Defiance of the Fall

by TheFirstDefier

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi LitRPG Magic Male Lead Post Apocalyptic Strong Lead Supernatural Xianxia
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As Zac was alone in the middle of the forest the world changed. The whole planet was introduced to the so-called multi-verse by an unfeeling System or God. A universe where all races and civilzations fought for power and dominion. 

Seemingly forgotten by the System, Zac found himself stuck in the wilderness surrounded by deadly beasts. Alone, lost and without answers, he must find the means to survive and get stronger in this new cut-throat reality. 

 

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Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue - Welcome to the Multi-Verse, v.2 ago
Chapter 1 - Roll For Survival, v.2 ago
Chapter 2 - A New World, v.2 ago
Chapter 3 - Battle Tactics, v.2 ago
Chapter 4 - Alone, v.2 ago
Chapter 5 - Stranded ago
Chapter 6 - Born for Carnage ago
Chapter 7 - Outpost ago
Chapter 8 - Abby the Eye ago
Chapter 9 - Forced to Fight ago
Chapter 10 - Preparation ago
Chapter 11 - Upgrades ago
Chapter 12 - The Warrior-Route ago
Chapter 13 - On the Hunt ago
Chapter 14 - Zombie Hound ago
Chapter 15 - Desperation ago
Chapter 16 - Choices ago
Chapter 17 - Eye of Discernment ago
Chapter 18 - Cosmic Energy ago
Chapter 19 - Vul ago
Chapter 20 - Fighting the Herald ago
Chapter 21 - Hurt ago
Chapter 22 - Scouts ago
Chapter 23 - Do you Understand My words? ago
Chapter 24 - Class ago
Chapter 25 - Stronger ago
Chapter 26 - Demons ago
Chapter 27 - One Against Many ago
Chapter 28 - Melee ago
Chapter 29 - Inscriptions ago
Chapter 30 - Experimentation ago
Chapter 31 - Infusion ago
Chapter 32 - Vanity ago
Chapter 33 - Infection ago
Chapter 34 - Conspiracies ago
Chapter 35 - The Fourth Beast ago
Q&A – Not a Chapter ago
Chapter 36 - Determination ago
Chapter 37 - Monstrous Power ago
Chapter 38 - Insight ago
Chapter 39 - Guidance ago
Chapter 40 - Chop ago
Chapter 41 - Apex Predator ago
Chapter 42 - Exodus ago
Chapter 43 - Stone Monkeys ago
Chapter 44 - Peak ago
Chapter 45 - Monkey Captain ago
Chapter 46 - The Hunt for the Herald ago
Chapter 47 - Collision Course ago
Chapter 48 - Simian Haranguing ago
Chapter 49 - Spelunking ago
Chapter 50 - Crystals ago
Chapter 51 - Stench ago
Chapter 52 - Odor ago
Chapter 53 - Blitz ago
Chapter 54 - Luck ago
Chapter 55 - Hey There Buddy ago
Chapter 56 - Ill-gotten Gains ago
Chapter 57 - Dressing up ago
Chapter 58 - Quest ago
Chapter 59 - Now or Never ago
Chapter 60 - Entering the Fray ago
Chapter 61 - Pitched Battle ago
Chapter 62 - Crescendo ago
Chapter 63 - Purple Haze ago
Chapter 64 - Taking Stock ago
Chapter 65 - First Contact ago
Chapter 66 - My Dinner With Ogras ago
Chapter 66.5 - My dinner with Zac ago
Chapter 67 - Diplomacy ago
Chapter 68 - Progenitor's Advantage ago
Chapter 69 - Rewards ago
Chapter 70 - Town Shop ago
Chapter 71 - First Impressions ago
Chapter 72 - Thayer Consortia ago
Chapter 73 - Foundations of a Capital ago
Chapter 74 - Classes, Cultivation, and old Hegemons ago
Chapter 75 - Gaming the System ago
Chapter 76 - Business Tactics ago
Chapter 77 - What is the System? ago
Chapter 78 - The Apostates ago
Chapter 79 - The Lifebringer ago
Chapter 80 - Loamwalker ago
Chapter 81 - Subjects ago
Chapter 82 - The Hordes ago
Chapter 83 - Wolves ago
Chapter 84 - Super Brother-Man ago
Chapter 85 - Four Fates ago
Chapter 86 - Ladders ago
Chapter 87 - Spectral Wolves ago
Chapter 88 - A day in the Wolf Horde ago
Chapter 89 - The Final Four ago
Chapter 90 - Worsening Conditions ago
Chapter 91 - Lightning Punishment ago
