With a dark pasted he travels forward through combat, revenge, love, and sorrow. On his journey, he will gain friends and enemies alike. He will topple nations, ancient evils, transcended beings, and maybe even the gods themselves.
Will he fulfill his desires or will he die trying? No one truly knows unless they read this epic of the man with the strongest job.
And that job is… a Gardener?
Note: This is my first Story so be prepared that the first ten or so chapters suck, but from what my followers comments is that it gets better after that.
Just saying i have no idea where this story is going. How the story moves is based on how i feel at the moment.
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First of all I don’t see how hes a gardener. I would call him a plant-type combat summoner or maybe a battle druid. Setting aside things like spelling errors and incorrect homonyms you’re constantly leaving off contractions on words like wouldn’t or couldn’t etc. which completely changes the meaning of a sentence making it slightly confusing and difficult to read. And most of all the villains are bad. Especially the brothers and uncle, you can’t get much more cliche and annoying. They absolutely aren’t good enough characters to keep reusing them so *SPOILER* when at the end of chapter 13 they escaped like fricking Team Rocket I almost stopped reading right there.
I like the story because the MC has an interesting "class" to work with along with a rather unique attitude. Some pacing issues especially when it comes to changes in the MC's attitude. It would be better if the MC's outlook on life matched up with his actions a little more. There is some lack of consistency on this front. If changes to the MC's attitude are necessary, it would better off as gradual process.
Now the real problem here is with the grammar. While readable, there are many glaring homonym based spelling errors as well as plain typos and badly worded sentences/fragments. Certainly not the worst I have seen on this site, but clearly in need of editing. Nobody expects perfection here, but the errors are definitely at a point where it hurting the overall story.
Story: The story in itself could be pretty interesting. Don’t really know how the author wants to do it with his story progression pace, but seems good
Style: Very bad! If you introduce a system into your story don’t change it every 2 chapters as you like! A story needs consistency to unfold (like i commented in one chapter, first he can’T see stats of an enemy 30 level higher than him, few chapters later he can suddenly see the stats of one almost 100 level higher than him?)
The level up progress is done too fast and the “skill” system makes no sense at all
Oh btw The title doesn’t even get close to the story, except for his “job” nothing has to do with gardener. He is a nature mage, nothing else, job could be called Nature mage - would be truer to the story
Grammar: GO BACK TO SCHOOL! It is one of the worst I have ever seen. Some words you use don’t even mean what you think they do. Past tense of words are most of the time wrong, wrong words destroying sentences. It is horrible
Character: Some character description is in the story, but not all too much. The MC Character seems to have a split personality (I didn’t do it to save you, but you are important to me, so i did it to save you? WTF?). His reasons change every chapter and how he is interacting with others does too.
All in all i have to say, as long as the author doesn’t get better at english, this story is a lost cause
Your grammar is probably in the lower 30% of the stories here on RRL, Check your spelling/ grammar or get an proofreader before posting, please?
I see that you tried to add character depth, but you kinda failed... The Character(s) are kinda... Shallow?
Okay, "Calm Mind Skill"... 99% of the people introducing this thing at the very beginning of an story are probably those that have no idea on how to make the character react on the new stuff.
So before you and your followers grab the pitchfork and start hunting me down... This. Is. SP- I mean this is an portal where you can freely critize right? Guys? ...
I think that you have a really fun idea, but the way that this was written made it so that I couldn't get past chapter 5. Ignoring the spelling and grammar mistakes, the characters were very dull and not at all belivable. I mean, honestly, a girl gets raped by a bunch of monsters and get upset that some random dude isn't lusting after her? Not a chance in hell...
I think that beginnings are vital to any type of story. It seemed like you just wanted this character to go from weakling to badass so fast that when he got stronger we didn't even care about him yet. What makes a good writer, in my opinion, is someone who can make me feel excited that the character is getting stronger, or sad when he is struggling with whatever issues.
If you would put a little more effort in the characters this story would be much better. Make the reactions believable, make us care about what happens.
Hope that was helpful
interesting idea, but TERRIBLY done.
Characters are shallow and unrealistic.
MC is described as a incompetent loser and yet in the blink of an eye he adapts to everything and becomes battle specialist.
Also MC finds 2 girls that were stripped against their will and experienced rape and yet they tell him "two beautiful ladies wearing all most nothing are in front of you and there is no react. It makes me loss confidents in myself" and no girl would ever said that in that situation.
This story is full of such unrealistic situations.
Got to chapter six and had to stop. It's like trying to read a foreign LN that went through Google Translate, but without any sprucing up. The very first paragraph, not to be confused with the first sentence. The very first paragraph had so many mistakes, you would have failed the first semester in ANY Language Arts class. The rest of the chapter had simple mistakes, but the last bit had a sentence I could not understand, and now I have a headache.
The unrealistic encounter between the MC and the two ice mages is probably what made me stop. If a random guy saw two naked women in a fantasy world, he would react in a myriad of ways. One of which would be to stare, while another would be to turn their back while they retrieve some semblance of clothing. Hell, if he was sadistic enough, he'd fuck them right then and there (I've read a few that did that sort of thing).
The story, however, looks interesting, but only because of the unique class. The skills, on the other hand, are more like a rip off of the plants from Plants Vs. Zombies. The Sunflower gave it away.
Overall, the story gets a 1.5/5 from me, as I won't touch it until the author fixes his/her bloody mistakes.
Hence the title. Since most have already said of what I wanted to say, well mostly thrashing… Not gonna stay any longer as its a waste of time. Expecting a lot of thumb down. But what I dont understand is why this had gotten first on weekly…
Grammar needs quite a bit of work. I liked the character's class, but the story needs work mainly explanations. The romance thing was a little disappointing, way too quick for a mc supposedly hating people. Could have stretched it out a bit and made him seem less of a pussy.
If you are looking for a completely amateur work.
Full of grammar mistakes and misspellings.
A history that used fake reviews to promote himself.
That is the history for you.
If you doubt what I am saying, just read until the 5º chapter and come back to judge this review.