The Girl with the Crimson Hair

by Danduil

Original ONGOING Adventure Drama Fantasy Romance High Fantasy Multiple Lead Characters Strategy Strong Lead Supernatural
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The lesser races are mere pawns to be discarded and used. From their Kingdoms to their magic, they are allowed to exist for one purpose alone, to serve. But, to serve unwillingly breeds contempt, and with contempt comes war. It has been sixteen years since the last Allanian Revolution led by the Crimson Queen. Although defeated, her shadow continues to loom over the land and sea. Remira, the daughter of the Crimson Queen, has been kept hidden within the snow-covered walls of Castle Everstone — until now.

After a plot derived from the Kings Court comes to fruition, Remira has found herself tricked into an arranged marriage with a monster. Desperate, afraid, and alone, Remira attempts an escape to the Ashensong, a land untouched by cruelty of the Inaresh, where she believes she can start her life over. Unwilling to jeopardize her freedom, Remira is prepared to use every tool at her disposal to ensure she arrives safely or risks living the rest of her life within a cage.

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FlitterPuff
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Looking Forward to More!

I was nervous when I first started reading this story. A story with no reviews? About a Princess? How good could it really be? I was quite surprised by the answer I found: It's fantastic!

There are some stories on this site that you feel you can put down for later. Either the plot slows down, or the writing needs a bit more editing, or sometimes you just find something you're more interested in reading. This isn't one of those stories. From the beginning, I was captivated, and I didn't stop until I'd read through all ten of the chapters that are currently up.

The writing is frankly excellent, a story about a young girl in over her head, trying to escape her evil pursuers, and confront the web of mystery and riddles surrounding her. The characters are complex and intriguing, the story kept me reading and wanting more, but most of all, I must say I loved the author's style. It's a battle of wit and one that got me to realize just how much I enjoyed a good riddle contest. 

So, do I recommend this story, you ask? Most definitely! 

MrAzE
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Like a fine wine, it needs some time

It's good. The setting is intriguing, even if the pace is overall slow. It has a way to pull you in and have you crave the next chapter. However, that comes at a price. The chapters' length is very large. More so at the start of the story.

The story itself is kept together by the two main characters - Remira and Derren. The duo is really well done and relatable and feels very real. They also have a really good support cast of minor characters, both good and evil. The only issue is, that most of the supporting cast are just momentary encounters, that help set the main event of the story. 

Despite that, minor issue, the story shows extensive and rich vocabulary and really good grammar. Yes, there a few mistakes here and there, but let's be honest. I've seen worse on actual published novels. 

It all adds to a unique style, which sticks to you. It reminds a bit of the Young Adult genre, but different, matured if you will. Danduil skirts just enough around it, that it becomes a style which should cater to a wide audience.

Overall this is an excellent story, that only improves with each new chapter. And that is the best thing, in my opinion. You can see the author grow and improve, at the same time as his characters do. It is those imperfections which make a compelling story. The Girl with The Crimson Hair should be a part of every lover of fantasy's library. 

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(Review as of Chapter 12)

The Girl with the Crimson Hair starts off really strong, an in medias res adventure of a mysterious girl going on a quest to escape her past. We begin with one of the better Chapter 1s I've read in any web novel, a self-contained and humorous tale that sets up the world, the tone, and the protagonist really well.

The novel isn't doing anything groundbreaking so far, but it's well-written and has a very strong protagonist in Remira. She's a little bit of a brat, a little bit ignorant of the world, but tenacious to the end. I love seeing her adventures!

A little bit of focus is lost when the story focuses on Derren, the story's secondary protagonist who had a lot of dark stuff going on with him. I would much rather the story focus mostly on Remira, though it's still serviceable even when the POV has shifted. Derren and Remira have nice (platonic) chemistry, and I can imagine we'll get a lot more interesting moments to come from the two in the future.

My biggest complaint with the story is that it feels a bit bloated so far-- after twelve chapters, we've barely broached the beginning of the narrative, but it's already 250 pages long (approx 70,000 words)! The plot itself is moving along fine, but maybe the chapters are just too long each? Not sure. And for a lot of RRL readers, the long length is probably a good selling point, not a flaw, so make of that what you will.

I'm really interested to see the further adventures of the Girl with the Crimson Hair!

Ajey
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Reviewed as of chapter fourteen. This is my first review ever so please be gentle!

The Girl with the Crimson Hair may not be the most straight forward story, or even the most concise. If I had to compare it to anything I’d say it’s more a like painting. The characters are its colors and through the writer’s words they take shape. It is something that can be interpreted in many different ways. To me I see a story about overcoming challenges, but at times I see a story about family, and even the budding seeds of love. In other words to me the Girl with the Crimson hair is art.

At first glance it seems like a very typical type of fantasy story. There is a Princess with a distinguishable feature who goes off on an adventure with the goal of try escaping her abusive life. To me I read the first five chapters of this story as a girl who sees a challenge and aims to win it, only the world doesn’t want her to win. It’s a tale of growth and of development, something known as a coming-of-age story. But what sets this story apart from others doesn’t come from the characters overcoming challenges physically, but instead, doing it mentally. These characters like to think, and the writer seems to enjoy spending time in their heads. But what makes this so interesting is how I the reader managed to follow the thought processes of these characters despite knowing so little about them.

Something that stands out to me the most about this story over many others in the fantasy genre is its clear inspiration from other fantasy works. The writer seems to know what they’re trying to be like and instead of straying away from other fantasy tropes he it enhances it, and then spins it.

