Defiance of the Fall

Defiance of the Fall

by TheFirstDefier

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Zac was alone in the middle of the forest when the world changed.

The whole planet was introduced to the multiverse by an unfeeling System... or God. A universe where an endless number of races and civilizations fought for power and dominion. Zac finds himself stuck in the wilderness surrounded by deadly beasts, demons, and worse. Alone, lost and without answers, he must find the means to survive and get stronger in this new cut-throat reality.

With only a hatchet for his weapon, he'll have to seek out his family before the world collapses... or die trying.

 

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue - Welcome to the Multi-Verse ago
Chapter 1 - Roll For Survival ago
Chapter 2 - A New World ago
Chapter 3 - Battle Tactics ago
Chapter 4 - Alone ago
Chapter 5 - Stranded ago
Chapter 6 - Born for Carnage ago
Chapter 7 - Outpost ago
Continue reading on Kindle, Kindle Unlimited, and Audible ago
Chapter 214 - Traps and Ladders ago
Chapter 215 - Treasures ago
Chapter 216 - Appeasing the Spirit ago
Chapter 217 - Ransacking ago
Chapter 218 - Alchemist's Mountain ago
Chapter 219 - Alliance ago
Chapter 220 - Jackpot ago
Chapter 221 - Public Enemy Number One ago
Chapter 222 - Herbs and Pills ago
Chapter 223 - Darkness ago
Chapter 224 - Salvation ago
Chapter 225 - Diplomacy ago
Chapter 226 - Alliances ago
Chapter 227 - Silver Rivers ago
Chapter 228 - Descent ago
Chapter 229 - The Great Redeemer ago
Chapter 230 - Out of the Frying Pan ago
Chapter 231 - Rooting out Problems ago
Chapter 232 - Into the Fire ago
Chapter 233 - Falling ago
Chapter 234 - Square Up ago
Chapter 235 - Dao of Formations ago
Chapter 236 - Anzonil ago
Chapter 237 - Mystic Garden ago
Chapter 238 - Mystic Structure ago
Chapter 239 - Through the Tunnels ago
Chapter 240 - Evolution ago
Chapter 241 - Eternal and Unbroken ago
Chapter 242 - Chains of Fate ago
Chapter 243 - Gold and Bones ago
Chapter 244 - Immutable Bulwark ago
Chapter 245 - Indomitable ago
Chapter 246 - Core of Darkness ago
Chapter 247 - Heart of Oblivion ago
Chapter 248 - Cursed Success ago
Chapter 249 - Creation and Oblivion ago
Chapter 250 - Rewards ago
Chapter 251 - Family Drama ago
Chapter 252 - Hunter's Paradise ago
Chapter 253 - Rats and Champions ago
Chapter 254 - Beruv Ylvas ago
Chapter 255 - The E-Grade ago
Chapter 256 - Pits and Tracks ago
Chapter 257 - Billy and Alien-man ago
Chapter 258 - A Singular Goal ago
Chapter 259 - Insurrection ago
Chapter 260 - Wallbreaker ago
Chapter 261 - Catastrophic Losses ago
Chapter 262 - Spear World ago
Chapter 263 - Man's Best Friend ago
Chapter 264 - The Final Sprint ago
Chapter 265 - Ladder Rewards ago
Chapter 266 - Council ago
Chapter 267 - News ago
Chapter 268 - Rescue Mission ago
Chapter 269 - Four Gates ago
Chapter 270 - Riverleaf ago
Chapter 271 - Rockmen ago
Chapter 272 - Corpsebloom Mantra ago
Chapter 273 - Guarantee Death ago
Chapter 274 - Final Tally ago
Chapter 275 - Billions ago
Chapter 276 - Runic Shaman ago
Chapter 277 - Cultivation Cave ago
Chapter 278 - Inheritance ago
Chapter 279 - Proving One's Worth ago
Chapter 280 - Fight Fire with Fire ago
Chapter 281 - Life Versus Death ago
Chapter 282 - The Lord of Cycles ago
Chapter 283 - Mortals and Cultivators ago
Chapter 284 - Beauty and Brawn ago
Chapter 285 - Profound Yin and Everlasting Yang ago
Chapter 286 - Sneaking Inside ago
Chapter 287 - Subterfuge ago
Chapter 288 - A Flower of Fire and Ice ago
Chapter 289 - Setting a Course ago
Chapter 290 - Impartment ago
Chapter 291 - Return ago
Chapter 292 - Westfort ago
Chapter 293 - Different Choices ago
Chapter 294 - Cultivation ago
Chapter 295 - Perusing the Library ago
Chapter 296 - Division of Labor ago
Chapter 297 - Changing Course ago
Chapter 298 - Rot ago
Chapter 299 - Little Bau ago
Chapter 300 - Ready for War ago
Chapter 301 - The Ez'Mahal ago
