 30 chapters is because the author at some point went 'fuck it' and did a month's time skip. (Thankfully, or we would have had chapter upon chapter of the protagonist doing the exact same thing)

Like others have said I share the opinion that this story has potential, it's too early to tell if it's worse or better than the works it seems inspired by, but I'm worried it will never be finished with this focus on overly detailed explanations.

I would advise the author to show more, and tell less. Not everything needs to be explained in full detail, let the readers imagination work out most of the things and focus on what's important to the main plot progression instead. If you look at some great artists (like say wlop for an excellent example) if you look closely at their artwork you will find that sometimes up to  80% or so of their pictures may end up being just blobs, anything that isn't the main focus/character of the picture is only vaguely defined. And it works, your brain will fill in these details when you look at the picture as a whole, but zoom in on it and all you'll see are blobs.

With the decreasing attention spans of humanity as a whole in our current society, it's vital for writers to adopt a similar strategy in their writing to keep the attention of readers.

Update: Now I'm at chapter 278.

Characters are, in line with my original impression, decent. They're better than in most stories in that they have actual personalities of their own, even if it's mostly template personalities, at least they're not full blown template characters. I should warn you though that if you're into good characters, you probably won't like this story because 90% of it is just focused on the protagonist. Other characters get defined personalities, but they don't get much further fleshed out than that, you won't be finding many tragic backstories or any character development in this story. There's a few interesting characters spread around in the novel, and you might actually be able to feel invested in some characters (hopefully at least the protagonist), but I doubt you'll be singing the author praises for good characters. Suffice it to say that he makes characters that work for the story, rather than a story that works for the characters. The story is centered around the protagonist mostly, other characters are in the end mostly just extras, so far most of the story is still the protagonist going solo, not that I dislike that at all, but it is what it is.

What I do dislike however is that unlike my original impression of the story being similar to new world and randidly ghosthound is that this is actually a xianxia story, I can see the tag is there now but I don't think it was when I started reading; what I do like however is that it's much better organized than any xianxia I've ever seen, namely that the power scaling of everyone is rather properly defined here thanks to the litrpg system, e.g. we pretty much know at all times where the protagonist stands on the global scale of power. Maybe not how powerful he is compared to others on the same scale, but just which scale he's on (i.e. the ratings of A, B, C, D, E and F essentially, and of course the levels). Everyone can be a bit of a wild card since their final power output depends heavily on their class and equipment and their 'daos' (a thing I really dislike in this story, the 'daos' create an undefined power scaling system within a decently defined one, tsk tsk.), but it's usually a fairly safe bet that a rank D warrior will not be able to defeat a rank C one with exceptions (exceptions like plot shields and overpowered daos!)

On that note, now that the story has progressed a bit, the protagonist is now overpowered, but only overpowered within his power scaling category (I don't remember what it was but I mean it's pretty down there like E or something) if you want specific, here's a lil spoiler:

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

As another review said, this story suffers a bit from lack of planning, but I somehow always end up coming back to it, I first dropped it at ch 36 or so, but then came back to it a good long while later when it had 100+ chapters. Then I had enough of this stupidity but eventually came back when it had 200+ chapters, now I'm coming back to it again when it has 300+ chapters.

The faults of the story being as they may, I have to give the author credit where credit is due. I have never on this site seen another author that's as consistent in his publishing rates as this one. I've seen it on other sites mind you, the chinese mass produced trash wuxia/xianxia novels in particular over on sites like webnovel.com do have this, it's just that they're always trash with absolutely no pacing, this story is similar I suppose (xianxia right?), but orders of magnitude better, has actual pacing (even if slow) and the plot is actively developing (even if slowly). So kudos for that!

I stand by my original ratings for the story, although I always end up dropping it at some point because of either pacing issues at some stretch of chapters, or some stupid things going on, I always come back to it fresh and mildly excited to keep reading it months later, which means there's some kind of rare quality to this story, because there aren't many stories I come back to after dropping 'em, and yet for this one it's happened 3 times.

