Songbird - a Kammi Kettu story

by Trashlyn

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Finding himself kicked out of his foster parents’ home on the night of the Emergence, John Doe Smith doubted even his luck could get any worse.

Now irrevocably changed by the Emergence into what many see as a monster, the newly dubbed Wraith must now deal with the consequences of her new powers in an unfriendly world.

This story is set in the universe of QuietValerie's Kammi Kettu, I have been working with her on this.

Echoing Valerie:

This story has LGBTQ themes, Cuteness and Heartache , so if that's not your thing, I'm sorry :).

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Night_Shade0611
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I like the character development and the details given in the mc’s background. It really brought a sense of thought when I processed the first information and brought me to right mow of review it. Overall It’s a great start with interesting hooks here and there as the story develops.

 

 

 

 

 

 

QuietValerie
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So, I've been enjoying this story from the perspective of someone who created the world it's written in, with the help of the lovely author of this story. So there is a bias here. That being said, I have always admired the way her writing is carefully crafted and constructed with thought, a pretty intense juxtaposition with my own writing, which is throw haphazardly at the page.

The story tends to cut out all the miscellaneous crap that bulks up a normal tale, sometimes for the better, sometimes not. This part is really a matter of style and reader's preference if I'm totally honest. So my personal opinion on the matter is that usually I highly enjoy a bunch of fluff that helps flesh out the story, but somehow I find myself with enough information to fill in the blanks here without there being a need for the extraneous crap.

Now, as far as the characters go, I love them, even the one that was created to poke fun at me >:O. Kelly is my creation, but she's been given a lot more character in this story. Robin is a treasure and deserved to be let out of her cage to fly happy and free.

What's grammar? I have no idea.

EDIT: Gosh, it's been a while since I made this review. Things have gone from great to plain awesome. Her writing has just skyrocketed in quality even above the level she was writing at when she started. Ashlyn is constantly coming to me with wild and intriguing new ideas for our intertwined stories and it's showing in how much more interesting things have become.

At this point, the Kammiverse is just as much her brain child as my own, with the differences between our ways of thinking dancing and merging together. Almost every aspect of the greater story becoming something far better than it ever could have been had we been working on our own.

So yeah, the story she's writing rocks, her characters rock and fuck am I impressed with how much fun the story is, and how much fun she is to write with.

<3 you're amazing Ashlyn, keep on going!

Katie-the-Angel-Witch
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Songbird feels like quality hot chicken. It was designed to hurt, but it hurts in the best way, and then you get the rest of the flavors and you just sit there in awe at the chef's skills. Robin's treatment from her parents and her institutions and her hope being ripped away a lot hurts, but it hurts in such a way that you want her out, as soon as possible. And I mean, hey Chapter 9 has just gotten released concluding Arc 1. Only good things for Robin now. 

Right Ash?

Right??????

Edit 21/6: Okay. Robin is getting good things, definitely. But also very heavy hits. The reveals with Kammi, Robin's own journey, and her relationship with her caretaker and guardian. I love this sappy shit. I love seeing Al be a dad he didn't get to be due to his queerphobic wife. 

Immolation970
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Equivalent to a gut punch followed by a massage.

Songbird is one of the Kammiverse stories. If you do not enjoy sad stories, then the beginning of this story will not be your thing. If you persevere through it, or simply enjoy those sorts of stories, the payoff is absolutely worth it. This story explores parenthood, abuse of the system, and has a nonviolent protagonist. This is the Kammiverse story that goes the most in-depth into how the American government is treating the Emerged, and it is not pretty. My only complaint is that the villains are rather one dimensional racist assholes, with little else currently added to their character. It is cute, it is beautiful, it is tragic, just freaking read it. 

superdbgtfan
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well done not sure what else to say without spoilers

Kara Null
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This story drew me in and had me rooting for Robin right out of the gate. It's amazing just how much each chapter built on this character to the point where you felt like you were right there with her. Sharing her struggle.

 

Not only that, but as things look like they're heating up, you give us a couple of alternate POVs. Usually this is something that drives me crazy because I'm impatient and feel like I'm always chasing the need to see how things turn out. In this case I didn't feel that way at all. Those chapters are every bit as engaging as the main story line. I didn't feel that way at all.

 

Then there's the end of Arc 1. I won't say much because I don't want to spoil anything. I will just say instead that it was glorious, and I really can't wait to see what's in store for Robin next!

Squirrelk
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Worth reading but fucccckkkkk meeeeee

Alright, I'll put the TL;DR at the start. This story is good but it's a fucking challenge to bite into.

 

In terms of the authors ability to write I'm more than happy, the characters are also pretty unique, even if they are pretty sparse.

This story is like eating all the crust on a loaf of bread before even considering the mere concept of having a sandwich. You know that the future might be good, but fuck me if the present isn't a bag of dicks that are being mercilessly shoved down your throat.

I don't hate the story for this, quite the contrary. I enjoy stories that play hard to get, it makes you want to read more. Maybe I'm just a masochist. Either way, I recommend reading this. 

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NOW IM EMOTIONAL AND WANT MORE

Okay, honestly I am terrible at writing out my thoughts and can't judge style for shit, but here goes nothing.

As is the wonderful trend with the Kammiverse stories, this is a story involving trans subjects and lesbian action. And its soooooooo good. Love the characters and how they are written. Especially love the little collaboration our authors have going on. I could go on on how the plot and characters, and grammer are wonderful, but that's what the stars are ther for, aren't they?

A really good story that while it has nice fluffy moments, really slaps you in the face with a large dose of reality in a great what if universe.

The Merciless Mercy
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It's great to see what Ash has done with Robin, she is going to be great once she is out of her shell and not scared of hugs anymore. 
The story has been so emotional so far, with the jail and recently with Milkdad

 

 

Taxouck
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Good queer superhero story

After a very emotionally rough start, Songbird allows a deeper dive into the world of Kammi Kettu, a place where government agencies commit human rights violations, where neo-nazis are rampant, and where the two don't hesitate to mingle together... Wait, isn't that just the real life USA? /s

Robin is an interesting teen thrown into this mix, after a teenhood full of trauma, she is finally given a supportive environment and a chance to bounce back up, and to fight back against the crimes of the government, while developping a career as a "songbird" :P

I'm always eagerly waiting for a new chapter to pop up.