Chapter 302 - Rage ago
Chapter 303 - Punishment ago
Chapter 304 - Plantations ago
Chapter 305 - War ago
Chapter 306 - The Tal-Eladar ago
Chapter 307 - Finality ago
Chapter 308 - Verana Tir'Emarel ago
Chapter 309 - Grub and Lulu ago
Chapter 310 - Growth ago
Chapter 311 - Peak ago
Chapter 312 - Blood for Blood ago
Chapter 313 - The Belly of the Beast ago
Chapter 314 - Sneaking Inside ago
Chapter 315 - Against the Clock ago
Chapter 316 - Deforestation ago
Chapter 317 - Explosions ago
Chapter 318 - Dao Funnel ago
Chapter 319 - Sugar Daddy ago
Chapter 320 - Karmic Ties ago
Chapter 321 - Severing Karma ago
Chapter 322 - Convergence of Fate ago
Chapter 323 - Sowing Grudges ago
Chapter 324 - Mr. Black ago
Chapter 325 - Underworld Nexus ago
Chapter 326 - Subterranean Diplomacy ago
Chapter 327 - Billionaires' Brawl ago
Chapter 328 - Captive ago
Chapter 329 - Negotiations ago
Chapter 330 - Transit Camp ago
Chapter 331 - Truths and Lies ago
Chapter 332 - New Management ago
Chapter 333 - The Underworld Council ago
Chapter 334 - Hidden Wealth ago
Chapter 335 - Ascension Breaker ago
Chapter 336 - Refined Skills ago
Chapter 337 - Profane Dominance ago
Chapter 338 - Breaking Out ago
Chapter 339 - Battleroach King ago
Chapter 340 - Battle of Attrition ago
Chapter 341 - Firmament's Edge ago
Chapter 342 - An Easy Gig ago
Chapter 343 - Priorities ago
Chapter 344 - Heretics ago
Chapter 345 - Drones ago
Chapter 346 - Heaven's Path ago
Chapter 347 - Enemies Ahead ago
Chapter 348 - Man Versus Machine ago
Chapter 349 - The Final Five ago
Chapter 350 - Despair ago
Chapter 351 - Out of Control ago
Chapter 352 - The Three Paths ago
Chapter 353 - Production Lines ago
Chapter 354 - Sortie ago
Chapter 355 - Baoqui ago
Chapter 356 - Final Stand ago
Chapter 357 - Adriel ago
Chapter 358 - Catharsis ago
Chapter 359 - Evil Stars ago
Chapter 360 - Dangers of Technology ago
Chapter 361 - An Overdue Meeting ago
Chapter 362 - Time Pressure ago
Chapter 363 - Stasis ago
Chapter 364 - Crusade ago
Chapter 365 - Lunatics ago
Chapter 366 - Manufacturing A Fortuitous Encounter ago
Chapter 367 - Playing the Part ago
Chapter 368 - Glimthain ago
Chapter 369 - Heat ago
Chapter 370 - Array Towers ago
Chapter 371 - The Floor is Lava ago
Chapter 372 - Deluge ago
Chapter 373 - Desecration ago
Chapter 374 - Dao of the Axe ago
Chapter 375 - Free Lunch ago
Chapter 376 - Impressions ago
Chapter 377 - Risk and Reward ago
Chapter 378 - Fallout ago
Chapter 379 - Fragment of the Axe ago
Chapter 380 - Coastal Incursion ago
Chapter 381 - Options ago
Chapter 382 - Enforced Balance ago
Chapter 383 - Final Hours ago
Chapter 384 - Apparitions ago
Chapter 385 - Protect Your Wallet ago
Chapter 386 - Galau ago
Chapter 387 - The Naspheyi Clan ago
Chapter 388 - Toxicity ago
Chapter 389 - Dreams ago
Chapter 390 - Balance ago
Chapter 391 - The Eight Calamities ago
Chapter 392 - Emerald Skies ago
Chapter 393 - Last Day ago
Chapter 394 - Last Opportunity ago
Chapter 395 - Prajñā Cherry ago
Chapter 396 - Aftermath ago
Chapter 397 - Elites ago
Chapter 398 - Piker ago
Chapter 399 - The Peaks ago
Chapter 400 - The Law of the Land ago
Chapter 401 - Taboo Origins ago
Chapter 402 - Whittlecreek ago
Chapter 403 - Questing ago
Chapter 404 - Remuneration ago
Chapter 405 - Floor Guardian ago
Chapter 406 - Penalties ago
Chapter 407 - Mastery ago
Chapter 408 - Creation ago
Chapter 409 - Fermentation ago
Chapter 410 - Heartless ago
Chapter 411 - War ago
Chapter 412 - Voidfire ago
Chapter 413 - Concordat ago
Chapter 414 - Ill-Gotten Gains ago
Chapter 415 - Hidden Rules ago
Chapter 416 - Bravoria Goods and Treasures ago
Chapter 417 - Vanguard of Undeath ago
Chapter 418 - Undying Legion ago
Chapter 419 - Tumbles ago
Chapter 420 - Erudite Master ago
Chapter 421 - True Strike ago
Chapter 422 - Road to 1000 ago
Chapter 423 - Cosmic Gaze ago
Chapter 424 - Thelim ago
Chapter 425 - The Enlightened Three ago
Chapter 426 - Talent ago