(Update, now at ch 376; pacing issues have gotten worse, not enough happened in the last 100 chapters, dropped style score by half star for how ridiculously reduced the pacing has now become, but as I said earlier, the bad pacing is largely mitigated by the consistently fast chapter release rate, so the real major downside to this really is the amount of filler text, or like I said in the original review, this author should really show more and tell less, rather than listening to my advice however, he seems to have gone the opposite direction, telling more and showing less, sometimes having entire exposition dump chapters just to explain things that were already thoroughly explained in earlier exposition dumps (chapter 375 for instance))

So you know what? Go ahead and read it, it's no masterpiece, you will probably enjoy some of it and get frustrated at some of it, but it is at least so far somewhat worth your time, especially if you can't find anything else good to read. It has a few decent plot twists, and passably good worldbuilding too, I doubt you'll be head over heels for the story but I also doubt you'll hate it, unless you're super picky.

Username5
Overall

A good story, but a few persistent issues.

Reviewed at: Chapter 518 - Artifact

This has a pretty good story, so good that I read 500 chapters before I stopped reading despite the few issues that this has.

The most prevalent issue I've noticed is some words being repeated for seemingly no reason (a word is said a few words before where it would make sense to say it, then repeated in the correct location)

A lot of things aren't properly explained, to the point that I didn't realise that a constitution was an actual cultivation term until a few hundred chapters in. A lot of aspect of the system are left unexplained entirely and some things are changed to fit the story at the time, which makes it harder to know what's going on at times.

For some reason, characters are constantly spitting out blood, which makes no sense. That implies that they've been pierced in their lung and it's started to fill with blood but most of the time they're just straining themselves or being crushed which are unlikely to lead to them coughing blood. I can understand why you'd think that this makes sense, since it's used often in a lot of media, but this just throws me off and makes it harder to enjoy the fight scenes.

Other than these things there's not really any issues I can think of right now, so I would say that this is not bad if you're able to get past these things.

amin0
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Strong beginning but petered out

Reviewed at: Chapter 24 - Class

EDIT: A kind reader has pointed out that some of my nitpicks and issues I had with the story have been fixed. When I wrote this review, the story was around chapter 35. With over 100 chapters now the story is different then when I reviewed in the beginning. I'll give the story another read in the future and I'll update my review to accurately reflect how I feel about the story then.

 

The story had a good start despite it being somewhat of a cliche. Apocolptic-litrpg where the MC is off on his own trying to survive in this new dark and gritty world. The author blended a few elements of eastern fantasy books with western litrpg and it came out pretty well. I did enjoy the story a lot, which is why I'm more disappointed as I got my hopes up. The story started to take a dive in quality when the MC made poor judgements and out of character decisions and the author started to handwave details too big to ignore. The problems I had with the story are pretty spoilery, so I wouldn't recommend clicking it if you're a new reader.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 There's a bunch of minor issues that just keep piling up and it's hard not to be nitpicky about it when they're so glaring. It's not allowed me to fully enjoy the story and after writing this review has soured my taste for this story even more. I rated this story as a 3.5/5 stars, but as I wrote this review and looked more indepth in the issues I had with it, lowered it to 3/5. I imagine many users on this site can overlook these problems and rate it 4-5 stars easily. I would recommend this story to readers very familiar with royal road, but I wouldn't recommend this to anyone who mainly reads published books.

LameNameYo
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Defiance of the fall has just become the fall.

Reviewed at: Chapter 533 - Non-lethal Lethality

The story has fallen to pieces. It just reads like filler garbage now. Spent an entire chapter reading about the main characters thought process on why he should go for a legendary item as if 450 chapters with the main character didn't show us the motivations. In 50 chapters maybe 5 chapters progressed the story in any meaningful way, and even that hasn't really progressed the story as much as it has moved him from A to B. At this rate I'll give it a couple more weeks but it's about time to drop the story.

 

The author really needs to cut back on frequency and focus on quality. I tried to stay with it but the quality has fallen too low. And I don't have a high bar.

xadu
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It’s good, just lacking a little

Reviewed at: Chapter 508 - Bloodlines

Reviewed at chapter 508.


Great story, the author is good at world building and there is never a point in the story that is boring or where it feels the author is lost on how to move the plot forwards.

A note on the story: there's a lot of buildup to each "climax" in the story. The buildup is interesting and obviously important, yet the climax of various parts in the story feels a bit anticlimactic. All the tens of chapters buildup to end in a short fight. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, it's simply credit to the main characters effort during the buildup.

