Defiance of the Fall

Defiance of the Fall

by TheFirstDefier

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Zac was alone in the middle of the forest when the world changed.

The whole planet was introduced to the multiverse by an unfeeling System... or God. A universe where an endless number of races and civilizations fought for power and dominion. Zac finds himself stuck in the wilderness surrounded by deadly beasts, demons, and worse. Alone, lost and without answers, he must find the means to survive and get stronger in this new cut-throat reality.

With only a hatchet for his weapon, he'll have to seek out his family before the world collapses... or die trying.

 

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue - Welcome to the Multi-Verse ago
Chapter 1 - Roll For Survival ago
Chapter 2 - A New World ago
Chapter 3 - Battle Tactics ago
Chapter 4 - Alone ago
Chapter 5 - Stranded ago
Chapter 6 - Born for Carnage ago
Chapter 7 - Outpost ago
Continue reading on Kindle, Kindle Unlimited, and Audible ago
Chapter 319 - Sugar Daddy ago
Chapter 320 - Karmic Ties ago
Chapter 321 - Severing Karma ago
Chapter 322 - Convergence of Fate ago
Chapter 323 - Sowing Grudges ago
Chapter 324 - Mr. Black ago
Chapter 325 - Underworld Nexus ago
Chapter 326 - Subterranean Diplomacy ago
Chapter 327 - Billionaires' Brawl ago
Chapter 328 - Captive ago
Chapter 329 - Negotiations ago
Chapter 330 - Transit Camp ago
Chapter 331 - Truths and Lies ago
Chapter 332 - New Management ago
Chapter 333 - The Underworld Council ago
Chapter 334 - Hidden Wealth ago
Chapter 335 - Ascension Breaker ago
Chapter 336 - Refined Skills ago
Chapter 337 - Profane Dominance ago
Chapter 338 - Breaking Out ago
Chapter 339 - Battleroach King ago
Chapter 340 - Battle of Attrition ago
Chapter 341 - Firmament's Edge ago
Chapter 342 - An Easy Gig ago
Chapter 343 - Priorities ago
Chapter 344 - Heretics ago
Chapter 345 - Drones ago
Chapter 346 - Heaven's Path ago
Chapter 347 - Enemies Ahead ago
Chapter 348 - Man Versus Machine ago
Chapter 349 - The Final Five ago
Chapter 350 - Despair ago
Chapter 351 - Out of Control ago
Chapter 352 - The Three Paths ago
Chapter 353 - Production Lines ago
Chapter 354 - Sortie ago
Chapter 355 - Baoqui ago
Chapter 356 - Final Stand ago
Chapter 357 - Adriel ago
Chapter 358 - Catharsis ago
Chapter 359 - Evil Stars ago
Chapter 360 - Dangers of Technology ago
Chapter 361 - An Overdue Meeting ago
Chapter 362 - Time Pressure ago
Chapter 363 - Stasis ago
Chapter 364 - Crusade ago
Chapter 365 - Lunatics ago
Chapter 366 - Manufacturing A Fortuitous Encounter ago
Chapter 367 - Playing the Part ago
Chapter 368 - Glimthain ago
Chapter 369 - Heat ago
Chapter 370 - Array Towers ago
Chapter 371 - The Floor is Lava ago
Chapter 372 - Deluge ago
Chapter 373 - Desecration ago
Chapter 374 - Dao of the Axe ago
Chapter 375 - Free Lunch ago