Chapter 92 - Fiend Wolf ago
Chapter 93 - Verun's Bite ago
Chapter 94 - Humans ago
Chapter 95 - Winterleaf Village ago
Chapter 96 - Terror of the Mountains ago
Chapter 97 - Freedom ago
Chapter 98 - Fort Roger ago
Chapter 99 - Emily ago
Chapter 100 - Travel Companions ago
Chapter 101 - First impressions ago
Chapter 102 - The Day before the Storm ago
Chapter 103 - The Second Horde ago
Chapter 104 - The War Council ago
Chapter 105 - Into the Hive ago
Chapter 106 - The Descent ago
Chapter 107 - Assault ago
Chapter 108 - Fighting the Royals ago
Chapter 109 - The final push ago
Chapter 110 - Exploration ago
Chapter 111 - Wave Whisperer ago
Chapter 112 - Back to the Scene of the Crime ago
Chapter 113 - New Washington ago
Chapter 114 - Intelligence ago
Chapter 115 - Going home ago
Chapter 116 - Family ago
Chapter 117 - Judgement ago
Chapter 118 - Recruitment ago
Chapter 119 - Army ago
Chapter 120 - The Return ago
Chapter 121 - Thomas Fischer ago
Chapter 122 - Homecoming ago
Chapter 123 - Neighbors ago
Chapter 124 - The Zhix ago
Chapter 125 - The Dominators ago
Chapter 126 - Ibtep ago
Chapter 127 - Setting the Course ago
Chapter 128 - Excursion ago
Chapter 129 - Final Preparations ago
Chapter 130 - The Motley Crew ago
Chapter 131 - The Marshall Clan ago
Chapter 132 - New Friends ago
Chapter 133 - The Auction Begins ago
Chapter 134 - Emma ago
Chapter 135 - Mystery Stones ago
Chapter 136 - Joint Ventures ago
Chapter 137 - Clearing the Air ago
Chapter 138 - Consequences ago
Chapter 139 - Heaviness ago
Chapter 140 - Dao Seeds ago
Chapter 141 - Forming Factions ago
Chapter 142 - Heading out ago
Chapter 143 - Assault ago
Chapter 144 - Gaining Reputation ago
Chapter 145 - Craftsmen ago
Chapter 146 - Home Sweet Home ago
Chapter 147 - Roads to Lordship ago
Chapter 148 - Cogstown ago
Chapter 149 - Reinforcements ago
Chapter 150 - The Third Wave ago
Chapter 151 - The Three Forces ago
Chapter 152 - Wallbreakers ago
Chapter 153 - Gambit ago
Chapter 154 - Diversion ago
Chapter 155 - Full Frontal Assault ago
Chapter 156 - Life versus Death ago
Chapter 157 - Wounded ago
Chapter 158 - Betrayal ago
Chapter 159 - Infiltrators ago
Chapter 160 - Long Time No See ago
Chapter 161 - Rewards ago
Chapter 162 - The Great Sage Brazla ago
Chapter 163 - The Eight Inheritances ago
Chapter 164 - Waiting ago
Chapter 165 - A Thousand Faces ago
Chapter 166 - The Frontier ago
Chapter 167 - Purifier Wang ago
Chapter 168 - Healing ago
Chapter 169 - Nature's Barrier ago
Chapter 170 - Conquest ago
Chapter 171 - Shamelessness ago
Chapter 172 - Balance ago
Chapter 173 - Disrupt the Call ago
Chapter 174 - Sui ago
Chapter 175 - Changes ago
Chapter 176 - Ghosts ago
Chapter 177 - Ravenous ago
Chapter 178 - Monks ago
Chapter 179 - Divine Mountain ago
Chapter 180 - Invitation ago
Chapter 181 - Abbot Everlasting Peace ago
Chapter 182 - Black and Gold ago
Chapter 183 - Kingsbury ago
Chapter 184 - Trial ago
Chapter 185 - Reunion ago
Chapter 186 - Return ago
Chapter 187 - Hatchetman's Rage ago
Chapter 188 - Secrets ago
Chapter 189 - Leandra ago
Chapter 190 - Top Tier Cheat ago
Chapter 191 - The Network ago
Chapter 192 - Island Tour ago
Chapter 193 - Merit and Debt ago
Chapter 194 - Savings and Expenses ago
Chapter 195 - Making Rounds ago
Chapter 196 - The First Step of Hegemony ago
Chapter 197 - Multiple Variables ago
Chapter 198 - Competition ago
Chapter 199 - Average ago
Chapter 200 - Star Ox ago
Chapter 201 - Greatest ago
Chapter 202 - Specialty Core ago
Chapter 203 - Duplicity ago
Chapter 204 - To Forgive ago
Chapter 205 - Draugr ago
Chapter 206 - The Correct Path ago
Chapter 207 - Titles ago
Chapter 208 - Apex Hunter ago
