Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Non-Human lead

Marrow was old... older than me or you. Older than the nation he lived in. And older than anyone he knew. Which is not surprising, because he did not know anyone else. He had been sitting, or perhaps leaning is the more apt expression, in a closet for many, many years, and had done nothing but stare. 

But eating, or rather chewing, a spider opened up another world to him. A world with a voice that was talking to him - to HIM! Marrow did not get what the voice was saying, but that was secondary at this point. 

And Marrow started to feel restless.

 

Nuff said.

If you like a sometimes quirky skeleton as the main character and want to ride along for its coming of age, or perhaps rather coming of sapience story... give it a shot. It is a litrpg context with skills, levels, heroes and monsters... and a skeleton. Not sure yet how fast the skeleton will level... we'll have to wait and see.

As a disclaimer... this is my secondary novel... my main story is ongoing and most of my time is dedicated to that. As such, new chapters will, at first, be rather infrequent and irregular. If things go well, I may shift more attention to the story, but we shall see how things go.

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Stultus
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Marrow is a story about a skeleton. Unlike, however, the skeletons in most fantasy stories, he is not some undead beast who desires the death of all living things, nor is he some mindless obedient thrall.

The audience is introduced to Marrow when his creator, a student at a Magic school of sorts, attempts to create an intelligent undead.

The mage succeeds, however, due to Marrow's intelligence, commands given to Marrow are not obeyed, unless Marrow wants to. The only command the mage can give him in the end, turns out to be "Do something".

Marrow happily obeys, by existing.

His creator disgustedly stuffs him into a closet, and the very next day, the Mage Academy is attacked, and the building left to ruin.

Centuries later, a group of daring adventurers find out about ruined building, said once to house many promising mages and magicians.

In this time, Marrow has been merely chewing on spiders.

The two groups meet, and a few misunderstandings, and a hell of a lot coincidence, allows Marrow to form a strange bond with them.

And that is where the story has reached, at the time of writing for this review.

Grammar is perfectly fine, displeasing only to the most picky of readers.

Characters are good as well, and it is hard to leave out things when the main character is simply a skeleton who does nothing but chew spiders.

While the story is just a wee bit rough around the edges, that is simply because the author is working on a entirely different story at the same time as writing this, and as such, might be a little frazzled.

Definitely give this a try, if you are a fan on non-human leads, fantasy, and overall general humour.

Notsae
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An interesting story with a twist on a common enough plotline; skeleton protagonist but not reincarnated. The writing is decent, no grammar flaws obvious or painful enough to bother me. The protagonist is uninformed, but not entirely brain dead; however, this ignorance could easily become grating rather than amusing. Reminds me somewhat of a less dark version of "Everyone loves large chests" based on the premise and story thus far. All around, I'm glad I gave it a shot, it's worth a read so far.

Hyeon
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interesting idea, has alot of future potential looking forward to it :)

TaoBio
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Style and Grammar: Good, doesn’t bother me and the few mistakes are not noticeable to me..

 

Story: Story has barely started at this point but it's about a skeleton bumbling around in some ruins (spent most of his time in a closet) and very, very, slowly learning about the system works and I'm enjoying where the story is going.

 

Character: It's fun to watch what our lovable bonehead will do, or mostly won't do, and the other characters shown are well written, they feel like real people and I love how they all interact with each other.

 

binary_pineapple
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Just another monster tale?

As of chapter 11:

As you've probably surmised, the story is about a sentient skeleton gaining sapience.

I totally agree with the other reviewer who remarks that it reads like a lighter version of everybody loves large chests. This story is about what if you raised the curiosity up but not the violent tendencies. It even has a skill similar to cadaver absorption. You can see the similarities, but it is still a worthwhile read. 

The way a person would interact with the system without knowledge of language is on point and the story flows well.

However, there are some points that really bring down the level of immersion. It falls into the familiar trope of making the rest of the characters a fair bit dumber than the MC. Come on, who is more stupid than a skeleton? It is cool that the skeleton survived 100 years by itself in a closet, but seeing how curious it is in the last few chapters, why had it not observed more of the space around it? That is beyond me. 

Overall the story seems to be going well, however the characters do seem to bring it down a notch. 

I would be keeping this on hold until atleast 10 more chapters and then see how it fares. Can it diverge from its famous predecessor and carve a new spot for itself? We will have to wait and watch. 

Tranquilmoth
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Neat as well as sufficiently entertaining. Good stuff produced by good work.

Henry Morgan
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Fun read so far, very interesting way of portraying a non-human intelligence

ProfGenki
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Looking like a fun read

This story puts a smile on my face, not anything to 'heavy' so far, might see that later.

Would recommend it as a read. As of Chapter 10 I've been enjoying myself with the characters and the slow but steady world building.

Hopefully it doesn't go the "I'm evil now, die everyone I'm a super dark character feel the edge" I personlly prefer these types of stories more chaotic neutral

Yeah-uuh
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I just finished reading up to chapter 10, and it's surprisingly engaging for a book about a skeleton. This is pretty good for a hobby.

The humor is nice. The grammar is solid. And the story just makes you curious to find out what Marrow will do. It'll be interesting to see how his character will grow later on.

All aroud, it's a fun little story. Probably too early for a 5 star, so I'm just gonna leave it at 4.5 because I'm nice like that.

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Bone rattling good time

As a first attempt at harnessing the fantasy/comedy style so famously perfected  by Terry Pratchett, Marrow’s strange adventure is another inventive foray into the fantasy space by author cerealman.  

A skeleton infused with the curious soul of a cat makes his way in a world of adventuring.  He at first knows nothing and we readers are taken along the journey of him growing from infantile knowledge into...well, we’ll see h we (only 11 chapters so far).

Style-wise cerealman’s sophomore effort is close to the mark and there is great potential here. 

 This may not be an Epic fiction that stuns the world with it’s depth, but it sure is entertaining and meeting it’s goal in that way.