Chapter 427 - Storm ago
Chapter 428 - Pool of Tranquility ago
Chapter 429 - Reciprocity ago
Chapter 430 - Manuals ago
Chapter 431 - Nine Reincarnations ago
Chapter 432 - Lord Draugr ago
Chapter 433 - War ago
Chapter 434 - Repurpose ago
Chapter 435 - Breeder Clone ago
Chapter 436 - The Tallest Trees ago
Chapter 437 - Struggle for Supremacy ago
Chapter 438 - Points ago
Chapter 439 - Battle of Fates ago
Chapter 440 - Fractured ago
Chapter 441 - Faceless ago
Chapter 442 - A Break from the Monotony ago
Chapter 443 - Fate ago
Chapter 444 - Dreams ago
Chapter 445 - Gains ago
Chapter 446 - The Hayner Clan ago
Chapter 447 - Fated ago
Chapter 448 - Nouveau Riche ago
Chapter 449 - Pawn of Fate ago
Chapter 450 - Out of Reach ago
Chapter 451 - Little Bean ago
Chapter 452 - Road of No Return ago
Chapter 453 - Clearance ago
Chapter 454 - Undercover ago
Chapter 455 - The Machine God Faction ago
Chapter 456 - Dr. Fried ago
Chapter 457 - Desolation ago
Chapter 458 - Creation ago
Chapter 459 - Perception of Reality ago
Chapter 460 - Indigestion ago
Chapter 461 - Pink ago
Chapter 462 - Dragon ago
Chapter 463 - Chaos ago
Chapter 464 - An Old Friend ago
Chapter 465 - Beware the Terminus ago
Chapter 466 - War ago
Chapter 467 - Man Versus World ago
Chapter 468 - Restrained ago
Chapter 469 - Clashing Fates ago
Chapter 470 - Friends and Foes ago
Chapter 471 - Quid Pro Quo ago
Chapter 472 - Arcane ago
Chapter 473 - Twilight Harbor ago
Chapter 474 - Challenged ago
Chapter 475 - Trapped ago
Chapter 476 - Sowing Discord ago
Chapter 477 - Meteors ago
Chapter 478 - Fighting Fate ago
Chapter 479 - Fragments ago
Chapter 480 - Desperate Times ago
Chapter 481 - The Next Step ago
Chapter 482 - Love's Bond ago
Chapter 483 - Against the Natural Order ago
Chapter 484 - Invitations ago
Chapter 485 - Choices ago
Chapter 486 - Decision ago
Chapter 487 - Heart ago
Chapter 488 - The Final Era ago
Chapter 489 - A Frayed Web of Uncertainty ago
Chapter 490 - The Second Step ago
Chapter 491 - Clashing Versions ago
Chapter 492 - Heartbeat ago
Chapter 493 - Void Heart ago
Chapter 494 - Balance ago
Chapter 495 - Turbulence ago
Chapter 496 - Death Defiance ago
Chapter 497 - Attunement ago
Chapter 498 - Go Time ago
Chapter 499 - Pillars and Beams ago
Chapter 500 - Wallbreakers ago
Chapter 501 - Death's Embrace ago
Chapter 502 - Scourge ago
Chapter 503 - Hidden Aces ago
Chapter 504 - Broken ago
Chapter 505 - Fate's Obduracy ago
Chapter 506 - Triv ago
Chapter 507 - Lump of Coal ago
Chapter 508 - Bloodlines ago
Chapter 509 - Challenge ago
Chapter 510 - Eveningtide ago
Chapter 511 - Plans and Schemes ago
Chapter 512 - Regret ago
Chapter 513 - Pathways ago
Chapter 514 - Cultivation Cave ago
Chapter 515 - Divide ago
Chapter 516 - Beastcrafting ago
Chapter 517 - Jammers ago
Chapter 518 - Artifact ago
Chapter 519 - Cleanse ago
Chapter 520 - A Clean Break ago
Chapter 521 - Birds ago
Chapter 522 - The Abyss and Arcadia ago
Chapter 523 - Jungle ago
Chapter 524 - Fanaticism ago
Chapter 525 - Sigil ago
Chapter 526 - Holy Fire ago
Chapter 527 - The Next Step ago
Chapter 528 - S-Grade ago
Chapter 529 - Adaptability ago
Chapter 530 - Incentives for Exploration ago
Chapter 531 - Peace ago
Chapter 532 - Upgrading the Shipyard ago
Chapter 533 - Non-lethal Lethality ago
Chapter 534 - Blighted Cut ago
Chapter 535 - War Council ago
Chapter 536 - Sincerity ago
Chapter 537 - Clues ago
Chapter 538 - Nepotism ago
Chapter 539 - Loot ago
Chapter 540 - Attunement ago
Chapter 541 - Dust and Bones ago
Chapter 542 - Crusade ago
Chapter 543 - Battleplans ago
Chapter 544 - Intent ago
Chapter 545 - War Machine ago
Chapter 546 - Massacre ago
Chapter 547 - Monster ago
Chapter 548 - Wrath ago
Chapter 549 - Adcarkas ago
Chapter 550 - Swamp ago
Chapter 551 - Connectedness ago
Chapter 552 - River ago
Chapter 553 - Roots ago
Chapter 554 - Life, Death, War ago
Chapter 555 - Trinity ago
Chapter 556 - Heaven's Mandate ago