Chapter 209 - Classes ago
Chapter 210 - Masochism ago
Chapter 211 - Experimentation ago
Chapter 212 - Final Preparations ago
Chapter 213 - The Hunt Begins ago
Chapter 214 - Traps and Ladders ago
Chapter 215 - Treasures ago
Chapter 216 - Appeasing the Spirit ago
Chapter 217 - Ransacking ago
Chapter 218 - Alchemist's Mountain ago
Chapter 219 - Alliance ago
Chapter 220 - Jackpot ago
Chapter 221 - Public Enemy Number One ago
Chapter 222 - Herbs and Pills ago
Chapter 223 - Darkness ago
Chapter 224 - Salvation ago
Chapter 225 - Diplomacy ago
Chapter 226 - Alliances ago
Chapter 227 - Silver Rivers ago
Chapter 228 - Descent ago
Chapter 229 - The Great Redeemer ago
Chapter 230 - Out of the Frying Pan ago
Chapter 231 - Rooting out Problems ago
Chapter 232 - Into the Fire ago
Chapter 233 - Falling ago
Chapter 234 - Square Up ago
Chapter 235 - Dao of Formations ago
Chapter 236 - Anzonil ago
Chapter 237 - Mystic Garden ago
Chapter 238 - Mystic Structure ago
Chapter 239 - Through the Tunnels ago
Chapter 240 - Evolution ago
Chapter 241 - Eternal and Unbroken ago
Chapter 242 - Chains of Fate ago
Chapter 243 - Gold and Bones ago
Chapter 244 - Immutable Bulwark ago
Chapter 245 - Indomitable ago
Chapter 246 - Core of Darkness ago
Chapter 247 - Heart of Oblivion ago
Chapter 248 - Cursed Success ago
Chapter 249 - Creation and Oblivion ago
Chapter 250 - Rewards ago
Chapter 251 - Family Drama ago
Chapter 252 - Hunter's Paradise ago
Chapter 253 - Rats and Champions ago
Chapter 254 - Beruv Ylvas ago
Chapter 255 - The E-Grade ago
Chapter 256 - Pits and Tracks ago
Chapter 257 - Billy and Alien-man ago
Chapter 258 - A Singular Goal ago
Chapter 259 - Insurrection ago
Chapter 260 - Wallbreaker ago
Chapter 261 - Catastrophic Losses ago
Chapter 262 - Spear World ago
Chapter 263 - Man's Best Friend ago
Chapter 264 - The Final Sprint ago
Chapter 265 - Ladder Rewards ago
Chapter 266 - Council ago
Chapter 267 - News ago
Chapter 268 - Rescue Mission ago
Chapter 269 - Four Gates ago
Chapter 270 - Riverleaf ago
Chapter 271 - Rockmen ago
Chapter 272 - Corpsebloom Mantra ago
Chapter 273 - Guarantee Death ago
Chapter 274 - Final Tally ago
Chapter 275 - Billions ago
Chapter 276 - Runic Shaman ago
Chapter 277 - Cultivation Cave ago
Chapter 278 - Inheritance ago
Chapter 279 - Proving One's Worth ago
Chapter 280 - Fight Fire with Fire ago
Chapter 281 - Life Versus Death ago
Chapter 282 - The Lord of Cycles ago
Chapter 283 - Mortals and Cultivators ago
Chapter 284 - Beauty and Brawn ago
Chapter 285 - Profound Yin and Everlasting Yang ago
Chapter 286 - Sneaking Inside ago
Chapter 287 - Subterfuge ago
Chapter 288 - A Flower of Fire and Ice ago
Chapter 289 - Setting a Course ago
Chapter 290 - Impartment ago
Chapter 291 - Return ago
Chapter 292 - Westfort ago
Chapter 293 - Different Choices ago
Chapter 294 - Cultivation ago
Chapter 295 - Perusing the Library ago
Chapter 296 - Division of Labor ago
Chapter 297 - Changing Course ago
Chapter 298 - Rot ago
Chapter 299 - Little Bau ago
Chapter 300 - Ready for War ago
Chapter 301 - The Ez'Mahal ago
Chapter 302 - Rage ago
Chapter 303 - Punishment ago
Chapter 304 - Plantations ago
Chapter 305 - War ago
Chapter 306 - The Tal-Eladar ago
Chapter 307 - Finality ago
Chapter 308 - Verana Tir'Emarel ago
Chapter 309 - Grub and Lulu ago
Chapter 310 - Growth ago
Chapter 311 - Peak ago
Chapter 312 - Blood for Blood ago
Chapter 313 - The Belly of the Beast ago
Chapter 314 - Sneaking Inside ago
Chapter 315 - Against the Clock ago
Chapter 316 - Deforestation ago
Chapter 317 - Explosions ago
Chapter 318 - Dao Funnel ago
Chapter 319 - Sugar Daddy ago
Chapter 320 - Karmic Ties ago
Chapter 321 - Severing Karma ago