Chapter 376 - Impressions ago
Chapter 377 - Risk and Reward ago
Chapter 378 - Fallout ago
Chapter 379 - Fragment of the Axe ago
Chapter 380 - Coastal Incursion ago
Chapter 381 - Options ago
Chapter 382 - Enforced Balance ago
Chapter 383 - Final Hours ago
Chapter 384 - Apparitions ago
Chapter 385 - Protect Your Wallet ago
Chapter 386 - Galau ago
Chapter 387 - The Naspheyi Clan ago
Chapter 388 - Toxicity ago
Chapter 389 - Dreams ago
Chapter 390 - Balance ago
Chapter 391 - The Eight Calamities ago
Chapter 392 - Emerald Skies ago
Chapter 393 - Last Day ago
Chapter 394 - Last Opportunity ago
Chapter 395 - Prajñā Cherry ago
Chapter 396 - Aftermath ago
Chapter 397 - Elites ago
Chapter 398 - Piker ago
Chapter 399 - The Peaks ago
Chapter 400 - The Law of the Land ago
Chapter 401 - Taboo Origins ago
Chapter 402 - Whittlecreek ago
Chapter 403 - Questing ago
Chapter 404 - Remuneration ago
Chapter 405 - Floor Guardian ago
Chapter 406 - Penalties ago
Chapter 407 - Mastery ago
Chapter 408 - Creation ago
Chapter 409 - Fermentation ago
Chapter 410 - Heartless ago
Chapter 411 - War ago
Chapter 412 - Voidfire ago
Chapter 413 - Concordat ago
Chapter 414 - Ill-Gotten Gains ago
Chapter 415 - Hidden Rules ago
Chapter 416 - Bravoria Goods and Treasures ago
Chapter 417 - Vanguard of Undeath ago
Chapter 418 - Undying Legion ago
Chapter 419 - Tumbles ago
Chapter 420 - Erudite Master ago
Chapter 421 - True Strike ago
Chapter 422 - Road to 1000 ago
Chapter 423 - Cosmic Gaze ago
Chapter 424 - Thelim ago
Chapter 425 - The Enlightened Three ago
Chapter 426 - Talent ago
Chapter 427 - Storm ago
Chapter 428 - Pool of Tranquility ago
Chapter 429 - Reciprocity ago
Chapter 430 - Manuals ago
Chapter 431 - Nine Reincarnations ago
Chapter 432 - Lord Draugr ago
Chapter 433 - War ago
Chapter 434 - Repurpose ago
Chapter 435 - Breeder Clone ago
Chapter 436 - The Tallest Trees ago
Chapter 437 - Struggle for Supremacy ago
Chapter 438 - Points ago
Chapter 439 - Battle of Fates ago
Chapter 440 - Fractured ago
Chapter 441 - Faceless ago
Chapter 442 - A Break from the Monotony ago
Chapter 443 - Fate ago
Chapter 444 - Dreams ago
Chapter 445 - Gains ago
Chapter 446 - The Hayner Clan ago
Chapter 447 - Fated ago
Chapter 448 - Nouveau Riche ago
Chapter 449 - Pawn of Fate ago
Chapter 450 - Out of Reach ago
Chapter 451 - Little Bean ago
Chapter 452 - Road of No Return ago
Chapter 453 - Clearance ago
Chapter 454 - Undercover ago
Chapter 455 - The Machine God Faction ago
Chapter 456 - Dr. Fried ago
Chapter 457 - Desolation ago
Chapter 458 - Creation ago
Chapter 459 - Perception of Reality ago
Chapter 460 - Indigestion ago
Chapter 461 - Pink ago
Chapter 462 - Dragon ago
Chapter 463 - Chaos ago
Chapter 464 - An Old Friend ago
Chapter 465 - Beware the Terminus ago
Chapter 466 - War ago
Chapter 467 - Man Versus World ago
Chapter 468 - Restrained ago
Chapter 469 - Clashing Fates ago
