The Wizard's Obsession

by SinSuzushi

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead Grimdark High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Supernatural War and Military
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

The Esterin Kingdom is invaded by the northern alliance after the fall of the silver legion.
From the ashes of destruction brought by the war, rises a wizard who will leave his mark on history.

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Krypek
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Some parts will probably need to be reworked

The story is fine the grammar is good but the character interactions are stiff and unnatural. There are plot holes and the logic and reasoning behind characters actions is not very belivable. It has some potential but needs work and be a bit more thought out. Characters themselves are human and somewhat relatable so thats a plus. Still the story feels clunky most of the time. Those qre the issues that stood out the most to me for now.

Omi Nya
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I think I cried after the first chapter. Was not ready for the feels, really. While I feel that the writing is a little dry and too formal, the overall serious tone is a breath of fresh air compared to most wacky wish fulfillment stories here. I'd also prefer more internal dialogues of the MC to get more information on his feelings, but all in all, I recommend the story.