Chapter 322 - Convergence of Fate ago
Chapter 323 - Sowing Grudges ago
Chapter 324 - Mr. Black ago
Chapter 325 - Underworld Nexus ago
Chapter 326 - Subterranean Diplomacy ago
Chapter 327 - Billionaires' Brawl ago
Chapter 328 - Captive ago
Chapter 329 - Negotiations ago
Chapter 330 - Transit Camp ago
Chapter 331 - Truths and Lies ago
Chapter 332 - New Management ago
Chapter 333 - The Underworld Council ago
Chapter 334 - Hidden Wealth ago
Chapter 335 - Ascension Breaker ago
Chapter 336 - Refined Skills ago
Chapter 337 - Profane Dominance ago
Chapter 338 - Breaking Out ago
Chapter 339 - Battleroach King ago
Chapter 340 - Battle of Attrition ago
Chapter 341 - Firmament's Edge ago
Chapter 342 - An Easy Gig ago
Chapter 343 - Priorities ago
Chapter 344 - Heretics ago
Chapter 345 - Drones ago
Chapter 346 - Heaven's Path ago
Chapter 347 - Enemies Ahead ago
Chapter 348 - Man Versus Machine ago
Chapter 349 - The Final Five ago
Chapter 350 - Despair ago
Chapter 351 - Out of Control ago
Chapter 352 - The Three Paths ago
Chapter 353 - Production Lines ago
Chapter 354 - Sortie ago
Chapter 355 - Baoqui ago
Chapter 356 - Final Stand ago
Chapter 357 - Adriel ago
Chapter 358 - Catharsis ago
Chapter 359 - Evil Stars ago
Chapter 360 - Dangers of Technology ago
Chapter 361 - An Overdue Meeting ago
Chapter 362 - Time Pressure ago
Chapter 363 - Stasis ago
Chapter 364 - Crusade ago
Chapter 365 - Lunatics ago
Chapter 366 - Manufacturing A Fortuitous Encounter ago
Chapter 367 - Playing the Part ago
Chapter 368 - Glimthain ago
Chapter 369 - Heat ago
Chapter 370 - Array Towers ago
Chapter 371 - The Floor is Lava ago
Chapter 372 - Deluge ago
Chapter 373 - Desecration ago
Chapter 374 - Dao of the Axe ago
Chapter 375 - Free Lunch ago
Chapter 376 - Impressions ago
Chapter 377 - Risk and Reward ago
Chapter 378 - Fallout ago
Chapter 379 - Fragment of the Axe ago
Chapter 380 - Coastal Incursion ago
Chapter 381 - Options ago
Chapter 382 - Enforced Balance ago
Chapter 383 - Final Hours ago
Chapter 384 - Apparitions ago
Chapter 385 - Protect Your Wallet ago
Chapter 386 - Galau ago
Chapter 387 - The Naspheyi Clan ago
Chapter 388 - Toxicity ago
Chapter 389 - Dreams ago
Chapter 390 - Balance ago
Chapter 391 - The Eight Calamities ago
Chapter 392 - Emerald Skies ago
Chapter 393 - Last Day ago
Chapter 394 - Last Opportunity ago
Chapter 395 - Prajñā Cherry ago
Chapter 396 - Aftermath ago
Chapter 397 - Elites ago
Chapter 398 - Piker ago
Chapter 399 - The Peaks ago
Chapter 400 - The Law of the Land ago
Chapter 401 - Taboo Origins ago
Chapter 402 - Whittlecreek ago
Chapter 403 - Questing ago
Chapter 404 - Remuneration ago
Chapter 405 - Floor Guardian ago
Chapter 406 - Penalties ago
Chapter 407 - Mastery ago
Chapter 408 - Creation ago
Chapter 409 - Fermentation ago
Chapter 410 - Heartless ago
Chapter 411 - War ago
Chapter 412 - Voidfire ago
Chapter 413 - Concordat ago
Chapter 414 - Ill-Gotten Gains ago
Chapter 415 - Hidden Rules ago
Chapter 416 - Bravoria Goods and Treasures ago
Chapter 417 - Vanguard of Undeath ago
Chapter 418 - Undying Legion ago
Chapter 419 - Tumbles ago
Chapter 420 - Erudite Master ago
Chapter 421 - True Strike ago
Chapter 422 - Road to 1000 ago
Chapter 423 - Cosmic Gaze ago
Chapter 424 - Thelim ago
Chapter 425 - The Enlightened Three ago
Chapter 426 - Talent ago
Chapter 427 - Storm ago
Chapter 428 - Pool of Tranquility ago
Chapter 429 - Reciprocity ago
Chapter 430 - Manuals ago
Chapter 431 - Nine Reincarnations ago
Chapter 432 - Lord Draugr ago
Chapter 433 - War ago
Chapter 434 - Repurpose ago
Chapter 435 - Breeder Clone ago
Chapter 436 - The Tallest Trees ago
Chapter 437 - Struggle for Supremacy ago