Chapter 470 - Friends and Foes ago
Chapter 471 - Quid Pro Quo ago
Chapter 472 - Arcane ago
Chapter 473 - Twilight Harbor ago
Chapter 474 - Challenged ago
Chapter 475 - Trapped ago
Chapter 476 - Sowing Discord ago
Chapter 477 - Meteors ago
Chapter 478 - Fighting Fate ago
Chapter 479 - Fragments ago
Chapter 480 - Desperate Times ago
Chapter 481 - The Next Step ago
Chapter 482 - Love's Bond ago
Chapter 483 - Against the Natural Order ago
Chapter 484 - Invitations ago
Chapter 485 - Choices ago
Chapter 486 - Decision ago
Chapter 487 - Heart ago
Chapter 488 - The Final Era ago
Chapter 489 - A Frayed Web of Uncertainty ago
Chapter 490 - The Second Step ago
Chapter 491 - Clashing Versions ago
Chapter 492 - Heartbeat ago
Chapter 493 - Void Heart ago
Chapter 494 - Balance ago
Chapter 495 - Turbulence ago
Chapter 496 - Death Defiance ago
Chapter 497 - Attunement ago
Chapter 498 - Go Time ago
Chapter 499 - Pillars and Beams ago
Chapter 500 - Wallbreakers ago
Chapter 501 - Death's Embrace ago
Chapter 502 - Scourge ago
Chapter 503 - Hidden Aces ago
Chapter 504 - Broken ago
Chapter 505 - Fate's Obduracy ago
Chapter 506 - Triv ago
Chapter 507 - Lump of Coal ago
Chapter 508 - Bloodlines ago
Chapter 509 - Challenge ago
Chapter 510 - Eveningtide ago
Chapter 511 - Plans and Schemes ago
Chapter 512 - Regret ago
Chapter 513 - Pathways ago
Chapter 514 - Cultivation Cave ago
Chapter 515 - Divide ago
Chapter 516 - Beastcrafting ago
Chapter 517 - Jammers ago
Chapter 518 - Artifact ago
Chapter 519 - Cleanse ago
Chapter 520 - A Clean Break ago
Chapter 521 - Birds ago
Chapter 522 - The Abyss and Arcadia ago
Chapter 523 - Jungle ago
Chapter 524 - Fanaticism ago
Chapter 525 - Sigil ago
Chapter 526 - Holy Fire ago
Chapter 527 - The Next Step ago
Chapter 528 - S-Grade ago
Chapter 529 - Adaptability ago
Chapter 530 - Incentives for Exploration ago
Chapter 531 - Peace ago
Chapter 532 - Upgrading the Shipyard ago
Chapter 533 - Non-lethal Lethality ago
Chapter 534 - Blighted Cut ago
Chapter 535 - War Council ago
Chapter 536 - Sincerity ago
Chapter 537 - Clues ago
Chapter 538 - Nepotism ago
Chapter 539 - Loot ago
Chapter 540 - Attunement ago
Chapter 541 - Dust and Bones ago
Chapter 542 - Crusade ago
Chapter 543 - Battleplans ago
Chapter 544 - Intent ago
Chapter 545 - War Machine ago
Chapter 546 - Massacre ago
Chapter 547 - Monster ago
Chapter 548 - Wrath ago
Chapter 549 - Adcarkas ago
Chapter 550 - Swamp ago
Chapter 551 - Connectedness ago
Chapter 552 - River ago
Chapter 553 - Roots ago
Chapter 554 - Life, Death, War ago
Chapter 555 - Trinity ago
Chapter 556 - Heaven's Mandate ago
Chapter 557 - Retaliation ago
Chapter 558 - Showdown ago
Chapter 559 - Void ago
Chapter 560 - Pressure ago
Chapter 561 - Liar ago
Chapter 562 - Back Again ago
Chapter 563 - Return ago
Chapter 564 - Precipice ago
Chapter 565 - Convictions ago
Chapter 566 - Lunar Tribe ago