Chapter 557 - Retaliation ago
Chapter 558 - Showdown ago
Chapter 559 - Void ago
Chapter 560 - Pressure ago
Chapter 561 - Liar ago
Chapter 562 - Back Again ago
Chapter 563 - Return ago
Chapter 564 - Precipice ago
Chapter 565 - Convictions ago
Chapter 566 - Lunar Tribe ago
Chapter 567 - Expansion ago
Chapter 568 - First Entry ago
Chapter 569 - Rifts ago
Chapter 570 - The World is Ending ago
Chapter 571 - Back-up Plans ago
Chapter 572 - Flames ago
Chapter 573 - Ash and Steel ago
Chapter 574 - Deathwish ago
Chapter 575 - Tempering ago
Chapter 576 - Plunge ago
Chapter 577 - Corruption ago
Chapter 578 - Sacrifices ago
Chapter 579 - Void ago
Chapter 580 - Gate ago
Chapter 581 - Hunger ago
Chapter 582 - Conformation of Supremacy ago
Chapter 583 - Overrun ago
Chapter 584 - Storm Surge ago
Chapter 585 - Alpha ago
Chapter 586 - Delayed Gratification ago
Chapter 587 - Pathstrider ago
Chapter 588 - Lunar Forest ago
Chapter 589 - Tracks ago
Chapter 590 - Let's Talk ago
Chapter 591 - The Hero's Journey ago
Chapter 592 - Datamancers ago
Chapter 593 - Old Friends ago
Chapter 594 - Bubbles ago
Chapter 595 - Karma and Time ago
Chapter 596 - Hands ago
Chapter 597 - The Collector ago
Chapter 598 - The Hero's Burden ago
Chapter 599 - Horror ago
Chapter 600 - Mapper ago
Chapter 601 - Next Step ago
Chapter 602 - Crowdfunding ago
Chapter 603 - Monochrome ago
Chapter 604 - Anchor ago
Chapter 605 - Missive ago
Chapter 606 - Inner Layer ago
Chapter 607 - Unmarked Boxes ago
Chapter 608 - Divine Guidance ago
Chapter 609 - Conflicting Truths ago
Chapter 610 - Looming Threat ago
Chapter 611 - Lab 16 ago
Chapter 612 - Betrayal ago
Chapter 613 - Helping Hand ago
Chapter 614 - Gifts and Reciprocation ago
Chapter 615 - A Different Sky ago
Chapter 616 - Blood for Blood ago
Chapter 617 - Like Moths to a Flame ago
Chapter 618 - Path to Freedom ago
Chapter 619 - Despicable ago
Chapter 620 - Sankhara-Dukkha ago
Chapter 621 - Ripples ago
Chapter 622 - Upheavals ago
Chapter 623 - Benevolent Shepherd ago
Chapter 624 - Island Hopping ago
Chapter 625 - Under Attack ago
Chapter 626 - Denizens of the Void ago
Chapter 627 - Hunger ago
Chapter 628 - Resisting Fate ago
Chapter 629 - Final Stretch ago
Chapter 630 - Foothold ago
Chapter 631 - Judgement ago
Chapter 632 - Asura ago
Chapter 633 - The Gift of Life ago
Chapter 634 - Seals ago
Chapter 635 - Bad Omens ago
Chapter 636 - Shortage ago
Chapter 637 - Treasure Mountain ago
Chapter 638 - Perfection ago
Chapter 639 - To Eat ago
Chapter 640 - Force of the Void ago
Chapter 641 - From the Void ago
Chapter 642 - Infighting and Finishers ago
Chapter 643 - Wresting Control ago
Book 1 out on Amazon/Kindle Unlimited/Audible! New bonus chapter goal! ago
Chapter 644 - Bloodline Resonance ago
Chapter 645 - Sever Karma ago
Chapter 646 - Clan Volor ago
Chapter 647 - Weight of Sin ago
Chapter 648 - Paradise ago
Chapter 649 - Ember of Glory ago
Chapter 650 - Prison ago
Chapter 651 - Overbearing Truth ago
Chapter 652 - Inner Chambers ago
Chapter 653 - Mad Ambition ago
Chapter 654 - Overpowering ago
Chapter 655 - The Key to Life ago
Chapter 656 - Ticking Clock ago
Chapter 657 - Barter ago
Chapter 658 - Ragnarök ago
Chapter 659 - On the Horizon ago
Chapter 660 - Anniversary ago
Chapter 661 - Peak Performance ago
Chapter 662 - Deviant ago
Chapter 663 - Tribulation ago
Chapter 664 - Destiny ago
Chapter 665 - Power ago
Chapter 666 - Powerless ago
Chapter 667 - Einherjar ago
Chapter 668 - Cycle of Life and Death ago
Chapter 669 - Grasping for Perfection ago
Chapter 670 - Alternative Paths ago
Chapter 671 - Vilari ago
Chapter 672 - Skill Fusions ago
Chapter 673 - Departure ago
Chapter 674 - Equanimity ago
Chapter 675 - Bloodwind ago
Chapter 676 - Zanda ago
Chapter 677 - Big Axe Coliseum ago
Chapter 678 - Tyrant ago
Chapter 679 - Terror of the Twinruins ago
Chapter 680 - Big Boss's Big Wall ago
Chapter 681 - Buyout ago
Chapter 682 - Attendant ago
Chapter 683 - New Horizons ago