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Garrdor
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Real struggle and tension in this survival litrpg

Reviewed at: Chapter 397 - Elites

Update: this story pretty quickly becomes your standard "Dao of Luck" xanxia fare, with the MC stumbling into treasures and powering up from near death experiences (that should have killed him). You better believe there's a settlement that he wants to protect at all costs and his motivations for becoming stronger are "because I need to". Biggest bummer is his fighting style devolves into "I hit the other guy harder, so I won". I'm still reading, obviously, but I'm definitely less enthused, and my earlier review may create unrealistic expectations.

 

I really like this story. Here are some bullet points of the things I like about it.

  •  Survival- The MC is lost in the woods during a system apocalypse. Always like when a character needs to survive and acclimate to dangerous surroundings, both when it's happening and in the future when the MC gets compared to other people. That seems a long way off, though.
  • Realistic Knowledge- Related to above, this story actually has an MC who doesn't know how to immediately game the system. There are a lot of functions of the system that he doesn't know, and even more that he doesn't know he doesn't know, simply because he missed the tutorial. Rarely, you'll see him do something and say, "what an idiot that's clearly not the optimal choice", but all his choices are rational given the amount of information he has. He's super ignorant of what's going on, but using context clues to help himself rather than an deep knowledge of "What to Do when the System Arrives for Dummies".
  • System- Its a cool system, fairly background, and kind of sentient. He doesn't immediately get skills and upgrades, it's honestly him surviving as a (albiet super strong) human.
  • Struggle- The power creep is good, he struggles for a while, figures out ways to overcome those struggles, and then new stuff pops up to struggle against. Not in the "he'll never see or get hurt by level one mobs" way some xianxia stories do, more like they're there but no longer as much of a threat due to training.
  • Plot- Seems like there's some depth to the plot, he's got semi-manditory quests to complete and that may take awhile, day to day survival offset with hints of all the other pieces of the multiverse.
  • Realistic Knowledge- The MC is doing fairly well for himself considering, but is by no means a Mary Sue. He's bled for every step forward he's taken. He doesn't immediately know bush craft or how to make armor or anything, it's refreshing to see someone struggle this long. He actually may be at a disadvantage compared to other humans, but is finding a different path to strength, helped in part cuz everyone else is stuck in the tutorial whilst he suffers. He uses his limited resources pretty well, spear stake traps and such.
  • Human Emotions- The character actually seems to have to deal with the fact he's stuck alone in the woods forced to fight for his life, rather than just being a mannequin devoid of human emotions. I stress, it really sucks for him almost constantly for the first 30 chapters, but that makes it better IMO cuz there's actually stress when he gets in fights. He actually behaves and feels and thinks in a way that a guy stranded alone might.
  • Consistency- All the system stuff is real consistent. The way skills and classes and items work all make sense in this universe.
  • Enemies- The monsters are pretty cool

Those are some of the things I like about the story, so far I only have a couple minor negative things to mention

  • Lucky- his initial luck in the system, literally a rigged dice roll he shouldn't have won, but that's over and done with by chapter 2 and the plots gotta happen somehow. There really wouldn't be another way to make the same general character and story in a more believable, less lucky manner.
  • Town Building I just generally don't like settlement/town management stories, it's nowhere close to getting to that point yet but it seems like a mechanic that's gonna pop up eventually. That's just something I personally don't want to see happen in any story, and it's barely present so far in this one, I just like to whine.

*Edit: new complaints added here as the story continues*

  • Overly Expositional its a kind of take the good with the bad situation, and as much as I like reading about a guy figuring out a System, we gotta read through his every thought process for what the system is an does. Sometimes there are multiple paragraphs in row of him just thinking through what he knows, doesn't know or assumes about the new world's physics.
  • Overly Introspective - similar to above and also a kind of "too much of a good thing", but the MC will also think through about 4-5 actions he wont do before every action he does do. It just kind of drags the story down at times, I don't really care why he decides not to buy 4 different things if he ends up getting something else, ya know? To me this writing feels like a defense mechanism to shield the writer from RRL comments.
  • Weirdly Competent MCs getting real good at murdering demons with an axe/throwing knives for a guy with a pretty hands off system, real quick.

All in all a very well done survival litrpg, with some wuxia elements blended in.

zigman2021
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Have you ever read a book or watched a show you know is objectively bad, but you can't stop? A guilty pleasure? My parents watch Wynona Earp while talking about how awful it is, some people hide away their Twilight books they hope no one finds, and I keep reading Defiance of the Fall.

One can definitely enjoy this. The litrpg aspect is interesting and sucks you in. But the writing itself? Not so much. Let's not even touch on the characters or plot and their problems. Instead, let's only talk about the prose and writing style. There are a LOT of literary crutches used. If you make a drinking game out of every time you see the words "truly" or "true" alone you'll be dead in one chapter. Other words and phrases used a ridiculous amount: Sighed/sighing, couldn't help but/could only, arduously, his heart, hesitantly, old monster... The list goes on.

The worst part? This issue has been brought up. Repeatedly. It's known and extremely easy to fix. All it takes is ctrl + f at the end of a chapter and editing it out. Or even having someone else edit each chapter. But these crutches all still show up a half a dozen or more times a chapter (each!) almost 400 chapters in. So it seems like the writing is never going to change regardless of how many people bring it up.