Chapter 567 - Expansion ago
Chapter 568 - First Entry ago
Chapter 569 - Rifts ago
Chapter 570 - The World is Ending ago
Chapter 571 - Back-up Plans ago
Chapter 572 - Flames ago
Chapter 573 - Ash and Steel ago
Chapter 574 - Deathwish ago
Chapter 575 - Tempering ago
Chapter 576 - Plunge ago
Chapter 577 - Corruption ago
Chapter 578 - Sacrifices ago
Chapter 579 - Void ago
Chapter 580 - Gate ago
Chapter 581 - Hunger ago
Chapter 582 - Conformation of Supremacy ago
Chapter 583 - Overrun ago
Chapter 584 - Storm Surge ago
Chapter 585 - Alpha ago
Chapter 586 - Delayed Gratification ago
Chapter 587 - Pathstrider ago
Chapter 588 - Lunar Forest ago
Chapter 589 - Tracks ago
Chapter 590 - Let's Talk ago
Chapter 591 - The Hero's Journey ago
Chapter 592 - Datamancers ago
Chapter 593 - Old Friends ago
Chapter 594 - Bubbles ago
Chapter 595 - Karma and Time ago
Chapter 596 - Hands ago
Chapter 597 - The Collector ago
Chapter 598 - The Hero's Burden ago
Chapter 599 - Horror ago
Chapter 600 - Mapper ago
Chapter 601 - Next Step ago
Chapter 602 - Crowdfunding ago
Chapter 603 - Monochrome ago
Chapter 604 - Anchor ago
Chapter 605 - Missive ago
Chapter 606 - Inner Layer ago
Chapter 607 - Unmarked Boxes ago
Chapter 608 - Divine Guidance ago
Chapter 609 - Conflicting Truths ago
Chapter 610 - Looming Threat ago
Chapter 611 - Lab 16 ago
Chapter 612 - Betrayal ago
Chapter 613 - Helping Hand ago
Chapter 614 - Gifts and Reciprocation ago
Chapter 615 - A Different Sky ago
Chapter 616 - Blood for Blood ago
Chapter 617 - Like Moths to a Flame ago
Chapter 618 - Path to Freedom ago
Chapter 619 - Despicable ago
Chapter 620 - Sankhara-Dukkha ago
Chapter 621 - Ripples ago
Chapter 622 - Upheavals ago
Chapter 623 - Benevolent Shepherd ago
Chapter 624 - Island Hopping ago
Chapter 625 - Under Attack ago
Chapter 626 - Denizens of the Void ago
Chapter 627 - Hunger ago
Chapter 628 - Resisting Fate ago
Chapter 629 - Final Stretch ago
Chapter 630 - Foothold ago
Chapter 631 - Judgement ago
Chapter 632 - Asura ago
Chapter 633 - The Gift of Life ago
Chapter 634 - Seals ago
Chapter 635 - Bad Omens ago
Chapter 636 - Shortage ago
Chapter 637 - Treasure Mountain ago
Chapter 638 - Perfection ago
Chapter 639 - To Eat ago
Chapter 640 - Force of the Void ago
Chapter 641 - From the Void ago
Chapter 642 - Infighting and Finishers ago
Chapter 643 - Wresting Control ago
Book 1 out on Amazon/Kindle Unlimited/Audible! New bonus chapter goal! ago
Chapter 644 - Bloodline Resonance ago
Chapter 645 - Sever Karma ago
Chapter 646 - Clan Volor ago
Chapter 647 - Weight of Sin ago
Chapter 648 - Paradise ago
Chapter 649 - Ember of Glory ago
Chapter 650 - Prison ago
Chapter 651 - Overbearing Truth ago
Chapter 652 - Inner Chambers ago
Chapter 653 - Mad Ambition ago
Chapter 654 - Overpowering ago
Chapter 655 - The Key to Life ago
Chapter 656 - Ticking Clock ago
Chapter 657 - Barter ago
Chapter 658 - Ragnarök ago
