Catgirls of GRIM

by Lord Astrea

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Female Lead GameLit Harem High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters Non-Human lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Strategy
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

*currently undergoing some major editing*

Hovestile is a world of magic, dangerous monsters and conflict. Earth is a world of science, dominant humanity and endless strife.

Resources on Earth are scarce, and tensions escalate between nations. Mankind turned to the stars...and failed. They resorted to more grounded technology, and accessed the world of Hovestile. Hundreds were carefully chosen to enter this world with plans to prepare for colonization. But contact with the humans of Earth was immediately lost.

Over time, the people of Hovestile welcomed any assistance to defeat the monsters threatening their lands. Those from Earth were labeled as Outworld Adventurers, humans with the ability to increase their natural abilities through stats. Those born to Hovestile were referred to as Native Adventurers, original denizens with a natural competence for magic.

Alphonse Kneller is one outworld adventurer who dreams of making Hovestile his true home. But on his third dungeon foray, he is betrayed by his adventuring party and left for dead.

As he begins to abandon hope, two young catgirl demihumans appear before him named Kirie and Asa. Their mother, Rinka, offers Alphonse a precarious gift known as the Equivalence Contract. Using this gift, and with two catgirls as adventuring partners, Alphonse seeks to make further contracts and establish the guild known as GRIM.

 

 

A story delving into the dark sides of humans and monsters with plenty of light-hearted comedy to balance the scales. A building plot with complexity that delves deep into the world. Guilds, dungeons, conflict and adventure. A story I'm writing because I want to have some variety and fun.

Also, I like catgirls.

 

This story currently has an average weekly schedule (edit: usually 3,000 words). Any longer receives a double upload. There may be some delays after mass daily uploads as well. This is usually for the purpose of story flow and extra planning. I plan to establish a more concrete schedule in the future, but I do work full time and am working on two other stories as well.

Cover by: Gabriela Figueroa

     https://www.instagram.com/gab_figueroa/

 

 

 

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eddietheman
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Hello. First review, and looking forward to getting more involved on the site (hopefully. lol). I think I'll set this up similar to how other reviewers do it with the advanced ratings.

I do want to mention that the story's title and actual content threw me off a bit. In a good way though. I expected a pretty straightforward isekai, but it turned out to be much more than that. There is a lot of interesting stuff going on.

Overall: A really impressive story so far that makes a lot of promises. It is well-written and above average for sure. From what I've read so far, and with all the history and hints dropped, this will probably be a pretty big world. I'll save some of the spoiler stuff for the end.

Style: It flows nicely. There is plenty of description for the characters and the setting. I also like the way the various perspectives are done so we get a look at the world and events from more than just the mc.

Story: It starts off as a pretty typical isekai. At first. I pretty much understood the whole thing with the contract based on the information, but I understand how it might be a bit confusing. There is a whole lot going on beyond the typical dungeon exploration and leveling. There is political intrigue, multiple subplots, good action and plenty of mystery surrounding various groups. Also, everything doesn't work out perfectly for the characters. Which is very believable.

Grammar: Not much for me to say. This clearly goes through a lot of edits. There may be one or two mistakes every so often.

Character: This may be the best part. Every character is provided a unique personality and has a role to play in the whole scheme of things. The mc isn't the only one getting things done. Without the other characters, we don't progress. I like this a lot. The mc is smart, but even he has to make decisions based on his gut and emotions. Characters that I thought would be discarded towards the beginning actually reappear and have a part to play. Heck, even the guild receptionists get some deserved screen time.

Now I'll add some constructive criticism. Every story has some cons. I actually fed off of comments from other readers too.
I'm not a fan of blue boxes and tons of stats, but I think the story could benefit with a few so we can see the progression. This was addressed early on, but I think getting little bits throughout the story will help. We get more value out of what was sacrificed.

There are a few info dump moments, and I think they are pretty obvious. Stuff that will probably be mentioned later, but we didn't need it now. That kind of thing. It was mentioned in the comments.

Be careful not to add too many mysteries. I think this is at an okay point right now. This might be due to the random upload schedule as well, so some might eventually be hard to track. That being said, the mysteries are engaging, and I am curious about how it will all come together.

 

So, yeah, I really am enjoying this so far. I'll probably make changes as the story goes on.

I appreciate how all the characters are getting the time they deserve. I'm actually most interested in how the mc's guild contributes as a whole. I like seeing the guild grow along with the main plot. Who is going to eventually join?

There is a lot going on in this story. A lot to eat. There are many questions to be answered: 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

 

 

Wolfie
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Decide wether you want 1st or 3rd person

Narration, because as far as I can tell it looks terrible. You want to use both at the same time. Like this from the 1st chapter (not to look far for example).

Spoiler: Spoiler

Maybe in some circles it is permissable to do something like that, but I do not like it and want to write about it. Wether setting holds water... I guess I'm about to find out if I reach a bit further in.