If you need a litrpg fix and have run out of stuff to read? By all means, you'll enjoy at least some of the time spent on this. But it's objectively not great due to some glaring and easy to fix issues.

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This novel suffers heavily from a lack of planning.

It definitely feels like TheFirstDefier started out with an interesting premise and just kept writing from there. 

Things constantly keep escalating and because of that the characters, their characterization, and the world building start to fall by the wayside.

All of this along with the xianxia trappings of cultivation and conflict reminds me of the author I Eat Tomatoes.

For example: things like the coins having grades could've easily been introduced at the start of the story, instead they're only mentioned when Zac becomes insanely rich so that money can still be a driving factor for conflict.

There've been hints at a larger story surrounding Zac and his sister and their place in the universe, but 300 chapters in its still too early to say.

Each new arc introduces many characters that are, in the moment, interesting but rarely matter going forward. The result of this is a very large cast with relatively little characterization.

In one of the recent chapters Zac joked about Emily being a mascot for Port Atwood. Funny, but I had actually forgotten that character was even a part of the story to begin with. I had to go back and reread to jog my memory because she's been such a non-factor.

The power structure, a mix of cultivation and system rpg, is another aspect of the story that feels a little slipshod. The RPG system starts out understandable but becomes bloated over time with the addition of percentage bonuses and bonuses that apply to the effective value of the stat. Zac being mortal and not a cultivator is only really relevant for the first arc of the story. Now he's cycling energy, forming cores, and exploring the Dao with the best of them. Speaking of, it's probably my own bias but opening nodes in the body being more difficult than grasping fundamental truths of the universe just doesn't feel right.

All that said I still think it's a good novel.

The amount that TheFirstDefier puts out is really commendable. It also gives context as to why some of these issues popped up. 
Overall I think that once this is finished and we know where we're going a good editing pass would easily smooth out these issues and make this go from good to great.

TLDR; Do you like IET? Then this'll do ya just fine.

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The story really hasn't progressed far enough to rate the characters but from what I've seen it seems like they're gonna be somewhat better than in the average rrl story.

Other than that, the story is a pretty basic New World/Ghosthound style deal. Everyone gets a system and is teleported to a tutorial while the earth gets fucked up by monster hordes and stuff. Everyone except for the protagonist of course, he doesn't get a tutorial (lol).

Other than that I am fairly impressed by how the story is relatively gritty (and sometimes defies logic, like how the guy used the same hatchet for over a month swinging it with superhuman strength against monsters that are definitely tougher than your average tree, considering they can break them apart by running into them... without breaking the hatchet) the protagonist is powerful, but at least so far he is not overpowered (he has the promise of becoming overpowered later tho if he plays his cards right). He has to survive by the skin of his teeth, he'd die on a daily basis if he didn't have the system giving him a 'sleep and your fatal injuries will be healed' trope. The author basically hands the protagonist everything he needs on a silver platter like in most stories like these, what he has not done however is give him anything more than what he needs, he's given him exactly the bare minimum and nothing more and I like that. It's pretty decently written too so you can feel the protagonists struggle as he suffers for not getting to do the tutorial like everyone else.

Unlike him however, we do get a tutorial, we get all the basic RPG stats eplained to us as if everybody doesn't already know it and the story is chock full of wordy explanations about the most mundane things. This was my gripe with the story, the pacing feels like it's snailing along because sometimes entire chapters are devoted to just seemingly meaningless exposition. Hell the last chapter I read (37) was one such chapter (edit: and 38 was the same. And 39.). Literally nothing happens in the entire chapter.

This kind of stuff is a huge pet peeve of mine, when authors do too much exposition, spend too much time on explaining or detailing things that don't really warrant that much text.

Good writing is a balancing act between colorful wording and effective pacing, this author leans a bit too heavily on the former for my tastes. The only reason the story even progressed anywhere for the past 30 chapters is because the author at some point went 'fuck it' and did a month's time skip. (Thankfully, or we would have had chapter upon chapter of the protagonist doing the exact same thing)

Like others have said I share the opinion that this story has potential, it's too early to tell if it's worse or better than the works it seems inspired by, but I'm worried it will never be finished with this focus on overly detailed explanations.

I would advise the author to show more, and tell less. Not everything needs to be explained in full detail, let the readers imagination work out most of the things and focus on what's important to the main plot progression instead. If you look at some great artists (like say wlop for an excellent example) if you look closely at their artwork you will find that sometimes up to  80% or so of their pictures may end up being just blobs, anything that isn't the main focus/character of the picture is only vaguely defined. And it works, your brain will fill in these details when you look at the picture as a whole, but zoom in on it and all you'll see are blobs.

With the decreasing attention spans of humanity as a whole in our current society, it's vital for writers to adopt a similar strategy in their writing to keep the attention of readers.

Update: Now I'm at chapter 278.