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Garrdor
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Real struggle and tension in this survival litrpg

Reviewed at: Chapter 593 - Old Friends

Update: this story pretty quickly becomes your standard "Dao of Luck" xanxia fare, with the MC stumbling into treasures and powering up from near death experiences (that should have killed him). You better believe there's a settlement that he wants to protect at all costs and his motivations for becoming stronger are "because I need to". Biggest bummer is his fighting style devolves into "I hit the other guy harder, so I won". I'm still reading, obviously, but I'm definitely less enthused, and my earlier review may create unrealistic expectations.

 

I really like this story. Here are some bullet points of the things I like about it.

  •  Survival- The MC is lost in the woods during a system apocalypse. Always like when a character needs to survive and acclimate to dangerous surroundings, both when it's happening and in the future when the MC gets compared to other people. That seems a long way off, though.
  • Realistic Knowledge- Related to above, this story actually has an MC who doesn't know how to immediately game the system. There are a lot of functions of the system that he doesn't know, and even more that he doesn't know he doesn't know, simply because he missed the tutorial. Rarely, you'll see him do something and say, "what an idiot that's clearly not the optimal choice", but all his choices are rational given the amount of information he has. He's super ignorant of what's going on, but using context clues to help himself rather than an deep knowledge of "What to Do when the System Arrives for Dummies".
  • System- Its a cool system, fairly background, and kind of sentient. He doesn't immediately get skills and upgrades, it's honestly him surviving as a (albiet super strong) human.
  • Struggle- The power creep is good, he struggles for a while, figures out ways to overcome those struggles, and then new stuff pops up to struggle against. Not in the "he'll never see or get hurt by level one mobs" way some xianxia stories do, more like they're there but no longer as much of a threat due to training.
  • Plot- Seems like there's some depth to the plot, he's got semi-manditory quests to complete and that may take awhile, day to day survival offset with hints of all the other pieces of the multiverse.
  • Realistic Knowledge- The MC is doing fairly well for himself considering, but is by no means a Mary Sue. He's bled for every step forward he's taken. He doesn't immediately know bush craft or how to make armor or anything, it's refreshing to see someone struggle this long. He actually may be at a disadvantage compared to other humans, but is finding a different path to strength, helped in part cuz everyone else is stuck in the tutorial whilst he suffers. He uses his limited resources pretty well, spear stake traps and such.
  • Human Emotions- The character actually seems to have to deal with the fact he's stuck alone in the woods forced to fight for his life, rather than just being a mannequin devoid of human emotions. I stress, it really sucks for him almost constantly for the first 30 chapters, but that makes it better IMO cuz there's actually stress when he gets in fights. He actually behaves and feels and thinks in a way that a guy stranded alone might.
  • Consistency- All the system stuff is real consistent. The way skills and classes and items work all make sense in this universe.
  • Enemies- The monsters are pretty cool

Those are some of the things I like about the story, so far I only have a couple minor negative things to mention

  • Lucky- his initial luck in the system, literally a rigged dice roll he shouldn't have won, but that's over and done with by chapter 2 and the plots gotta happen somehow. There really wouldn't be another way to make the same general character and story in a more believable, less lucky manner.
  • Town Building I just generally don't like settlement/town management stories, it's nowhere close to getting to that point yet but it seems like a mechanic that's gonna pop up eventually. That's just something I personally don't want to see happen in any story, and it's barely present so far in this one, I just like to whine.

*Edit: new complaints added here as the story continues*

  • Overly Expositional its a kind of take the good with the bad situation, and as much as I like reading about a guy figuring out a System, we gotta read through his every thought process for what the system is an does. Sometimes there are multiple paragraphs in row of him just thinking through what he knows, doesn't know or assumes about the new world's physics.
  • Overly Introspective - similar to above and also a kind of "too much of a good thing", but the MC will also think through about 4-5 actions he wont do before every action he does do. It just kind of drags the story down at times, I don't really care why he decides not to buy 4 different things if he ends up getting something else, ya know? To me this writing feels like a defense mechanism to shield the writer from RRL comments.
  • Weirdly Competent MCs getting real good at murdering demons with an axe/throwing knives for a guy with a pretty hands off system, real quick.

All in all a very well done survival litrpg, with some wuxia elements blended in.

Chayim
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Narrative Escalation is Hard

Reviewed at: Chapter 477 - Meteors

This novel suffers heavily from a lack of planning.

It definitely feels like TheFirstDefier started out with an interesting premise and just kept writing from there. 

Things constantly keep escalating and because of that the characters, their characterization, and the world building start to fall by the wayside.

All of this along with the xianxia trappings of cultivation and conflict reminds me of the author I Eat Tomatoes.

For example: things like the coins having grades could've easily been introduced at the start of the story, instead they're only mentioned when Zac becomes insanely rich so that money can still be a driving factor for conflict.

There've been hints at a larger story surrounding Zac and his sister and their place in the universe, but 300 chapters in its still too early to say.

Each new arc introduces many characters that are, in the moment, interesting but rarely matter going forward. The result of this is a very large cast with relatively little characterization.

In one of the recent chapters Zac joked about Emily being a mascot for Port Atwood. Funny, but I had actually forgotten that character was even a part of the story to begin with. I had to go back and reread to jog my memory because she's been such a non-factor.

The power structure, a mix of cultivation and system rpg, is another aspect of the story that feels a little slipshod. The RPG system starts out understandable but becomes bloated over time with the addition of percentage bonuses and bonuses that apply to the effective value of the stat. Zac being mortal and not a cultivator is only really relevant for the first arc of the story. Now he's cycling energy, forming cores, and exploring the Dao with the best of them. Speaking of, it's probably my own bias but opening nodes in the body being more difficult than grasping fundamental truths of the universe just doesn't feel right.

