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The class divide still exists in the future, and it has gotten much worse. There are many different types of worlds, from the paradise worlds where everyone is immortal, to the resource depleted, war-torn planets where every day is a struggle just to live.
Freya O'Malley grew up on Earth, the worst of the war-torn planets, and wants nothing more than to leave. With few options, Freya joins the Federation Marines. But, unlike the past, it's a struggle to earn enough enlistment points to stay in. With the prize of a citizenship on a paradise world at stake, competition is fierce. Every week is a new war. Can Freya earn enough points in the constant warring of the Marines to modify her body and mind to stay competitive? Can a girl from the wrong planet make it against those who have all the advantages?
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Edited by Aldous starting at chapter 19.
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Duck_No_Duck has written a couple of novels on RR. Both of them have strong female leads which are the exception rather than the norm on RR. This immediately makes him as an author, plus the novels, stand out of the crowd!
Follow our tough MC as she leads from the front, or snipes from up high. In this enjoyable, action-filled, futuristic tale!
I’m having a great time reading this story. Military scifi is an under represented genre here and the author has done a good job with this one. So far there has been a lot of action. The author does a great job a drawing you in and making you want to keep reading more.
There are a few jarring moments where grammar and/or misspellings can jolt you out of the story, but it’s not too bad and better than some other stories.
Pros: Great action and story with a main character I like and find interesting. The world has potential but so far there is a lot of mystery about it that is slowly being revealed as the chapters go on. Long chapters with good supplemental notes at the end to help explain terms and definitions if needed.
Cons: Grammar and spelling needs to be cleaned up a bit. So far most characters other than the main character are cookie cutter and forgettable. Most don’t even get a name, just a rank, and aren’t part of the story beyond a chapter or two.
This is the kind of story you don’t want to take too seriously, but if you are looking for an entertaining military scifi action romp then this story might just be for you.
Now I'm going to start this by saying that while this story is inherently unrealistic, and there are many people saying just that; there is a grounding in reality that can be found here. The military in this story is more of a systemized form of mercinary corp hired by the collective governnance of human colonized planets as far as I can tell. By large the military seems to act as it's own entity in all it's military endevours, accepting contracts and carrying out military action on behalf of the collective governance of humanity.
Now things get weird very quickly with the introduction of game-like elements in to the sudo-military styled mercanry corp structure. This too can be explained in some way as having a basis in reality. One of the few things people don't realize about the military is that one of the biggest and most important aspects of it is desensitivity training. Of course they don't call it that, obviously. It's "conditioning" to prepare you to act in a stressful situation, like combat. More often than not this is slipped in everywhere it can fit to turn soft pudgy civilians into hardened trained killers. This game-like aspect can be explained away as part of that part of their training that evolved over time to encompus the entirety of the sudo-military styled mercanary corp structure. This continues further into the majority of missions being carried out as simulations. If that were the only thing being offered them I would have assumed we were rolling in on an Enders Game type situation where it was all actually real. However it's been stated in the story that real-life missions are an option, so it's safe to assume that this isn't the case.
Moving back to the desensitising aspect of it we've already seen this to some extent with the third boot camp mission the protaginist undertook. Their mission was to clear out suburben homes in a suburben street like enviroment as far as can be extrapolated from what little was described of the enviroment. They entered each house and cleared it of occupents. Said occupent came in the form of people who either tried to run, hunker down in their house, or were in one case an elderly man caught on the toilet. A dispassionate reader will look upon this and ask, "So what?"
Now, maybe it's just a simulation? Yeah. But they were civilians or self stylized militia being sytematically neutralized in their home. There wasn't some kind of object for them to secure, they weren't taking out some group of people carrying out some secret plot or even to gather information. The protagonist and her team were there to kill the people living in their homes and nothing else... and none of them gave it a second thought because it's just a simulation and their objective says they should kill these people.
So think about that for a moment, and there you go. Desensitisation training at it's finest. It's pretty low key, am I right? You barely even blinked an eye while you read as they ruthlessly murdered all those people, right?
This is a well written story, with a good premise that was so good it apparently went over a bunch of peoples heads. Tops to the author for being a varitable genius.
The characters are believably human, though no one other than our lord and saviour JESUS and Freya really standout much. I haven't noticed any outstanding spelling or grmmatical errors, then again I'm terrible at that stuff. The story is outstanding and the writing is concise, and devoid of needless exposition. The way it is written makes it clear despite it being written from a third person perpective that protagonist is Freya. That this is a story about her and the life she lives as a digital citizen on board a warship called the Monarch. When it gets down to it--it is a fun sci-fi sudo-militanry styled mercanry corp adventure through a hypothetical government funded game-like militarized mercenary system. Unrealiztic and yet based in reality with it's methods. Real-world military has done stranger things and made it work in the past. A thousand years from now I cannot with all honesty say a system similar to this won't be in effect if it became nessisary. Limited resources and funds would make a digitized military training facility where soldiers can train in a variety of situations and without casualties at the low cost of maintain a server farm and some super computers a hot comodity. In a distopian future I could very well believe something like this could be used in a thousand years to cut costs on maintaining an effective galaxy-wide military presence.
Keep it coming because I can barely wait for more.
Has a lot of fighting, perhaps too much at the expense of everything else.
The LitRPG side is interesting, though a bit thin later on. Still better than those that spend whole chapters detailing their builds and explaining every stat in excruciating detail.
Other than that, it has the same sci-fi vibe I got from Neal Asher's Polity series. That's rare. Very rare.
Did I mention I read the first 31 chapters in a single night?