Chapter 659 - On the Horizon ago
Chapter 660 - Anniversary ago
Chapter 661 - Peak Performance ago
Chapter 662 - Deviant ago
Chapter 663 - Tribulation ago
Chapter 664 - Destiny ago
Chapter 665 - Power ago
Chapter 666 - Powerless ago
Chapter 667 - Einherjar ago
Chapter 668 - Cycle of Life and Death ago
Chapter 669 - Grasping for Perfection ago
Chapter 670 - Alternative Paths ago
Chapter 671 - Vilari ago
Chapter 672 - Skill Fusions ago
Chapter 673 - Departure ago
Chapter 674 - Equanimity ago
Chapter 675 - Bloodwind ago
Chapter 676 - Zanda ago
Chapter 677 - Big Axe Coliseum ago
Chapter 678 - Tyrant ago
Chapter 679 - Terror of the Twinruins ago
Chapter 680 - Big Boss's Big Wall ago
Chapter 681 - Buyout ago
Chapter 682 - Attendant ago
Chapter 683 - New Horizons ago
Chapter 684 - Guide ago
Book 2 out on Amazon/Kindle Unlimited/Audible! ago
Chapter 685 - Old Friend ago
Chapter 686 - Lies and Propositions ago
Chapter 687 - Pursuit of Eternity ago
Chapter 688 - Stocking Up ago
Chapter 689 - The Value of Money ago
Chapter 690 - Inheritance Crystal ago
Chapter 691 - Suspicions and Auctions ago
Chapter 692 - Flaunting one's Wealth ago
Chapter 693 - Bumpy Ride ago
Chapter 694 - Oppressive Might ago
Chapter 695 - Breaking Shackles ago
Chapter 696 - Aethergate ago
Chapter 697 - Coming Alive ago
Chapter 698 - Perennial Vastness ago
Chapter 699 - The Twilight Ocean ago
Chapter 700 - First Culling ago
Chapter 701 - Clashing Seas ago
Chapter 702 - Trove ago
Chapter 703 - Marked for Death ago
Chapter 704 - Cork Island ago
Chapter 705 - Profane Exponents ago
Chapter 706 - Opposing Sides ago
Chapter 707 - Mothertree ago
Chapter 708 - Turn of the Seasons ago
Chapter 709 - Agent of Chaos ago
Chapter 710 - Detour ago
Chapter 711 - Traitor ago
Chapter 712 - Truths and Conspiracies ago
Chapter 713 - Young Monsters ago
Chapter 714 - Unplugged ago
Chapter 715 - Ripples ago
Chapter 716 - Relegation ago
Chapter 717 - Radiant Temple ago
Chapter 718 - Hollowtongue Mountains ago
Chapter 719 - Mixed Meanings ago
Chapter 720 - Seclusion ago
Chapter 721 - Runebinder ago
Chapter 722 - Marked for Death ago
Chapter 723 - Into the Abyss ago
Chapter 724 - Profiteering ago
Chapter 725 - Information Exchange ago
Chapter 726 - Ventus Kalavan ago
Chapter 727 - Order ago
Chapter 728 - Dao Branch ago
Chapter 729 - Raksha Shrimp ago
Chapter 730 - Upgrades ago
Chapter 731 - Minefield ago
Chapter 732 - Twilight Chasm ago
Chapter 733 - Repercussions ago
Chapter 734 - Crushing Pressure ago
Chapter 735 - Mountain Formation ago
Chapter 736 - Limitless ago
Chapter 737 - Grand Origins ago
Chapter 738 - King of the Mountain ago
Chapter 739 - Reciprocity ago
Chapter 740 - Dark Horse ago
Chapter 741 - Gathering Strength ago
Chapter 742 - Mind's Eye ago
Chapter 743 - Catching Up ago
Chapter 744 - Uninvited Guest ago
Chapter 745 - The Last Laugh ago
Chapter 746 - Ascent ago