All that said I still think it's a good novel.

The amount that TheFirstDefier puts out is really commendable. It also gives context as to why some of these issues popped up. 
Overall I think that once this is finished and we know where we're going a good editing pass would easily smooth out these issues and make this go from good to great.

TLDR; Do you like IET? Then this'll do ya just fine.

DarkSpark
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It Was Great, Till It Wasn’t

Reviewed at: Chapter 523 - Jungle

My main gripes with this story is the lack of character development or any sort of growth as well as the forgettability of some of the side characters. People like the fisherman and the pet shop employee turned beast master get mentioned every now and then, but is then tossed aside for a couple chapters before reappearing again.

They have so much potential to become interesting characters to have at Zac's side! It's such a shame that I have to go back a couple chapters to remind myself who these people are and what they do on the rare occasions that they get brought up.

My second other main problem is the character development and their goals. Zac literally hasn't changed in any way for 300+ chapters since the incursions began. He still acts like a brute with a misguided sense of ethics and morals. I'm personally not invested in anything to do with Kenzie, Zac's mom, The Mystic Realm and all the other subplots as they feel more like a nuisances that get in the way. 

All in all, it's been a very average read though I do have to commend the author for churning out chapters like a mad man! Good luck. :D

naralian
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This story exhibits all the "standard" flaws of this generic type of story which would be called forgivable in most versions of it:

- the protagonist is a mary sue to the absolute maximum, with the plot straight up handing him everything with no effort 80% of the time: sure, cool. Typical, to the point it's treated as a joke and lampshaded with a "luck" stat.

- The stats and other litrpg elements are utterly superfluous and in many cases just outright lie to the reader instead of providing information (e.g. a character with a lower strength is notably stronger than one with higher in direct tests), many states appear to do nothing, etc. Ok, fine, a litrpg that would be substantially improved by just... not being litrpg, see also 90% of this website.

- The physics of the universe are ill defined, and casually violated whenever they'd result in the MC losing, causing the time and effort of the reader spent learning them to be insultingly wasted: pushing it now, but still typical of this kind of novel.

Standard so far, fairly forgivable? Sure. But the reason we forgive these kinds of stories for those kinds of things is that they're dramatic, action-packed thrill rides where something is always happening. Energy always maintained, whether it's a fight breaking out, family drama, angst, shiny loot being revealed, whatever.

In this story... nothing happens. Like, I don't mean nothing "of significance" I mean actually nothing. The author composes somewhere between three sentences and three short paragraphs of characters taking actions or events occurring, then hides them randomly in five god damned full length posts per week, the rest of the text so completely devoid of actual content that calling it filler is an insult to filler.

We've seen two thousand word posts where the event promised by the title is as much of a non-event as Zac reading a text box... and he hasn't read the one-sentence text box by the end of the chapter. Just stood in place and thought vaguely about how theoretically interesting it would be if he clicked the mouse once to press the button his cursor is already hovering over.

We're not reading a cultivation novel. We're not even reading about a boring accountant doing a spreadsheet. We're reading about a lazy accountant trying to consider starting a spreadsheet that won't even be useful when completed... and never actually entering any data in 80% of chapters.

So all of the bad parts of the genre, with the twist that it also doesn't have the one thing the genre usually does well. Skip.

StoneSideRoad
Overall

Interesting Concepts, Terrible Pacing

Reviewed at: Chapter 327 - Billionaires' Brawl

Defiance does a great job of blending a lot of aspects from western and eastern fantasy. but from arc 1 the pacing has been terrible. Sometimes you get a 130 chapter arc that could be resolved in 60 without the needless fluff, and sometimes you get a 20 chapter mini-arc that could have been stretched to 50+ to great effect. All in all, this is a good read that just has some pacing issues

Cdrcoyote
Overall

The story moves along very slowly, until it finishes the build up for that part of the plot then it moves very quickly and unsatisfyingly to the end of the plot so another can be started. Bad guys are built up for hundreds of chapters, and then are dealt with as if they were filler to be forgotten about a chapter later. 

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How Scale can kill Pacing.

Reviewed at: Chapter 396 - Aftermath

I'll start with some pro/con before I give the summary of my opinions and any spoiler stuff until the end. 

Pro:

There is some interesting concepts here, duality is touched on throughout and I'm not sure if it's intentional or just something that came from the cultivation side, regardless it's surprisingly deep for a story like this. This story also doesn't shy away from graphic violence , while I'm not one who prefers violence for violence sake, but the apocalypse would be bloody and disgusting and I think a lot of this story captures that. 

Con:

The characters are paper thin and without substance, often they're just plot tools to progress from one beat to the next. Plot holes and plot armor galore, almost every system introduced is retroactively walked back, seemingly on accident. The scale is absolutely massive, yet the pacing is incredibly slow. Ham fisted attempt at romance and a love triangle that should have been explored or abandoned not left in limbo. 

Summary: 

Some of this summary might contain spoilers so I'll leave them for the very end. 

The part that really made me lose interest in this story is the incredibly slow pacing, every action, every item, every theory is followed by 5-10 paragraphs of introspection. Not 5-10 lines, 5-10 actual paragraphs, so much so that sometimes half to three quarters of an entire chapter is introspective exposition. It's full, it's boring and it grinds the plot and pacing down to unimaginable levels. With all the plot threads the author has going this story would easily go to 3000-4000 chapters before finally starting to close them all. I made it to chapter 500 roughly, and everything to that point could have been achieved in 150 chapters, easily. 