Okay, this one is weird.
First off, the grammar. There's some mistakes. Like, ketchup-on-corn-flakes mistakes. There are some parts where words are used that just don't make *any* sense, even accounting for possible typos, and I don't know how they happened. But whatever, they're not that bad, and context always let me know what was going on. Needs an editing pass, but not too bad.
Now, the characters. They're kinda cool! Well, the one real character is kinda cool. The exploration of homeworld-bigotry is well done, and so is some of the actual conversations with our protagonist that aren't just info dumps. I'd like to learn more about her, you know?
Which brings us to something related to the info dumps, that I feel awkward bringing up.
This system is industrial-strength dumb.
The main character joins the marines. Okay, fine. They melt down her original body for materials (weird, but whatever) and load her brain into a simulation for training (alright, sweet) where she's expected to pay for her own meals with credits earned from training missions (wait, what?).
So far (chapter 11), the entire story takes place in a simulation, but the soldiers are expected to pay for their own food, lodging, equipment, and *respawns on training missions*, like it's some kind of video game and not an actual military. Putting aside how absolutely stupid the economics of this are, it's even worse that they won't teach recruits anything until they earn enough skill points, effectively cutting their own supply of skilled soldiers. The main character shows the willingness, aptitude, and drive to be a pilot, and they tell her she hasn't *leveled up enough yet*.
This is not military sci-fi. Any actual military that ran this way would belong to a civilization so hedonistically stupid that it either would have imploded a century ago, or it's already so impossibly powerful that the concept of a "military" is almost pointlessly meaningless. This is a VRMMO story, where the characters just refuse to admit they're in a game, and roleplay like there's no tomorrow.
I wanted to like this, because it's pretty well written, but the level of idiocy that the marine organization displays is so blatant and contrived that it drags me out of the experience every time it comes up.
Two and a half stars; really disappointed it isn't better, because the better version of this is probably really good.
Greatest military fiction on RR. Really like the concept with a digital traning world
Really good military litrpg and really good story, period. I haven’t seen a story like this yet and I’m loving it. It has blue boxes (a plus) and really good worldbuilding. I highly recommend it, especially as it’s so unique. Give it a shot if you like military stories, litrpg, good stories, what have you.
The grammar for the first half is sub par but eventually gets better.
Somtimes paragraphs get reptile during training montages.
Takes a while for the author to settle on an Ensemble cast to develop but most of the earlier faces we see are husks.
Mc is good for this site.
Setting and style are very unique.
I see a lot of people complaining in the reviews about how unrealistic it all is, in my opinion they are just viewing the setting from Moder Earth’s lens. This is a setting where practically everyone wants to be a great soldier for that chance of immortality. The whole cast pay to stay in this career path or they get washed out of the Marines.
With infinite time, immortal soldiers and a massive HR supply, the Marines naturally operate extrenely different from out Earth counterparts. It’s clear they are more focused on maximizing the potential of those select few future immortal pillars by grooming and pruning over time.
One reviewer said that the cast are just VRMMOs larping as marines which is just flat out deceptive to potential readers.
Sometimes the author is too vague about important details, I’m guessing since he knew all the information, he felt it was a lot easier for readers to figure out what was happening then it actualy was. It’s similar to how after knowing a difficult problem’s solution, the problem seems easier to solve. First big instance was if the missions were real or simulated, there was that 20% uncertainty.
Leads into my biggest issue, Author is absolutely god awful at describing where characters are in relation to the setting. Constantly reccuring issue, not helped because the author struggles to clearly describe the geography/architecture/space I’m the first place. I ended up lost in most missions despite the author’s attempts to guide me. The only time I’m not lost is when she’s looking down her scope for some reason. Everything is so much clearer to read in the scope that it’s a bit startling thinking back on it. Locations, obstacles, terrain, targets reference get neatly outlined in those sections is the main I reason I guess.
Side note: Am still not quite sure how the MC’s ship even lands (exhaust -down vs like an airplane)
My favourite failed orientation/rotation description was something like “the ship was a clock face, now it’s pointy end emerges from the clock face”
The orientation stuff didnt hamper my enjoyment too much as I learned when to move on.
I’m not good at writing positives but I did enjoy this book and though it was very fresh compared to the other RR works.
This is an enjoyable read, if just for entertainment value I'd probable give it 5 stars. Unfortunatly there are a few issues that are holding this story back from its potential.
The style is this Digital marine's strength, the way the story is written makes me not want to stop reading.
The story is still developing, we haven't seen much in the way of a plot other than leveling up as at chapter 12, but it's still early. The worldbuilding is very interesting although the way the millitary is run seems fairly illogical (Though I'm still holding out for a good in universe explanation for the MMO system)
The grammar is bad, mistakes in nearly every chapter if you care to look for them, it's an easy fix though, the author just needs to do a once over on previously relesed chapters.
The characters are as of yet undeveloped exept the main character, but that is only to be expected with only 12 chapters out. The main character is interesting and we are starting to get development on new chacacter.
Overall I would easily recomend this story, I understand if the flaws turn you off, but it is a good story if you can suspend your disbelief a little or trust that the author has resonable explanations for any issues.
Fantastic new fiction. Highly recommend for anybody interested in GameLit subgenre: action-oriented SciFi MilSim. So far the story focuses more on individual missions than on the overarching story. I actually prefer that in the web serials as this way every chapter is interesting and there are no filler chapters setting up the progression of the storyline.
Well written, likeable main character, good grammar, long chapters, regular releases, every chapter filled with action