The style of the story is simply great. No actual issues except for annoying words like gains and clout and the rare jumble of a sentence.

The characters are solid and grow with their environment. They make some strange and out of place choices here and there but nothing severe. 

The grammar. This is by far the largest problem in this entire story. 500 chapters in and the author is still making the same mistakes as the first 10 chapters. I understand that English might not be his first language. But even so. It feels like there's basically zero proofreading done by anyone. If the author is pressed for time it should be well with in his capabilities to ask or hire someone to proofread and edit for him. Words and even whole sections of sentences missing really hurts the story and the flow of the reading. The mistakes are elementary and can be easily fixed to push this story to at least a 4.5 star. 
These continuous grammatical errors also creates the feeling that the author doesn't care in the slightest about the story he is producing. 

Insanja
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Couldn't stop reading and finished all 501 chapters up to this point in about a week.

The balance between an overpowered and a struggeling main character is just perfect, while the main character keeps getting stronger, stronger challenges keep appearing without appearing out of nothing.

The world building is pretty good, very rarely I had the feeling it was too detailed or not detailed enough. I had the feeling the author had a good overview and the story didn't contradict itself much so far.

As for the characters, there are quite a few noteable characters. Even though I read the story in a pretty small timeframe I had problems remembering some of the minor characters names. Some only appear for a short time and re-appear after quite some time without a reintroduction, making it somewhat confusing. But in genral all important characters have a detailed backstory and are introduced nicely.

Grammar wise I can't really give an accurate feedback, as I'm not a native but it still was easy to read. Some words felt a bit repetetive as for example it felt like he was roaring every chapter, but it didn't feel like it was too much.

All in all definitly a recommendation to give this novel a try.

Atreivahavi
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One of the stories that has nearly nothing special but cannot hold yourself to not to read. A classic world survival story with mediocre at everything. But hey I really like mediocre stories far more than stories that have its ups and downs. Definetily worth to read if you have nothing important to do.

Bookman
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EDIT now 2,5 out of 5 it keeps draging on

Reviewed at: Chapter 562 - Back Again

What started good quickly turned into a slog.
As many have stated Character deverlopment is on the side run.
So many interesting character gets intruduced and then tossed aside.
It would have been so much more interesting to get PoV chapters from the other character.
I i dont mean just the side kicks to the main but others of the mutliverse.
A mini arc what the undead lady he meat did after they parted.
How the son from Greatest (Forgot his name) does. His current actions.
Petty peak and the dude that they went with in the tower.

There are sooo many ways to advance the timeline without focus on the main character.
Instat we get zack grinding again and again and again.
The entire Forrest Flower chapter could have been skipped.

Been skipped is a theme i see more and more ofter here.
I keep seeing myself skipping entire paragraphs or sometimes even chapters as i wonder where the dam story is.
I cant find it.
We are supposed to get all invested in the mystic realm but i cant seem to care about it.
Nore do i care about the people that die.

Why? becourse there is no character deverlopement.
There is no growth as a character.
Everyone just seem to grow in Stats and nothing else.

In short this entire story turned into a Power trip exposition.



I will keep reading it when iam bored but as it is now it cant hold itself to chicken and destiny.
I just hope the entire Mystic realm afair is over soon as it keeps draging on and on and on.

A shame for the potential is there.

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Me reading all the was to chapter 213 (the current max of the chapters)

*Keeps hitting the greyed out next chapter butten*
"This cant be.... Where is the rest of it?"

During the past 4 days i Went to work, sleept and read this novel.
Its good. Really good. Not Wandering Inn good but close enoug to warrant 4 stars.

As many have said the strugle is real. People die.
Also avoiding the Cultication tropes.

"The difference is like haven and earth" -Nope not once read.

"She is defintly a kingdom topeling beauty" -Also not found. While there are multiple female site casts the MC is clear that we wouldnt go suck them all up into a harem.

"Fortunatly this happend" -While the MC is lucky, he is not OP lucky.
Many of the Wuxia Novels i read have the MC constantly be extrem lucky. Getting one super rare artifact and cultivaton bonus after another.
This is not the case here but i will say this here that the author is on a tight rope so far.
If luck where on a scale and the MC is defently getting more and more lucky.
Dont fall to the trap of Wuxian story Lucky.
The MC should get through this story with skill and only in some cases with luck.