The second biggest issue in this story for me was the characters, specifically the romance option and the sister. I know a lot of people prefer no romance, but I think this story would have benefitted from the interactions of a romance, there is no social connections in this story, there's really no down time that isn't exposition or a time skip. It's exciting at first but after 200 chapters it's just.. dull. As for the sister, I think she objectively ruins the story, personality wise, their relationship wise , it just falls flat. 

Summary: 

Honestly, this story isn't terrible, but it's not great, you can tell this is the first big piece the author has worked on and sometimes it feels like they had ideas for 3-4 seperate books and just crammed them all into this one, but there is potential under the pile of exposition and useless characters. Hopefully on the next work the scale won't kill the pacing. 

 

Joostin
Overall

Plot - Decent, Everything else? Shallow

Reviewed at: Chapter 679 - Terror of the Twinruins

Ill start this off by saying i'm still reading along due to enjoying the overall plot, but that is about all i enjoy in this story. Hopefully it continues to improve.

Pros - I would say the synopsis does a great job at telling you what this story is about.  Overall the plot and the world building introduced is fairly good.  Races and civilizations across the universe are brought in the story  and fleshed out to a small degree showing what the MC now has to deal with.

Cons - 

Man there are so many that are hard to get past. Repetitive story telling for one.  MC goes to fight > thinks about his powerups/new levels and stats he just gained > more internal dialogue about loot gained.  Rinse and repeat, and maybe every few times he will have a 1 sentence dialogue with a random side character that goes nowhere. Then will continue with... And then Zac and "character" discussed a few more things and he went off to go prepare to fight

Dialogue and character growth is non existent in this story.  He has a somewhat of a core group of people he relies on which are his generals that you know by name, but never have a discussion with, and then there are the "Elites" that support him time and again that he doesn't give the time of day. A new side character might be introduced and given an interlude, and then either die off, or are never brought up again.

Motivations / Loot / Town Building - This ties into the previous point a bit that there is almost no discussion on what he's doing or why he's doing it other than to save his family. Eventually he gets a few people he can rely on but he doesnt try and empower or assist them in any way, always looking to do everything himself. Loot? He has an endless supply of it that you pretty much never see being bought or sold or giving to his town or elites. Meat? Endless supply of mountains of meat that you never see him make or buy. The Town? Again, you see the surface level of one or two buildings in his town, but never more than a sentence or two of discussion about it.

Chapters - The chapters are a bit short in volume and in actual story info. A large part of each chapter is essentially filler (MC ponders on this or that before doing anything of substance) and a small amount of action, and then ends abruptly so he can finish that plot point a few chapters down the road

Carlos Sal
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

OK, this novel has a really good start and some funny moments that can get a few good laugh out of anybody, but I'm just tired to be honest. Not a simple thing happens to the MC without struggle. Absolutely nothing without an earth shaking struggle he miraculosly win with a treasure or a dao epiphany....

Of course I'm exagerating becouse let's be honest, thats the fun part. but I had read this novel for 500 chapters and sincearly it's just one fight after the other, une struggle after the other, one apocalyptic crisis after the other... and Zac just do nothing more than fight, get stronger and fight. I just feels that the story is good but the mc spends 99% of the time either fighting or geting stronger and nothing more.

The story advances by how strong is he more than how the characters advance in the story. "Zac is stronger, now he can defeat the next enemy..." repeat the formula and that is the whole first 500 chaps. Nothing happens in the middle, Zac has no chance to do anything but fight or try to use the System to get stronger and i gets repetitive.

Lets avoid the "Luck" component. He just have to much... just so much luck it's not funny. 

Cestarian
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

The story really hasn't progressed far enough to rate the characters but from what I've seen it seems like they're gonna be somewhat better than in the average rrl story.

Other than that, the story is a pretty basic New World/Ghosthound style deal. Everyone gets a system and is teleported to a tutorial while the earth gets fucked up by monster hordes and stuff. Everyone except for the protagonist of course, he doesn't get a tutorial (lol).

Other than that I am fairly impressed by how the story is relatively gritty (and sometimes defies logic, like how the guy used the same hatchet for over a month swinging it with superhuman strength against monsters that are definitely tougher than your average tree, considering they can break them apart by running into them... without breaking the hatchet) the protagonist is powerful, but at least so far he is not overpowered (he has the promise of becoming overpowered later tho if he plays his cards right). He has to survive by the skin of his teeth, he'd die on a daily basis if he didn't have the system giving him a 'sleep and your fatal injuries will be healed' trope. The author basically hands the protagonist everything he needs on a silver platter like in most stories like these, what he has not done however is give him anything more than what he needs, he's given him exactly the bare minimum and nothing more and I like that. It's pretty decently written too so you can feel the protagonists struggle as he suffers for not getting to do the tutorial like everyone else.

Unlike him however, we do get a tutorial, we get all the basic RPG stats eplained to us as if everybody doesn't already know it and the story is chock full of wordy explanations about the most mundane things. This was my gripe with the story, the pacing feels like it's snailing along because sometimes entire chapters are devoted to just seemingly meaningless exposition. Hell the last chapter I read (37) was one such chapter (edit: and 38 was the same. And 39.). Literally nothing happens in the entire chapter.