Characters are, in line with my original impression, decent. They're better than in most stories in that they have actual personalities of their own, even if it's mostly template personalities, at least they're not full blown template characters. I should warn you though that if you're into good characters, you probably won't like this story because 90% of it is just focused on the protagonist. Other characters get defined personalities, but they don't get much further fleshed out than that, you won't be finding many tragic backstories or any character development in this story. There's a few interesting characters spread around in the novel, and you might actually be able to feel invested in some characters (hopefully at least the protagonist), but I doubt you'll be singing the author praises for good characters. Suffice it to say that he makes characters that work for the story, rather than a story that works for the characters. The story is centered around the protagonist mostly, other characters are in the end mostly just extras, so far most of the story is still the protagonist going solo, not that I dislike that at all, but it is what it is.

What I do dislike however is that unlike my original impression of the story being similar to new world and randidly ghosthound is that this is actually a xianxia story, I can see the tag is there now but I don't think it was when I started reading; what I do like however is that it's much better organized than any xianxia I've ever seen, namely that the power scaling of everyone is rather properly defined here thanks to the litrpg system, e.g. we pretty much know at all times where the protagonist stands on the global scale of power. Maybe not how powerful he is compared to others on the same scale, but just which scale he's on (i.e. the ratings of A, B, C, D, E and F essentially, and of course the levels). Everyone can be a bit of a wild card since their final power output depends heavily on their class and equipment and their 'daos' (a thing I really dislike in this story, the 'daos' create an undefined power scaling system within a decently defined one, tsk tsk.), but it's usually a fairly safe bet that a rank D warrior will not be able to defeat a rank C one with exceptions (exceptions like plot shields and overpowered daos!)

On that note, now that the story has progressed a bit, the protagonist is now overpowered, but only overpowered within his power scaling category (I don't remember what it was but I mean it's pretty down there like E or something) if you want specific, here's a lil spoiler:

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As another review said, this story suffers a bit from lack of planning, but I somehow always end up coming back to it, I first dropped it at ch 36 or so, but then came back to it a good long while later when it had 100+ chapters. Then I had enough of this stupidity but eventually came back when it had 200+ chapters, now I'm coming back to it again when it has 300+ chapters.

The faults of the story being as they may, I have to give the author credit where credit is due. I have never on this site seen another author that's as consistent in his publishing rates as this one. I've seen it on other sites mind you, the chinese mass produced trash wuxia/xianxia novels in particular over on sites like webnovel.com do have this, it's just that they're always trash with absolutely no pacing, this story is similar I suppose (xianxia right?), but orders of magnitude better, has actual pacing (even if slow) and the plot is actively developing (even if slowly). So kudos for that!

I stand by my original ratings for the story, although I always end up dropping it at some point because of either pacing issues at some stretch of chapters, or some stupid things going on, I always come back to it fresh and mildly excited to keep reading it months later, which means there's some kind of rare quality to this story, because there aren't many stories I come back to after dropping 'em, and yet for this one it's happened 3 times.

(Update, now at ch 376; pacing issues have gotten worse, not enough happened in the last 100 chapters, dropped style score by half star for how ridiculously reduced the pacing has now become, but as I said earlier, the bad pacing is largely mitigated by the consistently fast chapter release rate, so the real major downside to this really is the amount of filler text, or like I said in the original review, this author should really show more and tell less, rather than listening to my advice however, he seems to have gone the opposite direction, telling more and showing less, sometimes having entire exposition dump chapters just to explain things that were already thoroughly explained in earlier exposition dumps (chapter 375 for instance))

So you know what? Go ahead and read it, it's no masterpiece, you will probably enjoy some of it and get frustrated at some of it, but it is at least so far somewhat worth your time, especially if you can't find anything else good to read. It has a few decent plot twists, and passably good worldbuilding too, I doubt you'll be head over heels for the story but I also doubt you'll hate it, unless you're super picky.

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Hits blunt "Dao"

 

DotF has an averagely good start, got the hook though not the sinker. Various life-and-death battle right off the bat, which is dynamic and engaging indeed, but kind of spoiled when you just see there are still so many chapters ahead. Right away we see our MC about to die but survived due to his devil-rigged luck. Get used to his Luck, however, since it won't go away for a while, perhaps ever.

Frankly speaking, it doesn't have many grammar mistakes. TheFirstDefiance's usage of words is refreshing for me who's been stuck with Japanese MTL for months. That being said, they sometimes miss some words and commas, and, either forgot or intentional, don't use past tenses in some. But again, I'm no native, and my command over engrish I got mostly from western movies if not translated Japanese novels.

The story is passable, and it's not stagnant. From survival to conquer to town building, and it's still moving. We see it unfolding through the eye of the Defiant, Zac. I liked it when it was less exposition and more show and feel at the beginning, but I guess the Author have to rely on the ol' reliable wall of text. We see how strong our MC is time and again, but we're keep reminded that he's but a lion cub playing with mice in the ruthless jungle. When the Author use a graded system, what they do is they gave us a promise. We thought our MC has reached the peak, but there's still so much to explore, stronger enemies to fight, tougher hurdles to topple. He's still a grade (F)

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being in a grade (D) baby world, while there are still grade (B) old monsters and many more in the infinitely vast multi-verse, waiting for their appearance.

