I Made One Mistake! Now I Have To Become the Demon Lord in Another World, But I’m Just a Frail Vampire Girl?!

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Toshihide Yukawa is a Japanese scientist working in Switzerland, who during a late-night particle-physics experiment sets off a chain reaction which kills him and claims the lives of millions. Now a mysterious girl offers him an escape from divine retribution. Become a Demon Lord in another world or be removed from existence.

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Slow down there, buddy

As of Chapter 5

Style: It's good, well structured an all that from what I can tell - emphasis on that last part. It's very fast pase, to the point that some parts seem to faze together. I can't really understand many of the details, which is why even though I say it's good, I've only given it three stars.

Story: Creative premise. Again, can't really tell.

Grammar: Is, surprisingly enough, quite good. If you took out a few sentences at a time, you'd be able to understand them clearly.

Character: The main character has emotional depth, and some thought is put into how she acts. We've only really 'met' one other character (I never really count family, as they usually only show one or two fairly basic sides to them, and these two happened to die rather quickly), but she has one or two outlined traits.

Overall, it's a story with a good premise and detail, just poorly executed. It's incredibly difficult to understand any hints/nuances the author may have included, as it goes by so fast that your eyes just skim over it all. You can't really comprehend much...

Just as a side note, I may be being rather generous in my stars, but that's because at the heart of it all, it's a promising read. I wouldn't want to bring it down before a chance has been given for its flaws to be corrected.

If I had to be really angry at one part, it would be when her parents died. I had no clear idea what the flying frik happened to them until chapter five; I knew they died, but that was about it. Still not entirely sure.