Second Chances

Not a bad read.

I don't know much about Sidhe, but I actually hit up wiki a few times because of this story.  Wanted to know if any of the names were real.  Seemed since the Greek Gods were based on myth, the Sidhe might too.

There have been a few slow bits.  But the pace has been pretty good.  If you sit down and read it from chapter 1 to chapter 21 like I just did, it reads great.

Literally just binge read this wonderful story and need more immediately. The author knows just what to do to hook you and keep you coming back for more. I was referred to this story and I am so grateful that I was! This has the makings of being one of the best stories on this site. Plus I love how attention to detail is applied to mythology and grammar. If I could rate higher than 5 stars I would. Normally I do not rate stories but this was need.

All I will say is read it. No reason not to it's a great book and it's free so what are you still waiting for go on get start reading..... Are you still here I said get reading ! 

Good work.

Just afraid that it would be inevitably tagged with the Malicious entity named "Hiatus". It has already consumed so many other good works. Hope the author is strong enough to resist it's evil power.

Really enjoying this!  

Hope the author doesn't decide to go on hiatus and leave us hanging.  I hate when that happens.  Spend a couple of chapters and bring the story to an end, even if it's not the end you originally wanted.

Good writing.  Good style.  Good story.  Good character.  5* across the board.

Just found this and read through Chapter 21.  

The story starts out kind of slow.  Lots of info.  But I guess that's needed.  But Chapter 21 really shifts the story.  

I don't know if the author has plans to keep the excitement going.  But I really want to know what comes next, and that is always the mark of a good story.

Worth changin my socks for!

Gods.

Fairies

Battles

Soulmates

Powerful magic.

And Blue Boxes!  What's not to like?  

Story is pretty good.  Main character has had it rough.  Style is great if you like Blue Boxes or reincarnation.  And grammar is pretty stellar.

Holy cow. This is pretty good, and I was not expecting it. Not from that synopsis. Something that should be noted is the story borrows heavily from mythology, pretty sure Celtic? Germanic? It mainly focuses on the fae (specifically the sidhe) but there are Greek and Norse antagonists included as well.

STYLE: Pretty sure its all first person. Told from the eyes of our MC ( who's name I cant remember. I'm sleepy. Pretty sure its Mac Du Belenos now. Might have misspelled it). No P.O.V. changes have happened or interludes (thank god)

STORY: This is where the score suffered a bit. As I said earlier, this draws heavy from mythology. It's also a litrpg. And unfortunately, in my opinion, this story suffers from being a litrpg. It's like looking at what could be a great story and then noticing it still has training wheels on. Theres something about the status boxes acting as a hard magic system that didn't really mesh well with the vague soft magic like themes of the wild hunt, the summerlands, or the sidhe in general. Because there are moments when magic is unexplained in this story, and those are just more enjoyable. But it could be personal bias.

I would also say that there isnt enough weight in this story. Things happen, but it feels as if it's kind of told matter of factly. What I mean is, I  the latest chapter The Wild Hunt was called forth. And the author did a good job describing it, but that was pretty much it. This is a major turning point in the story involving betrayal, fighting for survival, and facing your fears/ challenges head on (nobody thought it would be that convoluted, but nobody thought he was going to a simple banquet either). And yet, for such a momentous part of the story, it feels flat. Where is that gut punch of fear? The righteous fury? The grim resolve to call forth one of the most terrifying magic in fae lore, The Wild Hunt. Where is the weight of battle, where the 8 lb. blade (guesstimate. I have no idea how heavy it is) feels like its 80 lbs. The exertion of giving it your all to overcome your obstacles. 

Something I really like about the story, yet we havent had the chance to explore, is how a magical society is more advanced than ours. I really like this concept and wish we could explore the world more. What kinds of weapons do the fae use? Iron? Why swords, and not some magical gun or something better? A wand that shoots laser beams or something. Why are there so few princes and kings and queens if all you need is exp? After all, the sidhe may as well be immortal for all intents and purposes. 