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LameNameYo
Overall

Defiance of the fall has just become the fall.

Reviewed at: Chapter 533 - Non-lethal Lethality

The story has fallen to pieces. It just reads like filler garbage now. Spent an entire chapter reading about the main characters thought process on why he should go for a legendary item as if 450 chapters with the main character didn't show us the motivations. In 50 chapters maybe 5 chapters progressed the story in any meaningful way, and even that hasn't really progressed the story as much as it has moved him from A to B. At this rate I'll give it a couple more weeks but it's about time to drop the story.

 

The author really needs to cut back on frequency and focus on quality. I tried to stay with it but the quality has fallen too low. And I don't have a high bar.

Joostin
Overall

Plot - Decent, Everything else? Shallow

Reviewed at: Chapter 679 - Terror of the Twinruins

Ill start this off by saying i'm still reading along due to enjoying the overall plot, but that is about all i enjoy in this story. Hopefully it continues to improve.

Pros - I would say the synopsis does a great job at telling you what this story is about.  Overall the plot and the world building introduced is fairly good.  Races and civilizations across the universe are brought in the story  and fleshed out to a small degree showing what the MC now has to deal with.

Cons - 

Man there are so many that are hard to get past. Repetitive story telling for one.  MC goes to fight > thinks about his powerups/new levels and stats he just gained > more internal dialogue about loot gained.  Rinse and repeat, and maybe every few times he will have a 1 sentence dialogue with a random side character that goes nowhere. Then will continue with... And then Zac and "character" discussed a few more things and he went off to go prepare to fight

Dialogue and character growth is non existent in this story.  He has a somewhat of a core group of people he relies on which are his generals that you know by name, but never have a discussion with, and then there are the "Elites" that support him time and again that he doesn't give the time of day. A new side character might be introduced and given an interlude, and then either die off, or are never brought up again.

Motivations / Loot / Town Building - This ties into the previous point a bit that there is almost no discussion on what he's doing or why he's doing it other than to save his family. Eventually he gets a few people he can rely on but he doesnt try and empower or assist them in any way, always looking to do everything himself. Loot? He has an endless supply of it that you pretty much never see being bought or sold or giving to his town or elites. Meat? Endless supply of mountains of meat that you never see him make or buy. The Town? Again, you see the surface level of one or two buildings in his town, but never more than a sentence or two of discussion about it.

Chapters - The chapters are a bit short in volume and in actual story info. A large part of each chapter is essentially filler (MC ponders on this or that before doing anything of substance) and a small amount of action, and then ends abruptly so he can finish that plot point a few chapters down the road

Easy
Overall

Created a Royalroad account just to rate your story and commend your upload speed and chapter length 

Great story 

Best work ethic I've seen on RR

Zanadarn
Overall

Pacing killed it for me

Reviewed at: Chapter 550 - Swamp

The Good:

Interesting concept mixing Xianxia and System Apocalypse. Decent protagonist who does well straddling the line between doing what he has to and keeping a core of values. Good power level balance with the protagonist both feeling strong and yet continually challenged by powerful forces arrayed against him.

The Bad:

Pacing. I'm almost a million words in and he's still stuck on Earth, just barely out of the lowest rung of power level in this universe and it feels like I'm still many chapters away from him finally leaving. Sure there were some sidequests to break up the monotony of the Earth storyline, but those just made it worse because it prolongued it.

This novel takes many cues from Xianxia stories yet imagine reading a Xianxia story where a million words in the protagonist is still stuck in the area where they started, still at the lowest general power level. That's practically the halfway point for many of them. It's just moving far too slowly and I'm probably not going to stick around for the thousands of chapters it would take to conclude at this pace.

xadu
Overall
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It’s good, just lacking a little

Reviewed at: Chapter 508 - Bloodlines

Reviewed at chapter 508.


Great story, the author is good at world building and there is never a point in the story that is boring or where it feels the author is lost on how to move the plot forwards.

A note on the story: there's a lot of buildup to each "climax" in the story. The buildup is interesting and obviously important, yet the climax of various parts in the story feels a bit anticlimactic. All the tens of chapters buildup to end in a short fight. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, it's simply credit to the main characters effort during the buildup.

The style of the story is simply great. No actual issues except for annoying words like gains and clout and the rare jumble of a sentence.

The characters are solid and grow with their environment. They make some strange and out of place choices here and there but nothing severe. 