For example: If you manage to push past the first chapter and its dump of information about the South the writer introduces us to the concept of a troll who guards a bridge. In order to pass over the bridge you either pay the toll or answer his riddle. It’s an idea ripped straight from old fairy tales, yet, the writer has put their own spin on it and has made the encounter both comedic and believable. Remira, the girl who has the crimson hair, is stubborn and doesn’t want to pay the toll. She does this not because she doesn’t have the money, but because she thinks the idea of it is barbaric. However, in doing so she insults the troll which segways into a game of riddles.

This is something that the story does often. It introduces a concept, teaches us a bit about it, and then spins it. Another example is the Inaresh named Tiva. She is introduced as a beautiful creature with gems in her eyes and a voice that sounds like a song, much like all high elven races in fantasy. However, upon meeting her the character of Derren reacts in a way you wouldn’t expect. He fears her. This takes the trope of elves being beautiful and holy creatures and shows us that the beautiful things in this world aren’t as they seem. This is evident because later when we revisit Tiva we learn that she’s not as beautiful on the inside as she is on the outside. In fact, she’s damned right cruel.

Each chapter continues this trend. It pushes the plot forward while introducing us to the concepts of the realm of Allania. Its worldbuilding at its finest, and although the pace is slow at times, it’s an earned pace due to how well written the characters are.

The characters, although we are just now getting to know them, have layers of depth to them which I think is great. Like in our world we aren’t able to truly understand another person until we’ve spent time with them. Time and time again writers get this wrong. They end up giving their characters a few traits and then they stick to those traits no matter what. The writer here however has clearly gone through extensive planning as a lot of this story tends to have been grounded in past events, making the world’s history and character motivations seem earned and realistic. Characters don’t dump their backstory onto you the moment you meet them. They hint, they withhold words, and they even lie. Its up to the reader to learn the truth. Remira and Derren are both the main characters and prime examples of this. Remira holds back information from Derren, Derren holds back information from Remira. Like always if the two just told one another the truth then half of the problems that arise between them could be solved. But, because they are written with their own intentions and understand that they are vulnerable they don’t. This leads once again, to a constant mental battle. Remira could easily have blasted Derren to bits (which she does), but Derren could have just as easily ordered his shadow to take care of her. Its like the old question of what happens when an unbreakable wall meets an unstoppable force.

In other words the characters are unique, believable, and downright likeable. I began to root for Remira from the very beginning and wanted nothing more than for her to use her unique power (which I still really want to learn about) to blast away Derren. But, upon learning more about Derren and getting a deeper look into his character and his motivations my views on him have completely flipped around. I felt my allegiances shift from Remira to Derren and vice versa. It’s a strange mix-up of emotions that I can’t quite put my finger on, but it works and its keeping me very interested.

Remira isn’t a perfect little Princess, she’s a scarred human being which the writer has literally spelled out for us (scars on her wrists).

Derren isn’t a knight in shining armor he’s just a farmer who has been thrown into this mess, yet he embodies the virtues of knighthood. 

What so great about this is the fact that these two characters are clearly the writers way of presenting to us how this world works. Nothing is as it seems, everything is a lie, and it’s up to us, the readers to discover the truth while the characters develop.  The level of symbolism and convolution is downright absurd and it seems like the details are all there from the very beginning.

But enough about that, let me get to the part which has solidified this as must read.

The characters actually react.

Derren reacts when he sees Remira struggle. He not only feels terrible for her, but he is inspired by her. Remira reacts when things seem hopeless. If she doesn’t like something, she states it and backs up her own opinion. This isn’t a story where we forced to follow the breadcrumbs of facts left behind by the writer. This isn’t a story where the writer just says: Three days later they all met up at a bar. No. This is a story meant to cause a reaction, and the reactions are very much earned.

If you’ve read up to here and you still aren’t convinced then I’ll tell you now, the story is superb. To me this doesn’t seem like a web novel at all, it seems like a full fledged novel.

Please continue the great work!

 

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It's plain to see the talent in how the author writes the interactions between the characters, and these scenes are the biggest strength of this story. The interactions and dialogue are great to read through as we really begin to learn about these characters and get to see their reactions to each other. We get some clever dialogue and some interesting dynamics. I look forward to meeting more characters. This definitely seems character-driven, and in my mind the best stories usually are, so I can see it becoming better and more interesting as it goes on.

There are some problems with grammar although these are more rare the further into the story we go. The style of writing seems to depend alot upon dialogue, which is not a bad thing, as I've said the dialogue and character interactions are great.

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Even with only thirteen and a half chapters it’s one of the best stories Ive found on RoyalRoad. I don’t think Ive ever read through something so quick before. The grammar and spelling and choice of words is perfect. The pacing is perfect. The concept even though I no clue whats gonna happen is so fresh and unique. One mystery comes after another and when one is solved three more appear.

The characters are something else. I’ve never read anything that captures a girl at this age with so much crazy stuff going on like this. Remira is like an iceberg. What you see is super pretty but below the water it goes so deep that you cant’ see the bottom. She has so much depth to her and feels familiar even though theres so much about her I don’t know.

The other main character Derren is like a mix of every cool character except the thing is that he doesn’t seem overpowered at all. But the best part about him is that he seems strategic and calculating in his thinking the writer makes it clear to us that hes not as smart or as clever as the other main character Remira.

The conversations and the characters remind me so much of the harry potter books which is a great thing :)

 

I just want to know more about the world and I want to see the characters develop and the plot and mysteries to unfold. This is a definite read please continue!