However, this novel will, and has to, be a long-running series if the Author wish to keep their current story pace. After all, 200 chapters in and we're still stuck on Earth dealing Earth problems. A tangled mess of conflict it is for our number one survivor to unravel before we can even consider stepping onto foreign lands.

And here is the series' weakest point, the characters. Various names show up only to be forgotten not even a chapter after. A myriad of people we meet via Zac through his journey turns irrelevant after they filled their roles. And when their names resurface, you'll have to dig your memory quite deep to find, if they ever lodged there in the first place. Not to mention, Zac's own characterization. He starts human, weak and naive. And as he grows stronger so does his personality, becoming harsher and cold so to adapt the Ruthless Heaven and the Multi-verse on its wake. Not just once he hurts the people around him due to the distrust he bears, and he's only growing more crooked to "fit" into the System. At first, I thought he'd got better, or at least see his roots when he met her sister after a while, but Nah.

The only reason why I give it three stars instead of two is that I like the MC's interaction with his Lancer. In fact, I would totally ship them if I was a fujoshi, which I am not. Fortunately, or unfortunately.

PS: I literally dance whenever I found a story I like. This one, I only danced once. 

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Overall it's decent for what it is, a cultivation story with a system. But it could use some work and a good polish. But i don’t think that will happen, the author reminds me of Chinese Wuxia authors. He is making a very long story with many plots and paths it can take, while keeping the tension high to keep people reading.

 I honestly won’t go into detail because other people have already pointed out everything I would put down. 

 If you like a decent story about a body cultivator who has to suffer to get stronger, this story is for you. Otherwise, maybe pass it up.

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One of the stories that has nearly nothing special but cannot hold yourself to not to read. A classic world survival story with mediocre at everything. But hey I really like mediocre stories far more than stories that have its ups and downs. Definetily worth to read if you have nothing important to do.

WhirlyKing
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I haven't read enough cultivation stories to be able to accurately judge DotF for originality there but I enjoy the mix of the two subgenres.

Defiance of the Fall is an enjoyable post apocalypse story that has, I think, a good mix of seriousness and fun. It doesn't get too bogged down in how depressing a lot of the world dying would be but does address the fact even if not deeply. Zac is a good guy trying to do his best in a world where might makes right and I think he succeeds for the most part. He sometimes goes down darker paths but it's at least acknowledged and he attempts to do better some of the time.

Overall I enjoy the story and think it's worth a read.

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Strong beginning but petered out

Reviewed at: Chapter 24 - Class

EDIT: A kind reader has pointed out that some of my nitpicks and issues I had with the story have been fixed. When I wrote this review, the story was around chapter 35. With over 100 chapters now the story is different then when I reviewed in the beginning. I'll give the story another read in the future and I'll update my review to accurately reflect how I feel about the story then.

 

The story had a good start despite it being somewhat of a cliche. Apocolptic-litrpg where the MC is off on his own trying to survive in this new dark and gritty world. The author blended a few elements of eastern fantasy books with western litrpg and it came out pretty well. I did enjoy the story a lot, which is why I'm more disappointed as I got my hopes up. The story started to take a dive in quality when the MC made poor judgements and out of character decisions and the author started to handwave details too big to ignore. The problems I had with the story are pretty spoilery, so I wouldn't recommend clicking it if you're a new reader.

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 There's a bunch of minor issues that just keep piling up and it's hard not to be nitpicky about it when they're so glaring. It's not allowed me to fully enjoy the story and after writing this review has soured my taste for this story even more. I rated this story as a 3.5/5 stars, but as I wrote this review and looked more indepth in the issues I had with it, lowered it to 3/5. I imagine many users on this site can overlook these problems and rate it 4-5 stars easily. I would recommend this story to readers very familiar with royal road, but I wouldn't recommend this to anyone who mainly reads published books.

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Story starys off with it being taken over by the system.  Where the lucky few have the cultivator ability awoken and are taken off for training.  The rest are left to deal with the invaders.  The MC is one of those that were left.  To make matters worse he starts off in the exact spot that a monster is going to spawn and has to roll the dice for his life.  

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Does not fell lile the MC has to struggle all that much.  Fighting foes that have unlocked cultivation and beats them, with only some minor ingenunity.  This is a system that is supposed to favor the powerful, where if you are not a cultivator, you are trash.  Yet the MC thrives killing everything in sight.

 

The Good:

Even with being super OP'd the MC is still interesting.  

The grammar is great, few errors, allow the reader to stay immersed in the story.

Has a plot that stays consistant and believable.  

Good world building and leveling system.  Both the explantion and execution are consistant and detailed.

Supporting characters background is there and is decent.