The grammar. This is by far the largest problem in this entire story. 500 chapters in and the author is still making the same mistakes as the first 10 chapters. I understand that English might not be his first language. But even so. It feels like there's basically zero proofreading done by anyone. If the author is pressed for time it should be well with in his capabilities to ask or hire someone to proofread and edit for him. Words and even whole sections of sentences missing really hurts the story and the flow of the reading. The mistakes are elementary and can be easily fixed to push this story to at least a 4.5 star. 
These continuous grammatical errors also creates the feeling that the author doesn't care in the slightest about the story he is producing. 

darthpsykoz
Overall

The first 100-200 chapters are quite well paced and well done, world building and settings wise. But then, I read like 50 chapters during which nothing signifcant really happened and this continue forever. The Universe has at least A rank beings and the MC, starting at F, is not even D rank after 500 chapters!

a username
Overall

Starts out good, but over time gets steadily worse. It steadily gets more confusing over time, and seemed to have been pigeon-holed by many of the decisions made in the beginning that don't fit later on. Additionally, I feel the story has really struggled with character relationships, with many of them feeling unrealistic. This story is great if you just want a lot of content.

Username5
Overall

A good story, but a few persistent issues.

Reviewed at: Chapter 518 - Artifact

This has a pretty good story, so good that I read 500 chapters before I stopped reading despite the few issues that this has.

The most prevalent issue I've noticed is some words being repeated for seemingly no reason (a word is said a few words before where it would make sense to say it, then repeated in the correct location)

A lot of things aren't properly explained, to the point that I didn't realise that a constitution was an actual cultivation term until a few hundred chapters in. A lot of aspect of the system are left unexplained entirely and some things are changed to fit the story at the time, which makes it harder to know what's going on at times.

For some reason, characters are constantly spitting out blood, which makes no sense. That implies that they've been pierced in their lung and it's started to fill with blood but most of the time they're just straining themselves or being crushed which are unlikely to lead to them coughing blood. I can understand why you'd think that this makes sense, since it's used often in a lot of media, but this just throws me off and makes it harder to enjoy the fight scenes.

Other than these things there's not really any issues I can think of right now, so I would say that this is not bad if you're able to get past these things.

BobBer
Overall

I'm about 40 chapters behind right now, so this review might be a bit dated. 

This story starts like a lot of litrpg does; the MC is in some sort of crisis because of whatever setup the author used to create a litrpg scenario. Now, in this crisis mode the MC was a brutal and self serving maniac, which makde sense and didn't keep me from caring about him. But, since then, the crisis has ended to some degree while MC has proceeded to turn into a greedy, selfish, kleptomaniac who places very little value on the lives of others. The MC doesn't have to be a giant bag of “bricks" anymore, he just wants to. If the MC got killed off at any point I would feel zero sympathy for him. It's not a doing-evil-to-do-good thing either, or the MC doing evil to serve a greater ambition. The MC just cares a lot about himself and very little about everyone else. "It's your bad luck if you have something I want and you aren't strong enough to stop me from taking it." An ego maniacal bag of bricks. 

I read stories like this somethimes that I think are litrpg and turn into "xianxia". I really don't understand how either the author or the reader is able to connect to and feel empathy for MCs who make the journey from being the little guy to being the person who steps on the little guy with no regrets. Maybe it is a cultural thing or something. 

Kevosman
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Character

Story starys off with it being taken over by the system.  Where the lucky few have the cultivator ability awoken and are taken off for training.  The rest are left to deal with the invaders.  The MC is one of those that were left.  To make matters worse he starts off in the exact spot that a monster is going to spawn and has to roll the dice for his life.  

The bad:

Does not fell lile the MC has to struggle all that much.  Fighting foes that have unlocked cultivation and beats them, with only some minor ingenunity.  This is a system that is supposed to favor the powerful, where if you are not a cultivator, you are trash.  Yet the MC thrives killing everything in sight.

 

The Good:

Even with being super OP'd the MC is still interesting.  

The grammar is great, few errors, allow the reader to stay immersed in the story.

Has a plot that stays consistant and believable.  

Good world building and leveling system.  Both the explantion and execution are consistant and detailed.

Supporting characters background is there and is decent.