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Reincarnation was just the start.
I have completed quests, restored System integrity, and have reached the Highest Rank on planet Talahm. But the Universe is vast, and our enemies countless. The Gods of Olympus and Asgard would see the Sidhe chained, our magic stolen, and the Summerlands under their control.
I am King Teigh Mac de Beleros y Cyronax, a child of the Gods Beleros and Cyronax, a Seelie/Unseelie half-breed, one of the triumvirate of powers that rule the planet Talahm, and I will see Ragnarok rage before I allow any of that to happen.
Book 4 begins at Chapter 109
This will be the beginning of the second trilogy, with help from other Characters to allow Teigh to increase his influence.
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"Who wouldn't try to game the system and take all the advantages possible?"
Not this guy, thats for sure. He didnt game anything. More like, he was gamed by the system. This sentence is seriously misleading. Do NOT except a capable and cunning MC that can actually deal with hurdles through his wits and smarts. At least not anywhere till chapter 20.
If you enjoy relentless, long winded, robotic explanations about every little detail of the world/system or errant thought of the protagonist then you should enjoy this. If you find it natural for an assassin to deliver a multi paragraph monologue about the why of it all when prompted to by his target then I question your taste, but you should like this story.
Apart from the above there are also issues concerning the main character. His transition from a crippled karmic saint to voluntarily reincarnating as a reviled half breed, rape spawned, prince of the "Fey" was a nonsensical decision outside of the context of a video game. After all who would freely chose to live that sort of life without a single thought towards the implications? But it's a litrpg after all and naturally everything comes to the protagonist like a fish in water despite a complete lack of experience in his former life.
But still to go from a saint like figure to:
“Should we let any of them live, your highness?” Cedric asked gaining my attention, as he continued to parry and distract the few Satyrs that were focused on him.
“Why bother?” I sneered. “We know who sent them. I really doubt we’ll get much more information out of them, and I’m positive Zeus isn’t the kind of guy that will ransom people who have failed him.”
"My newfound battle knowledge allowed me to react almost before they engaged. My weapon moved into position exactly where it needed to be to diffuse their strategies and tactics."
For all of this to have happened in a single day on top of the endless monologues and info dumps was just too much for me.
I wanted to like this story because it has a very nice take on re-incarnation and as an unusual race at that. I have two big issues with it though:
- A good story follows the show don't tell principle. This one has so much information being dumped that by chapter 10 the story hasn't advanced more than an hour or so from the re-incarnation. Even when action should be happening there's more talking than anything else.
- I dislike the dialog style. It consistently spans multiple line breaks and just feels rambling. Hypocritical coming from me, I know, but takes one to know one.
FYI: landed here due a link from the Delve by .
As of chapter 23 -
The gods "author" can indeed be fickle. This is a review as of the point that almost made me give up this novel. I am not sure if I will continue from here however it was great up to this point. The nerf nuke was pulled out and managed to nerf both the MC and the novel.
The MC is presented as a person that made certain choices in his previous life and was led into the situation he starts. Mainly, good person that did god things regardless of what happened to him. This is presented differently when the nuke is going off. Also, the way the nerf happens is just so out of nowhere that it makes no sense. Finally, the nerf completely alters the story in a way that goes from OP to UP in seconds. Even after reading the reasoning it leaves the reader with a bad experience that is made worse by the lasting effects.
Below I will go into my thoughts on what happened to help understand what happened. Spoilers included.
Our MC is a fairly good person which is why he is able to reincarnate with so many points. Unless this is all a lie it makes no sense, what happens within his first few weeks of being reincarnated. Arrogance is his reasoning for everything? Fear was what caused it? Wouldn't fear be running without confrontation knowing the outcome could be bad? While yes, there was some arrogance, I feel that it was only natural given the situation. Yes, he could have ran and left enemies at his back but only morons do that. You treated this world like a game... REALLY!? He has been there for all of a few weeks. He is supposed to immediately be able to change perspective even though he was literally left with his prior life, that lasted well over a few weeks long. You spend near half your EARNED karma points on an item and they take it away permanently because you didn't adjust in the short time, they feel you should have? The final issue I had, as one is fixed immediately in the next chapter, is the gimping and neutering of the MC. His status is locked, he is held to stipulations no others are, and he can't grow in efficiently power. This is at least for a year, so you learn. This is because you didn't learn in a few weeks so a year of being punished should help you learn. Our "hero?" has his hands tied and is put in this situation not to help himself but to help the author. That is what makes it painful. When nerfing happens, it needs to be in an effort to balance if anything. If you nerf a character to below EVERYONE else it isn't a nerf, it’s a crippling. To me, the author is a noble from a Xianxia novel that crippled our MC because he didn't like his behavior.
The beginning was great and a great plot was established with enough mistique to advance the story. I was really getting into it and looking forward to continuing to follow the novel, that was until the uber nerf happend. Where even after he had learned from his mistakes and turned over a new leaf a vast majority of his advantages were stripped. This story could have been fantastic but I’m afraid the author has ruined it (at least for me). Perhaps some people will still enjoy the story however it is not for me.
I liked it right up to the part were Mac decided to knowingly go into a trap, then call a wild hunt and gets screwed. It just seemed really out of character to put himself in that situation. Then gets punished. I absolutely thought he would just leave, not swagger like a teen protag into a trap. It reads like the author railroading plot. No lead up to to punishments presented, and plot Nerf to Mac's aura which literally cooked people on his first try.
With that overt plothole making, like not following up on enemy investigations, and detping into a trap he suspected, I just can't continue reading. Real shame that.
The author writes what may be a good story, but has one great fault in execution: the long winded infodumps. It is my opinion that the story would be far better if the author is integrates the info in the infodumps more naturally in the story.
Besides that I don't really like how the main character acts. Aside from all that it is actually fairly good.
The story tries to craft a strong and caring image for the MC but it fails by turning him into nothing more than another murder hobo. The first thing he does in the new world is murder a bunch of schmucks who were following the magically compelled orders of ther leige lord. The schmucks were very much willing but that isn't the point. They were ants compared to the mc and he killed them after they were not only disarmed but also disabled. The mc then has the temerity to be enraged by the leige lord being alive while his men died when he was the one who killed them without cause. That's the MCs character so far in ch 14. He's a self righteous asshole covered in a thin vineer of "heroism". I do hope he gets better.
i have just dropped this at third chapter, i dont want to spend my time with reading sheets only, nothing happends so far. Maybe you can give a chance and read but i am bored. Good luck
Story has a lot of potential, and I really want to rate it higher, but the author uses a ton of info-dumping for world-building.
It starts off with a strong emotional introduction that is followed up by several chapters of world-building and developing the future background of the MC. Unfortunately, even after the initial chapters dedicated to explaining the world, there are excessive paragraphs of info-dumping. It is fine at first, because what new author webnovel doesn't have an early info-dump?
However for anyone who likes to binge a good story, it becomes hard to process and absorb so much information at once (even if it is nicely put in a blue box). A concern of mine would be how dumping so much info at once will turn off any new readers if the trend continues. Most readers don't come to Royalroad to read textbooks. Even the relevant information becomes stressful to process.
FOR THE PROS THOUGH; Interspersed between the paragraphs is a wonderfully innovative story involving pantheons and foreshadowing a clash between different mythos. Upon processing the large amounts of knowledge thrown at you, you see a wonderful and interesting world to explore.