This kind of stuff is a huge pet peeve of mine, when authors do too much exposition, spend too much time on explaining or detailing things that don't really warrant that much text.

Good writing is a balancing act between colorful wording and effective pacing, this author leans a bit too heavily on the former for my tastes. The only reason the story even progressed anywhere for the past 30 chapters is because the author at some point went 'fuck it' and did a month's time skip. (Thankfully, or we would have had chapter upon chapter of the protagonist doing the exact same thing)

Like others have said I share the opinion that this story has potential, it's too early to tell if it's worse or better than the works it seems inspired by, but I'm worried it will never be finished with this focus on overly detailed explanations.

I would advise the author to show more, and tell less. Not everything needs to be explained in full detail, let the readers imagination work out most of the things and focus on what's important to the main plot progression instead. If you look at some great artists (like say wlop for an excellent example) if you look closely at their artwork you will find that sometimes up to  80% or so of their pictures may end up being just blobs, anything that isn't the main focus/character of the picture is only vaguely defined. And it works, your brain will fill in these details when you look at the picture as a whole, but zoom in on it and all you'll see are blobs.

With the decreasing attention spans of humanity as a whole in our current society, it's vital for writers to adopt a similar strategy in their writing to keep the attention of readers.

Update: Now I'm at chapter 278.

Characters are, in line with my original impression, decent. They're better than in most stories in that they have actual personalities of their own, even if it's mostly template personalities, at least they're not full blown template characters. I should warn you though that if you're into good characters, you probably won't like this story because 90% of it is just focused on the protagonist. Other characters get defined personalities, but they don't get much further fleshed out than that, you won't be finding many tragic backstories or any character development in this story. There's a few interesting characters spread around in the novel, and you might actually be able to feel invested in some characters (hopefully at least the protagonist), but I doubt you'll be singing the author praises for good characters. Suffice it to say that he makes characters that work for the story, rather than a story that works for the characters. The story is centered around the protagonist mostly, other characters are in the end mostly just extras, so far most of the story is still the protagonist going solo, not that I dislike that at all, but it is what it is.

What I do dislike however is that unlike my original impression of the story being similar to new world and randidly ghosthound is that this is actually a xianxia story, I can see the tag is there now but I don't think it was when I started reading; what I do like however is that it's much better organized than any xianxia I've ever seen, namely that the power scaling of everyone is rather properly defined here thanks to the litrpg system, e.g. we pretty much know at all times where the protagonist stands on the global scale of power. Maybe not how powerful he is compared to others on the same scale, but just which scale he's on (i.e. the ratings of A, B, C, D, E and F essentially, and of course the levels). Everyone can be a bit of a wild card since their final power output depends heavily on their class and equipment and their 'daos' (a thing I really dislike in this story, the 'daos' create an undefined power scaling system within a decently defined one, tsk tsk.), but it's usually a fairly safe bet that a rank D warrior will not be able to defeat a rank C one with exceptions (exceptions like plot shields and overpowered daos!)

On that note, now that the story has progressed a bit, the protagonist is now overpowered, but only overpowered within his power scaling category (I don't remember what it was but I mean it's pretty down there like E or something) if you want specific, here's a lil spoiler:

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

As another review said, this story suffers a bit from lack of planning, but I somehow always end up coming back to it, I first dropped it at ch 36 or so, but then came back to it a good long while later when it had 100+ chapters. Then I had enough of this stupidity but eventually came back when it had 200+ chapters, now I'm coming back to it again when it has 300+ chapters.

The faults of the story being as they may, I have to give the author credit where credit is due. I have never on this site seen another author that's as consistent in his publishing rates as this one. I've seen it on other sites mind you, the chinese mass produced trash wuxia/xianxia novels in particular over on sites like webnovel.com do have this, it's just that they're always trash with absolutely no pacing, this story is similar I suppose (xianxia right?), but orders of magnitude better, has actual pacing (even if slow) and the plot is actively developing (even if slowly). So kudos for that!

I stand by my original ratings for the story, although I always end up dropping it at some point because of either pacing issues at some stretch of chapters, or some stupid things going on, I always come back to it fresh and mildly excited to keep reading it months later, which means there's some kind of rare quality to this story, because there aren't many stories I come back to after dropping 'em, and yet for this one it's happened 3 times.

(Update, now at ch 376; pacing issues have gotten worse, not enough happened in the last 100 chapters, dropped style score by half star for how ridiculously reduced the pacing has now become, but as I said earlier, the bad pacing is largely mitigated by the consistently fast chapter release rate, so the real major downside to this really is the amount of filler text, or like I said in the original review, this author should really show more and tell less, rather than listening to my advice however, he seems to have gone the opposite direction, telling more and showing less, sometimes having entire exposition dump chapters just to explain things that were already thoroughly explained in earlier exposition dumps (chapter 375 for instance))

So you know what? Go ahead and read it, it's no masterpiece, you will probably enjoy some of it and get frustrated at some of it, but it is at least so far somewhat worth your time, especially if you can't find anything else good to read. It has a few decent plot twists, and passably good worldbuilding too, I doubt you'll be head over heels for the story but I also doubt you'll hate it, unless you're super picky.