GRAMMAR: You get a perfect score from me. I didn't notice anything wrong. 

CHARACTER: This suffered a bit too. The MC doesnt really seem to have any growth. He went from a 700 lb. depressed slob to this reincarnated handsome, confident, charismatic sidhe prince. And it truly seems like he's shed his past life behind. Wish that could have been tied into the story better. Wish events shaped him into the man hes become rather than the system. Feels like a missed opportunity for me. Also, the antagonists suck and are extremely cliche. Each one has been the pettiest, most cliche villain that explains their plans right before the MC kills them. Like wtf..... make the MC work for something, whether its self discovery or trying to figure out who means him harm. It's boring when everything is served up to our MC on a silver platter.

Conclusion: I mostly focused on the negatives in this review. Dont let that give you the wrong idea. I really like this story. It is a MUST READ. Seriously, lotta garbage in royalroad. But it will leave you wanting. Theres just too many times you'll go "that's it?" The action is not gripping, the politics feel flat, the antagonists seem two dimensional. But I love mythology. I love the racial stereotypes. I love the logic of magic causing a society to flourish, not stagnate. And ultimately, only a few days have passed in the story. It's hard to get all this shit crammed into a few days. 

To the author: The benefit of a webnovel is you're not confined to a page count. You can drag shit out. Besides the aforementioned "weight" and litrpg, and missed character growth, I would recommend dragging this story out a bit. Dont get me wrong, it's not the way to write a novel. But then you can world build properly. And then in the rewrite you can condense it. Then condense it again and again until you get to a point where you're building a world and progressing the plot and growing characters at the same time.

I'm sleepy now, night y'all

hello , i like this novel, it's really good especially for a first novel,  the only that stopped me from giving a 5 rate star , are some "incosistences" about the mc background and his actions (the killing etc) , Do you think that a fat guy who was abused  is actually a  killer machine without conscience? i'm pretty sure that being abused doesn't necessarily mean that someone is going to turn into a sociopath, then there is the calm when killing , on in general dangerous actions(I  a normal, would piss miself probably), does it sound like the attitude of a fat guy who was abused?? nope  to me , it sound like the punisher, a member of cosa nostra, a veteran soldier (from what i have read on quora xD , most new soldier tend to avoid killing) . So this kind of attitude is the only turn off for me, but only because of his background, in general i actually like cold mc. Anyway aside from that it's a cool read.

P.s author, like i have said to  others, you can't please every reader, unfortunately there is alwais going to be someone who doesnt like (the novel) or rage about something you did on the novel. Such is life, i hate harr. P.tter series (for example). anyway good job, and  I WANNA MOARR.

Edit: a good way to put it , is that i don't like  the mc background, it's kind of pathetic.and a big turn off. 

edit:the  author will do a rewrite later , so kinda of thought of giving him full stars.

This story is all about roller coasters (for the moment).

you get a guy that had a uber hard life that dies (down) and is allowed to be reborn (up), within a mega super über new magical life (re-up) and then he is placed in not-so easy situation (down), then manages it (many up and downs) and goes on rampage (up), then get nerfed (down), then get his ass helped out of the hot soup (up), then everyone powerful will be against him (down), then maybe not totally everyone (up)...Etc, you get the idea.

the world is the same, you are pingponged :
Earth-->Magical-world so I might use my techno knowledge as an ace --> Oh, the many pantheon exists in reality (well done) so I might use my techno& historical knowledge as aces --> oh, but my knowledge of Earth might not be useful at all :)

Politics and plots will be a part of the story, and the blue screen also, but with evolutions about it's importance.

The MC will most likely have to fight, to manage a team, to create a kingdom or be an uber diplomat, maybe find 2 people to marry, save the world :) (so it's like a complete pizza : a bit of everything tasty)

I like that the Sidh mythos is well used, and combined with the other pantheons that creates a big and fantastic world, unknown (due to the political and techno-magical aspect) but still somewhat familiar.